Unit+5+Working+the+land读后续写同步写作高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit5Workingtheland人教版2019选择性必修第一册读后续写读话题写作文高二上Module5ChemicalfarmingOrganicfarmingLearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123技法点拨

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使续写更加形象生动01所谓协同，就是指所产出的语言与所需理解的语言趋于一致，是语言输出向语言输入看齐的一种方式。原文的语篇特征就是后续文章的语篇特征，所以要注意以下几方面的协同：1.主题协同以本模块典例赏析中材料为例（下同），根据原文的“Fromage14，heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedanduseditto

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expenses.”可知，文章的主题为“familyresponsibility”，在续文中，要紧紧围绕该主题进行，并体现出“我”已经“长大”，应该承担起自己的责任。2.冲突协同原文中冲突为“hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities”“Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldcither”,在续文中要做好这两个矛盾的协同:冲突1.父子俩互相理解；冲突2.儿子愿意拿出这笔钱用作为家庭的开销。Tip1:协同原则写美文3.人设协同(1)根据原文中的“Aquietman”可知，父亲不善言辞；根据“Andhisdad，Albert.tookthemoncymydadcarnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenscs.”可知，父亲勤劳、有责任心；在续文中，要尽可能把父亲憨厚老实的性格特征体现出来；续文中父亲不要说过多的话,而且不要出现文绉绉的说辞，否则与父亲憨厚老实的农民身份不符合。(2)根据原文的“thefarmersaidtheremightbemorework.butIwasn't

interested”“thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed”"Idecided

itwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.”可知，儿子的性格是聪明、自信、倔强又有点不负责任，所以才会不理解父亲。按照正能量原则，儿子最终会理解父亲，并愿意上交这笔钱，承担起相应的家庭责任。Tip1:协同原则写美文4.情感协同小男孩的情感非常丰富，所以续文中也要把小男孩丰富的情感淋漓尽致地表达出来，做到情节和情感[让交钱“我”不愿(unwilling)——因小事被感动(moved)——负责父亲影响“我”(considerate)——心甘情愿拿出补家用(willing)]两条线同时走，让续文的情感丰盈饱满。5.语言协同内容要创造，语言要模仿（王初明）。原文为续文提供了语境，续文是原文的延续，自然要遵循原文的语言风格和特点。原文用到了同位语、非谓语、定语从句、宾语从句、主语从句及一些好的词汇，句式和句型相对来说还是比较丰富的。续文作者也要遵循这一原则，做到与原文语言的合理衔接。Tip1:协同原则写美文名词性从句包括主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和同位语从句。what,that所引导的名词性从句是写作中常见的高级表达方式，使用名词性从句可以使表达更加丰富、地道。1.宾语从句(1)IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.我被告知我在写作比赛中获得了一等奖，并且将在两天后进行颁奖典礼。(2023新高考)【赏析】该句使用了两个that引导的宾语从句，分别讲述了“我”得知的两件事情：一是我获奖了，二是将要参加一个颁奖典礼。(2)Openinghercyes,shecouldn'tbelievewhatshehadseen.睁开眼睛，她简直不敢相信她所看到的一切。(2021新高考)【赏析】what引导的名词性从句作谓语动词believe的宾语，其中，what在从句中作谓语动词hadseen的宾语。Tip2:名词性从句提升表达档次2.主语从句(1)WhatconcernedthechildrenwaswhetherBernardcouldsellallthepopcorn

out.让孩子们担心的是伯纳德是否能卖完所有的爆米花。【赏析】what引导名词性从句。(2)Itisofvitalimportancethatwe(should)learnsomcthingfromfailurc.我们从失败中吸取教训是至关重要的。【赏析】“it”作形式主语，真正的主语是后面的名词性从句。3.同位语从句OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.有一天，我听说他因患重病住院了。(2022年1月浙江卷)【赏析】that引导同位语从句，解释“word”的具体内容。Tip2:名词性从句提升表达档次佳

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跟着课文学佳句02细节描写1.考虑到这对双胞胎没有做母亲节早餐的经验，父亲面带笑容，乐意帮助他们。GiventhatthetwinshadnoexperienceincookingaMother’sDaybreakfast,hefatherwaswillingtohelpthem,withasmilespreadingonhisface.3.为了帮助更好地种植蔬菜，他们首先轮流给植物浇水。Tohelpgrowthevegetableswell,theyfirsttookturnstowatertheplants.2.这幅图画让我深信做一个好女儿甚至比做一个好学生更重要。Thepictureconvincesmethatitisevenmoreimportanttobeagooddaughterthanagoodstudent.原：Totacklethiscrisis,hechosetostudyagricultureandreceivedaneducationatSouthwestAgriculturalCollegeinChongqing.原：

GiventhatYuan'shybridsmadehimquitewealthy,oncmightthinkhcwouldhaveretiredtoalifeofleisure.原：Yuanwasconvincedthattheanswercouldbefoundinthecreationofhybridrice.细节描写4.我没有退缩，而是专注于我所能实现的目标。Insteadofwithdrawingintomyself,IfocusedonwhatIcouldachieve.6.当参观艺术展览时，我们讨论了伟大艺术家的作品。

While(wewere)visitingtheartexhibition,wediscussedthegreatartists'works.（天津卷）5.我习惯每天早晨看《中国日报》，因为它能让我了解国内外的时事。IamusedtoreadingChinaDailyeverymorning,asitcankeepmeinformedofthepresentcventsbothathomeandabroad.原：

Thegoalofusingdifferentorganicfarmingmethodsistogrowgoodfoodwhileavoiding

damagetotheenvironmentortopeople'shealth.原：

Eveninhislateryears,YuanLongpingwasstillyoungatheartand

fullofvision,andeveryonewasalwaysexcitedtoseewhathewoulddreamup

next.原：Organicfarmersfocusonkeepingtheirsoilrichandfreeofdiseasethroughnaturalmeans.细节描写7.伯纳德感激的泪水顺着脸颊流下来，他说：“言语无法表达我对您帮助我克服困难的感激之情。”Withtearsofgratitudestreamingdownhischeeks,Bernardsaid,“NowordscanexpresshowgratefulIamtoyouforyourhelpingmeovercomemyproblem.”原：

Throughintensecffort,Yuanovercameenormoustechnicaldifficultiestodevelopthefirsthybridricethatcouldbeusedforfarmingin1974.03写作实践:

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Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(长号).ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome--itwas$119--mydadwantedtotalktome.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.

______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在八年级前的暑假去农场工作,辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后,理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。

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（adj./v./短语）（主要）角色1highschoolstudent,didn’tunderstanddad’sworld（主要）角色2DadGeorgequiet,alivestocktruckerwithloweducationcontributetohome（次要）角色

aneighboringfarmer背景事件Ididasummerjobandearnedsomemoney.微情节

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Ilookedforwardtothepay.

(p5)Dad’swordsmademerealizedmyearningsmaybenotmine.(p6)Iwasnotinterested.(p7)I

22第二步：构建情节What’sthegenreofthepassage?Narration（记叙文）Argumentation（议论文）Exposition（说明文）Readforthegenre

Para1.情节情感JennaandJeff思考着如何给妈妈准备母亲节早餐。内心充满期待的、无比激动的、兴致勃勃的。Para2.情节情感JennaandJeff准备早餐的过程，精心地煎着面包片。自信的、小心翼翼的、谨慎地、仔细地、开心的、期待的、镇定的。Para3.情节情感厨房弄得一团糟，JennaandJeff分工明确、互帮互助，但是粥依然没煮出来，面包片也焦了。面对厨房一团糟的恐惧不安与担心、手背锅烫了的痛苦难受、一直做不出母亲节早餐的焦急之情、忐忑不安、忧心忡忡。

Thepayarrivedatlast.

Afterhearingwhathehadsaid,Ifeltembarrassed.P1大意Daddidn'twantmymoney.ImisunderstoodDad.P1角色续写思路角色IDad

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Dad①HowdidIfeelafterreceivingthemoney?②Arrivinghome,whatdidIdo?③Whatdidhesaidtome?P2大意P2角色续写思路角色

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定情节发展ThistimeIundertandDadandamwillingtosharemymoney.I;

DadIDad③Howdidhefeel?Howdidhereact?

Afterhearingwhathehadsaid,Ifeltembarrassed.①HowdidIfeel?②WhatdidIdo?

What’stheending?情绪(adj.)续写段1.情节情感爸爸的突然出现救场缓解了双胞胎俩人的窘境，描写爸爸是如何知道孩子们做好这一顿早餐的，描写出爸爸的耐心与孩子们的认真。结合续写第二段的既给首局可知爸爸领着孩子俩给妈妈做早餐成功了。①孩子角度：看见爸爸出现了很激动，内心如释重负，重拾信心；②爸爸角度：知道孩子们做早餐时内心充满了对孩子和妻子的爱以及耐心。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.________续写段2.情节情感①描写做好早餐后孩子们将其端上楼给妈妈的动作（仔细，小心翼翼，激动，期待）；②描写妈妈看见爱心早餐的动作反应；③描写双胞胎与爸爸妈妈的语言互动；④主旨升华（亲情类的名人名言）。妈妈看见早餐后既惊喜又激动，妈妈的感动之情，以及双胞胎俩人对妈妈和爸爸的感激之情。Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup._____________________WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.Knowingthathewouldtalkaboutmyearnings,Ipulledalongfaceandintendedtosimplywalkpasthimandslipbacktomybedroom.“Comehere,son.”Dadexclaimed,wearinganaccessibleexpression.Myheartsank.WhatIhadbeenlookingforwardto—adreamynewfootballoutfitwouldfinallygivewaytofamilyexpenses.Reluctantly,Iinchedforwardandsubmittedthepaycheck.However,Dadslidthepaycheckbackintomyhand,sayinginatendervoice,“You'vegrownup.Youhaveeveryrighttodecidewhattodowiththemoney.”IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Mypreviousdesperationwasimmediatelyerasedbygreatbills.Isteppedcloserandhuggedhimtightly.JustatthatmomentInoticedhisgreyhairandstiffneck.Memoriesofhisusualcryofpainontheneckcamecrowdingin.Irealizedhowmuchhehadcontributedtothefamilythroughhistiringworkofbeingatrucker.Tearsbegantoblurmyvision,"Dad,thanksforyourhardworktheseyears.Ishouldn'thavebeensoselfishandnotwillingtocontributemymoney."Onthatday,IbegantounderstandDad’sworldanditseemedthathewasalsoonthewayintomyworld.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasearlyspringandNanawasinthebackyardwithhergrandchildren.Amy,Michael,andJustinwereplayingwhenNanasaid,“I’mgoingtostartplantingmygarden.Whowantstohelpme?”“Whataregoingtoplant,Nana?”askedAmy.“Ilikebig,yellowsunflowers.”“I’mgoingtoplantvegetables.Thatwaywecanhavethemtoeatwhentheyareready,”saidNana.“Howlongdoesthattake?”askedMichael.Helikedvegetablessometimes,especiallycarrots.“Itwilltakeafewmonthsbeforeanythingisreadytoeat,”answeredNana.Thechildrenweresurprised.“Months?Whywouldyoudoallthatworkandthenhavetowaitsolong?”askedAmy.“Youshouldjustgotothestoreandbuythem.”“Patience,mysweeties!Don’tyouknowfoodalwaystastesbestwhenyougrowityourself?”repliedNana.“Andifallofyoucometohelp,itwon’tbetoomuchwork.”“I’llhelpyou,Nana,”offeredJustin.HeputdownthesoccerballandwenttolookatthegardeningtoolsNanahadlaidout.“Whatdowedofirst?”MichaelandAmycameo