Unit5Poems话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版选择性

Unit5POEMS人教版2019选择性必修第三册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.____________________________________.Tearswerebeginningtogatherinhereyes.一阵悲伤涌上心头，她眼里涌上泪水。(sorrow)(读后续写情感描写)2.Depressed,she_________________________________butweepinherroom.她很沮丧，除了在房间里哭泣，什么也不想做。(mood)(读后续写情感描写)3.Onlywhenwe________________________________________canwewinthetrustofothers.只有言行一致,我们才能赢得他人的信任。(correspond)(读后续写主旨升华)活用写作词汇Awaveofsorrowwelledupwithinherfeltinnomoodtodoanythingmakeouractionscorrespondwithourwords4.MrsMeredith___________________________________thepoor,sowhenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Meredith太太同情穷人，因此每当她有时间都会给他们带来食物和药品。(sympathy)(2020·新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写)5.ItwasthroughtheexperiencethatIwasawarethatIshould_____________________mydreamandnevergiveitup.正是通过这次经历，我意识到我应该坚持自己的梦想永不放弃。(hold)(读后续写主旨升华)6.I____________________________breakingdownwhenmyfathercamerunningtohelpwithaknife.我差点哭出来，这时我父亲拿着刀跑来帮忙。(point)(2021·浙江卷读后续写)活用写作词汇hadsympathyfor/wassympathetictoholdonto/holdfasttowasonthepointof活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.我不想让我的父母失望，这就是我下定决心学好功课的原因。_________________________________________________isthatIdon'twanttoletmyparentsdown.2.无论我们走到哪里，我们都应该尽力传播我们的中国传统文化和习俗。_____________________________,weshouldtryourbesttospreadourtraditionalChineseculturesandcustoms.原：Therearevariousreasonswhypeoplecomposepoetry.人们写诗有各种各样的原因。原：AndthenwhenIfoundit,whereveritblew,Ishouldknowthatthewindhadbeengoingtheretoo.后来当我找到它时，无论它飘到哪儿，我会知道风也去过那里。ThereasonwhyI'mdeterminedtodowellinmylessonsWherever/Nomatterwherewego细节描写3.原因是他们没有因为成功而欣喜若狂，也没有因为失败而感到沮丧。_________________theywerenotthrownintoecstasiesovertheirsuccess,norfeltdepressedovertheirfailures.4.如果我们中有更多人看重家庭而不是金钱，这个世界就会更美好。Ifmoreofusvaluedfamilyabovemoney,____________________.原：Thereasonisthattheycanfeelthewarmthofloveandenjoytheinnocenceofchildhood.原因是他们可以感受到爱的温暖，享受童年的天真。原：Iflovewerewhattheroseis,andIweretheleaf,ourliveswouldgrowtogether.爱情若是玫瑰，我便是绿叶，花和叶同生同长。Thereasonisthatitwouldbeabetterworld活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例集成意象Hundredsofstarsinthedeepbluesky/Hundredsofshellsontheshoretogether明喻OmyLuve’slikeared,redrose隐喻(暗喻)Lifeisabroken­wingedbird,thatcannotfly.Lifeisabarrenfield,frozenwithsnow.Iflovewerewhattheroseis,andIweretheleaf,ourliveswouldgrowtogether.Iflovewerewhattheroseis,andIwereliketheleaf.Lifeismostlycheerfulbutsometimessad""Lifecanbedreams,Lifecanbegreatthoughts"重复法Hundredsofstarsinthedeepbluesky,Hundredsofshellsontheshoretogether,HundredsofbirdsthatgosingingbyHundredsofbeesinthesunnyweather...技法点拨：

修辞手法的运用02⑴FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacorkforcedintoabottle.最后，我把整个头放进了里面，就像软木塞进了瓶子里。（2021年1月高考浙江卷读后续写）⑵PaullookedoutthebackwindowandsawthewolfstandingoverMac’sbikeasifitwereakill.保罗从后窗望出去，看见那只狼站在麦克的自行车上，好像是要杀人似的。（2017年浙江高考读后续写）⑶Hemovedlikelighteningbeforethepolicecame.还没等警察到来，他像闪电一样地跑了。（动作描写）⑷Thecountry,coveredwithcherrytreeflowers,looksasthoughitiscoveredwithpinksnow.这个国家，覆盖着樱花，看起来好像被粉红色的雪覆盖着。（情景描写）⑸Icouldn'tmovemylegs.Itwasasiftheywerestucktothefloor.我的腿动不了，就好像给固定在地板上似的。（动作描写）⑹Thehouselookssomethinglikeacastle.那房子看上去有点像一座城堡。(somethinglike...有点像……)（景物描写）⑺Kylelookedatthetestwithastareasblankashisnotebook.Kyle茫然地看着试卷，头脑如同笔记本一样空白。（情景描写）⑻Asindepthsofmanyseas,myheartwasdrownedinmemories.如同在大海深处，我的心沉溺在回忆之中。（情绪描写）1.Simile明喻⑴Herhairwasaflowinggoldenriverstreamingdownhershoulders.她的头发像是一条流淌在肩上的金色河流。（外貌描写）⑵Thebeautifulparkwasacarpetofcolour.美丽的公园就是一个芬芳的彩色地毯。(景物描写)⑶Stopbeingsuchababy.别这么幼稚好不好。(人物描写)⑷Lifeisanunexploredriver,fulloftwistsandturns.生活就像一条未被涉足的河流，有各种曲折。(升华)⑸Theoldman'sfaceisamapoftime.老人的脸是岁月的写照。（外貌描写）2.metaphor暗喻⑴Thewindstoodupandgaveashout.大风凛冽，发出怒吼。（环境描写）⑵Thebreezegentlykissedhercheeks.微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸庞。(环境描写)⑶Thefogswallowedhimup.薄雾把他包围起来。（环境描写）⑷Starswinkedatmeinadarkeningsky.夜空中星星向我眨眼睛。（环境描写）⑸Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.顷刻间，黑暗统治了森林。（环境描写）3.Personification拟人⑴Motherwasverybusygatheringthelaundry,dustingthefurnitureandwashingthedishes.母亲正忙着收拾要洗的衣服，掸去家具上的灰尘，洗碗。（动作描写）⑵Whetherinclass,atwork,orathome,Jameswasalwaysbusy.无论是在课堂上，在工作中，还是在家里，詹姆斯总是很忙。（情景描写）(3)Don’tmakepromisewhenyouareinjoy.Don’treplywhenyouaresad.Don’ttakedecisionwhenyouareangry.Thinktwiceandactwise.别在喜悦的时候许下承诺；别在悲伤的时候做出回答；别在愤怒的时候作出决定。三思而行，做出睿智的行为。（哲理）⑷Painmakesyoustronger,tearsmakeyoubraver,heartbreakmakesyouwiser,sothankthepastforabetterfuture.痛苦，会让你更强大；眼泪，会让你更勇敢；心碎，会让你更睿智，所以为了更好的未来感谢过去吧。（哲理）⑸ThisisnotonlyjustwhatIwanted,butalsojustwhatIneeded.这不仅是我想要的，也是我需要的。4.parallelism排比写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIwaseightornineyearsold,Iwrotemyfirstpoem.Mymotherreadthelittlepoemandbegantocry.“Buddy,youdidn’treallywritethisbeautiful,beautifulpoem!”Mymotherpouredoutherpraise.Iglowed.“WhattimewillFatherbehome?”Iasked.IcouldhardlywaittoshowhimwhatIhadaccomplished.Mymothersaidshehopedhewouldbehomearoundseven.Ispentthebestpartofthatafternoonpreparingforhisarrival.First,Iwrotethepoemoutinmyfinestflourish(花体字).ThenIusedcolouredcrayon(蜡笔)todrawanelaborateborderarounditthatwoulddojusticetoitsbrilliantcontent.ThenIwaited.As7o’clockdrewnear,Iconfidentlyplaceditrightonmyfather’splateonthedining-roomtable.Butmyfatherdidnotreturnatseven.Iadmiredmyfather.HewasheadofParamountStudiosinHollywoodbuthehadbegunhismotionpicturecareerasawriter.Hewouldbeabletoappreciatethiswonderfulpoemofmineevenmorethanmymother.Thiseveningitwasalmost8o’clockwhenmyfatherburstin.Hewasanhourlatefordinner.Hismoodseemedthunderous.Hecouldnotsitdownbutcircledthelongdining-roomtablewithadrinkinhishand,callingdownterribleoath(诅咒)onhisemployees.Suddenly,hepausedandstaredathisplate.Therewasasuspensefulsilence.“Whatisthis?”Hewasreachingformypoem.Iloweredmyheadandstareddownintomyplate.Iwasfullofanxiousdaydreams.Howwonderfulitwouldbeifthisveryfirstworkofminedroveawaytheangrycloudsthatnowdarkenedmyimportantfather’sface.“Ben,awonderfulthinghashappened,”mymotherbegan.“Buddyhaswrittenhisfirstpoem!Andit’sbeautiful.”“Ifyoudon’tmind,I’dliketodecideformyself.”Fathersaid.Ikeptmyfaceloweredtomyplateashereadthatpoem.Itcouldn’thavetakenverylongtoreadthatpoem.Itwasonlytenlines.Butitseemedtotakehours.Icouldhearhimdroppingthepoembackonthetable.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Nowcamethemomentofdecision.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:AfewyearslaterItookasecondlookatthefirstpoem,andIhadtoagreewithmyfather’sjudgment.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者八九岁的时候写了一首小诗，这首诗得到了母亲的高度评价，作者也希望得到父亲的赞扬，欣喜地等待着父亲的归来，父亲回来后，花了很长时间来看这首诗，作者甚至能听到父亲把诗扔回桌上的声音。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenWhenIwaseightornineyearsoldwhereathomewhoI;mymother;myfatherWhatIwroteapoem.WhyMyparentshavecompletelydifferentreactionstomypoem.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①根据第一段续写首句“做出决定的时候终于来了”可知，第一段可描写父亲对作者写的诗的评价以及作者对此的反应。②根据第二段续写首句“几年后，作者再次看了自己写的第一首诗，同意当年父亲的评价”可知，第二段可描写作者对于写诗这件事情的感悟。2.续写线索：父亲的评价——作者的反应——多年之后作者对于父亲对自己诗的评价的认可——感悟。思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点25

Nowcamethemomentofdecision.

“Ithinkit’sterrible,”hesaid(衔接句).Icouldn’tlookup,andmyeyesweregettingwet(神态描写).“Ben,sometimesIdon’tunderstandyou,”mymotherwassaying.“Thisisjustalittleboy.Thesearethefirstlinesofpoetryhe’severwritten.Heneedsencouragement.”“NoonesaysBuddyhastobecomeapoet,”myfatherheldhisground.Myfather’swordshitmeovertheheartlikeahardfist,soIcouldn’tstanditanothersecond(心理描写).Iranfromthedining-roomuptomyroom,threwmyselfonthebedandcriedtheworstofthedisappointmentoutofme

AfewyearslaterItookasecondlookatthefirstpoem,andIhadtoagreewithmyfather’sjudgment.

Itwasaprettyterriblepoem.AsIworkedmywayintootherbooksandplaysandfilms,itbecameclearerandclearertomehowfortunateIhadbeen(心理描写).Ihadamotherwhosaid,“Buddy,didyoureallywritethis?Ithinkit’swonderful!”andafatherwhoshookhisheadanddrovemetotearswith,“Ithinkit’slousy.”Infact,everyoneofusinlifeneedsthatmotherforceandfatherforce.Betweenthetwopolesofpraiseanddoubt,bothinthenameoflove,wetrytofollowourtruecourse(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________________________