第二部分　一、感悟真题 高中英语

圆学子梦想铸金字品牌PAGE8-第二部分读后续写一、感悟真题(2024·浙江1月高考)Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasix-storybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers’offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonecommittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfirstP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather’s,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.“It’sjustthebeginning,”shethought.“I’llcomeinlastforsure.”SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword“mile”.Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldcompleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:续写词数应为150个左右。WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【阅读文本分析】1.故事情节:高中开学第一周Eva努力不陷入困境:因为方向感差,在六层楼的教学大楼里记不住教室、实验室、老师办公室、图书馆、食堂和运动馆。第一堂体育课,教练Pitt要求每人必须围绕跑道完成一英里跑。Eva猜测她会落后。在她感到绝望之际,Eva开始使用mindtrick策略,停止想“mile”,转而聚焦每一个小标志,就这样完成第一圈。由一圈到二、三、四圈。2.文本语料:(1)情感描写①Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater(避免陷入困境).②Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.③...letalonecommittomemory更别说记忆了④EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthat...⑤Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.⑥Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.⑦WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.(2)动作描写①Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.②SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.3.续写悬念:themindtrick策略的核心是什么?Eva能否适应高中生活、记住复杂的教学大楼4.故事主题:生活与学习:校园生活个人成长直面挑战超越自我5.文本结构:AStoryMountainuseamindtrick;stopthinkingabout“mile”;focusoneachspot【写作思路点拨】1.第一段开头语意思为:当Pitt教练在终点线夸赞她“真棒”的时候,Eva感到吃惊。首先要点明Eva吃惊的原因。根据阅读文本信息内容,Eva起初预测自己会落后(“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances;Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust;I’llcomeinlastforsure.),因此令她吃惊的内容不是完成一英里跑,而是她比很多同学更快完成。由第二段开头语可知,第一段续写要明确指出thesametrick的内涵,为第二段做铺垫,即把大目标分成一个个小目标,逐一完成。2.第二段开头语意思为:Eva决定用相同的计策来应对教学大楼。本段侧重描写Eva运用thesametrick来克服其所谓的“方向感差”的弱点,攻克教室、实验室、图书馆等地点的定位。续写的结尾可写Eva在成功熟悉教学大楼后的感悟:不同的思维模式能够创造奇迹。【高分范文】WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Shebreathedalongsighofreliefandcomposedherselfwildlybeatingheart.“Youmanagedtodoit,”shesaidtoherselfwithaninnervoice.Sherecalledwhatsheexperiencedduringthisone-milemarch.Itwasvariousshadows,joggingpointsthatremovedherfearandsmoothedherheavybreath.ThenherclassmateswhofellbehindapproachedEva,castinganadmiringlookatherandasking,“Whatsupportedyouandkepttothelastlegofthemile?”“Freeyourbrainanduseamindtrick.”Herclassmatesnoddedinagreementwitheyestwinkledwithmerrimentandappreciation.Suddenly,anideaoccurredtoEva:Whynottrythiswaytofightherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding?

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Shetriedagaintoexplorethecampusandtestherself.Butthistime,insteadofmemorizingeachpositionanddirection,sherememberedsomespecialsymbolsandsignsbesidetheclassrooms,theoffices,andthelibrary.Duringtheadventureoftheschoolbuildings,manyuniquemarkswereimprintedonEva’smind.Withtimetickingby,shefoundit’spossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuildingdespitehavingapoorsenseofdirection.Bathedinthesunshine,Evasprangtoherfeetwithjoyintheschool.Afterthisexperience,Evacomprehendedthatthereisn’tonlyonewaytoachievethegoal.Changethethinkingstrategyandemployadifferentmindsetandthemindtrickwillworkwonder!

·文本句式点评:1.词汇活用,精炼生动Freeyourbrainanduseamindtrick.2.副词介词修饰,彰显外功Herclassmatesnoddedinagreementwitheyestwinkledwithmerrimentandappreciation.“Youmanagedtodoit,”shesaidtoherselfwithaninnervoice.Butthistime,insteadofmemorizingeachpositionanddirection,sheremembered...shefoundit’spossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuildingdespitehavingapoorsenseofdirection.3.高级句型:无灵主语,有灵谓语动词Suddenly,anideaoccurredtoEva:Whynottrythiswaytofightherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding?...employadifferentmindsetandthemindtrickwillworkwonder!4.高级句式(1)强调句型Itwasvariousshadows,joggingpointsthatremovedherfearandsmoothedherheavybreath.

(2)部分否定Afterthisexperience,Evacomprehendedthatthereisn’tonlyonewaytoachievethegoal.(3)with结构Withtimetickingby,shefoundit’spossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding...5.分词作状语Bathedinthesunshine,Evasprangtoherfeetwithjoyintheschool.ThenherclassmateswhofellbehindapproachedEva,castinganadmiringlookatherandasking...6.定语从句ThenherclassmateswhofellbehindapproachedEva...7.名词性从句Sherecalledwhatsheexperiencedduringthisone-milemarch.Afterthisexperience,Evacomprehendedthatthereisn’tonlyonewaytoachievethegoal.8.修辞手法(1)暗喻Duringtheadventureoftheschoolbuildings,manyuniquemarkswereimprintedonEva’smind.(2)头韵Changethethinkingstrategyandemployadifferentmindsetandthemindtrickwillworkwonder!9.动作链,细腻精准Shebreathedalongsighofreliefandcomposedherselfwildlybeatingheart.Itwasvariousshadows,joggingpointsthatremovedherfearandsmoothedherheavybreath.10.内容呼应themindtrickone-milemarchtheclassrooms,theoffices,andthelibraryapoorsenseofdirectiongetaroundinsuchahugebuildingfear【下水作文】WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Neverinherwildestdreamhadsheeveranticipatedcompletingsuchanimpossibletask.Puffingandpanting,shewasevenmoredelightedwhenshewheeledherselfaroundtoseeherclassmatesfallingfarbehind.Awaveofachievementmingledwithexcitementsurgedoverher.Neitherwassheleftinthedust,norwassheattheendofthegroup.Hermindtrickseemedtohaveworked!Breakingdownthechallengingtaskintosmalleronesmadeiteasierandhelpedhermaintainfocus.Asshethoughtaboutit,unknowingly,shefoundherselfneartheschoolbuilding.Gaz