基础（词句文）02如何描写人物动作和神情（读后续写讲义）（原卷版）

基础（词句文）02如何描写人物动作和神情（读后续写讲义）读后续写微技能定位读后续写微技能定位一、人物动作与神情描写基本概念1.定位读后续写中人物不可或缺，而人物的动作与神情描写更是尤其重要。人物的动作与神情是人物内在情感的外显，它能推动故事情节、揭示人物心理状态并且增强故事的画面感。精准的人物动作和恰当到位的神情描写可使读者“看见”人物情绪，想人物之所想，急人物之所急，使后文续写情节更加连贯（如紧张时咬唇），避免直接陈述（如"Hewasnervous"），让续写更符合前文人设且富有感染力。2.区分人物动作和神情的基础描写是指我们直接直述动作，修饰较少（例：Shenodded.Hesighed.）人物动作和神情的进阶描写：多个连贯动作衔接恰当，还可融合环境、细节强化、比喻、夸张等情感层次（例：Herfingerstrembledasshereachedfortheletter,thepapercrinklinglikeautumnleavesunderhertouch—astarkcontrasttoherforcedsmile.）3.技巧讲解：让动作更生动技巧维度例句Translation1.

动态连贯（动作链）他猛地站起身，撞翻了椅子，大步流星冲向门口，手刚碰到把手又猛地缩回。Hesprangtohisfeet,knockingoverthechair,andrushedtowardsthedoor.Hishandreachedforthehandlebutjerkedbackabruptly.2.

细节强化（精准动词+伴随态）她攥紧书包带，指节泛白，脚步却不自觉往教室角落挪。Sheclutchedthestrapofherschoolbag,herknucklesturningwhite,andunconsciouslyedgedtowardsthecorneroftheclassroom.3.

环境互动（动作+场景呼应）他跺了跺脚，踩碎脚下的枯叶，沙沙声里混着急促的喘息。Hestampedhisfoot,crushingthedeadleavesbeneathhim,therustlingsoundminglingwithhisrapidbreathing.让神情活起来1.

五官联动（眼/眉/唇协同）她眉心拧成个“川”字，眼睑低垂，嘴唇紧紧抿成一道线。Hereyebrowsknittedintoafrown,hereyelidsdrooped,andherlipswerepressedtightlyintoathinline.2.

动态变化（神情的“起承转”）他的笑刚在嘴角绽开，就猛地僵住，眼神里的光像被掐灭的烛火。Thesmilehadjustspreadacrosshislipswhenitfrozeabruptly,thelightinhiseyesdimminglikeasnuffedcandle.3.

隐喻联想（神情+意象类比）他眼里像是燃着两簇野火，灼灼地烧向对方，睫毛却止不住地抖。Thereseemedtobetwowildfiresblazinginhiseyes,scorchingtowardstheotherperson,yethiseyelashestrembleduncontrollably.二、晨读素材必背单词1.headv.前往2.kissv.亲吻3.raisev.举起；使升高4.nodv.点头5.smellv.闻，嗅6.waterv.流口水7.standup站起身8.walkgracefully步态优美地走9.walkacrossthefields穿过田野10.jumptoone’sfeet一跃而起11.listenimpatiently不耐烦地听12.pacebackandforth来回踱步13.walkacrossastreet步行穿过马路14.walkarminarm挽臂而行15.walkthroughthepouringrain在倾盆大雨中走16.wanderintothewoods漫步向森林走去17.wanderoverthecountryside在乡间漫步18.singone’sownpraise自吹自擂19.bearalltheblame承担全部责任20.breakintoshoutsofapplause爆发出阵阵喝彩声三、晨读素材佳句赏析（选自各版本课本内容）1.Shetiptoedintotheroomandwhisperedtome,“IlookedateveryplantandIknowIgotthebestone!”（她踮着脚走进房间，轻声对我说：“我看过每一株植物，我知道我选到了最好的那株！）2.Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Ibreatheddeeply.“Hi,I’mMengHao.”（心里像揣了只小鹿，我深吸一口气：“你好，我是孟浩。”）3.Davidwasbannedfromtakingpartinthecrosscountryrunandheloweredhishead,withtearsofsadnesswellingupinhiseyes.（大卫被禁止参加越野跑，他低下头，悲伤的泪水在眼眶里打转。）4.Theyoungman'seyesgleamedwithreliefandjoyatthenews.（听到这个消息，年轻人的眼中闪烁着宽慰与喜悦的光芒。）5.Shepretendedtobehappybeforeherparentsasifnothinghadhappened.（在父母面前，她装作一副开心的样子，仿佛什么都没发生。）6.Hefrozeinplace,thesmilefadingfromhislips.Hisfaceturnedpale,andhetrembledfromheadtotoe.（他僵在原地，笑容从唇边褪去，脸变得惨白，浑身止不住地颤抖。）7.Shestoodbythewindow,joyfullyandpatientlywatching.Goldensunlightdancedinherlonghairandthechildren'slaughterfloatedintheair.（她站在窗边，欢快又耐心地望着。金色的阳光在她的长发间跳跃，孩子们的笑声飘荡在空中。）8.Hepushedthedooropenforcefully,strodeintothehouse,grabbedthehatonthetable,turnedaroundhurriedly,andrushedoutlikethewind.（他用力推开门，大步迈进屋里，抓起桌上的帽子，匆匆转身，风一般冲了出去。）9.ZhangYueputherhandsbehindherbacktohidethattheywereshaking.Shecouldn’t,however,hidethelineofsweatrunningdownherforehead.（张悦把双手背在身后，想掩饰它们的颤抖，却遮不住额头滑落的那道汗。）10.Hetorehiseyesawayfromhismother’sface,whispered,“I’lleback.”andhurriedfromtheroom.（他把目光从母亲脸上挪开，轻声说：“我会回来的。”然后匆匆离开了房间。）测试反馈：分级测试步步为赢测试反馈：分级测试步步为赢一、晚练高频语块汉译英1.v.前往2.v.亲吻3.v.举起；使升高4.v.点头5.v.闻，嗅6.流口水7.站起身8.步态优美地走9.穿过田野10.一跃而起11.不耐烦地听12.来回踱步13.步行穿过马路14.挽臂而行15.在倾盆大雨中走16.漫步向森林走去17.在乡间漫步18.自吹自擂19.承担全部责任20.爆发出阵阵喝彩声二、晚练佳句赏析汉译英1.

她踮着脚走进房间，轻声对我说。(tiptoe;whisper)2.他低下头，悲伤的泪水在眼眶里打转。(low)3.她紧咬嘴唇，眼睛不安地来回转动。（bite）4.他攥紧拳头，死死盯着地上的裂缝。（clench）5.李瑶猛地捂住嘴，眼睛瞪得滚圆，脚步不自觉地往后退。（cover）6.男孩挠了挠头，眼神躲闪，支支吾吾地说不出完整的话。（scratch;avoid；stammer）7.她把脸埋进臂弯里，脚尖不安地蹭着地面。（bury;rub蹭）8.老人眯起眼睛，微微前倾身子，全神贯注地听对方讲话。（narrow使变窄;leanforward）9.他拖着沉重的步伐，肩膀耷拉着，眼皮不住地打架。（drag;slump耷拉）10.听到这个消息，年轻人的眼中闪烁着宽慰与喜悦的光芒。（gleam）仿写实战：模仿借鉴学以致用仿写实战：模仿借鉴学以致用一、读后续写情景运用—单句1.闻到食物的香味，我开始流口水了。Mymouth______whenIsmelledthefood.2.她张开嘴要说什么。She______tosaysomething.3.她拉住孩子的手帮着他爬上台阶。Shetookthechild'shandand________________________.4.他们手拉手沿着小路走。They__________________alongthepath.5.他直起身子，目瞪口呆地看着我。Hestraightenedupandlookedatme,______.二、读后续写情景运用—小情景小段落阅读所给首句，在了解首句所设定的情境后，用一句话进行与动作与神情描写相关的主题续写。1.

[校园安慰・共情温暖]Whenherdeskmateburstintotearsafterseeingthefailedexampaper,shefrozeforasecond.2.

[家庭惊喜・感动意外]Asheopenedthefrontdooronhisbirthday,thelightssuddenlywentonandcheersexploded.3.

[街头助人・热心主动]Onthestreet,shespottedanoldmanstrugglingtocarryaheavybagofgroceries.4.

[舞台表演・紧张突破]Backstage,hishandsweresweatingandhiskneesknockedtogetherasthehostcalledhisname.5.

[雨天避雨・温柔怜悯]Waitingatthebusstopintherain,shenoticedasoakedstraydoghuddlingunderabicycle.6.

[图书馆认错・尴尬窘迫]Inthelibrary,hereachedforabookontheshelf,onlytofindanotherhandgraspingitatthesametime.三、读后续写情景运用—语篇1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Myfatheraskedmetochatwithhimforawhile.Actually,wasunwillingtolistentohistalkingendlesslyasalwaysdid.Myfatherwasalawyer,butIneverwantedtogotolawschoolorfollowhispaththroughlife.Er...What...d,heclearedhisthroatandstartedtosay,"Er...What...Whatdoyoureallywanttodointhegorgeousfuture?"Iwassilentforamomentplayingwiththecellphone.Ikeptthinking,"ShouldItellhimmytruethoughts?Whatifhegetsangry?WhatifIlethimdown?"LaterIreplied,"Well,Iwanttobeawriter."Iguessedthismaybenottheanswerhewouldexpect.Butansweredsurprisingly,"Interestingidea!"Iwasshocked,speakinginalowvoicewithhesitation(犹豫)."Areyouserious,Dad?""Well,youneedconfidenceandgoodpreparations,andyoustillhaveplentyoftime.Youneedtofindoutwhatyoureallyenjoynow.Look,it'slate.Let'staketheboatouttomorrowmorning,justyouandme.Maybewecancatchsomecrabsfordinner,andwecantalkmore."Earlynextmorningwepackeduptheequipmentandsetoffalongthecoast.Wedidn'ttalkmuch,butenjoyedthesoundoftheseabirdsandthesightofthecoastline.Therewerenobigwavesandbrightsunlightatthattime."Let'sseeifwearelucky,"hesaid,andpickedupacagewitharopetiedtoitandthrewitintothesea.Wewaitedawhile,thenmyfatherstoodupandsaid,"Givemeahandwiththis."Thenwepulledupthecrabcageontothedeck(甲板).Toourjoy,thecagewasfilledwithdozensofsoftshellcrabs.Squatting(蹲）down,wewatchedthemforamoment.Atfirsttheyfoughtagainsteachothertoclimbouthard,tryingtoescape(逃跑).Manywerepulledbackintothecage.Later,somegaveup,buttherewerestillsomecrabstryingtoescapeagainandagain.Atthatmoment,myfatherpointedtothecage,"Lookatthatcrabthere!"______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Fromthatdayon,Iwasdeterminedtomakemydreametrue.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【考查目标】主题语境为“人与自我”，涉及“个人未来规划”、“亲子关系”等内涵意义。要求考生在阅读的基础上，发挥合理想象，续写两段文字，以使故事完整、情节合理、衔接有序和语言生动。【文本主旨】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者不愿跟随自己的父亲做一名律师，于是大胆提出了自己想做作家的想法，结果父亲竟然意外同意了。随后作者跟随父亲