Unit4AdversityandCourage话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版选择性

Unit4

ADVERSITYANDCOURAGE人教版2019选择性必修第三册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.I_______________________becauseshewasreallydressedtotheteethattheparty.她在派对上穿得真华丽，我非常眼红。(envy)(读后续写情感描写)2.________________.Shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn’tholdbackhertears.她心情沉重。她突然感到很悲伤，忍不住落下泪来。(sink)(读后续写情感描写)3.Wesang,danced,andlaughed________________,forgettingthetroublesinourlives.我们放纵地唱歌、跳舞、大笑，忘却了生活中的烦恼。(abandon)(读后续写情感描写)4.________________________________,hewasstillinhighspiritsatthethoughtofthecomingholiday.虽然被困在交通堵塞中，但一想到即将到来的假期，他仍然情绪高昂。(stick)(读后续写情感描写)5.Theteacher’sencouragement_______________,andherfacelitupwithjoy.老师的鼓励使她振作起来，她脸上露出喜色。(cheerup)(读后续写神态+情感描写)活用写作词汇wasgreenwithenvyHerheartsankwithabandonThoughstuckinthetrafficjamcheeredherup活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.把我的头从巨大的南瓜里拔出来对我来说太难了。因此，我急

于向父亲寻求帮助。________________________pullmyheadoutofthegiantpumpkin.Hence,Iwastooeagertoturntomyfatherforassistance.(2021·1月浙江读后续写)2.伯纳德和约翰是如此有决心以至于尽管失败了几次，他们仍然热情地做成了爆米花。BernardandJohnare___________________theystillmadepopcornwithenthusiasminspiteofseveralfailures.(2020·新高考Ⅰ读后续写)原:Thevoyagewastoodangerousanddifficultforallofustomakeitinoursmallboats.这次航行太危险、太困难了，我们无法全部乘我们的小船离开。原:ButIwassoenthusiasticabouttheideaofgoingalongwiththemthatIsecretlywentaboardhisship,theEndurance,andhidinasmallcupboard.但我对与他们一同探险实在充满热情，于是我偷偷地上了“坚忍”号轮船，藏在一个小橱柜里。Itwastoodifficultformetosodeterminedthat细节描写3.当北极熊张开嘴向我们冲来的时候，我们是多么的害怕啊!(2020·浙江卷读后续写)______________________________whenthepolarbearopeneditsmouthandchargedtowardsus!原HoweveryonewillenvymewhenIcomebackandtellthemabouttheamazingplacesIhavebeento!当我回来告诉他们我去过的那些神奇的地方时，大家会多么羡慕我啊!Howfrightenedwewere活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例名言积累Greatworksareperformednotbystrength,butperseverance.—SamuelJohnson动作描写1.Beforeweabandonedtheship,Shackletoncalmlycalledustogetherandtoldustorescueourmostessentialsupplies…2.Whenwewerefinallyrescued,wefeltsuchreliefandjoythatmanyofuscouldnothideourtears.场景描写1.However,thesehappymemoriesaresooninterruptedbyasuddencoldrushofair.2.Lifefellintoaregularpattern.外貌描写Attheageof19,Iamfitandfullofvigour.

心理描写1.HoweveryonewillenvymewhenIcomebackandtellthemabouttheamazingplacesIhavebeento!2.Andwhentheshipsank,ourheartssankwithit.

3.Theirgenuineconcernforothers,theirperseverance,andtheirresolve

fillmewithhope.

4.Wefeltsoaloneanddesperate.Butitwasnotforlong.5.Ourdisciplineandteamspiritkeptusoptimisticandhelpedusdealwithourfearsinapositiveandsuccessfulway.技法点拨：

故事冲突的预设与解决02例1:（2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.1）Thepaydayarrivedatlast.IwasdelightedtofinallygetthepaymentafterIworkedhardfortwoweeks.Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.“Ineededanewfootballinthefuture.”Iwhisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Itseemedasifsomethingwronghadhappened...【赏析】续写第一段中的“Onthewayhomefullofexcitement”表明了故事主人公心情非常好，但是当面对新的问题“mydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad”时，故事主人公内心开始出现冲突与疑问，这两种心态的冲突描写前后衔接自然、且恰到好处。【用语储备】感到一阵……：feelaflushof.../feelawaveof.../feelafeeling/senseof...(joy高兴,excitement兴奋,pride骄傲,anger愤怒,rage狂怒,panic惊慌,alarm惊慌,terror恐惧,horror恐惧,fear恐惧,unease不安,sorrow悲伤,sadness悲伤,grief悲伤,embarrassment尴尬,disappointment失望,shame羞愧,guilt愧疚)。1.面对逆境，人物产生的消极或积极情绪例2：（2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2）ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween.Ilookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomyroom,butMomstoppedme.“Youhaven’treadthecommentsyet.”IscrolleddownthescreenandmarveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.【赏析】续写第二段首句提示语提供了一个新的情境（Thevideowaspostedonline)，这让故事主人公内心冲突加剧（Embarrassedandalittleannoyed），但当听到母亲的话之后，主人公开始阅读网上的评论，这又将主人公引向另一情境，结果主人公内心又起了变化（marveled）。情境的不断变换，加剧了故事主人公内心的矛盾冲突的不断变换。【用语储备】①心里想：think/saytooneself;②害怕；恐慌：withfear/panic/terror;tremblewithfear;beseizedwithpanic;screamwithpanic/terror;freeze/shakewithterror;③生气；愤怒：withrage;tremble/shakewithrage;feellikecryingwithrage;bespeechlesswithrage;beboilingwithrage;④兴奋；激动：withexcitement;yellwithexcitement;jumpupanddownwithexcitement;screamwithexcitement;gowildwithexcitement;⑤悲伤；流泪：Tearsblurredone’seyes.泪水模糊了她的双眼。/One’seyesgotmisty.一个人的眼睛都模糊了。/One’seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.泪眼模糊。/Tearsrolldownone’seyes/cheeks/face.泪水落下。2.面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理例3：(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2）Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【赏析】续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲（woketheirmotherup）后，母亲的动作首先有“saw”和“wasverysurprised”，之后在双胞胎发出节日问候“HappyMother’sDay”时，母亲的动作有“hugged”和“kissed”。这种面对他人的行为或动作而产生的一些新动作行为，往往承载了人物对情节中的矛盾冲突的回应模式及态度。【用语储备】①常用词语：openone’smouth张开嘴;widenone’seyes睁大眼睛;risetoone’sfeet站起来;jumptoone’sfeet跳起来;shoutatthetopofone’slung扯着嗓子大声喊叫;reachout伸出手

②常用句式：如：Havingpassedtheexam,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.通过考试后，他非常高兴，不知所措。3.面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为例4：（2018年6月，浙江高考,Para.1）Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.【赏析】续写第一段首句承接源语篇，提供了一个新的情境，即“rabbitjumpedout”，从而引发了马与人的一系列的避险动作，并且马由于受惊而奔跑起来，最终将主人公带入了另一个困境，即“wewerewayoffthetrack”。【用语储备】①不幸的是：unfortunately②某人做了某事，不知道下一步该做什么。 Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext. Sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.4.人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出现了新问题例5：（2020年7月，浙江高考，Para.2）Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.【赏析】续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境“thehelicopterarrived”，于是故事主人公的心情好转（Myheartleapedwithjoy），并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公就又有了新的想法（wethrowallthefoodwehave），这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救后，主人公又开始感谢（Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound）。可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件的回应过程中的特写镜头。【用语储备】“某人突然想到……”：Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat...=Ithitsbthat...=Itstrucksbthat...=Itdawnedonsbthat...5.情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法例6：（Para.2）Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac’sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople’sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.【赏析】续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人（theothertwocyclistsarrived），之后又不断有人加入（Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicycles/Moreandmorecarsstopped），故事中的人物有了一系列与狼对抗的动作，如“circledthewolf”“tookoutthesticksfromthecars”“tookouttheknives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步推向高潮。【用语储备】①鼓起勇气(做某事):take/gather/one’scourage(todosth);②毫不犹豫/选择：withoutasecondthought/withoutdelay/withouthesitation/havingnochoice6.面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法例7：（2022年1月，浙江卷,Para.2）OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.HewasalittlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodotherestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Hendersonwasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.【分析】续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了项目（Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime），这引发了主人公的反思，并且主人公的这种体验不断地深入（从“wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates”到“agroupofpersonscantravelfarther”），充分展现了主人公的成长历程以及心里感悟。【用语储备】①直到……才意识到……倒装句：Notuntil...didsbrealize/noticethat...强调句：Itwasonly...thatsbrealizedthat...②表达经历与教训 WhatavaluablelessonIhavelearnedfrom...!我从……中得到了宝贵的教训。 Whatanunforgettableexperience!多么难忘的经历啊!③结尾点题 Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.天助自助者。 Lifeisfulloflaughterandtears.Onlybyacceptingbothcanweenjoylife.生命就是充满欢笑和泪水的。只有同时接受两者，我们才能享受生活。 Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouraction.永远不要低估你的行为的力量。7.获得新的成长，人物开始总结、点题并呼应前文写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Nieshacouldnotforgetthewayshehadfrozeninfrontoftheclasstoday.Mr.Robertshaddividedtheclassintogroupstodopresentations.TodayhadbeenNiesha’sturn.However,herhandshadshakensobadlythatshecouldn’treadhernotes.Hervoicehadbecomesoftereventosilence.Mr.RobertshadkindlyendedNiesha’spartofthepresentationeventhoughshehadclearlynotfinished.HehadalsoaskedNieshatostayafterclassforamoment.“Niesha,Iknowyou’reshy,butyouworkedhardonthisproject.I’dhatetoseeyougiveup.onyourself.”MrRobertshadhesitated,“IfIgiveyouanotherchanceuntiltomorrow,doyouthinkyoucanfindyourcourage?”Nieshahadnodded,gratefulforthechance.Shehadgoneasquicklyasshecouldtohernextclass.Shehadkeptherheaddownandhopedtheschooldaywouldendsoon.Whenshereachedherbackstepsthatafternoon,shecouldseeaninvitinglightcomingfromthekitchenwindows.Mommawasbaking.MommastudiedNiesha’sfaceasshecameintothekitchen.“What’swrong,Niesha?”TearsshoneinNiesha’sbrowneyes.Shetoldherthewholestory.Mommawassilentforamoment,herhandsstillbusywiththecake.“Whyisitthatyoucantalktomeaboutanythingandeverything,butyoucan’ttalktoyourclass?”Mommaasked.Shesetthetimerandthensaid,“Letmeshowyousomething.”NieshafollowedMommatoherbedroom.ThereMommashowedherabookfilledwithnewspaperclippingsandpictures.Inittherewasablueribbonthatsaid“FirstPlace”andapictureofherselfwhenshewasveryyoung,standingwithherparents.“Iwonitforpublicspeaking.Istartedtheschoolyearastheshyestgirlonthespeechteam,butIendedtheyearastheblueribbonwinner.Itwasn’teasyatfirst—notsureofmyselfatall.Iworkedhard,andmostlyIfacedmyfears.Youjustneedtofindyourcourage.”典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:HearingMomma’swords,Nieshagazedatthepreciousblueribbon,lostinthought.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:ThenextdayNieshaagainwalkedtothefrontoftheclassroomtogiveherpresentation.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Niesha在做报告时非常紧张，不得不终止。回到家后，告诉了妈妈事情的经过，妈妈告诉Niesha自己是如何克服恐惧，完成演讲的，Niesha从中得到了勇气，完成了报告。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whendopresentationsinfrontoftheclasswhereintheclass;atschool;athomewhoNiesha;MotherWhatNieshawasverynervouswhilegivingthereportandhadtoterminateit.WhyShewasafraidofspeakinginpublic.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①根据第一段续写首句“Niesha听着妈妈的话，凝视着珍贵的蓝丝带，陷入了沉思。”可知，第一段可描写Niesha如何克服恐惧的内心活动的。②根据第二段首句“第二天，Niesha又走到教室前面做报告。”可知，第二段可描写Niesha克服恐惧完成报告。2.续写线索：陷入沉思——回味妈妈的话，克服恐惧——继续报告——顺利完成报告——感悟。思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点27

HearingMomma’swords,Nieshagazedatthepreciousblueribbon,lostinthought.Sheimaginedthescenewherehermommatriedherbesttoovercomeherfearsandpluckuphercouragetodeliverafantasticspeechtotheaudience(衔接句；心理描写).PerceivingNeisha’sanxiety,MommareassuredherandreachedoutherhandtotietheblueribbonontoNiesha’swristwithadisarmingsmile(动作描写).Restoredanddetermined,shegrittedherteethtofindhercourage(心理描写).InfrontofthemirrorparkedNeishacontinuouslypracticingfrompronunciationtotone,evengesture.“Tryharder,”sheperkedherselfupwhendrowsinessfelluponher(衔接句；神态描写).

ThenextdayNieshaagainwalkedtothefrontoftheclassroomtogiveherpresentation.Feelingshy,shecustomarilyloweredherheadandavertedhergaze,numbthereforseconds(衔接句；心理描写).Shortlyafterwards,couragefounditswaybackthemomentshecaughtsightoftheblueribbon(无灵主语).Comfortedandinspired,shetookadeepbreath,summoneduphercourage,“Dearfellowstudents,...”NieshacastaglanceatMr.Robertsstandinginthecornersmilingather.Aself-reassuringsmilespreadacrossNiesha’sface.Sheknewforsurethatshehadfoundhercourage,inthemillandintheadversity.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Itwastheworstdayever.TheexactdatewasJanuary10,2010.Andmylifewaschangedcompletelywhenthataccidenthappened.BeforethatdayIhadjuststartedmycollegelifeandlovedbeingatthatstageinmylifewhereIcouldeatallthepizzaIwanted,yetengageinadultconversationswithmyparentsabouttheresponsibilitytomakelifebetterforothers.IwasprettysureIcouldbesomeoneinthefuture,agreatvolunteermaybe.Thenonthatday,allthepossibilitiesweredestroyedbyacarelessdriver.ThedaysIspentinhospitalweredreadful,sufferingseverepainandhearingthedoctortellingmethatIcouldneverwalkanymore.WhenIwasfinallypermittedtoleavethehospital,Ihadmyselfinasmallapartmentandrefusedanyvisit,blamingeveryoneintheworldanddrowningmyselftodespair.AfterImissedtencallsfrommydad,hejustcouldn’tleavemealone.Andwhenheenteredtheapartment,itwasinamess,withpizzaboxesontheflooranddirtydishesinthesink.Inthecorner,therewasagarbagecanaroundwhichwerepiecesofgarbageandwastepaper.Heturnedaroundandfinallyhadhiseyesonme.Afewstepstowardsmeandhestrokehisfingersthroughmyhair,gentlyasking,“Youwanttoseesomething?”Ifeltalittleguiltyformakingmydadsoworried,soIfakedasmileandnoddedmyhead.Heopenedmyfridge,searchedforawhileandtookoutsomeiceandsometealeavesafterboilingsomewaterinapot.Mysteriously,heputtheiceintheboilingwater.Afterawhile,heasked,“Howistheicenow?”“What?”Iwasalittleconfusedabouthisquestion,wonderingwhathewasabouttodonext.Whenherepeatedthemoveandaskedmethesamequestion,Ibegantofeelbored.“Howistheicenow?”“Whatice?Thereisnoiceinthewaternow!Itmelted!”Iansweredwithmyeyesfixedontheroof.Suddenly,Dadheldmyhead,lookedatmestraightlyandexplained,“Theicewasoncetoughandhard.”Dadcontinued,“Butwhenitwasputinthep