英语书面表达的润色.ppt

英语书面表达的润色,句式的多样选词特色关联词的使用合理的想象和发挥,高考英语科考试说明中第五档（2125分）的给分范围和要求,覆盖所有内容要点；应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽量使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言应用能力；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的。全、准、顺、雅,一、复杂多样的句式,复合句倒装句强调结构非谓语感叹句虚拟语气独立主格结构、反意问句、并列句、名言、警句等,2004年广州一模的书面表达为例,假设你是某中学生英文报的小记者，对中学生课外上网的利弊进行调查采访。以下是学生们对上网的看法。请你根据他们的观点写一篇简要的调查报告，并呼吁正确使用互联网。使用互联网的益处1、资源丰富2、节省时间3、方便交流和沟通使用互联网的弊端1、内容良莠不齐2、沉迷网络游戏会影响学业3、过多使用会影响健康,1各种复合句1）TheresnodoubtthattheInternetdoesusgood.2)ThemajorityofstudentsbelievethattheybenefitalotfromtheInternet.3)Asisknowntoall,onceaddictedtotheonlinegames,thestudentsnolongerconcentrateontheirstudies.4)Helpfulasthecomputeris,somestillsticktotheopinionthatnoteverythingontheinternetisgoodforusstudents.,2.倒装句1)Neverbeforecouldwebeexposedtosomuchinformationwithjustaclick.2)Onlywithgreatcareandunderproperguidancewillthestudentsimprovetheirstudiesandenjoymakingnewfriendsbysurfingtheinternet.3)Withtheincreasingpopularityandconveniencethattheinternetbrings,therearisestheargumentoveritsbadeffectsonteenagers.4)PresentedasfollowsistheresultofarecentsurveyonhowstudentsviewtheInternet.,3.强调结构1)Itistheinternetthatmakestheworldmuchsmaller.2)Isntistheinternetthatprovidespeoplewithamoreconvenientwayofcommunication?3)Theinternetdoesenablepeopletocommunicatewitheachothermoreeasilyandquickly.,4.非谓语1）Weshouldtrytomakeproperuseofthecomputer,makingitagoodpartnerthatbenefitsourlifeaswellasourstudy.2)Beingabsorbedinthegames,studentsmayhavedifficultyincontrollingthemselves,leavingtheirhomeworkundone.5.感叹句1)Howhardsomestudentsfindittotearthemselvesawayfromcomputergames！2)Howconvenientitistousethecomputer!,6.虚拟语气1）Asmoreandmorestudentsstayupsurfingtheinternet，itishightimethatwediscussedtheproblem2)Withouttheinternet,wewouldnothaveenjoyedourlifesomuch.3)Somepeopleinsistthatteenagersbekeptawayfromtheinternet.,二、选词特色(2004年广州一模),dosbgood,dosbharm,haveoneshealthdamaged,leaveoneshomeworkundone,benefit,addictedto,concentrateon,beexposedto,underproperguidance,provide,enable,absorbedin,havedifficultyindoing,tearoneselfawayfrom,bekeptawayfrom,makeproperuseof,stayup,actasatwo-edgesword,teenagers,asfollows等等。,三、关联词的使用,（1）表时间的：now,then,afterwards,soon,beforelong,shortlyafterthat,minuteslater,justnow,justthen,suddenly,immediately,themoment,etc.（2）表顺序及过程的：first(ly),firstofall,second(ly),atfirst,then,next,atlast,finally,etc.（3）表转折的：but,yet,andyet,instead,however,although,though,otherwise,orelse,inspiteof,etc.,（4）表结果的：thus,therefore,so,asaresult,seeingthat,luckily,(un)fortunately,etc.（5）表强调的：firstofall,aboveall.indeed,surely,certainly,ofcourse,afterall,atleast,atmost,etc.（6）表并列的：and,also,aswell,etc.（7）表递进的：besides,whatsmore,inaddition,even,oncemore,whatwasworse,tomakethingsworse,etc.,（8）表解释或说明的：inotherwords,thatis,thatistosay,namely,forexample,actually,andsoon,suchas,personally,believeitornot,totellyouthetruth,accordingtothis,forthisreason,etc.（9）表比较的：justlike,justas,inthesameway,moreorless,onthecontrary,ononehand,ontheotherhand,while,etc.（10）表总结的：finally,inconclusion,inaword,ingeneral,generallyspeaking,inshort,asyou/weknow,intheend,inall,etc.,2004年广州一模的书面表达可以用上以下的过渡性词语:whatsmore(also,beside,inaddition),worsestill(whatsworse,tomakethingsworse),however,therefore,asaresult,ontheotherhand,onthecontrary,generallyspeaking等待。,四、合理的想象和发挥,LastSunday,ourclassorganizedsomevolunteeractivities.GroupOnewenttothePeoplesParktoplanttreesandwatertheflowers.GroupTwowenttotheBusStationtodosomecleaning.GroupThreewenttothestreettoraisemoneyfortheHopeProject.GroupFourwenttotheoldpeopleshometoputonperformances.Lateintheafternoonwereturnedhome，andwewerehappy.“流水帐”式，缺少“血”和“肉”。,LastSunday,ourclassorganizedsomevolunteeractivities,fromwhichallofuslearnedalot.GroupOnewenttotheparktoplanttreesandwatertheflowerstomakeitmorebeautiful.GroupTwomanagedtogivetheBusStationaspringcleaning.Asaresult,ittookonanewlook.GroupThreeheadedforthestreetandhelpedtoraisemoneyfortheHopeProject,sothatmorepeopleinthepoorareascanaffordtheirschooling.,GroupFourwenttotheoldpeopleshomeandpresentedwonderfulperformances,theagedlaughingallthetime,happierthanever.Lateintheafternoonwereturnedhome,wornout,butwewerehappytohaveenjoyedameaningfulday.,关联词的使用练习,OnedayIwaswalkinginthestreet.Isawathiefstealingacarnearahouse.Irantothehouse.Iwantedtotellitsownerwhatwashappening.Nobodywasthere.Idecidedtoshoutatthethiefandstophimstealingthecar.Thethiefgotoutofthecar,seizedmeandthrewmetotheground.Igotbadlyinjured,myheadbleedingallthetime.Istruggledtostandup.Igaveaphonecalltothepolicestation.Thepoliceturnedupandcaughtthethief.,OnedayIwaswalkinginthestreetwhenIsawathiefstealingacarnearahouse.Withouthesitation,Irantothehouseinordertotellitsownerwhatwashappening,butnobodywasthere.SoIdecidedtoshoutatthethiefandstophimstealingthecar.Suddenlythethiefgotoutofthecar,seizedmeandthrewmetotheground.AtthattimeIgotbadlyinjured,myheadbleedingallthetime.Istruggledtostandupandgaveaphonecalltothepolicestation.Severalminuteslaterthepoliceturnedupandcaughtthethief.,某报纸刊登有人化装行乞的照片,请你为此写篇评论,要点为:1.假装残疾和无助是欺骗行为2.行乞原因3影响市容4.政府应采取措施杜绝此类事件,要点分析及发挥：,看到这些图片感到震惊。这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