高考英语 书面表达（开放式作文）练习讲评二课件.ppt

2012届高考英语书面表达 开放式作文 练习讲评二 请根据下图提示 用英语写一篇短文 先简要描写下图 然后再发表你自己的看法和意见 注意 1 词数 150左右2 可适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 讲评 本篇开放作文的写作的关键在于对漫画主题的正确理解 正确的理解是 提醒人们在照顾孩子的同时也应该关爱老人 孩子 中年人 老人都有各得其乐的方式 应该珍惜每一个阶段 不恰当的理解或是跑题 画面描绘了母爱 老人深受感动 养狗也体现了一种母爱 低碳生活 因为小孩骑车 没开车 而且画面里有风车 少壮不努力 老大图悲伤 年少时学的少 要多学 老了之后就不能学了 年老时就悲伤 母亲教孩子学车 所以母亲溺爱 有人想要孩子 有人想养宠物 但最终宠物代替不 所以还是应该抚养孩子好 去户外锻炼身体 多接触大自然 漫画所反映的事情发生的背景是在一个公园内 一位年轻的母亲帮助女儿学骑自行车 一位老人坐在板凳上 旁边有一条睡着的宠物狗 一 简述漫画内容 inthepicturethereisanoldmansittingaloneonthebenchinapark heislookingatayoungmotherholdingthebikeforherlittledaughterwhilesheisridingit bythesideoftheoldmanliesasleepinglittlepetdog asisshowninthepicture anoldmanwithastickseatedaloneonthebenchinapark heislookingatayoungmotherhelpingherlittledaughterlearnhowtorideabike besidehimliesasleepinglittlepetdog whichishisonlycompany asisshowninthepicture thereisanoldmanwithasticksittingaloneonthebenchinapark ontheroadinfrontofhimayoungmotherisholdingthebikeforherlittledaughterwhilesheisridingit bythesideoftheoldmanliesasleepinglittlepetdog whichishisonlycompany inthislivelypicture themomishelpingwiththelittlegirllearningtorideabicycle whileanoldpersonwithhislittlepetdogsleeping sittingonachair isshowingjealousimpressionstothevividlifestyleofthemotheranddaughter asisseeninthepicture ayoungmotherisridingabiketogetherwithherdaughterinapark smilinghappily happily whileononesideoftheroadsitsalonelyoldmanwithonlyadogbyhim lookingupset 本幅漫画采用了明显的对比手法 小孩由母亲陪着玩 很快乐 老人只能独自一人 只有宠物狗相伴 给人以一种强烈的视觉反差 我们由此可以得出结论 老人无人陪伴 他应该感到很孤独 这可以从老人的面部表情中看出来 二 点明漫画主题 thisisapictureofgreatcontrast bythelookontheman sface wecantelltheoldmanfeelsabitlonely however thelittlegirl enjoyinghermother scompany isplayinghappily thepicturegivesusastrongvisualcontrast bytheexpressionontheoldman sface wecanjudgethathefeelsabitlonely however thelittlegirlishavingagoodtimeaccompaniedbyhermother thepicturegivesusastrongvisualcontrastandthemessageconveyedinthepictureisclear nowadays achildisthecenterofeachfamilyandtheyshouldbetakengoodcareof buttheagedfeelverylonelybecausetheyareoftenareignoredbytheirchildren thepictureshowsingreatcontractthatinoursocietysomeoldpeopleareleftalonebytheirownchildrenliketheoldmaninthepicture wholeadsalonelylifedayafterdaywithoutbeinglookedafter whatthepictureintendstodoistomakeusreflectourselves 谈谈个人感想要从以下两个方面来谈 一是大人无微不至地照顾孩子 无可厚非 二是老人也应该得到应有的帮助和照顾 三 谈谈个人感想 youngparentsdowhatevertheycantotakegoodcareoftheirchildren there snothingwrongwiththat butasfarasi mconcerned notonlytheyoungbutalsotheoldinoursocietydeservegoodcareandenoughattention theneedsoftheoldshouldn tbeignored inconclusion weshouldn tlosethegoodtraditionofcaringfortheold adultsdowhatevertheycantotakegoodcareoftheirchildren thereisnothingwrongwiththat but meanwhiletheoldinoursocietydeservegoodcareandenoughattention theyalsoneedloveandcare thereisnothingmoreimportantthantheirfamily shappinessforthem soeveryadultshouldtrytheirbesttospendsometimewiththeirparentsandcomforttheirlonelyheart wehavetobeawarethathowwetreatourparentsorgrandparentscanhaveabiginfluenceontheirstateoflife howeverbusyweare itisnotacceptabletooverlooktheirfeelingsandneedsforchildren hadwesparedmoretimeaccompanyingthem theywouldhavebeenmuchmoresatisfiedwiththeirlives tosumup weoughttotakeourresponsibilitiesup andshowourcarefortheold 参考范文1 inthepicturethereisanoldmansittingaloneonthebenchinapark heislookingatayoungmotherholdingthebikeforherlittledaughterwhilesheisridingit bythesideoftheoldmanliesasleepinglittlepetdog thisisapictureofgreatcontrast bythelookontheman sface wecantelltheoldmanfeelsabitlonely however thelittlegirl enjoyinghermother scompany isplayinghappily nowadays allfamilieshaveonlyonechild soparentsdowhatevertheycantotakegoodcareoftheirchildren there snothingwrongwiththat butmeanwhile asfarasi mconcerned notonlytheyoungbutalsotheoldinoursocietydeservegoodcareandenoughattention theneedsoftheoldshouldn tbeignored inconclusion weshouldn tlosethegoodtraditionofcaringfortheold 参考范文2 asisseeninthepicture ayoungmotherisridingabiketogetherwithherdaughterinapark smilinghappily happily whileononesideoftheroadsitsalonelyoldmanwithonlyadogbyhim lookingupset thepictureshowsingreatcontractthatinoursocietysomeoldpeopleareleftalonebytheirownchildrenliketheoldmaninthepicture wholeadsalonelylifedayafterdaywithoutbeinglookedafter whatthepictureintendstodoistomakeusreflectourselves wehavetobeawarethathowwetreatourparentsorgrandparentscanhaveabiginfluenceontheirstateoflife howeverbusyweare itisnotacceptabletooverlooktheirfeelingsandneedsforchildren hadwesparedmoretimeaccompanyingthem theywouldhavebeenmuchmoresatisfiedwiththeirlives tosumup weoughttotakeourresponsibilitiesup andshowourcarefortheold 同步练习 2012届江苏省石庄高级中学书面表达专题指导同步练习请根据下图提示 用英语写一篇短文 先简要描写下图 然后再发表你自己的看法和意见 注意 1 词数 150左右 2 可适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 参考范文 itistheoldman sbirthdaytoday nowheissittingonasofaalone maybehiswifehasbeendead ontherightsideisabigbirthdaycakesentbyhisson andtherearealsosomepresentsgivenbyhisdaughterontheleft yettheoldmandoesn tfeelhappy instead helooksverysadbecauseheislonely nowadays youngpeopleseemtogettoobusytofindtimetostaywiththeirparents whichalwaysmakestheoldfee