Unit1ScienceFiction话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版选择性

Unit1SCIENCEFICTION人教版2019选择性必修第四册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.______________________________,“Idon’tthinkitisfairtohandinallmyearnings.”我用不愉快的声音说道：“我认为把我赚的钱全都上交不公平。”(declare)(2021·浙江卷读后续写)2.She______________________inheranxiety,andthenwandereddowntothegateandback.她焦虑地来回踱步，然后溜达到大门口又回来。(pace)(读后续写动作描写)3.Iwasembarrassed,butIfoughtback________________________________.我感到很尴尬，我突然很想跑下台，但我忍住了。(urge)(读后续写情感描写)4.Myparentsurgedmetobepatientandnever__________________________.我的父母敦促我要有耐心，永远不要让消极的想法占据上风。(take)(读后续写主旨升华)活用写作词汇Inanunpleasantvoice,Ideclaredpacedupanddownthesuddenurgetorunoffthestageletnegativethoughtstakeover5._________________________,Davidparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityintherace.最后，大卫尽最大努力参加了比赛。(turn)(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写)6.Thecat,______________________,nearlyscaredhimtodeathwhenheopenedthedoor.在他开门时，吊在天花板上的猫差点把他吓死。(suspend)7.(2022·全国乙)_____________________Europeanrailwaysalonespendapproximately20billioneurosayearonmaintenance,includingsendingmaintenancestaff,oftenatnight,toinspectandrepairtherailinfrastructure.据统计，仅欧洲铁路公司每年在铁路维护上的花费就约为200亿欧元，其中包括经常在夜间派遣维修人员检查和维修铁路基础设施。(calculate)8.Whenourpersonalinterestsare________________________thoseofthepeople,weshouldputthepeople’sinterestsbeforeourown.当我们的个人利益与人民利益发生冲突时，我们应该把人民利益放在个人利益之前。(conflict)活用写作词汇AsitturnedoutsuspendedfromtheceilingItiscalculatedthatinconflictwith活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念，才使不寻常的事情最终发生。_____________________________________couldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.2.他彻夜未眠，想着这个问题。Allnightlonghelayawake,_________________________.原：Itwasatteno'clocktodaythatthefirstofallTimeMachinesbeganitscareer.今天上午十点，所有时间机器中的第一台启动了其运转之旅。原：ClairethankedTony,tellinghimthathewasa“dear”．克莱尔向托尼道谢，称托尼为“亲爱的”。Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatthinkingoftheproblem细节描写3.既然今天你休息，你最好帮我补习数学。______________________________,youhadbetterhelpmewithmymathematics.4.当大卫冲过终点线时，人群中响起雷鸣般的掌声和欢呼声。(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写场景描写)________________________whenDavidcrossedthefinishlinetothethunderousapplauseandcheersfromthecrowd.原：SinceIdon'thavemuchtime,Ineedtocalculatehowlongitwilltakemetodothetask.由于我没有太多的时间，我需要计算一下完成这项任务需要多长时间。原：Assheturnedaround,therestoodGladysClaffern.当她转过身时，格拉迪丝·克拉芬就站在那里。SinceyouarefreetodayThencamethemoment细节描写5.随着信心逐渐消失，消费者们把更多的钱留在口袋里。_________________________________,consumerskeptmoreoftheircashintheirpocket.(as)＝____________________________,consumerskeptmoreoftheircashintheirpocket.(with)原：Asmypacegrewfaster,thewallsofthelaboratoryfellaway.我的速度越来越快，实验室的墙壁随之坍塌。AsconfidencefellawayWithconfidencefallingaway活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例动作描写1.

Tonybroughtherbreakfastandthenaskedherwhethersheneededhelpdressing.2.Nowshewasbeinglookedafterbyarobot.3.Shelookedathisfingerswithwonderastheyturnedeachpage.4.ClairethankedTony,tellinghimthathewasa“dear”.5.Assheturnedaround,therestoodGladysClaffern.6.Idrewabreath,grippedtheleverandpusheditforwards.7.Itprobablytookheraminute,buttomeshemovelikearocket.场景描写1.Thesunandmoonlookedasiftheywerebeingthrownacrossthesky.2.Thewholesurfaceoftheearthwasbeingchanged,meltingandflowingbeforemyeyes.3.Avastlakeorevenanocean,spreadfarbeyondwheretheeyecouldsee.外貌描写4.Hewastallandhandsomewithsmoothhairandadeepvoice,althoughhisfacialexpressionneverchanged.心理描写1.Clairethoughtitwasridiculousthatshewasbeingofferedsympathybyarobot.2....andthathefeltmorethanjustthedesiretopleaseher.3.Iwasstunnedforamoment.技法点拨：

颇具画面感的“动作链”02⑴我生气地走出了房间。Iwentoutoftheroomangrily.【动作分解】yelled(叫喊),slammedthedoor(摔门),stormed/rushedoutoftheroom(冲出门外)⑵我原谅了他。Iforgavehim.【动作分解】hugged(拥抱),patted(轻拍),whispered(低语)⑶他不情愿地向我道了歉。Heunwillinglyapologizedtome.【动作分解】dragged(拖),bitone’slips（咬住嘴唇）,mumbled（咕哝）⑷我开始演讲。Ibeganmyspeech.【动作分解】glancedat(扫视）,tookabreath(深呼吸）,gatheredmycourage/gatheredmyself（鼓起勇气）【总结】“动作链”结构1:A，BandC，用and来连接动作（三个动作时态保持一致，需要注意的是要根据情境及中心动作前后有什么动作来拆分）1.动作分解，创造画面感⑴我生气地走出了房间。Iyelledathimfuriously,slammedthedoorandstormed/rushedoutoftheroom.【动作串联】and的连动结构。⑵我原谅了他。Ihuggedhimtightly,whisperingtohimthatitwastimetoletitgo.【动作串联】谓语动词+非谓语结构。⑶他不情愿地向我道了歉。Dragginghimselftomyseat,hebithislipandmumbledanapologytome.【动作串联】非谓语结构+谓语动词。⑷我开始演讲。WhenIquicklyglancedattheaudience,Itookadeepbreathandgatheredmycouragetostartmyspeech.【动作串联】状语从句。【总结】“动作链”结构2:用非谓语动词或状语从句来衔接动作（动作的发生有明显的先后顺序）2.用连词、非谓语动词和状语从句来串联动作⑴Theboyrantochasetheball.男孩跑去追球。⑵Theboysprinteddownthefield,dovesuddenlyandcaughttheballwithhisoutstretchedarmsskillfully.男孩猛冲向球场，突然扑倒并巧妙地伸出手臂接住了球。【赏析】⑴句没有提供太多信息，描述简单，没有对动作进行细节描写。⑵句使用了更具体的动词描写了主语发出的动作，如“sprinted”“dove”“outstretchedarms”等，生动地展现了男孩的行动姿态和技能。这种句子更适用于需要营造氛围、描绘情景或者强调某个细节的场合。3.动词具体化，表达更传神⑴Thewomanlosttherace.这个女人输了比赛。(2)Thewomanlosttheracebyalargemargin.这个女人以很大的差距输掉了比赛。【赏析】⑴句说明在比赛中失利，但并未提及她是以多少分败北的，描写得比较平淡。⑵句在表达女人输掉比赛的同时，突出了她的失败非常惨重。使用“byalargemargin”这一短语，形象地传达了女人与其他选手之间的巨大差距。⑴Fearingforherwoundedchild’swell-being,themotherleft.担心她受伤的孩子的安危，母亲匆忙离开了。⑵Fearingforherwoundedchild’swell-being,themotherboltedawaylikeaspeedingbullet.担心她受伤的孩子的安危，母亲像一颗高速飞行的子弹一样猛冲而去。【赏析】⑴句表达出了母亲的忧虑和焦急，但没带任何个人的感情色彩，没有表现出母亲的急切心情。⑵句使用了“boltedawaylikeaspeedingbullet”，这个比喻形象生动，强调了母亲离开的突然和迅速，更加强烈地表达了母亲的情感和行动的快速，带有强烈的情感色彩。4.动词搭配修饰语，情绪更饱满一、完成句子1.We____________bigriversandvastplains,____________highmountains,and____________deepvalleys.我们穿过大河和辽阔的平原，爬上高山，俯瞰深谷。2.He____________deepintohispocket,____________ahandfulofchange,and____________tothefarmer.他把手伸进口袋，掏出一把零钱，递给农夫。3.Lorna____________tothewindow,____________itand____________upatthenightsky.洛娜走到窗前，打开窗户，望着窗外的夜空。4.____________besidetheemptyroad,theylookedupintothesky,____________thepreciouspeacefromwithin.他们站在空旷的路边，仰望天空，感受着内心珍贵的宁静。5.____________theovercoatacrossherarm,she____________thehallquietly.她把大衣搭在胳膊上，悄悄地穿过大厅。6.____________towardsthedoor,sheopenedit,____________“Here,Edmond,hereIam”.她冲到门口，打开门说:“爱德蒙，我来了。”7.Hismother,____________atthedoor,____________tearsofjoy.他的母亲站在门口，喜极而泣。举一反三crossedclimbedoverlookedreachedpulled

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upcameopenedlookedoutStandingfeelingThrowingcrossedRushingsayingstandingcried补充语段Inthemorning,asscheduled,1._________________________________________________________(双胞胎早早起床，踮着脚走进厨房，从袋子里舀出面粉).Oncetheysetaboutmakingbread,theyfeltconfused.Atthattime,2._________________________________________________________________(他们的爸爸溜进厨房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道),“Don’tquit.Youcanovercomethechallenge.”Thetwinsmadethebreadsmoothly.Then,3.__________________________________________________(他们端着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈).Withhereyesglitteringwithexcitement,themotherwassocontentthatshegatheredherchildrenintoherarms.举一反三thetwinsgotupearly,tiptoedtothekitchenandscoopedsomeflouroutofthebagtheir

fatherslidintothekitchen,pattingthetwins’shouldersandcomfortingtheminasoftvoicetheycarriedthebreakfast,advancedupstairsandwokeuptheirmother写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Collinwaslyingonhisback,tossing(抛掷)abaseballtowardtheceilingwhenhisbedroomdooropened.Hissister,Carina,barged(乱闯)inandperched(停留)ontheedgeofhisbed.Collincouldtellshe’dbeencrying.“What’swrong?”Collinasked.“Homesickagain?”Carinanodded.“Yeah,metoo.”Collinsighed.TheirfamilyhadmovetotheMoonColony(殖民地)nearlyfourmonthsago.Itstilldidn’tfeellikehome.Thedwellings(公寓)werecozy,butoutsideeverythingwasgray,rockyandlifeless.“Imissmyfriends,”Carinasaidgloomily(满脸愁容地).“Andgreengrassandswimming,andeverything.Ievenmissthesoundofrainontheroof.”Thecolonywashousedinsideahugetransparentdome(圆顶).Therewasnoweatherthereatall—norainorsnoworevenwind.“Worstofall,”Carinacontinued,“mybirthdayisintwodays,andIdon’tthinkMomandDadareplanninganythingspecial.They’retoobusy.”“She’sprobablyright.”thoughtCollin.LifeontheMoonwashectic(紧张忙碌的)forscientistsliketheirparents.Hedoubtedtheyhadtimetoplanaparty.Andhowcouldtheyanyway?Thingssuchasballoonsandbirthdaycandlesdidn’texistonthecolony.Wedon’tevenhavetherations(定量口粮)tomakeacake“Don’tworry.”CollinputanarmaroundCarina’sshoulder.Iftherewasnoparty,maybehecouldgivehissisterapresent.Collinwanderedtowardtheagriculturalcenter,wherehismomworked.Somedays,hehelpedhertakemeasurementsorharvestcrops.Todayhefoundhertakingnotesinapatch(地块)ofbambooplants.

“Theyarestrongandgrowfast.Theymakegoodbuildingmaterial.”Momsaid.Agoodideaflashedacrosshismind.Hespottedaone-footsectionofbamboothathadbrokenfromalargerstalk.“MayIhavethatpiece?”“Sure.”Momhandedittohimandmadeanoteonherchart.Thenextday,afterhisteachersupervised,hedrilledtinyholesintothepieceofbambooandpouredahandfulofMoonpebbles(鹅卵石)insidethetubeandsealedtheopenends.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Collinheldthebamboopiececarefullyashehurriedhome.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:“Whatisit?”Carinaasked,lookingatitcuriously.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述Collin一家移民到月球后，在妹妹过生日时，Collins克服困难偷偷为妹妹准备生日礼物的事情。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenTheirfamilyhadmovetotheMoonColony(殖民地)nearlyfourmonthsagowhereOnthemoonwhoCollins;

sister;MomWhatThefamilymovedtotheMoonfourmonthsago.TherewasnoplanforCarina’sbirthdaybecauseofthepoorcondition.Collinwantedtogivehissisterapresentasasurprise.ThenCollinmadethegift.WhyWhenfacingsomedifficultiesonthemoon,thefamilyworkstogethertosolvethem.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节

①根据第一段续写首句“科林匆匆忙忙地拿着那块竹片回家。”可知，第一段可描写科林如何瞒着妹妹给妈妈准备生日礼物的过程。

②由第二段首句内容“这是什么？”可知，第二段可描写科林送的生日礼物，以及大家的心理。2.续写线索：准备礼物——赠送礼物——合家欢乐——感悟。思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点28

Collinheldthebamboopiececarefullyashehurriedhome.Hehiditbehindhisbackandslidopenthefrontdoor(衔接句；动作描写).Tohissurprise(心理描写),Momwascarryingsomethingthatlookedlikeacake(比喻修辞).HelookedcloserandrealizedMomhadtoppedaflatbrownoatcakewithdriedapplesandcinnamonsugar(动作描写；场景描写).Arealtreat,ontheMoon.AfterthefamilyhadsungtoCarinaandDadhadcutthecake,Collinsaid,“AndnowIhaveapresentforyou.”Hehandedhissisterthebamboorod,“Happybirthday!”

“Whatisit?”Carinaasked,lookingatitcuriously.“Arainstick,”saidCollin.“Wheneveryouturnitover,theMoonpebblesfallaroundthenailsanditsoundslikerain.”Carinaturnedthestick,andtheroomwasfilledwithasoundlikeraindrummingonaroof(心理描写）.“It’sMoonrain!”shesaid.“ItmakesmefeellikeI’mhome.”ShesmiledatCollinandturnedtherainstickoveragain.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Formyfifth-gradesciencefairproject,Igotsixchickeneggsinanincubator(孵化器).“ButIdon’tknowanythingabouthatchinganegg.”Mrs.Brubecksmiled.“Youdon’thavetobeanimmediateexpertateverything,Juli.Theideahereistolearnsomethingnew.”“Butwhatiftheydie?”“Thentheydie.Documentyourworkscientificallyandyou’llstillgetanA.”ShepulledTheBeginner’sGuidetoRaisingChickensfromherbookshelfandsaid,“Readthebookandsetyourselfuptonight.”ThatnightIcamehome,moreworriedthanever.I’dreadthebook.Ihadtoturntheeggsthreetimesadayandregulatethetemperatureandhumidity(湿度).Butasidefromthat,whatwastheretodo?Myfathercamewithacardboardtubeandaflashlight.Hetapedthetwotogethersothatthelightbeamwasforcedstraightoutthetube.“Iwillshowyouhowtocandletheeggs,”hesaid,thenswitchedoffthelightandheldanegguptothecardboardtube.“Thelightletsyouseethroughtheshellsoyoucanwatchtheembryo(胚胎)develop.Look,seethedarkspothere?”“Isthatanembryo?”“That’sit!”Suddenlyitfeltreal.Theeggswerealive!Surelytheyhadtolive!Forthenextthreeweeks,Iwascompletelyconsumedwiththegrowingofchicks.IlabeledtheeggsA,B,C,D,EandF,butbeforelongtheyhadnames,too:Abby,Bonnie,Clyde,Dexter,EuniceandFlorence.EverydayIweighedthem,candledthem,turnedthem.Idrewdiagramsofvariousstagesofanembryo’sdevelopment.Idocumentedthedailychangesandweightlossofeachegg.Ontheoutsidetheeggswereboring,butIknewwhatwashappeninginside!实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:ThenonemorningIwascandlingBonniewhenInoticedagentlepeck(啄).___________________________________________