读后续写：语言提升(动作+修饰语)-2025届高三英语作文复习专项

ContinuationWriting

——Howtomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid?Afterthelesson,studentsareableto

1)acquirethethreeskillsofhowtodescribetheactionsvividly.

2)

applytheskills/sentencepatternstodescribeactionsvividly.Learningobjectives读从评分细则看续写内容的侧重点（以南宁市2024届摸底测试为例）1.内容：17分（1）第一段：①妈妈对我的鼓励以及我的感受。（3分）②我演出前的准备和演出时的表现。（4分）③老师或妈妈送花给我。。（2分）（2）第二段：①带着花回家后我的感受以及妈妈的回应。（3分）②此后，我的变化。（3分）③感悟/体现主题。（2

分）Actions：

Feelings:鼓励、准备、表现、送花、回应感受、回家后的感受以动作描写为主、情感描写为辅，从而推动情节的不断发展读高三10班读后续写学情分析(以南宁市2024届摸底测试为例)平均分16.938四档五档21-250人四档16-2038人三档11-156人二档6-103人一档1-51人各档次给分范围和要求:

总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

读后续写的评分标准评分的四个方面第五档（21-25分）要求考查角度要求与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度与所给短文融合度高，与段落开头语的衔接合理思维内容语言logicalresonableconsistent内容的丰富程度内容丰富内容rich应用语法结构和词汇的丰富程度和准确性所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。语言accuratevarious上下文的连贯性有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使续写的短文结构紧凑思维coherent6（南宁市2024届摸底测试读后续写）

WhenIwaslittle,Ilivedinahousewithabeautifulgardenfullofallkindsofflowers.TherewasnothingIenjoyedmorethansittinginthegardenwithmymotherreadingstoriestome.WhenIwasoldenoughtoread,Ienjoyedreadingstoriesaloudtoher.IwouldneverforgetonedaywhenIwasinthethirdgrade.Ihadbeenpickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadrehearsed(排练)mylinessohardwithme.ButhowevereasilyIactedathome,themomentIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside,explainingthatshehadwrittenanarrator's(解说员)parttotheplay,andaskedmetochangeroles.Herword,kindlyexpressed,stillhurt,especiallywhenIsawmypartgotoanothergirl.Ididn'ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeafterschoolthatday.Butshesensedmypain.Insteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtotakeawalkinthegarden.ItwasMayandroseswereblossomingand,underthetrees,wecouldalsoseeyellowdandelions(蒲公英)inthegrass,asifapainterhadpaintedourgardenwithred,yellowandgreen.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyonedandelion."IthinkI'mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,"shesaid,pullingitupbyitsroots."Fromnowon,we'llhaveonlyrosesinthisgarden."“ButIlikedandelions,"Iprotested,"Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”“Yes,everyflowerisbeautifulinitsownway,isn'tit?"sheaskedthoughtfully.Inodded,pleasedthatIhadwonherover."Andthatistrueofpeopletoo,"sheadded."Noteveryonecanbeaprincess,butthereisnoshameinthat.”Relievedthatshehadguessedmypain,IstartedtocryasItoldherwhathadhappened.Shelistenedandsmiledtomegently.Findouttheactionsdescriptionandthinkabouthowtheauthordescribedtheactionsvividly?Discusswithyourdeskmatesandunderlinethehighlights(写得好的地方)ofit!

AppreciationAppreciation

并列的动词链灵活运用非谓语动词添加适当的修饰语

Howcanwemaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid?

SkillI：使用并列的动词链

SkillII：灵活运用非谓语动词SkillIII:

添加适当的修饰语SKillI使用并列的动词链

Appreciatethefollowingsentencesandanalyzethesentencepatterns1.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.（2022年新高考I&II卷）2.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”(2023年新高考I&II卷)1：主+谓1...and...谓22：主+谓1...and...谓2...and谓3...

Conclusion:如果是同一个主语先后做了______个动作或以上，可以用这两个句式结构，细致地描写人物的动作，完整地展现事情发展的全过程。Sentencepattern1：主+谓1

and谓2...Sentencepattern2：主+谓1...谓2...,and谓3...

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Exercise1:Trytopolishclassmates’originaltext.(使用所学的句式结构，提升同伴的作品)场景：老师或妈妈送花给“我”。

（南宁市2024届摸底测试）（1）Myteachergavemeaflower.(黄同学)（提示：思考老师给“我”送花前后分别会做什么动作？用上Sentencepattern2：主+谓1...谓2...,and谓3....）______________________________________________________________Myteachercameovertome,gavemeaflower,andsaidmyperformancewassoperfect.

SKillII灵活运用非谓语动词Observetheunderlinedverbsandsummarizemoresentencepatternswecanuse.3.Finally,myteachertookmeaside,explainingthatshehadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay······.（南宁市2024届摸底测试）4.RemindingmehowmuchIlovedtoreadstoriesaloudtoher,shecontinuedtostress······（南宁市2024届摸底测试参考范文）5.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.（2023年新高考I&II卷）3：主+谓...,非谓语动词doing...

4、5：非谓语动词doing/done...，

主+谓...Conclusion:当出现两个动作以上，而前后的动作逻辑主语一致时

，可以通过在句子前后使用__________动词,这样不仅能细致地描写人物的动作，还能实现语言表达的流畅性和丰富性，彰显自己扎实的语言功底。非谓语Theusageofnon-predicateverbs(非谓语动词的用法)

基本形式用法doing表示：主动；进行done表示：被动；完成todo表示：主动；表目的、将来

Exercise2:Trytotranslatethefollowingsentences.(使用所学的句式结构，翻译句子)场景：妈妈对“我”的鼓励以及“我”的感受。

（南宁市2024届摸底测试）(1）

她温柔地摸摸我的头，告诉我解说员这个角色在戏剧当中也是非常重要的。（Sentencepattern3:主+谓...，非谓语动词doing...）

Shetouchedmyheadgently,_______________________________________________________(2)听到妈妈所说的话，我决定接受现实，不遗余力地去训练。（Sentencepattern4：非谓语动词doing...，主+谓...）________________________,Idecidedtoacceptrealityandsparednoeffortstopractise.(3)受到妈妈的鼓励，我变得自信了起来，下定决心努力练习台词。

(Sentencepattern4：非谓语动词done...，主+谓...）___________________________________________________________________

tellingmethatthenarrator’spartisalsoverysignificantintheplay.HearingwhatmymothersaidEncouragedbymymom，Ibecameconfidentandmadeupmymindtopractisemylines.

SKillIII添加适当的修饰语18Observetheunderlinedwordsandsummarizethemodifierswecanadd.1.

“Yes,everyflowerisbeautifulinitsownway,isn’tit?”sheaskedthoughtfully.（南宁市2024届摸底测试）.

2.Shelistenedandsmiledtomegently.（南宁市2024届摸底测试）Conclusion：1.Add____.(添加_____词，使人物的动作描写更加生动具体,也可以更好地表现人物的鲜明个性。)副3.Atthe

awardpresentationhostedintheschoolhall,Iacceptedtheawardcertificate,extremely

nervousandexcited.(2023年新高考I&II卷

参考范文)4.Shockedandmoved,

Istaredatthenote,feelingguiltyaboutmypreviousthoughtthatallpeopleareindifferent.(2021年八省联考参考范文)Conclusion：2.Add____.(添加情感类的_____词，置于句子的_______或者________，可以突出强调人物的当时状态，更好地推动情节的进一步发展。形容开头结尾adv.adj.

Exercise3：Trytopolishclassmates’originaltextbyaddingadv./adj..场景：“我”演出时的表现。（南宁市2024届摸底测试）1.IwalkedontothestageandbelievedIcoulddoit.(颜同学)添加副词：_________________________________________________________________添加形容词：_________________________________________________________________Confidentandbrave,IwalkedontothestageandbelievedIcoulddoit.Iwalkedontothestageconfidently/determinedlyandbelievedIcoulddoit.Summary使用并列的动词链使用并列的动词链灵活运用非谓语添加适当的修饰语主+谓1and谓2主+谓1，谓2and谓3主+谓···，非谓语动词doing···

非谓语动词doing/done···,主+谓···

adv.adj.Application22Application（2022年新高考I&II卷读后续写）

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路线）throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.23Application（2022年新高考I&II卷读后续写）

任务：请同学们阅读以上材料,根据其内容和所给段落的开头语，完成第一段中的场景：即“我”对David的鼓励和David的反应。(要求用上本堂课所学结构)参考：“我”的鼓励：patone’sshoulder,say···David的反应：risetohisfeet