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2025届常州市高三年级期末考试

第二节（满分25分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完

整的短文。

“Ifeelhopelessaboutmyschoollife!I'mnotapopularstudentinourclass.I

can'tplaybasketballaswellasotherboys.AndIfailedMathexamagainyesterday,

whichmademe.…”Tom,a16-year-oldboyofMr.Brown'sclass,loweredhishead,

sobbing（啜泣）uncontrollablyintheTeacher9sOffice.

“Pmsorrytohearthat,"Mr.BrownpattedTom'sshouldergentlyandaskedthe

youngboytositdowninfrontofthedesksothattheycouldsitoppositeeachother.

ThiswasthefirsttimethatTomhadturnedtoMr.Brownforhelpbecausehewasso

shyandquietinschool.ButMr.Brownhadnoticedhimmanytimesinschool9s

volunteerwork.Lookingatthesadyoungboy,Mr.Brownwassilentforamoment.

Then,hetookapieceofpaperandapenoutofhisdrawer.

“I'dliketoinviteyoutotakeasurprisetest,myboy”,saidMr.Brown,passing

thepentoTom."AnewMathexam?”,Tomraisedhiseyeswhichwerestillfilled

withtears,gotthepenandrepliedinconfusion,worryingaboutthecomingchallenge.

“Justtakeiteasybecauseit'snotaboutnumbersorfbrmulas（方程Mr.Brown

comfortedhimwithabigsmile.Notknowingwhatwouldcomeintheexampaper,

Tomnoddedhisheadandwipedhistearswithhissleeves.

Mr.BrownhandedTomthequestionpaperandencouragedhimsoftly,"Now,

youcanbeginandpleasefinishthetestwithintenminutes."ToTom'ssurprise,there

wasnoquestionsinthepaper,butjustablackdotinthecenterofthepage.Mr.

BrownthoroughlyreadthroughTom'spuzzledexpressionsandsaid,“Iwantyouto

writewhatyouseethere."Confusedashewas,Tombegantodowhathehadbeen

askedtodo.Meanwhile,Mr.Brownpickedupanovelandstartedreadingit,waiting

patiently.

注意：

（1）续写词数应为150个左右；

（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:TomScratchedhisheadanxiously,havingnoideawhattowrite.

Paragraph2:"Whatyourwritingfocusedonwasjusttheblackdot,butyouhave

awholewhitepaper,“SaidMr.Brown.

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完

整的短文。

“Ifeelhopelessaboutmyschoollife!I'mnotapopularstudentinourclass.I

can'tplaybasketballaswellasotherboys.AndIfailedMathexamagainyesterday,

whichmademe…・"Tom,a16-year-oldboyofMr.Brown'sclass,loweredhishead,

sobbin虱啜五泣）uncontrollably（非谓语动词做伴随动作）intheTeacher9sOffice.

"I'msorrytohearthat,"Mr.BrownpattedTom'sshouldergentlyandaskedthe

youngboytositdowninfrontofthedesksothattheycouldsitoppositeeach

others目的状从）.ThiswasthefirsttimethatTomhadturnedtoMr.Brownforhelp

becausehewassoshyandquietinsc/z。。“状从）.ButMr.Brownhadnoticedhim

manytimesinschool'svolunteerwork.Lookin史atthesadyoungboy,Mr.Brown

wassilentforamoment.Then,hetookapieceofpaperandapenoutofhisdrawer.

"I'dliketoinviteyoutotakeasurprisetest,myboy”,saidMr.Brown,passing

thepentoTom.“AnewMathexam?”,Tomraisedhiseyeswhichwerestillfilled

withtears,gotthepenandrepliedin鹿（动作串），wo/ry加&aboutthecoming

challenge（非谓语动词做伴随动作）.“Justtakeiteasybecauseifsnotaboutnumbersor

formulas（方萄（状从）”,Mr.Browncomfortedhimwith。瓦*smile.Notknowing

wouldcomeintheexam（非谓语动词做原因状语）,Tomnoddedhisheadand

wipedhistearswithhissleeves.

Mr.BrownhandedTomthequestionpaperandencouragedhimsoftly,"Now,

youcanbeginandpleasefinishthetestwithintenminutes."ToTom飞surprise,there

wasnoquestionsinthepaper,butjustablackdotinthecenterofthepage.Mr.

BrownthoroughlyreadthroughTom'spuzzledexpressionsandsaid,“Iwantyouto

writewhatyousee统ere（宾从）・“Confusedashewas（倒装句）,Tombegantodowhat

hehadbeenaskedtodo（宾从）.Meanwhile,Mr.Brownpickedupanovelandstarted

readingit,waitingpatiently（非谓语动词做伴随动作）.

注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相

应位置作答。

Paragraph1:TomScratchedhisheadanxiously,havingnoideawhattowrite.

Paragraph2:“Whatyourwritingfocusedonwasjusttheblackdot,butyouhave

awholewhitepaper,“SaidMr.Brown.

1.按高考英语读后续写要求进行分类和分析

分

析

内容原文反映句

维

度

"Ifeelhopelessaboutmyschool

类

励志类读后续写life!I'mnotapopularstudentin

型

ourclass."

构

从主人公内心困惑入手，通过一个特殊

"Lookingatthesadyoungboy,

思

的引导过程，让主人公领悟到隐藏的潜Mr.Brownwassilentfora

思

0

力和生活的积极面，完成情感转折。moment.

路

-第一段：描写主人公在“考试”中的困

布惑心理。"Iwantyoutowritewhatyousee

局-第二段：展示老师引导的智慧与主人there."

公心理变化。

框1.起：情绪低落的学生。

架2.承：老师用智慧的测试引导。"Justtakeiteasybecauseifsnot

提3.转：学生领悟生活真谛。aboutnumbersorformulas."

炼4.合：学生情感得到正向提升。

实

-结合主人公心理活动的细腻描写。

施"Now,youcanbeginandplease

-注重情节层层递进，尤其是对比学生

建finishthetestwithintenminutes."

由］后的态度O

议

分

析

内容原文反映句

维

度

-确保心理描写自然过渡。

"ButMr.Brownhadnoticedhim

意-承接原文情节，避免断层。

manytimesinschool'svolunteer

事-巧用象征物（如黑点和白纸）深化主

work."

项题。

巧-以黑点和白纸作为象征，启发主人公

妙关注积极面。"Whatyourwritingfocusedon

wasjusttheblackdot,butyou

设-巧妙运用对比手法（如黑点与白纸、

haveawholewhitepaper."

计学生的前后心理转变）。

2.故事山模式分析

StoryMountain思维导图：

引入：Tom感到无助，向老师倾诉内心困惑。

上升：老师提出意外测试，引发学生疑惑。

高潮：Tom完成测试，写下自己的观察。

下降：老师解释测试意义，揭示隐藏真谛。

结局：Tom领悟生活中的积极面，内心感到释然。

关键分析表格：

分析

内容原文反映句

角度

人物Tom从自卑到释然，老

"Mr.Browncomfortedhimwithabigsmile."

刻画师耐心且充满智慧。

分析

内容原文反映句

角度

情感"Tomraisedhiseyeswhichwerestillfilledwith

从绝望、疑惑到顿悟。

层次tears."

关键

老师的测试设计和对黑"Whatyourwritingfocusedonwasjusttheblack

情节

点的象征意义的解释。dot,butyouhaveawholewhitepaper."

点

语言简洁生动，象征手法贯"Lookingatthesadyoungboy,Mr.Brownwas

特色穿始终。silentforamoment.n

心理描写Tom的紧张、疑"Tomscratchedhisheadanxiously,havingnoidea

描写惑到释然的心理转变。whattowrite.n

动作老师耐心引导，Tom认"Tomnoddedhisheadandwipedhistearswithhis

描写真作答。sleeves."

环境老师办公室中的温馨氛“Mr.BrownpattedTom'sshouldergentlyand

askedtheyoungboytositdowninfrontofthe

描写围突出教师的关怀。

desk."

隐含看问题要着眼于整体，

"Youhaveawholewhitepaper."

主题不要纠结于细节。

情感从失落到顿悟的积极转

"Tombegantodowhathehadbeenaskedtodo."

转折变。

空间办公室内不同互动情景"Mr.Brownpickedupanovelandstartedreading

转换的变化。it,waitingpatiently."

时间测试时间的推进与心理"Now,youcanbeginandpleasefinishthetest

过渡转变同步。withintenminutes."

3.续写所需推荐语料：动作、心理、环境描写及词汇替换

动作描写例句（8个）

1.Heclenchedhisfists,tryingtosteadyhisnerves.

2.Shetappedherpenrhythmicallyagainstthedesk,lostinthought.

3.Heslouchedinhischair,shoulderssaggingwithdefeat.

4.Shestraightenedherback,determinationshininginhereyes.

5.Hefidgetedwithhissleeves,unabletositstill.

6.Shereachedout,herhandtremblingslightly.

7.Hepacedtheroom,hismindracingwithpossibilities.

8.Shenoddedslowly,processingwhatshehadjustheard.

心理描写例句（8个）

1.Hismindwasastormofthoughts,eachonemorechaoticthanthelast.

2.Doubtcreptintoherheart,whisperingthatshemightfailagain.

3.Reliefwashedoverhimlikeagentlewave.

4.Herheartachedwithamixtureofregretandhope.

5.Hefeltasurgeofpride,hisconfidenceslowlyrebuilding.

6.Asenseofuneasesettledinherchest,refusingtogoaway.

7.Determinationburnedinhiseyes,pushingasidehisfears.

8.Shefeltasthoughaweighthadbeenliftedoffhershoulders.

环境描写例句（8个）

1.Thesunlightfilteredthroughtheblinds,castingwarmpatternsonthefloor.

2.Theroomwasquietexceptforthesofttickingoftheclock.

3.Afaintbreezerustledthepapersonthedesk.

4.Thecozywarmthoftheofficestoodincontrasttothechillyairoutside.

5.Shadowsdancedonthewallsasthesunlightshifted.

6.Thearomaoffreshcoffeelingeredintheair.

7.Thesterilesilenceoftheroomfeltalmostoppressive.

8.Outside,birdschirpedmerrily,oblivioustothetensionwithin.

高级替换词汇（分场景）

场景普通词汇高级替换词汇

情绪表达happyelated,jubilant

描述失败failuresetback,downfall

场景普通词汇高级替换词汇

强调信心confidentassured,self-reliant

鼓励行动tryendeavor,strive

描述过程startinitiate,embark

3.推荐语料：读后续写常用描写例句

描写

推荐英文例句（8句）

类别

1.Hescratchedhishead,ahintofconfusioncloudinghisface.

2.Shenoddedslightly,hereyesfullofhesitation.

3.Hewipedhistearswithtremblinghands.

动作4.Sheleanedforward,eagertocatcheveryword.

描写5.Hefrozeinplace,unsureofwhattodonext.

6.Shesteppedcloser,acomfortingsmileonherlips.

7.Hegrippedthepentightly,hisknucklesturningwhite.

8.Sheglancedaroundnervously,herfingerstappingonthedesk.

1.Anxietycreptintohisheartastheclocktickedaway.

2.Hermindracedwithcountlessthoughts,eachmoreconfusingthanthelast.

3.Awaveofreliefwashedoverhim,lighteninghisburden.

心理4.Doubtcloudedhisjudgment,leavinghimhesitant.

描写5.Shecouldn'tshakeoffthefeelingofunease.

6.Confidenceslowlyreplacedthefearinhiseyes.

7.Herheartswelledwithgratitude.

8.Asenseofaccomplishmentwarmedhissoul.

1.Theroomwasfilledwithasoft,calminglight.

2.Thetickingoftheclockechoedinthequietoffice.

环境3.Agentlebreezefromtheopenwindowrustledthepapers.

描写4.Thescentoffreshlybrewedcoffeelingeredintheair.

5.Thesunlightstreamedthroughtheblinds,castinglongshadowsonthe

floor.

描写

推荐英文例句（8句）

类别

6.Thefainthumofdistantvoicesbrokethesilence.

7.Thedeskwasclutteredwithbooksandpapers,creatingasenseofwarmth.

8.Thepolishedsurfaceofthewoodendeskreflectedthelight.

高级单词替换:

场景基础词高级替换词

表达情感sadsorrowful,despondent

表达心理转变thinkcontemplate,reflect

表达行为lookgaze,observe

表达环境quietserene,tranquil

表达结果happycontent,elated

4.高中语法现象分析

语法现象原文句子解析

"Iwantyoutowritewhatyousee使用了宾语从句“whatyousee

宾语从句

there.nthere”表明写作内容。

"Lookingatthesadyoungboy,

非谓语动词分词短语作状语，表示原因。

Mr.Brownwassilent.n

"Mr.Browncomfortedhimwith使用间接引语表述人物间的对话

间接引语

abigsmile."与情绪传递。

生词积累:

词

单词词义近义词反义词例句

性

Hisconfusionwasevidentasheread

confusionn.困惑perplexityclarity

theinstructions.

词

单词词义近义词反义词例句

性

使迷bewilder,Thestrangemessagepuzzled

puzzleV.enlighten

惑confuseeveryoneintheroom.

Shepattedthedoggentlyonthe

patV.轻拍tap,strokestrike

head.

4.高中语法现象分析（续）

语法现象原文句子解析

Tdliketoinviteyouto

"I'dlike”表达委婉语气，虚拟语气增强

虚拟语takeasurprisetest,my

表达礼貌性与可能性。

boy?

时间状语"Pleasefinishthetest明确时间状语"withintenminutes”表示具

从句withintenminutes."体的完成时间要求。

"Whatyourwriting

使用强调句型“What...was...”突出写作集中

强调句型focusedonwasjustthe

于黑点的特定内容，强调对比性。

blackdot."

生词积累：

词词

单词近义词反义词例句

性义

邀Heinvitedmetothedinner,butIwas

inviteV.ask,requestdecline

请unabletoattend.

观notice,Thescientistobservedthechanges

observeV.ignore

察perceivecarefullyunderthemicroscope.

Theteacherencouragedthestudents

鼓motivate,

encourageV.discouragetospeakconfidentlyduringthe

励inspire

debate.

词词

单词近义词反义词例句

性义

耐

calmly,Shewaitedpatientlyforherturn,

patientlyadv.心impatiently

serenelyshowingnosignsofirritation.

地

Theteacherexplainedtheconceptof

解clarify,

explainV.confusevirtualrealityinasimpleyetengaging

释elaborate

manner.

例句：

invite:

1.Sheinvitedherfriendstoherbirthdayparty.

2.Heinvitedhertoshareherthoughtsabouttheissue.

encourage:

1.Thecoachencouragedtheteamtokeeppracticingdespitethelosses.

2.Positivefeedbackencouragesstudentstoperformbetterinacademics.

人物刻画

1.Tom:从一个内心充满困惑和无助的学生，逐渐转变为一个逐渐

找回自信的个体。通过Mr.Brown的鼓励和理解，Tom体验至U的

是一种心理上的转变。

2.Mr.Brown:展现了一个关心学生、富有同理心的教师形象。通

过给予帮助和指导，他不仅解决了Tom的表面问题，也为他带来

了情感上的支持。

情感层次

1.从最初的绝望和无助，到通过一个简单的互动体验转变，Tom的

情感逐渐回归到平静和自信。

2.Mr.Brown通过细心的关怀和不急不躁的态度，成功缓解了Tom

的情绪冲突，使他感到温暖和被理解。

关键情节点

1.冲突：Tom感到自己在学校无法取得成功，对自己的能力产生了

怀疑。

2.转折：Mr.Brown通过"黑点"测试的方式，引导Tom从表面的困

扰转向内心的自我反思。

3.解决：Tom从情感上的低谷逐渐恢复，重新找到了前进的力量，

开始重新审视自己的优势与潜力。

隐含主题

1.人生如纸，不能只看表面或一点点失败。需要看到更多的可能性

和机会。

2.通过关心和支持，我们能帮助别人发现自己潜在的力量和勇气。

情感描写与动作描写分析

•情感描写：通过Tom的心理变化展示情感层次的转变。他开始时的沮丧

和疑惑逐渐转变为释然和希望，最后充满信心。

・动作描写：动作通过具体行为表现情感，如“擦拭眼泪”“坐下微笑”等，

细致地刻画出人物的心理状态。

推荐语料

动作描写

oHeliftedhishead,wipingawaythelastofhistearswiththesleeveof

hisshirt.

oSheslowlyrelaxedhergriponthepen,feelingthetensioninher

fingersease.

oTomsatupstraighter,asenseofcalmreplacingthestorminhischest.

oMr.BrownplacedagentlehandonTom'sshoulder,offeringsilent

reassurance.

心理描写

oAwaveofreliefwashedoverTom,hisbreathingslowlyeveningout.

oHisheartwasnolongerheavywithdoubt,butlightwith

understanding.

oForthefirsttimeinalongwhile,Tomfeltaflickerofhoperisingin

hischest.

oMr.Brown'swordsresonatedinhismind,leavinghimwithasenseof

possibility.

环境描写

oTheofficewaswarmandquiet,astarkcontrasttothestormof

thoughtsswirlinginTom'smind.

oOutsidethewindow,thesunwassetting,castingasoftglowthat

seemedtomatchthemoodintheroom.

oThesoundofpagesturningwastheonlynoiseintheroom,calming

andsteadying.

高级替换词汇

场景普通词汇高级替换词汇

情绪表达saddespondent,sorrowful

信心confidentself-assured,optimistic

鼓励helpassist,support

安慰comfortconsole,reassure

转变changetransformation,shift

Version1

Paragraph1:Tomscratchedhisheadanxiously,havingnoideawhattowrite.

Theblankpaperinfrontofhimseemedlikeasilentchallenge,whiletheblackdot

stoodout"ominentlv,mockin?his〃（非谓语动词做伴随动作）.Hesitatedto

writeoutontothe〃砍玖adj短语做主语补语）ashedescribedhowtheblackdot

overshadowedthec/ea〃（状从+宾从），whitesurface.Lostinhis统（非谓语动词做原因

状语），hebarelynoticedthetimepassinguntilMr.Brownsoftly（状从），

"Time'sup,Tom.^^Lookingathiswor」非谓语动词做伴随动作）,Tomfeltamixof

embarrassmentandrelief、unsure（adi短语做补语hehadmethisteacher9s

expectations.（宾从）

Paragraph2:“Wfea。writin殳focusedonwasjusttheblackdot,but

haveawholewhite〃即丝“saidMr.Brown,holdingthesheetup（非谓语动词做伴随动

作）.“Theblackdotrepresemschallenges,mistakes,orfailuresinlife.Butdon't

forget,Tom,there'ssomuchmoretocelebvateinthe'whiteDapey'-yourkindness,

talents,Dotential."HiswordsstruckachordwithTom,makinghim

realizehownarrowhisperspectivehad）ee〃（非谓语动词做伴随动作+宾从）."Lifeisnever

perfect,butweshouldfocusonthepositiveandnotletsetbacksdefineMr.

Brownaddedwithasmile.Inspiredbyhisteacher'swo/vfa（非谓语动词做原因状语，Tom

feltas〃rgcofconfidence.Helefttheofficethatdaydeterminedtoembracehis

strengthsandworkonhisweaA7iesscs（adi短语做伴随动作），knowingthatlife,likethe

whitepaper,wasfullofpossibilities（英心.

亮点分析

情绪描写亮点：

1.例句：

1."Tomscratchedhisheadanxiously."

2."Lookingathiswork,Tomfeltamixofembarrassmentand

relief/

2.分析：使用了细腻的心理活动描写，展现出Tom的内心波动，增

强了读者的代入感。

动作描写亮点：

1.例句：

1."Hestartedwritingdownwordslike'isolated：'flawed；and

Imperfection.,n

2."Tomwipedhistearswithhissleeves."

2.分析：动作描写与心理描写结合，使情节发展更自然、流畅。

环境描写亮点：

1.例句:"Theblankpaperinfrontofhimseemedlikeasilentchallenge."

2.分析：用具象化的比喻展现场景氛围，与人物心情相呼应。

语法加分点:

1.虚拟语气:"Lifeisneverperfect,butweshouldfocusonthe

positive."

2.强调句型："Whatyourwritingfocusedonwasjusttheblackdot.*'

积累语料:

短语/句型升级替换选项同义词/联想词例句

"scratch"rubone'sTomscratchedhishead,tryingto

frown,hesitate

one'shead"forehead0recalltheanswer.

remainInsteadofworryingaboutfailures,

"focusonthe"lookonthe

optimistic,stayweshouldfocusonthepositive

positive"brightside"

hopefulaspectsoflife.

"defineYourachievements,notyour

"shapeone'sdetermine,

one'smistakes,shoulddefineyour

personality"characterize

identity"identity.

6.优秀短语与词汇分析表（欧路词典）

核心词汇词性词义近义词联想词例句

挑战/

Thistestisnotonlya

difficulty,obstacle,

challengen./v.向...挑challengebutalsoachance

taskstruggle

战tolearn.

潜力/capability,prospect,Hehasthepotentialto

potentialn./adj.

潜在的possibilityopportunitybecomeagreatleader.

Gainingconfide