高考英语 书面表达（文字提纲式作文）练习讲评二课件.ppt

2012届高考英语书面表达 文字提纲式作文 练习讲评二 注意 1 对所给要点逐一陈述 适当发挥 不能简单翻译 2 词数150左右 开头已经写好 不计入总词数 3 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名 legalaffairsofficeofthestatecouncilofchinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofschoolbussafetyregulationsondec 11th 2011tocollectpublicopinions 2011年12月11日国务院法制办就我国校车安全条例草案征求意见稿正式全文公布 广纳民意 请你根据下列表格的内容为某英语网站写一篇短文 讲评 一 认真审题 确立话题 归纳要点 通过审题 确定本文的话题为 就我国校车安全条例草案征求意见稿发表看法 围绕这个话题 将题目中叙述的文字转换成以下要点 出台的背景 连续的事故 社会的关注 政府的重视 出台的意义 关爱生命 稳定社会 我的看法 二 理顺要点 增加细节 连贯表达 本篇书面表达的文字提纲实际上就是按照表达顺序提供的 所以不存在理顺要点的环节 但为了表达的连贯 还需要增加要点 既然是有出台的背景就要增加有关的背景资料 过去的几年连续发生的校车事故夺取了许多学生的生命 这些悲剧使人们震惊引起了社会和政府的关注 政府是如何重视的 校车安全条例草案的公布表明政府已经意识到问题的严重性 说明政府正在采取措施来确保校车的安全 校车安全条例草案的公布反映政府与公众关爱学生的生命 校车安全条例草案一旦实施必将有助于减少事故惠及学校和每个家庭从而对稳定社会会起及其重要的作用 我的看法 围绕上述的叙述进行想象首先要表明对校车安全条例草案的态度 赞成或支持 其次希望人人都要遵守这个条例 最后是希望政府部门要严格执行这个条例 三 化解难点 灵活表达 词能达意 本篇所给要点和增加的细节比较多 有些要点和细节表达起来还比较棘手 1 化解难点 夺取了许多学生的生命claimmanystudents liveskillmanystudentsmanystudentslosttheirlives 使人们震惊ashocktoeveryonetoeveryone sshocktoeveryone sgreatsurpriseshockeveryonemakeeveryoneshocked surprised 引起了社会和政府的关注arousegreatconcernamongpeoplefromallwalksoflifeaswellasthegovernmentpeoplefromallwalksoflifeaswellasthegovernmentpaymuchattentionto causeoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuchattentionto 校车安全条例草案的公布thepublicationofthedraftregulationshavingpublishedthedraftregulationsthedraftregulationspublished 问题的严重性howseriousthesituationis howserioustheproblemis suchaserioussituation problem 确保校车的安全ensurethesafetyoftheschoolbusmakesurethattheschoolbusissafe 关爱学生的生命concernaboutstudents livespaymuchattentiontostudents safety 一旦实施when onceputintoeffectwhen oncecarriedoutwhen onceputintopractice 惠及学校和每个家庭benefitschoolsandeveryfamilyschoolsandfamiliesbenefitfromdogoodtoschoolsandfamilies 2 变点为句 过去的几年连续发生的校车事故夺取了许多学生的生命duringthepastyear therehavebeenseveralsevereschoolbusaccidentswhichclaimedstudents lives duringthepastyear severeschoolbusaccidentshaveclaimedmanystudents lives duringthepastyear aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedclaimingmanystudents lives duringthepastyear aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedkillingmanystudents duringthepastyear aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappened inwhichmanystudentslosttheirlives 这些悲剧使人们震惊引起了社会和政府的关注thesetragediescameasashocktoeveryoneandhavearousedgreatconcernamongpeoplefromallwalksoflifeaswellasourgovernment thesetragediesmadeeveryoneshockedandcausedoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuchattentiontothem 校车安全条例草案的公布表明政府已经意识到问题的严重性 说明政府正在采取措施来确保校车的安全thepublicationofthedraftregulationsindicatesthatourgovernmenthasrealizedhowseriousthesituationisandthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus havingpublishedthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmenthasrealizedthesituationissoseriousthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus thedraftregulationspublishedindicatethatourgovernmenthasrealizedhowseriousthesituationisandthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestomakesurethattheschoolbusmustbesafe 校车安全条例草案的公布反映政府与公众关爱学生的生命thepublicationofthedraftregulationsreflectadeepconcernfromourgovernmentaswellasfromthepublicaboutstudents lives thepublicationofthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmentaswellasthepublicpaysmuchattentiontostudents safety 校车安全条例草案一旦实施必将有助于减少事故惠及学校和每个家庭从而对稳定社会会起及其重要的作用whenputintoeffect theregulationswillsurelyhelpreducethenumberofaccidentsandbenefitschoolsandfamiliesaswell whichwillbeofvitalimportanceinstablingthesociety when oncecarriedout theregulationswillsurelyhelpreducethenumberofaccidents andschoolsandfamiliesbenefitfromit whichwillbeofvitalimportanceinstablingthesociety 对校车安全条例草案支持ifullysupportthecomingoutoftheregulations iamfavorofthecomingoutoftheregulations 希望人人都要遵守这个条例ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywillobeytheregulations ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywilldowhatisrequiredaccordingtotheregulations 希望政府部门要严格执行这个条例ihopethattheregulationsshouldbestrictlycarriedout ihopethatourgovernmentmustcarrytheregulationsoutstrictly 四 错落有致 连接恰当 发挥有度 连接恰当 整理成文legalaffairsofficeofthestatecouncilofchinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofschoolbussafetyregulationsondec 12th 2011tocollectpublicopinions duringthepastyear aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedclaimingmanystudents lives thesetragediesmadeeveryoneshockedandcausedoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuchattentiontothem havingpublishedthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmenthasrealizedthesituationissoseriousthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus thepublicationofthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmentaswellasthepublicpaysmuchattentiontostudents safety oncecarriedout theregulationswillsurelyhelpreducethenumberofaccidents andschoolsandfamiliesbenefitfromit whichwillbeofvitalimportanceinstablingthesociety asfarasi mconcerned iamfavorofthecomingoutoftheregulations ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywilldowhatisrequiredaccordingtotheregulations what smore theregulationsshouldbestrictlycarriedout 参考范文 legalaffairsofficeofthestatecouncilofchinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofschoolbussafetyregulationsondec 12th 2011tocollectpublicopinions duringthepastyear therehavebeenseveralsevereschoolbusaccidentswhichclaimedmanyyounglives thesetragediescameasashocktoeveryone andtheyhavearousedgreatconcernamongpeoplefromallwalksoflife thepublicationofthedraftregulationsindicatesthatourgovernmenthasrealizedhowseriousthesituationisandthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus thedraftregulationsreflectadeepconcernfromourgovernmentaswellasfromthepublicaboutstudents lives whenputintoeffect theregulationswillsurelyhelpreducethenumberofaccidentsandbenefitschoolsandfamiliesaswell also theywillbeofvitalimportanceinstablingthesociety personally ifullysupportthecomingoutoftheregulations andisincerelyhopethateveryoneinoursocietywillobeytheregulations what smore theregulationsshouldbestrictlycarriedout 153words 同步练习 网络资源2011届高考预测 接连发生的酒后驾驶 飙车肇事致死案 引发了社会高度关注 2011年5月1日起 中华人民共和国刑法修正案 八 将正式实施 醉酒驾驶将作为危险驾驶罪被追究驾驶人刑事责任 五一 期间 发现醉酒驾驶者 将对其进行刑事拘役 醉驾者一旦被查实 将面临最高半年拘役的处罚 请你根据以下内容 以 treasureourlives 为题在你个人博客上发文 奉劝司机朋友珍爱生命 切莫酒后驾车 参考词汇 飙车drag race 醉驾drunkdriving 路人pedestrian 写作时注意格式 词数150左右 开头已给出 不计入总词数 参考范文 treasureourliveswiththenumberofcarsincreasingincities trafficaccidentsoccurfrequently callingseriousattentionacrosstheglobeandbecomingamajorconcerninoursocietytoday frighteningnewsneverstopsshockingpeople may7thwitnessedaterribleaccidentduetodrag racinginthecitycenterofhangzhou causingimmediatedeathofazh