高中英语写作课堂实录及点评

高中英语写作课堂实录及点评高中英语写作课堂实录及点评 Step I Greeting and Leading in T Class begins Ss Good afternoon teacher T Good afternoon everybody Sit down please Ss Thank you T Nice to have this English class with you First of all please look at the learning aims of this period 1 Write a paragraph giving the opposite view 2 Develop a good writing habit read discuss and write 3 Learn to study on the Internet in a proper way 评 首先出示本节课学习目标 而且学习目标设定具体 明确 会写表达自己观点的小文章 课型 写 作课 写作过程 读 讨论 写 这样学生听课过程中有的放矢 心中有数 T Think about as many things we can do on the Internet as possible to relax oneself to communicate to work or study and so on What can we do on the Internet Think about as many things as possible A to relax oneself B to communicate C to work study D S1 We can listen to music and watch videos or movies on line S2 We can play computer games and chat on line with friends S3 We can send E mails to our family and friends as well S4 We can do online shopping which is both convenient and cheap S5 We can search for all kinds of information easily and quickly on the Internet S6 We can also study online for example listen to English listening materials S7 We can learn news at home and abroad 评 通过开放性问题激活学生已有知识 学生们各抒己见 表达自己的观点 为下一步评价作者观点做 好铺垫 开放性的问题有利于引导学生思考 从而展示学生不同观点 体现了学生即资源 不同即丰富的 理念 T Well done Yes we can do a number of things on the Internet So some students think we can learn all we need on the Internet Do you agree with this opinion Ss Yes No T Different people have different opinions Let s read a short essay first 评 引导学生通过阅读了解他人对某事的看法和观点 从而导入本课阅读文章 Step II Pre writing Task 1 Reading T Read the essay on page 56 and do the exercise on your guiding paper 1 What s the writer s opinion about studying on the internet 2 What s the supporting ideas to support his opinion 3 What s the writing style of the passage 4 What s the tense of the passage 评 问题设计很有价值 通过这四个问题 首先引导学生在阅读中学会找到作者观点和支撑观点的论据 然后观察文章的写作风格和时态 为下一步学生自己的写作做了非常好的铺垫 The students read the essay silently and then do the related exercise for two minutes T Have you got the answers Ss 学生没有回答 It seems that some of the students are not sure about their answers T If you have any difficulty you can discuss your answers with your partners The students discuss for a while 学生热烈讨论起来 评 在学生学习过程中 关注学生之间的分享和交流 既丰富了学生思维 又达到了兵教兵的目的 始 终贯穿 差异即资源 不同即丰富 的理念 T Let s share the answers Who would like to answer the first question S1 We can learn all we need on the Internet T Does anybody have different opinion Ss No 学生齐声回答 T Ok you are right You have got the right answer How about the second one S2 The first one is that the teacher can t help everyone in the class in 50 minutes The second one is that it would be much better if we spent the time working on a computer T Do you all agree with him Ss Yes 学生齐声回答 T You have got it How about the third one S3 The writing style is argumentative writing T You are quite right How about the fourth one S4 The tense of the essay is the present tense T Good 评 通过阅读和讨论 学生解决了四个问题的同时也就明白了作者如何表达自己观点 学习写作就是模 仿 模仿作者的表达方式 模仿作者的构思框架 让学生在模仿中学习写作 既有据可循 又降低了难度 增强了学生敢写的信心 Task 2 Discussing T After reading we have got the writing style the tense and the structure of the essay giving a view Now it s time for us to think about how we can write a paragraph to give the opposite view Discuss how to support the opposite view and write down the key 关键的 words 1 the importance of having teachers 2 the importance of working together 3 the danger of spending too much time looking at the computer 4 Other supporting ideas 5 What conclusion 结论 can you draw from the discussion above T Please read the given expressions and patterns silently Ss I don t agree with this opinion In my opinion It s very important to It would be very difficult to 学生们默默的读着 评 这是在为学生写作准备素材和语言材料 给学生写作继续搭支架 为下一步写做准备 T Please discuss in groups of four how to support the opposite view and write down the key words on your guiding paper Ss 学生热烈的讨论起来 After discussing in groups of four for about five minutes T Now Let s appreciate some of your opinions Who would like to tell us the opinions about the importance of having a teacher S1 In my opinion it s very important to have a teacher We can ask teachers questions and chat with them They can also tell us how to learn well and we can get along well with teachers T OK Sit down please Any other opinions S2 We can ask the teacher for help when we are in trouble S3 The teacher can explain things more clearly and it is more relaxing for us to study with a teacher help T Oh I agree with you Teachers can explain things more clearly and vividly compared with computers What do you think of the importance of working together 评 学生们对第一个问题回答后 老师及时加以总结和提升 S4 It would be very different to solve problems alone If we work together we can help each other S5 We can learn from each other and we can exchange our ideas S6 We can also make friends when working together as a class T Yes friendship is very valuable Any other opinions S7 Working together we can be more energetic and more interested in what we learn T Well done How do you find the danger of spending too much time looking at the computer S8 It will do harm to our health and it s bad for our eyes S9 Spending too much time looking at the computer may waste our valuable time and influence our study S10 If someone spends too much time with computers he may become cold blooded and have difficulty in getting along well with people around S11 Sometimes we may be lost in computer games T Oh that would be a little dangerous Do you have other supporting ideas besides the three points above It seems that the students don t know how to answer the question T Are all the websites and information good for the students like us 评 在同学们解决完课本上的问题后 老师引导学生回答开放性问题 为了便于学生理解 老师使用了 back up question S12 Maybe there is some information and websites online which are not suitable for us students T That s true Some people who spend too much time on computers may have mental problems Then what will you pay special attention to while studying online 评 老师继续使用 back up question 引导学生更深入思考 S13 We shouldn t spend too much time on computers S14 We should not be crazy about computer games T How about the fifth question What can we get from the discussion S15 The Internet has both advantages and disadvantages T Yes we should use the Internet as a tool That is to say we can study with the help of it Don t depend on it completely 评 通过讨论 学生知道了如何正确使用电脑 电脑不是万能的 这和作者提出的观点恰恰相反 学生 们在不知不觉中已经学会了如何提出相反观点 如何表达自己观点 为下一步写作做好了充分的准备 Step III While writing T After discussion and sharing the opinions of your classmates you must have got a lot of information on the view Now it s time for you to write a paragraph on your guiding paper giving the opposite view You can refer to the notes you have taken the expressions and patterns on the textbook To make your passage clearly organized you can use the phrases on the screen such as Firstly Secondly Thirdly In a word or To begin with In addition What s more In conclusion and so on About fifteen minutes for you to write a paragraph about 100 words I will ask one of you to write on the blackboard The students write a paragraph on the guiding paper and one girl is asked to write hers on the blackboard After ten minutes most of the students have finished it 评 通过以上各种活动 学生明白了写作任务 知道写什么 怎样写 然后给学生一个相对安静的环境 限时写作 老师走到学生中间巡查 个别指导 以了解信息 Step IV Post Writing T Since you have finished writing it s time to evaluate your work First of all look at the standards on the screen And then read your writing and check the mistakes by yourself first Two minutes for the students to check some simple mistakes by themselves T Let s evaluate the work on the blackboard in public Please appreciate some beautiful sentences and phrases Above all what do you think of the handwriting Ss Ok But it s not very beautiful T I agree with you Her handwriting needs a little improving Let s see the structure Has she given the view first Ss Yes That s the first sentence T Are there some supporting ideas and a conclusion Ss Yes T She has also used some of the expressions and patterns mentioned above That s great Who can tell us how to make her writing better Ss By using some phrases to make it more organized and clear 评 老师先引领学生批改 目的是让学生知道怎样批改 学会欣赏美句 T That s right Now please exchange your passages with your deskmates to evaluate Later I will choose some of you to show in public 评价内容标准自评互评教师评价 书写 5 分整洁 美观 词汇 6 分拼写正确 选词得当 语法 4 分时态 句子结构准确 行文 15 分要点齐全 结构紧凑 总分 30 分 The students exchange their writing and evaluate each other s according to the given standards Four minutes later 评 给出评价依据 学生两两互批 老师走动指点 这及照顾个体有关注全体 有面及点 效果好 T Now let s appreciate more Please look at the screen How do you find the handwriting Ss Not so good T The handwriting needs improving And the first letter of Internet should be capitalized The boy has used the patterns and expressions discussed above T Another composition I think the handwriting is much better Please pay attention to the patterns and supporting ideas 评 展示学生的作