Unit1 Back to school（读后续写-人物情感）

Unit1Backtoschool

单元写作深度指导

读后续写

（如何刻画人物的情感、情绪）

叵直闽高丁

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浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务）

一、情感表露

幸福happiness

悲伤sorrow/sadness/misery/despair/grief

快乐joy/delight/cheerfulness/merriment

生气angcr/annoyancc/upsct/irritation

激动excitement/thrill

沮丧frustration/depression

满意satisfaction

失望disappointment

好奇curiosity

厌倦boredom

镇定calm

紧张nervousness/tension

勇敢bravery

害怕fcar/fright/drcad/panic/tcrror

自信confidence

吃惊surprise/amazement/astonishment/shock

自豪pride

嫉妒jealousy

内疚/后悔guilt/regret

反感disgust

感激appreciation/gratitude

困惑confusion/puzzlcmcnt

关心care/concem

焦虑anxiety/worry/concern

I.Heabandonedhimselftodespair.

Hegavewaytodespair.他陷入绝望.

2.Hisvoicewasfilledwithfatherlyconcern.他的声音充满了慈父般的关切.

3.Shewasfilledwithcuriosityandexcitementinthisnewenvironment.她在新的环境中充满了好奇和兴奋.

4.Shecried,fullofhappiness.她哭了,充满了幸福.

5.Mymindwasfullofanger,fear,panic.我心中充满了愤怒、恐惧、恐慌.

6.Theyareconsumedwithjealousyathersuccess.

他们对她的成功充满了嫉妒.

7.Theymaybeburdenedbyguiltandregret.

他们内心可能充满内疚和悔恨.

8.Herparentswereoverewithgriefalthefuneral.在葬礼上她父母悲痛欲绝.

9.1wasburstingwithcuriosity/pride.我充满/好奇/自豪.

10.OneinsixUKadultswillsufferfromdepressionandanxietyatsome.每六个英国成年人中就有一个人患有

某种程度的忧郁症和焦虑症.

11.1don'tsufferfromstress.I'macarrier.我不为压力所苦，因为我是一个搬运工.

12.Curiosityseizedhim.=Hehim.=Hewasseizedbycuriosity.他好奇心顿起.

13.Absoluteterrorpossessedher.她恐惧到了极点.

14.Panicseizedher.

Shewasseizedbypanic.她突然惊慌失措.

15.Seizedbyanger,thehunterraisedhisgunagain.猎人愤怒极了，再次举起了枪.

16.Guiltandhorrorfloodedherinwaves.

内疚和恐惧一阵阵涌上她的心头.

17.ThewordsHoodedhimwithselfpity.

这些话使他充满了自怜之情•.

18.Theheavycloudofdisappointmentseemedtohangoverthewholeproceedings.

失望的阴云似乎笼罩着整个过程.

19.Despairhangsheavyinthestiflingair.

绝望的感觉积压在憋闷的空气中.

2O.Thcroomwaschargedwithhatred.

这个房间充满了敌意.

21.Townsendharboursnoregrets.

汤淼心中无悔.

22.Guiltwaswrittenon/alloverhisface.

他满脸愧疚.

23.Healmostburstwithpridewhenhissonbegantoexcelatfootball.

当儿子在足球方面表现优秀时他心中充满了自豪.

24.WhenIlookedalmybrotherfor（hefirstlime,Ifeltamixtureoffearandinterest.LittledidIknowthatsmall,

pinkcreaturewouldgrowuptobeoneofmyfavoritepeopleintheworld.

当我第一次看着我的笫弟时，我感到既害怕乂兴趣.我一点也不知道这个粉红色的小东西长大后会成为世界

上我最喜欢的人之一.

25.Watchinghimclimbuptheprecipice,everybodywasbreathlesswithanxiety.

看着他往悬崖上爬,大家都捏了一把汗.

26.Thatonekisshadleftherbreathlesswithexcitement.

那个吻令她激动得喘不过气来.

27.Shelikestobearupwithherneighboursinappearances.Thelenderlovescenesbehindthefootlightsmade

Emmabreathlesswithenvy.

她爱撑场面,不愿居于邻居们之后.戏台上那理情意绵绵的爱情场面使爱玛为之神往.

二、情感变化

（-）情感过山车

1.Hispreviousfeargavewaytocuriosity.

不多时，他的呜咽变成了哭泣.

（二）态度变化

l.Hewasnotaskedtoleavehewentvoluntarily.（自愿地）

2.Wehavereluctantlyagreedtolethimgo.（不情愿地）

3.Heturnedleftautomaticallywithoutthinking」不假思索地）

4.Afterawhilewcnaturallystartedtalkingaboutthechildren.（自然而然地）

5.Shehadunknowinglybrokentherules.（无意中）

6.Sheunthinkinglyblamedusforwhatwehaddone.（轻率地;不假思索）

7.Hedriftedaimlesslyfromonejob（oanoiher.（漫无目的地）

8.Sheopenedthebookrandomlyandstartedreading.（随意地）

9.“Whatdidhesayaboutme?”sheaskedascasuallyasshecould.（不在乎地）

10.1accidentallybrokeaglass.（非故意地）

11.Theycoincidentallywrotesimilarletterstotheclub.（巧合地）

12.Hedroppedinonmequiteunexpectedly4出乎预料地）

13.Shelookedcautiouslyaroundandthenwalkedawayfromthehouse.（小心谨慎地）

14.Theword“remend"wasusedadvisedly.（深思熟虑地）

15.Hegazedreflectivelyathispanion.（若有所思地）

（三）情感描写

结构I：”（adv.+）doneby/with/about/at...,S+V...”

结构2：“adj.+and/but/yet+adjS+V...”“adj.+prep..../todo...,S+v...

结构3：独立主格结构

z4®:intcrcst/amusc/absorb;（bc）buriedin/（bc）absorbcdin/（be）lostin

厌烦:bore;（bc）tircdof/（be）fcdupwith

高兴:delight/please

t3S：annoy/offend/irrilate/disgust

沮丧:fhistrate/depress

满意:satisfy/content

失望:disappoint

镇定:calm

吃惊:surprise/amaze/astonish/shock

迷惑:confuse/puzzle

迷住/®{i：attract/spellbound/fascinate/over\vheInVdumbfound

担心/^^:worry/disturb/upsct;(bc)conccrncdabout

宙怕:frighten/alarm/scare/terrify

激动:excite/lhrill

感动:move/iouch

鼓励/:inspire/encourage/motivate

尴尬/羞愧:embarrass:awkward(adj.);(be)ashaniedof

1.Deeplymovedbyherperformance,thewholeaudiencegaspedwithadmiration.

她的演奏动人心弦,全场观众赞叹不已.

2.Excitedbythenews,Maricphonedhermotherimmediately.

玛丽听到消息十分激动,立刻给妈妈打了个电话.

3.Alarmedby(henoise,thebirdsflewaway.

那声音把鸟吓飞了.

4.Frightenedbythenoiseinthenight,thegirldidn'tdaretosleepinherroom.

姑娘被夜里的响声吓坏了,不敢在自己的房间里睡觉.

5.“1don'tagree,nshesaid,surprisedatthestrengthinherownvoice.

“我不同意.”她说道,对自己的声音如此响亮有力而感到惊讶.

6.Boredbycollegelife,IleftDartmouthattheendofDecember.

因大学生活无聊，我于12月底离开达茂斯.

7.Thrilledwithhisresponse,Ihappilyvolunteered(odropthemoff:henextdayattheframeshop.

他的反应让我激动万分，我兴高采烈，并且自告奋勇第二天就拿去装框.

8.Embarrassedatbeingthecenterofattention,Ifledoutoftheroom.

因成为众人关注的焦点而感到尴尬，我逃离了房间.

9.Amusedbymyjoke,sheburstintolaughter.

被我的笑话逗乐,她突然大笑.

1().Concernedabouthermother'sillness,shecouldn'tresistburstingintotears.

担心母亲的疾病，她禁不住大哭.

11.Inspiredbythis,theysetouttoseektheeffectsofphoneuseonpassersby.

受此后发,他们开始研究手机使用对过路人的影响.

12.Overwhelmedbyfear,Icouldn'thelpscreamingandbeatinghimonhischestandheadbutdidn'thelp.

我吓得不知所措，禁不住尖叫起来，不停地捶打他的胸和头,但无济于事.

13.WhenIreached(hepeakIstoodspellboundbythescenebelow.

爬上顶峰时，我被下面的景色迷住了.

14.Fascinatedbytheirsuperbperformance,theaudienceapplaudedwarmly.

观众被他们的精彩表演迷住了，热烈鼓掌.

15.Motivatedbyaneedtoachieve,weworkedaroundtheclock.

对成功的渴望激励着他们没口没夜地发奋.

16.Delightedbythebeautyoftheirfountainheaskedthemtodesignanotheroneforthecollege.

他对这个喷水池赞不绝口，请求他们为学校也设计一个一样的喷水池.

17.Calmedinaninstantbylookingatthestars,Idecidedtomakemoreefforts.

遥望星空暂时I可归平静•我决心更加努力.

18.Shesaidsheevenweptwhenfrustratedbyfailures.

她说自己屡受挫折,甚至还哭过.

19.Frustratedbytheirlackofrealsuccess,scientists'interestsinsleepsubstanceseventuallydwindled.

由于在寻找睡眠物质方面没能获得真正的成功，科学家们对它的兴趣最终消退了.

2O.Severelydepressedbywhatwasunfoldinginfrontofhim,hemadeuphismindtoleave.

因对展现在眼前的一切感到消沉,他决意离开.

21.Werushedtotheoffice,eagertoknowiheresultoftheexamination.

我们冲到办公室，急着想知道考试结果.

22.Unawareofthedangerahead,wewalkedon,talkingandlaughing.

没有意识到前方的危险,我们谈笑着往前走.

23.Suspiciousofhisintentions,sherefusedtotakehiscar.

由于对他的意图有几分怀疑，她拒绝乘他的车.

24.Enthusiasticabouthelpingothers,heishighlythoughtofbyallhismales.

由于热心助人，他受到所有同事的高度评价.

25.1wenttoKate'sroom.Shesatinherchair,motionless,handsinherlap,staring.Takingherhandsinmine,I

said...

我走进凯特的房间.她坐在椅子匕一动不动,手放在膝匕目光呆滞.我握着她的双手说…・••

26.Hcsmiled,hiseyesfulloflaughter.

他笑了，眼里充满了笑意.

27.ThcmantossedandsawReuben,dirtyandsweatstained.

那人转过身来，看到了脏兮兮、汗涔涔的鲁本.

28.Hewalkedtowardstherightdoor,eachstepfirmandsteady,andevenaglimmerofsmileinhiseyes.

他朝右边的门走去,每一步都坚定而稳重，他的眼睛里甚至还有一吆微笑.

29.Twoyoungloversweresmilingthroughthepassingseasons.Howlovelytheylookednow,sittingthere,the

lightshiningontheirwhiteheads,theirtimewrinkledfacessmilingatthememoriesoftheyears,caughtand

heldforeverinthescrapbooks.

两个年轻的恋人面带笑容,相互依伴度过那么多个春秋.他们现在坐在那儿，光线洒在他们白发苍苍的头上，他

们那饱经沧桑而布满皱纹的脸上荡漾着对往事回忆的笑容,一切往事都被相机拍摄下来，并永久地保留在剪

贴簿上，这个时候的他们看起来真的很可爱.

30.Doraliftedthelid,tearsbeginningtoblurhervision.

多拉打开盒盖,泪水顿时模糊J'她的双眼.

c/B除®包「画?

【方法指引】

突破方法1:直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜、怒、哀、乐

例如:快乐(happy,delighted,pleased,joyful,enjoyable等)、吃惊(surprised,shocked,amazed,

astonished)等形容词或介词短语(toone'ssurprise,inrelief,inpanic)等描述人物的情绪。

突破方法2:利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感

例如:Dellafinishedhercryinganddriedherface.Shestoodbythewindowandlookedoutunhappily

atagraycatwalkingalongagrayfenceinagraybackyard.(小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用3个形容词gray,

体现了Della的难受和不开心。)

突破方法3:利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节

例如:熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。Soangrywasthebearthatitroaredand

smackedthefenceviolently.（so...that倒装句型）

【策略微练】

1.按要求补全下面描写动作、情感和心理细节的句子

(1)简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐卜.，歇歇疼痛的双脚。

Scaredandhelpless,Janesatagainstatree,restingherachingfeet.(形容词短语、非谓语动词作状语)

⑵"如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了,”她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼暗。

"HadInotquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'thavebeentrappedhere,“shethoughttoherselfwithregretful

tearscloudinghereyes.(虚拟语气的倒装句,with复合结构)

(3)跟随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。

Followingthesoundofthestream,shewalkedtowardsthewater.(非谓语动词作状语)

(4)突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。

Suddenlyshenoticedafamiliarfigureatadistanceingtowardsher.(非谓语动词作宾语补足者)

2.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡

Scaredandhelpless,Janesatagainstatree,restingherachingfeetJHadInotquarreledwithTom,I

wouldn'thavebeentrappedh8「e,"shethoughttoherselfwithregretfultearscloudinghereyes.She

struggledtoherfeettosearchforthelake.However,shebecamesoexhaustedthatsheclimbeduponto

abigrock,laydownandfellfastasleep.ltwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Althoughdepressed,shedecidedto80tinueforcingherwayahead.Followingthesoundofthe

stream,shewalkedtowardsthewater.Suddenlyshenoticedafamiliarfigureatadistanceingtowards

her.

【语篇练习】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Myschoolhadatraditionduringtheninthgradegraduation:abeautifulgoldandgreen(theschool

colors)jacket,wasawardedtothestudentwhohadmaintainedthehighestgradesfornineyears.

IhadbeenastraightAstudentsincethefirstgradeandhadlookedforwardverymuchtoowningthat

jacket.Myfatherwasafarmlaborerwhocouldn'tearnenoughmoneytofeedfivechildren.Iwasgivento

mygrandparentstoraise.Therewouldneverbeaschoolsportsjacketforus.Thisscholarshipjacketwas

myonlychance.

OnedayinMay,IhappenedtooverhearMrSchmidt,myhistoryteacher,andMrBoone,mymath

teacherarguingaboutmeintheoffice.*1refusetodoit!Idon'tcarewhoherfatheris;hergradescan't

matchMartha'satall.Iwon5tlieorfalsify（伪造）records.”saidMrSchmidtangrily.

ButMrBoone'svoicesoundedcalm."Joann'sfatherisnotonlyontheboard（戢事会），heownsthe

onlystoreintown:wecouldsayitwasaclosetieand..."

Shakingandsad,I,waitedafewminutesandwalkedaway.

Thenextdaywhentheprincipalcalledmeintohisoffice."Martha,Mhesaid,“There'sbeenachange

inpolicythisyearregardingthescholarshipjacket.Thisyeartheboardhasdecidedtochargefifteen

dolars,whichstillwon'tcoverthepletecostofthejacket.Soifyouareunabletopaythemoneyforthe

jacket,itwillbegiventothenextoneinline.”

StandingwithallthedignityIcouldfind,Isaid/l'llspeaktomygrandfatheraboutit,sir,andletyou

knowtomorrow.111criedonthewayhome.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

BythetimeIgothome,myeyeswereredandswollen.Ifoundmygrandpainthebean

field.

Idraggedintotheprincipal'sofficethenextday,sadandcisappointed.

【参考范文】

BythetimeIgothome,myeyeswereredandswollen.Ifoundmygrandpainthebeanfield.Sensing

somethingwrong,heaskedmewhathappenedwithgreatconcern.Imurmuredtheprincipal'swords,a

surgeofregretgnawingatmyheart.Ireallyhatedtoseemygrayhairedgrandpa'sdisappointment.

Grandpa'seyesroundedindisbelief.Timetickingby,heheavedalongsigh,l,Mychild,anawardbought

can'tbecalledanaward."Inoddedunderstandingly.ButwhoknewhowreluctantandbitterIwas?

Idraggedintotheprincipal'sofficethenextday,sadanddisappointed.Myheadstillliftedwithdignity.

Itredtofightbackthetears,stammering,*'lcannot...affordthejacket,sir."Staringintonyeyes,the

principalsuddenlygrinned,*1havegoodnewsforyou."Ilookedathiminconfusion."Theboarddecided

thatanawardcannotbeboughtjustforthesakeofwinners'dignity.,>Hiseyesbrimmedwithsmiles.I

pinchedmyhandonlytofindIwasnotdreaming.OnlyatthatmomentdidIbelievethatMrSchmidtand

mygrandpawereright:nevercanawardsbefalsifiedorbought.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者的学校在九年级的毕业典礼上会奖励一件漂亮的金绿色的

夹克给9年来成绩最好的学生，作者•直是优等生，渴望得到那件夹克，但是偶然听到Schmidt老师和Boone

老师争论夹克到底给她还是Joann。后来祖父告诉作者买来的奖不能叫奖。校长最后也把夹克奖给了作者。

【写作思路】

1.段落续写

①由第一段首句内容“当我回到家时,我的眼睛又红又肿。我在豆地里找到了祖父。”可知，第一段可描写作者

告诉了祖父发生的一切,祖父告诉作者买来的奖不能叫奖。

②由第二段首句内容“第二天，我拖着沉重的脚步走进校长办公室,既伤心乂失望。”可知,第二段可描写作者伤

心地告诉校长自己买不起夹克，但是校长最后还是把夹克奖给了作者。

2.续写线索

找到祖父一告诉发生的事——作者心理情绪一祖父叹息感慨一走到校长办公室一告年校长买不起

——校长更改主意——作者得到夹克

3.词汇激活

行为类：

①低声说:murmur/sayinalowvoice/mutter

②看着:stareinto/lookat/watch

情绪类：

①难以置信:indisbelief/incredibly/unbelievably

②失望:disappointment/despair/Tustration

4.增分句型

©Sensingsomethingwrong,heaskedmewhathappenedwithgreatconcern.（运用了sensing现在分词作

状语）

（2）1pinchedmyhandonlytofindIwasnotdr6aming.（运用了省略引导词that的宾语从句作find的宾语）

③OnlyatthatmomentdidIbelievethatMrSchmidtandmygrandpawereright:nevercanawardsbe

falsifiedorbought.（运用广部分倒装句和由that引导的宾陪从句作believe的宾语）

c/0实画演叵I；

一、单句训练

1.爷爷觉得不对劲,关切地问我发生了什么事。

Sensingsomethingwrong,mygrandpaaskedmewhathappenedwithgreatconcern.

2.我喃喃地念着校长的话，一股遗憾的情绪折磨着我的心。

Imurmuredtheprincipal'swords,asurgeofregretgnawingatmyheart.

3.我真的不愿意看到白发苍苍的爷爷失望的样子。

Ireallyhatedtoseemygrayhairedgrandpa'sdisappointment.

4.时间一分一秒地过去，爷爷长叹一声。

Timetickingby,mygrandpaheavedalongsigh.

5.但是谁知道我是多么不情愿和痛苦呢？

BuiwhoknewhowreluctantandbitterIwas?

6.我仍然带着尊严昂起头。我努力抑制住眼泪,结结巴巴道。

Myheadstillliftedwithdignity.Itriedtofightbackthetears,stammering.

二、补充语段

李华的高中生活开始了,看看他第一天所写的Fl记吧。（根据文中的提示，完成下面的短文。）

MyfirstdayatSeniorHighthatIhavebeen「lookingforwardto（期待）eseventually.Mynewschool

makesadeepimpressiononmebecauseitisnothinglikemyJuniorHighschool.Ifelt2.soanxious（如此

焦虑）thatIcouldhearthesoundofmybreathing.3.Asanexchangestudent（作为一个交换生）,Idecided

toexploreabitandIwaslookingatthephotosonthenoticeboardwhenIheardavoicebehindme.I

4.wasqu让ecuriousto（非常好奇）findwhoitwas.Turningaround,IfoundmyEnglishteacher5.standing

there（站在那里）.

Itisatraditiontointroduceourselvestoeachotheronebyoneinthefirstclass.6.Although

frightened（尽管害怕）,Itriedtomakemyselfknowntoalltheclassmates.BeforeIknewit,thefirstday

passed.Ifoundmyselfconfidentaboutmyhighschoollife.

三、读后续写

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpclarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcamp

outsidenthepolarbearcapitaloftheworld''_thetownofChurchillinManitoba.Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbearslikeallwildanimals-shouldbe

photographedfromasatedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,!likeittobethroughacamerawitha

telephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner.ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledour

garlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefcncc.Hcpulledandbit

thewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Temfied,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebeanhitpotshard,andfired

blankshotgunshellsintotheairSometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Not（hispolarbear（houghhe

justkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbefore

i（arrived.Making（hebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesorthebear.

EiltandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishmcnt.Thccampmanager

suggestedIusepepperspray.Thcsprayburnsthebears'eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvited

guestslowlyand.throughthefcncc,spraycdhiminthefacc.Withanangryroar（吼叫）,thebearrantothelaketo

washhiseyes.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Para1.

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

Para2.

Atthatverymoment.thehelicopterarrived.

【参考范文】

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedlelike

shrillness.ThenoisesturnedElliandIpaicwithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.He

roaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatv/asleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesoinepicturesofthe

bear.Theanimal'snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.

Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,hetrottedforwardafewsteps.

Atthatverj'1moment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.

Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswith

themercilessnecessityofhunger,sowcthrowallthefoodwchave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.As

wcwereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.

【文章大意】

本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事。

【写作提示】

主人公的感情线变化为：兴奋渴望一惊恐一放松。剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开。

具体思路如下：

由第一段的段首提示句可知：几分钟后，熊又回到营地。接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐

的画面,例如"Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedlelikeshrillness.“这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应,

也描绘出让人战栗的场景。要注意与第二段首句的衔接。

由第二段的段首提示句可知：此时，直升机到了。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描

写戊“A代crthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。

“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而

泣的状态，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”最后,结尾部分需要迅速收束,

并说明成功逃脱的结局。

〔2024年1月•浙江•高考真题）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完

整的短文。

Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajor

headachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneach

floor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.

Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.

Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.All

thedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthat

shewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn'texist.

InherfirstPEclass,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunone

milearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewas

nothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile"wasusedtodescribelong

distances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,

eveninacar!

WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle（哨子），Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,while

someofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.MIt'sjustthebeginning,ushethought.1*

I'lleinlastforsure.

SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Eva

startedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedon

reachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothe

spotwherethetrackcurved（拐弯）.Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelap

turnedintotwo,thenthree,then