读后续写《道德困境抉择与情感冲突》专题教学设计

读后续写《道德困境抉择与情感冲突》专题教学设计一、试题呈现阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。主角与长辈在超市进行每周采购时，意外发现了一个皮质钱包。他好奇地捡起钱包，发现表面印有咖啡豆图案，这让他回忆起大学期间在咖啡店兼职的经历。除此之外，钱包内装有大量现金，还有一张印有电话号码的名片。主角与长辈一直过着清贫的生活，每一顿饭都源于长辈的辛勤劳作。主角目前正处于失业状态，仍在积极寻找工作。“我应该留下这个钱包吗？”他暗自思索，缓解经济压力的念头在脑海中闪过。“这笔钱我确实用得上。”然而，一阵愧疚感涌上心头。“但如果长辈知道了，一定会生气的。”他紧握着钱包，心中暗想。长辈察觉到他的犹豫，便询问缘由。主角告知了钱包的事以及自己内心的挣扎。长辈用温和却坚定的语气提醒他坚守价值观：“不属于我们的东西，我们不能要。”主角的脸涨得通红，心中百感交集。“我们没有稳定收入，还有账单要付，这或许是一个转折点。”他回应道。长辈承认了当下的困境，但鼓励他思考何为正确的选择：“归还钱包，或许会为你带来意想不到的好运。”最终，主角下定决心，拨通了名片上的电话号码。钱包的主人是一位年长的先生，当他与主角碰面取回钱包时，感激不已。他解释说，钱包里的钱是为儿子准备的，对儿子计划新开的咖啡店至关重要。主角离开时，因做了正确的事而感到一种成就感，但他仍在为自己的求职之路和经济状况担忧。注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,theprotagonistreceivedanunexpectedcall.Paragraph2:Theprotagonistwaspromotedtomanagerofthecoffeeshopsoon.二、文本类型界定与续写思路构建（一）文本核心定位本文属于道德选择型读后续写，核心冲突围绕“金钱诱惑与道德坚守”展开，主角在经济困窘与诚信准则之间面临抉择，最终选择归还钱包，续写需紧扣“善有善报”的价值导向，呼应前文伏笔，解决主角的核心困境。（二）续写整体布局段落核心事件情感转折衔接原文要素第一段接到意外来电，获得工作邀约从求职担忧到重拾希望年长先生提及儿子开咖啡店、长辈“意外好运”的预言第二段晋升咖啡店经理，生活改善从踏实工作到获得认可主角的咖啡店兼职经验、诚信品质（三）续写实施要点衔接原文关键信息：必须呼应“咖啡店”“名片电话”“年长先生之子”“长辈的价值观引导”等核心元素，保证情节连贯性；情感逻辑连贯：延续主角“愧疚—坚定—成就感—担忧—希望—满足”的情感脉络，心理描写需贴合人物处境；价值观导向：结局需传递“诚信胜短期利益”的正向理念，符合学业评价的价值要求；情节设计巧思：将主角的咖啡店兼职经验与新店需求精准匹配，使“善报”具备合理的因果逻辑，避免情节突兀。三、故事山模式与原文深度解析阶段原文内容续写方向开端主角捡到钱包，陷入道德与利益的内心挣扎/发展长辈劝导坚守诚信，主角最终选择归还钱包/高潮失主透露钱款用途（支持儿子开咖啡店）来电提供工作（构建新的情节高潮）回落主角获成就感但仍担忧经济与求职晋升经理解决核心困境（达成圆满结局）（一）核心要素分析分析维度具体内容原文支撑句人物特质主角：清贫却坚守底线；长辈：价值观坚定、善于引导“Wedon'tkeepwhatisn'tours.”情感层次利益诱惑→愧疚不安→坚定抉择→成就感→担忧→希望“awaveofguiltwashedoverhim”/“feltasenseoffulfillment”关键转折点归还钱包的决定成为命运转折的契机“withresolve,hedecidedtocallthenumber”语言特色以心理描写为核心，动作描写辅助刻画人物状态“thethoughtoffinancialreliefcrossinghismind”/“holdingthewallettightly”伏笔设置1.主角的咖啡店兼职经验；2.失主之子的咖啡店创业计划；3.长辈“意外好运”的预言money...dhimofhisownexperienceworkingparttimeatacoffeeshop”/“themoney...wascrucialforhisnewbusiness—acoffeeshop”核心冲突经济困境与道德准则的对立“Wehavebillswithoutsteadyine,andthiscouldbeaturningpoint”vs“Wedon'tkeepwhatisn'tours”隐含线索主角的专业技能与新店的人才需求高度契合“hisownexperienceworkingparttimeatacoffeeshop”四、续写段落示范（契合分析框架）Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,theprotagonistreceivedanunexpectedcall.Thewarmandfamiliarvoiceonthelinebelongedtothesonoftheelderlywalletowner.“Yourhonestydeeplymovedmyfather,”hesaid,explainingthathisnewlyopenedcoffeeshopwasinurgentneedofsomeonewithbothintegrityandrelevantexperience.Memoriesofhisparttimejobinacoffeeshopduringcollegeflashedthroughtheprotagonist’smind,makinghisheartracewithexcitement.“Wouldyoubeavailableforaninterviewtomorrow?”thecallerasked.Hangingupthephone,theprotagonistglancedathiselder,whoseearlierwordsechoedclearly:“Returningitcouldbringyouunexpectedgoodluck.”Paragraph2:Theprotagonistwaspromotedtomanagerofthecoffeeshopsoon.Hisdedicationtoworkandproficientskillswonfullrecognitionfromtheshopowner.Heoftenjoked,“Thatwalletbroughtmemorethanstartupfunds—itbroughttherightpersonfortheshop.”Thestableinefinallyeasedthefinancialpressureontheprotagonistandhiselder.Oneevening,ashearrangedcoffeebeansbehindthecounter,henoticedawalletwithafamiliarbeanpatterninacustomer’shand.Smiling,heremindedthecustomertokeepitsafe,firmlybelievingthatgooddeedsalwayscircleback,justashehadexperienced.五、描写技巧专项积累（一）动作描写（ActionDescriptions）Hepickeditupcuriously.（他好奇地捡起它。）Holdingthewallettightly,hehesitated.（他紧紧攥着钱包，犹豫不决。）Hisfingerstrembledashedialedthenumber.（拨号码时，他的手指微微发抖。）Shepattedhisshoulderreassuringly.（她安慰地拍了拍他的肩膀。）Hehandedthewalletbackwithasmile.（他微笑着归还了钱包。）Hisfaceturnedredwithembarrassment.（他的脸因尴尬而涨红。）Theelderlymanreachedouttoshakehishand.（老人伸出手和他握手。）Hesigheddeeplybeforemakingthecall.（他深深叹了口气，然后拨通了电话。）Shenoddedinapproval.（她赞许地点了点头。）Heclenchedhisfists,strugglingwiththedecision.（他攥紧拳头，内心挣扎。）（二）心理描写（PsychologicalDescriptions）Awaveofguiltwashedoverhim.（一阵愧疚感涌上心头。）Hewonderedifkeepingthemoneywasworthit.（他在想，留下这笔钱是否值得。）Thethoughtoffinancialreliefcrossedhismind.（经济压力缓解的念头闪过他的脑海。）Hefeltasenseoffulfillmentafterdoingtherightthing.（做了正确的事后，他感到一种满足感。）Doubtgnawedathimasheconsideredhisoptions.（他在权衡选择时，疑虑啃噬着他的心。）Hisconscienceprickedhim.（他的良心在刺痛他。）Amixofemotionsswirledinsidehim.（复杂的情绪在他内心翻涌。）Hecouldn’tshakeoffthefeelingofunease.（他无法摆脱不安的感觉。）Relieffloodedthroughhimwhentheownerthankedhim.（当失主感谢他时，他感到一阵释然。）Hopeflickeredinhischest.（希望在他心中闪烁。）（三）环境描写（EnvironmentalDescriptions）Thesupermarketbuzzedwithshoppers.（超市里挤满了购物者，嘈杂喧闹。）Thedimlightinginthestorecastlongshadows.（店里昏暗的灯光投下长长的影子。）Thearomaoffreshcoffeebeansfilledtheair.（新鲜的咖啡豆香气弥漫在空气中。）Raintappedgentlyagainstthewindow.（雨轻轻敲打着窗户。）Thestreetlightsflickeredintheeveninggloom.（街灯在暮色中闪烁。）Achillywindsweptthroughtheemptystreet.（一阵冷风扫过空荡荡的街道。）Thehumofconversationfilledthecoffeeshop.（咖啡店里充满了交谈的嗡嗡声。）Goldensunlightstreamedthroughtheblinds.（金色的阳光透过百叶窗照射进来。）Theclatterofdishesechoedfromthekitchen.（厨房里传来餐具碰撞的声响。）Thescentofleatherlingeredintheair.（空气中残留着皮革的气味。）六、高级语料分类积累（一）金钱/财富相关基础词汇：money高级替换：funds,savings,finances,wealth,cash例句：Hestruggledwithhisfinancesafterlosinghisjob.（失业后，他陷入了经济困境。）Thefundsinthewalletcouldsolvehisurgentproblems.（钱包里的钱可以解决他的燃眉之急。）（二）犹豫/纠结相关基础词汇：hesitate高级替换：waver,deliberate,vacillate,falter,ponder例句：Hewaveredbetweenkeepingthemoneyandreturningit.（他在留钱和还钱之间犹豫不决。）Afterdeliberatingforalongtime,hedecidedtocalltheowner.（深思熟虑后，他决定给失主打电话。）（三）道德/正直相关基础词汇：honesty高级替换：integrity,righteousness,virtue,morality,uprightness例句：Hisintegritypreventedhimfromkeepingthewallet.（他的正直不允许他留下钱包。）Shevaluedmoralityovershorttermgain.（她重视道德，而非短期利益。）（四）情绪/感受相关基础词汇：happy高级替换：elated,overjoyed,content,gratified,euphoric例句：Hefeltgratifiedafterdoingtherightthing.（做了正确的事，他感到心满意足。）Shewasoverjoyedwhenshegotthejoboffer.（收到工作邀约时，她欣喜若狂。）（五）工作/职业相关基础词汇：job高级替换：occupation,profession,career,employment,vocation例句：Hehadbeensearchingforemploymentformonths.（他已经找工作好几个月了。）Hisnewvocationatthecoffeeshopsuitedhimwell.（他在咖啡店的新职业非常适合他。）七、固定搭配与词法解析（一）固定搭配（Collocations）Strugglewithunemployment（与失业作斗争）Awaveofguilt（一阵愧疚感）Financialrelief（经济压力缓解）Makeadecision（做决定）Senseoffulfillment（满足感）Turnanewleaf（翻开新篇章）Facedifficulties（面对困难）Unexpectedgoodluck（意外的好运）（二）词法解析（LexicalAnalysis）Significant(adj.)=important,considerable（重要的；相当多的）反义词：insignificant（无关紧要的）例句：Thewalletcontainedasignificantamountofcash.（钱包里有一大笔现金。）Hiscontributionwasinsignificantinthegrandscheme.（在全局中，他的贡献微不足道。）Crucial(adj.)=critical,vital（至关重要的）反义词：trivial（琐碎的）例句：Themoneywascrucialforthenewcoffeeshop.（这笔钱对新开的咖啡店至关重要。）Themistakewastrivialandeasilyfixed.（这个错误很琐碎，很容易纠正。）Acknowledge(v.)=admit,recognize（承认；认可）反义词：deny（否认）例句：Sheacknowledgedtheirfinancialstruggles.（她承认了他们的经济困境。）Hedeniedtakingthemoney.（他否认拿了钱。）八、优秀续写版本参考Version1Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,theprotagonistreceivedanunexpectedcall.Tohissurprise,thecallerwasthesonoftheelderlywalletowner.Withafriendlytone,hesaidhehadheardabouttheprotagonist’shonestyfromhisfatherandwasdeeplytouched.“Peoplewithsuchintegrityarerarethesedays,”headded.Hementionedthathisnewcoffeeshopwasshortofstaffandaskedwhethertheprotagonistwouldbeinterestedingivingitatry.Theofferseemedalmosttoogoodtobetrue,buttheprotagonist,bothexcitedandgrateful,acceptedwithouthesitation.Determinednottoletthecallerdown,hepouredhisheartintotheworkfromdayone.Herearrangedtheshoplayouttoimprovecustomerflow,remendedseveralnewdrinks,andtreatedeverycustomerwithgenuinecare.Slowly,theshopbegantoattractmoreregularcustomers,andtheprotagonistregainedasenseofconfidencehehadn’tfeltinalongtime.Paragraph2:Theprotagonistwaspromotedtomanagerofthecoffeeshopsoon.Theshopownerhadbeensilentlyobservinghisperformanceandwasimpressedbyhisdedicationandabilitytobringwarmthtotheworkplace.Underhismanagement,theshopnotonlyachievedsteadyrevenuegrowthbutalsoearnedglowingreviewsfromcustomers.Theprotagonistensuredeveryemployeefeltvaluedandcreatedapositiveworkingenvironment.Oneevening,ashelockeduptheshopandlookedattheglowingsignboard,herecalledhishesitationwhenhefirstpickedupthewallet.Hiselder’swordsechoedagaininhismind,remindinghimthatdoingtherightthing,evenwhenit’shard,alwaysbringshope.Now,henotonlyhadastablejobbutalsoarenewedbeliefinhimself,builtonhonesty,effort,andperseverance.Version2Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,theprotagonistreceivedanunexpectedcall.Thecallcamefromtheownerofthecoffeeshophehadindirectlyhelped.Hesaidheadmiredtheprotagonist’ssenseofresponsibilityandwonderedifhewouldbewillingtojointheteam.“Weneedsomeonetrustworthylikeyou,”hesaidsincerely.Theprotagonistwasoverwhelmed—hehadbeenstrugglingtofindajobforweeks.Withoutmuchhesitation,heagreed.Onhisfirstday,hearrivedearly,carefullycleanedthecounters,andgreetedeachcustomerwithasmile.Heevenhelpeddesignasimpleloyaltycardsystem,drawingonwhathe’dlearnedduringcollege.Theshopownernoticedhisquietinitiativeandstrongworkethic.Thoughthedayswerelongandtiring,theprotagonistfelthopefulagain—hewasfinallypartofsomethingmeaningful.Paragraph2:Theprotagonistwaspromotedtomanagerofthecoffeeshopsoon.Onerainyafternoon,theshopownerhandedhimanametagwiththeword“Manager”onitandsaid,“You’vemorethanearnedthis.”Theprotagonisthelditforamoment,feelingtheweightofresponsibilityaswellaspride.Hisconsistenteffort,patience,andproblemsolvingskillsgraduallywontheshopowner’sfulltrust.Withhimincharge,theshopranmoresmoothly,andcustomersoftenreturnedjusttochatwithhim.Hetrainednewstaff,handledplaintswithcalmprofessionalism,andconstantlythoughtofwaystoimprovethebusiness.Lookingback,herealizedthatasingleactofhonestyhadnotonlyhelpedothersbutalsorewrittenhisownstory,justashiselderhadbelieveditwould.Version3Paragraph1:Afewdayslater,theprotagonistreceivedanunexpectedcall.Itwasthesonoftheelderlywalletowner,whoexplainedhisfatherhadtoldhimeverythingaboutthewallet.“Irespectyourhonesty,”hesaid.“We’rehiring.Wouldyouliketoeinforaninterview?”Theprotagonisthesitatedforamomentbutthenagreed.Theinterviewwentsmoothly,thankstohispreviousparttimeexperienceinacoffeeshop.However,startingfromtheentrylevelpositionwastough—hehadtocleanspills,memorizedozensofdrinkrecipes,anddealwithimpatientcustomers.Still,hestayedmitted.Hisperseverancedidn’tgounnoticed.Theshopowneroftensawhimstayinglatetohelpcolleagues.Afterclosingoneevening,theshopownerapproachedhimwithasmile.“I’vebeenwatchingyou.Let’stalkaboutyourfuturehere.”Paragraph2:Theprotagonistwaspromotedtomanagerofthecoffeeshopsoon.Hispromotionwasnotjustarewardbutarecognitionofhisintegrityandhardwork.Heintroducedweeklytrainingsessionsandredesignedthecustomerloyaltysystem.Underhisguidance,theshop’srevenuesteadilyincreased.Moreimportantly,hebecamearolemodelforyoungerstaff.Sometimes,assuggeste