Unit4Sharing话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版

Unit4Sharing人教版2019选择性必修第四册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.We________________________withourjointeffortsratherthanwiththehelpofluck.我们应该通过我们的共同努力而不是运气来赢得比赛。(deserve)(读后续写主旨升华)2.Theguide___________________________thekitchen.向导慢慢朝厨房挪动。(drag)(读后续写动作描写)3.Itwas____________________Ms.MeredithandherchildrenthatBernard’businessofpopcorntookoff.正是在Ms.Meredith和她的孩子们的帮助下，伯纳德的爆米花生意成功了。(help)(2020·新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写)4.FromtheexperienceIlearnedanimportantlesson—seedifficultiesasakindoftestand_____________________.从这次经历中我学到了重要的一课——把困难看作是一种考验，并认真对待它们。(take)(读后续写主旨升华)5.Iwouldnotforgettheexperience,andIwoulddowhatIcouldto_________________.我不会忘记这次经历，我也会竭尽全力帮助需要帮助的人。(inneed)(2022·浙江卷读后续写)活用写作词汇deservedtowinthecompetitiondraggedhimselfslowlytowiththehelpoftakethemseriouslyhelpthoseinneed活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.

(2021·6月浙江)母亲正在把她买的东西放进购物袋里，这时一个陌生人走了过来。Mymotherwasputtinghergroceriesintoshoppingbags____________________________.2.他们到达了山顶，从那里他们可以把整个城市看得很清楚。Theyreachedthetopofthehill,_____________________________________.原：TheotherdayIwasshowingtheboysachemistryexperimentwhen,beforeIknewit,themixturewasbubblingoutofthetesttubespillingeverywhere!几天前，我正在给男孩们演示一个化学实验，在我反应过来前，混合物冒着泡从试管中涌出，洒得到处都是！原:AnotherteacherandIwalkedfortwoandahalfhourstogetthere—first,upamountainfromwherewehadfantasticviews,andthendownashadedpathtothevalleybelow.我和另一位老师走了两个半小时才走到那儿。我们首先爬上了一座山，在山里欣赏到了极美的景色，然后沿着一条阴凉的小路走到了下面的山谷。whenastrangercameuptoherfromwheretheyhadagoodlookatthewholecity细节描写3.刚才，汤姆撕开包裹，挤出一条，大咬了一口。Justnow,Tom___________________________________.4.尽管有他的远程指导，但我独自完成这个课题确实很辛苦。(2022·浙江卷读后续写)_________________________________________despitehisremoteguidance.原：Mymotheralsodoesacircuitoftheruralvillagestoprovidemedicaltreatment,helpthosewithdisabilities,andprovideconsultationandtrainingforlocaldoctors.我母亲还到偏远的农村巡诊，提供医疗服务，帮助残疾人，并为当地医生提供咨询和培训。原Ittakesmeonlyafewminutestowalktoschooldownadustytrackcoveredinweeds.沿着杂草丛生、尘土飞扬的小路，我只需要几分钟就能走到学校。torethepackageopen,squeezedoutonestripandtookabigbiteItdidtakemehardworktofinishtheprojectalone活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例动作描写1.Whenlreachtheschoolgrounds,I’mgreeted

byachorusof“goodmorning”fromtheboys.2.Theotherdaylwasshowingtheboysachemistryexperimentwhen,beforelknewit,thetesttubespillingeverywhere!3.Thewholeclassbecameacircusastheboys,whohadnevercomeacrossanythinglikethisbefore,startedjumpingoutofthewindows.4.Mymuscleswereachingandmykneesshakingaswedraggedourselvesdownthemountaintowardshome.场景描写1.Theclassroomsaremadeofbamboo,withclayfloorsandroofsofgrass.2.Ittakesmeonlyafewminutestowalktoschooldownadustytrackcoveredinweeds.3.Anotherteacherandlwalkedfortwoandahalfhourstogetthere-first,upamountainfromwherewehadfantasticviewsandthendownashadedpathtothevalleybelow.

外貌描写Tombe’sfather,Mukap,amanwithastrongjawandawrinkledforehead,ledustohishouse.心理描写IdoubtwhetherI’mmakinganydifferencetotheseboys’livesatall.技法点拨：

环境描写02⑴“情景交融”法①Thatnightwesetupourtentinapark.（那天晚上我们在公园里搭起帐篷。）②Themoonwasheldupabovethesky,shininghersmoothandcharmingmoonlight.（月亮被高举在天空的上方，照耀着她那光滑而迷人的月光。）③Twinklingstarswereblinking（眨眼）,andfragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风）gentlyblew.（闪烁的星星眨着眼，芬芳的微风轻轻地吹着。）④Restingbesidemymother,withhandsheldtightlybyher,Ifeeltheworldissobeautiful.（躺在母亲身边，双手紧紧地握着母亲，我觉得这个世界是如此美丽。）【评析】这几个例句中smooth光滑的，charming迷人的blinking（眨眼）,fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风）这个景物描写很精彩。再加例4中就让“母亲”显现，就让“我与母亲关系和谐”的主旨就显现了。总之，根据凸显“情感”的需要，我们可以决定是不是该加一句显性的“情感表达”，来决定是不是呈现显性的“情景交融”。1.环境描写方法⑵比喻法例1.Nightfell.Thedarknesswasthin,likesomesleazydressthathasbeenwornandwornformanywintersandalwaysletsthecoldthroughtothebones.Thenthemoonrose.夜色降临,暮色稀薄,犹如穿过了数个冬季的敝衣,难以抵御刺骨的严寒。而后月亮升起。《TheWhistle》【评析】这句话的核心句是：Thedarknesswasthin，即：暮色稀薄。其他内容都是锦上添花的作用，就是让这个核心句子显得更加完整具体。它首先是用到了比喻：这里的like就起到了这个作“likesomesleazydress”意为“像是一条薄薄的裙子”，将darkness比作薄薄的裙子还不够，还穿了好几个冬天(hasbeenwornandwornformanywinters),冬天里穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(tothebones)。如此，一个寒冷的夜晚(coldnight)与一件不能御寒的敞衣相联系，内容可以如此丰富。1.环境描写方法例1：Theairwasdedicatedlystill,treeconsideratelysilentandthenightremarkablypeaceful.空气很安静，树很安静，夜晚非常宁静。【句式总结】排比:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2,and意象3+动词3.例2：Thestarstwinkledvividlyinthesky,lookingasbrightasdiamonds.星星在天空中生动地闪烁着，看起来像钻石一样明亮。【句式总结】（动作连）非谓语:意象+谓语动词(主句)，非谓语动词(分句)例3：SunlightshonegentlyonDavid,celebratinghisbravery.阳光温柔地照射在大卫身上，庆祝他的勇敢。【句式总结】（拟人）非谓语:意象+谓语动词(主句)，非谓语动词(分句)2.环境描写常见句式1.云在远处快速移动,笼罩着整个森林____________________________________________.2.倾盆而下,敲打窗户。_____________________________________.3.狂风呼啸,把树连根拔起。____________________________________.4.云在远处快速移动,笼罩着整个森林。________________________________________________________.5.阳光穿过森林,轻轻地照在地面上。_________________________________________________________.6.月光微弱地照在地上,将一切都笼罩在银色之中。_______________________________________________________.7.散布于天空中,调皮的星星们把夜色映得栩栩如生。__________________________________________________________.8.阳光温柔地洒在大卫身上,赞美他的勇敢和决心。________________________________________________________.举一反三Thecloudsmovedrapidlyinthedistance,envelopingthewholeforestTherainpoureddownheavily,beatingagainstthewindowsThewindwasroaring,uprootingabunchoftreesThecloudsmovedrapidlyinthedistance,envelopingthewholeforestThesunlightbrokethroughtheforest,shininggentlyonthegroundThemoonlightshoneweaklyontheground,coveringeverythinginsilverDottingthesky,thenaughtystarsvividlylitupthenightSunlightshonegentlyonDavid,celebratinghisbraveryanddetermination写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Mary’shusbanddiedafewyearsagofromanaccident.Tomakeendsmeet,shehadtotakeonseveraljobsandbringupherfivechildrenalone.Fortunately,heroldestchildrenunderstoodherandhelpedtolookaftertheyoungerkids.Maryalwaysfeltterribleaboutthat,buttherewasnothingshecoulddo.Shedreamedofhavingavantotransportgoodsforotherssothatshecouldhaveanothersourceofincome.Inthemornings,Marycleanedthehousesforsomefamilies,andworkedasacashieratasupermarkettherestoftheafternoon.Atnight,sheworkedatagasstation’sconveniencestore.Everynight,shecamehometired,andmostofthekidshadbeenasleepbythen.Oneafternoon,Marywaswalkingtothesupermarkettostartherdutywhenshesawanoldmanstaringatthewindowofthebakerynextdoor.Thesmelloffresh-bakedbreadpermeated(弥漫)theair.However,themanmerelysighedandstartedwalkingaway.Maryfeltawfulforsomeunknownreasonandstoppedtheman.“Hey,sir.IthinkI’veseenyoubeforeatthestore,”

shesaid.“Yes.I’mHector.Nicetoseeyou,”theoldmannoddedatherandstartedtowalkaway.“Wait,doyouneedanything?”Marysaid,smilingkindly.“Honestly,therewasaleakinmyroofthismonth,andIhadtospendmyentiremonth’spension(退休金)onit.Idon’thavemuchmoneyfordesserts,”hesaid.“Idon’tknowwhenI’llbeabletobuysomeagain.”典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:MaryaskedHectortowaitandshewentintothebakery.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Oneday,MarysawanewvaninthedrivewaywithHectorstandingnexttoit.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Mary为了养家糊口，打了几份工，希望能有个送货的工作能节省出时间照顾孩子，一天遇到了一位身处困境中的老人，这次偶然的善意使她圆了自己的梦想。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenOneafternoonwhereOnMarry’swaytothesupermarketwhoI;Mary;anoldmanWhatMarywaswalkingtothesupermarkettostartherdutywhenshesawanoldmanstaringatthewindowofthebakerynextdoor.WhyTheoldmandidn’thavemuchmoneyfordesserts.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节

①由第一段首句内容“玛丽让赫克托等一下，然后她走进面包店”可知，第一段可描写作者进到店里帮Hector买了些面包，并经常去看望Hector，他们成为了好朋友。

②由第二段首句内容“一天，玛丽在车道上看到一辆新面包车，赫克托站在旁边”可知，第二段可描写Hector帮助Mary买了一个货车，圆了她的梦想。Mary受到感动，感谢Hector的善良。2.续写线索：让Hector等待——Mary进店买面包——推辞——经常交流，成为好朋友——Mary看见新货车——Hector卖掉名表——圆梦、感动——拥抱思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点24

MaryaskedHectortowaitandshewentintothebakery.SheboughtsomebreadforHector(衔接句).“Hereyougo,”shesaid,handinghimthebagwhensheexitedthebakery(动作连).“Ican’tacceptthis,”hetriedtoreject,butMaryinsisted.“Please,letmedosomethingforyoutoday,”shecontinued(对话描写).HectorthankedMaryandthenwalkedaway.Inthefollowingdays,MarywouldseeHectordailyandbringhimsomethingtoeat(场景描写).Withtimegoingby,theybecamegoodfriends.Theyevenchattedabouteverythingwitheachother(衔接句).

Oneday,MarysawanewvaninthedrivewaywithHectorstandingnexttoit.“Surprise!Thisvanisyours!”Hectorsaid(衔接句).Marycouldn’tbelievethat(心理描写).“Mary,youhavehelpedmealot.Icanneverrepaythat,butIhadanoldwatch.Itwasworthaprettypenny,”hesaid.“Ican’ttakethis.Youneedmoney,too,”Maryrefused.“Acceptthevan,andyoucanquitoneortwoofyourjobstoaccompanyyourchildren,”Hectorsaid.MarywasdeeplymovedandshehuggedHectortightly,thankinghimforhiskindness(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

TheJoyofGivingSomeoneoncesaid,“Tohelpthepooristohelpyourself.”Perhaps,thatpersonmeantthathelpingthoseinneedwilllaterresultininternalsatisfaction.Iusuallyneverdocommunityservicebefore,butwhenIheardtheopportunitytojoinmyschool’sserviceclub,Interact,Iputupmyhandwithouthesitation.TheopportunitytohelppeopleinneedexcitedmeandasIsigneduptoattendSaintMary’sFoodBank,theurgeofhelpingpeoplemademybodytremble.AsIwalkedafterschooltoMrs.Green,Icouldfeelthepalms(手掌)ofmyhandsbecomingwetbytheminute.ThewaterofmynervesrandownthesideofmyheadandIcouldfeelthetipofmyshirtsoaking(湿透)withfreshsweat.TheclocktickedandIcouldfeelthetimeofgoingtoSaintMary’sFoodBankgettingcloser.Tenminuteslaterthebusarrived-andwewereonourwaytothebank.Onthewaymanythingscamethroughmymind.Whatwasitgoingtolooklike?Willtherebehomelesspeoplethere,

andwillIenjoymyexperience?AsIcontinuedtoexploremymind,thebuscametoastop.“We’rehere,“saidloudlythebusdriver.Icouldfeelthepalmsofmyhandsbeginningtomoisturize(变潮湿)onceagain.AsIgotoffthebus,Ifellintoadeepdoubt.Thiswasthefoodbank?Ihadneverseenanythinglikeit.Tomyamazement,itremindedmeofaplaceIwouldgoinMexicotofeedthepoor.Itwasbrown,wideandhadanoldlooktoit.Asweenteredthebankasagroup,theessenceofitwasverycomfortable.IfeltlikeIwashome.Finallymynervesweregone,andIwasreadytowork.Beforewestartedworking,weweregiveninstructions.Butassoonaswefinishedourtourofinstructions,thedutyofservicebegan.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Wewerealldividedintogroupsandgivenaspecificjob._________________________________________________________________________________