读后续写写作技巧Atechnique-toshownottotell

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Atechniqueincontinuationwriting他焦急地等待着朋友的出现。他坐在椅子上，不停地看表，眉头紧锁，嘴角微微向下。手指有节奏地敲击着桌面，脚也不安分地抖动着。他时不时地望向门口，眼神中充满了期待和焦虑。每当有人从门口经过时，他都抬头向外看，但随即又失望地低下头去。李华约了一位重要朋友在餐厅19:00见面，已经19:10，朋友还没来，他等得有点急。

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Showthereaderseverything,tellthemnothing.

--ErnestHemingway

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Don’ttellmethemoonisshining.Showmetheglint(闪光）oflightonbrokenglass.--AntonChechove

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Atechniqueincontinuationwriting:ToshownottotellSHOWVSTELLLearn&UnderstandToTell:giveusinformation.ToShow:helpusformpicturesinourmind

throughdetails.Whatis“toshow”&“totell”Learn&UnderstandHewasverycold.Histeethchatteredasheblewonhisfingers.Hepulledhercollarup,tightenedhisscarf,puthishandsdeepintohispocketsandturnedhisfaceawayfromthebitingwind.Techniquesincontinuationwriting:Showthecharacters’emotions.（情感）Describespecificverbs.(动作链)Picturethesetting.(环境)

Atechniqueincontinuationwriting:thecharacters’emotions.We’lllearntoshowhappiness,sadness,excitement,surprise,anger,embarrassment,boredom,confusion….Suppose:Youwereboundforanothercitywhereyouwillstudy,youexchangedgoodbyewithyourmotherattherailwaystation.HowwillyouwriteanentryofdairytodescribetheseparationToday,mymomsawmeoffatthestation.Iwasreallyupsettosaygoodbye.Describethesceneofseparation.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandLikethis

“Takecare,mydear!”Momsaidinachokedvoice.Shethrewherarmsaroundmeandstrokemyhair.Iwasseizedbysadness,mylipstremblingandtearsstreamingdownmyface.

Foramoment,theworldandallitspeopledisappeared,onlyMumandmeatthestation.“Ihavetoleavenow.”Mummurmured（轻声说）.Sheturnedaroundandheadedfortheexit.“Iwillmissyou!”Iwavedmyarmandshoutedatthetopofmyvoice.Butshedidn’thearme.Throughmistyeyes/glisteningtears,Isawherbacklostamongcrowdsofpeoplehurryingtoandfro(来去匆匆)andnolongervisible.Aclearandvividpicture.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandHowdidthewriterpaintsuchapictureFromwhataspects

“Takecare,mydear!”Momsaidinachokedvoice.Shethrewherarmsaroundmeandstrokemyhair.Iwasseizedbysadness,mylipstremblingandtearsstreamingdownmyface.Foramoment,theworldandallitspeopledisappeared,onlyMumandmeatthestation.“Ihavetoleavenow.”Mummurmured（轻声说）.Sheturnedaroundandheadedfortheexit.“Iwillmissyou!”Iwavedmyarmandshoutedatthetopofmyvoice.Butshedidn’thearme.Throughmistyeyes/glisteningtears,Isawherbacklostamongcrowdsofpeoplehurryingtoandfro(来去匆匆)andnolongervisible.FacialexpressionsBodylanguageVoiceHowtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandHowtoshow

characters’emotions.++FaceBodyVoiceShow:Hewasexcited.Aplayerscoredagoal.Thecoachwasveryexcited.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understandShow:Hewasexcited.①FACEStep1:Drawanexcitedfaceinyourmind.Step2:Imaginehisfacialexpressionsfromthetoptothe

bottom.(eyebrows,eyes,nose,mouth,cheeks,

jaw)Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understand①Face:Hiseyessparkled/twinkledwithgreatdelight.Abigtoothysmilespreadacrosshisface.Show:Hewasexcited.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understandHepunchedtheairwithfists.

举拳欢呼Hesprangtohisfeet/gaveajumpintheair.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.②Body:learn&understand“Yes!/Yeah!”hescreamed/yelled/exclaimedatthetopofhislung.③Voice:Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.learn&understandWithhiseyessparkling/twinklingwithgreatdelight(face),thecoachsprangtohisfeet,punchingtheairwithfists(body)ashisplayerscoredagoal.

“Yes!”Hescreamedatthetopofhislung(voice).Abigtoothysmilespread

acrosshisface(face).Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.With复合结构V-ing伴随状语“无灵”主语句╳(totell)√(toshow)Hewasexcited.Withhiseyessparkling/twinklingwithgreatdelight,thecoachsprangtohisfeet,punchingtheairwithfistsashisplayerscoredagoal.“Yes!”Hescreamedatthetopofhislung.Abigtoothysmilespreadacrosshisface.facebodyvoiceshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:MissDengwasangrybecauseweliedtoher.learn&understandShow:MissDengwasangrybecauseweliedtoher.facebodyvoice“Howdareyou!”MissDengscreamedatthetopofhervoice（Voice）,hercheeksflushedwithrage

（face）.Sheglaredatus,herwholebodyshakinglikealeaf./Sheglaredatus,pounding/bangingthedesk.（body）.learn&understand独立主格独立主格V-ing作伴随状语Atthenewsthathegotthefirstprizeinthecompetition,hewasverysurprised.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewassurprised.Apply&PracticeHiseyebrowswereraised.Hiseyeswidened.Hismouthwasopen.Show:Hewassurprised.Face:Apply&PracticeBody:Voice:“Really”Heexclaimedinshock.HestraightenedupDiscussionHegotthefirstprizeinthecompetition.Face:One’seyebrowsrose/wereraised.One’seyeswidened/werewideopen.One’smouthwasopen.open-mouthedadj.One’smouthwaswideopenenoughto

swallowadentist.One’sjawdropped/felltotheground.Body:Sb.shookone’sheadindisbelief.Sb.straightenedup.

Shockrootedsb.tothespot.Sb.wasnumbwithshock.Voice:Sb.yelled/exclaimedinshock.Sb.wasspeechlesswithshock.Sb.gaveagaspofsurprise/gaspedinsurprise.

倒吸一口气Expressionsandgrammarthatmayhelpyou:Groupwork:createyourworktoshow:Hewassurprised.with复合结构V-ing作伴随状语独立主格无灵主语句…①Sb.+V,with复合结构

Theyhuggedtightlytogether,withtearsofjoywellingupintheir

eyes/withtearsofjoyintheireyes.②Sb.+V,独立主格结构Theyhuggedtightlytogether,tearsofjoywellingupintheireyes.③Sb.+V,V-ing伴随状语Hecheered,

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