Unit _Session B_Writing a Descriptive Essayjaneppt课件.ppt

WritingaDescriptiveEssay Reading Writing3 SessionB 1 MajorActivities I Warmup QuickwritingII Writingstrategy WritingadescriptiveessayIII ReadingforwritingIV WritingpracticeV Assignments 2 I QuickWriting Directions Thewriterofthefollowingparagraphtellsusthat Maggieisafreckle facedten year old morelikeaboythanagirl andthenadddetailsselectedtoelaborateuponthischaracteristic Usingthisparagraphasamodel writeadescriptionofaperson First giveageneralimpressionoftheperson asthewriterdidinhertwoopeningsentences Thenaddthedetailsthatsupporttheimpressionyouwanttocreate 3 Model Maggiewastenyearsold withlighteyeslookingoutfromunderdarkscowlingbrows brownhairthatfellstraightandlimpfromcurlingragsevenastheywereunrolled andafacecoveredwithfreckles Shewasmorelikeaboythanagirl everyonesaid Shewasalwayscarryinghoptoadsaboutinherhat ortearingherpetticoatsclimbingtreesandslidingdowntheicehouseroof Shewassometimesasboldasbrassandsometimesonecrimsonblushofshyness andshehadthestrangestwaysofshowingpeoplethatshelovedthem boastinginfrontoftheminaloudgruffvoice makingawfulfaces twistingonelegaroundtheother orstandingonthesidesofherfeet Yourparagraph 4 II WritingStrategy WritingaDescriptiveEssay 5 Whatdoyouwanttodescribe ApersonAplaceAmemoryAnexperienceAnobject 6 Whyareyouwritingyourdescriptiveessay Findyourparticularlyreasonforwritingdescriptiveessay Gettingintouchwiththisreasoncanhelpyoufocusyourdescriptionandimbueyourlanguagewithaparticularperspectiveoremotion Ex Ifyouwanttodescribeyourgrandfather You vechosentowriteaboutyourgrandfather sphysicalappearanceandthewaythatheinteractswithpeople 7 Howshouldyouwriteyourdescription It sthefamoussaying showdon ttellEx1 Igrewtiredafterdinner Ex2 AsIleanedbackandrestedmyheadagainstthetopofthechair myeyelidsbegantofeelheavy andtheedgesoftheemptyplateinfrontofmeblurredwiththewhitetablecloth Thefirstsentencetellsreadersthatyougrewtiredafterdinner Thesecondsentenceshowsreadersthatyougrewtired Themosteffectivedescriptiveessaysareloadedwithsuchshowingbecausetheyenablereaderstoimagineorexperiencesomethingforthemselves 8 Focusonthefivesenses sightsoundsmelltouchtasteWhenyoufocusyourdescriptionsonthesenses youprovidevividandspecificdetailsthatshowyourreadersratherthantellyourreaderswhatyouaredescribing 9 Introduction trytodescribeyourphysicalappearance 10 Whatisthemostimportantpersonalitytraitofagoodboyfriendorgirlfriend Canyouexplainindetails 11 Basicsfordescribingaperson Physicalappearance face facialexpressions body clothesPersonality habit interests manners tastes actionsFocusononeortwoaspectsofapersonProduceanoverallimpressionandyourfeelingabouttheperson keywordinyourtopicsentence OrganizeinspatialorderToptobottomorbottomtotopFronttobackorbacktofrontRighttoleftorlefttoright 12 Details UsespecificanddescriptivedetailsShehaslongblackhairthatfallsdowntotheshouldersandsurroundsherattractiveface whichisusuallysuntanned Shehasdarkbrowneyebrowsoverhercharmingeyes Hernoseisasbeautifulasyoucanimagine andontheleftsideofthebottomofhernose byhernostril isasmallmole Shehaslovelymouth andherteetharestraightandwhite Thereisnothingbutextraordinarybeautyinherface 13 Exercise Shehascharmingeyes Hewasagentleman 14 Hereyeswerequickandbright theywereayellowishbrown aboutthecolorofherhair Shehadawayofturningthemswiftlyuponanobjectandholdingthemthereasiflostinsomeinwardmazeofcontemplationorthought Heworeglasses Hewasofforty ofmediumheightandratherslenderbuild hestoopedalittle Hishairwasbrownandstraight partedononeside Hisbeardwasneatlyandcloselytrimmed 15 16 FacialAppearance FaceEyesEyebrowsEyelashesEyelidNoseMouthHairVoiceComplexionDimple 17 Oval Round Rectangularoroblong Square Heart Diamond Triangle 18 圆脸鹅蛋脸方脸高颧骨长相一般长得好看瘦削的胖乎乎的脸蛋长相完美胡子刮的干净的未剃胡子的 19 圆脸roundface鹅蛋脸ovalface方脸squareface高颧骨highcheekbones长相一般average plain commonlooking长得好看goodlooking瘦削的ahaggardface胖乎乎的脸蛋plumpcheeks chubbycheeks长相完美gorgeous胡子刮的干净的clean shaven未剃胡子的unshaven 20 Eyes 闪闪发光深陷的凹陷的 凸出的淡眉毛浓密独眉毛长睫毛 21 Eyes bright sparkling twinkling shiningeyes闪闪发光deep set深陷的sunken凹陷的 bulging protruding凸出的thineyebrows淡眉毛thickbushyeyebrows浓密独眉毛longeyelashes长睫毛 22 Nose 高鼻梁直鼻梁好看的鼻子长鼻梁塌鼻子朝天鼻 猪鼻子朝天鼻鹰钩鼻鹰钩鼻 高鼻梁 23 Nose High bridgednose高鼻梁straightnose直鼻梁noblenose好看的鼻子longnose长鼻梁flatnose塌鼻子snub nosed朝天鼻 猪鼻子upturnednose朝天鼻aquiline hookednose鹰钩鼻aromannose鹰钩鼻 高鼻梁 24 mouth 薄嘴唇樱桃嘴厚嘴唇尖尖的下巴双下巴 25 mouth thinlips薄嘴唇cherrylips樱桃嘴thicklips厚嘴唇pointedchin尖尖的下巴doublechin双下巴 26 hairstyle straight直的curly卷发的pigtails辫子crewcut平头bald秃头的spikyhair刺头 板寸头partedhair分头fairlylong很长 正合适 wavyhair波浪发jet black乌黑的 fair金色的 blonde淡黄色的 golden金黄色的 dyed染色的 chestnut栗色的 27 Complexion白皮肤的肤色暗淡的肤色较深的黄皮肤的 东方人的棕褐色棕色皮肤 28 Complexionfair skinned白皮肤的apalecomplexion肤色暗淡的slightlydark tanned肤色较深的oriental黄皮肤的 东方人的sunburned suntanned棕褐色brown棕色皮肤 29 30 Stuffonface 落腮胡上唇上的小胡子皱纹黑痣斑伤疤酒窝 雀斑 复数 痘痘 复数 31 Stuffonface beard落腮胡moustache上唇上的小胡子Wrinkles lines皱纹amole黑痣spots斑scar伤疤dimple酒窝freckles 雀斑 复数 pimples 痘痘 复数 32 Figure buildshortandstout矮胖small largefat肥胖的thin瘦的slim苗条的overweight超重 slight瘦小的 well built身材魁梧mediumheight中等身材 averageheight一般身材 belowaverage低于平均身高 tall高的 short矮的 tallish有些高的 middle sized身高中等的 ofmediumheight中等身材 1 78meters身高1 78米mediumbuild中等身材overweight超重plump丰满perfectfigure完美的身材muscular肌肉的 强壮的 33 Personality AdventurousAggressiveAmbitiousBrightCarefreeCautiousCheerfulClumsyConfidentConservativeCynicalDiligentEnergeticExtrovert IntrovertGenerous HonestHumorousInnovativeLiberalMeanModestNosyOpinionatedOptimistic pessimisticResponsibleRomanticRudeSelfishSubmissiveTolerant 34 说到我的爸爸的长相 他的长相很普通 中等身材 黑色的卷发 他的眼睛不大并且也不那么闪亮 但是他通常面带笑容 这让他看起来十分平易近人 Intermsofappearance myfatheriskindofaverage Heisofmediumbuild withblackandcurlyhair Hiseyesaresmallandnotsobright Buthealwayswearsafriendlysmileonhisface whichmakeshimprettyapproachable 35 你可以用这个世界上所有的溢美之词来形容他 帅 有形 性感 他的外表无可挑剔 强壮的身躯 俊俏的脸庞 1 83米的身高 还有一头飘逸的金发 Youcanuseallthecommendatory complimentarywordstodescribehim suchas handsome charming sexy Hisappearanceisreallyattractivewithmuscularbody handsomeface nearly6feetand4inchestall andaflyawayblondhair 36 Yourtask 1 Describeyourpartner2 Describeoneofyourfamilymembersandyourpartnerhastosketch 37 Practice Thislookslikeasmall elderly Asianman Helooksasifhemayberatherpoor Heiswearingabatteredhat andhiseyeslookcheerful Hehasabiggrin Heiswearinganold looking darkjacketHelookslikeahappy kind heartedsortofman 38 Hehasshort blackhair sparklingbrowneyesandabroad friendlysmile Heiswearingadarksuitandtie Heappearstobefitandtrim Helookslikeanintelligent competentman 39 Thislookslikealittlegirlwearingapinktop Shehasplumproundcheeks andchubbylittlehands SheseemstobeveryinterestedinherDaddy sbaldhead 40 Helookslikeheisabout8yearsold Hehasbig darkeyesandapoutingmouth HeiswearinganorangeT shirt Hedoesn tlookveryhappy 41 BasicIdeas Adescriptiveessayuseswordpicturestore createaperson place thing event orfeelinginthemindofthereader Adescriptiveessaycreatesamainimpression anoveralleffect feeling orimage aboutthetopic Themainimpressionisoftenthemainideaofthedescriptiveessay 42 Adescriptiveessayusesspecificexamplestosupportthemainimpression Adescriptiveessaysupportsthoseexampleswithdetailsthatappealtothefivephysicalsenses sight hearing smell tasteandtouch Adescriptiveessaybringsaperson place thing event orfeelingtolifeforthereader 43 WritingTips Lookforkindsofdescriptivedetails Noticeappearance walk voice andmannerindescribingpeople observeoutstandingfeaturesofaplacethatcontributedtothemainimpression payattentiontotheorderinwhichthepartsofanincidenttakeplace 44 Useyoursensesindescribing Indescription supportconsistsofspecificdetailsthatappealtooneormoreofthefivesenses sight hearing smell taste andtouch Yourdescriptionshouldshowyourreaderswhatyoumean notjusttellthem 45 Beconcretandspecificindescribing Theworngreenchairfitmybodyexactly Theturquoiselakeshimmeredinthemorningsunlight Thecreamywhitegardeniasgaveoffaheavyperfume Thewindhowledaroundthecornerofthehouse Theoldconcreteparkbenchesscrapedtheskinoffmylegs 46 Selectdescriptivewordsandusingfigurativelanguangeindescription Youcanmakeyourwritingvividbychoosingverbs adjectives andadverbscarefully Anotherwaytomakeyourwritingclearandvividistousefigurativelanguage 47 Usuallyusetimeorderorspaceorderindescribing Somecommontimetransitionsandspacetransitionsarelistedbelow 48 Commontimetransitionsaftereventuallymeanwhilesoonasfinallynextthenatlastfirstnowtodaybeforelastsecondwhenduringlatersincewhile 49 Commonspacetransitionsabovebelowneartotherightacrossbesidenexttotothesideatthebottombeyondoppositeunderatthetopfarther furtheroverwherebehindinsidetotheleft 50 Practice1 Directions Readthefollowingdescriptionsandtellwhichsensorydetailsareusedineachdescription 51 A Itwasamagnificentday renderedverymildbytheautumnsun Wesatinfrontofthehouseinthelittlepeasantgraden underanolivetreeladenwithfruit Betweenthesilveryleavestheseawouldbeseengleaminginthedistance perfectlycalmandstill Vaporouscloudswerecontinuallypassinginfrontofthesun makingtheearthappearnowsad nowgay asifitwerebreathing 52 B JohnBegbiewasasoft fat baldmanonwhom despitehisbulk clothesalwayshungorlaytooloosely Histrousersweretoowideattheankles hisjackettoolonginthesleeves wheneverhecould heunbuttonedhiscollarandpulleddownhistiesothattheknothungseveralinchesbelowhisneck Thenheblewouthischeekswithrelief Helooked lollingback likeanill wrappedparcelwhichsomeonehaddumpedunceremoniouslyinachairandwasunlikelysoontocallforagain Protrudingfromthesewrappingwasaroundfacewithapairofblueeyes surprisedandinjuredinexpression andasmall poutingmouth 53 C Theairwasheavywithodorsnotonlyoffoodonplatesbuttheactofcookingitself alongwiththemetallicsmellofheatedironfromthehard workingSmokeEater andthewholestoveofferedusitsyetunbeatenprospectsofmoregooseanduntouchedpies Toseeagibletgravymadeandpouredintoagravyboat whichhadpaintedonitssideswinterscenesofboysslidinganddeerboundingoversnow isthesurestwaytoovereatitsswimmingrichness 54 D Highaboveusinthedarknessasolitarymockerpouredhisrepertoireinblissfulunawarenessofwhosetreehesatin plungingfromtheshrillkee keeofthesunflowerbirdtotheirasciblequackofabluejay tothesadlamentofPoorWill PoorWill PoorWill 55 Directions Readthestatementsbelowandwriteatleastthreedetailsyoumightusetosupportthemainimpression Practice2 56 Evenatnight NewYorkCityechoeswithnoise Example A peopleonthestreetB soundsofmusicfromclubsC carhorns 57 Beijingisfarmorethanjustapoliticalcapital A B C A economicheartofthenationB culturalheartofthenationC diplomaticheartofthenation 58 2 Thedormitaryisamess A B C A bookscoveredthedeskB untidyblanketC shoeshereandthere 59 3 Wequicklyspruceduptheapartmentbeforeourguestarrived A B C A hidtoysandnewspapersinspareclosetB vacuumedpethairsoffsofaC sprayedairfresheneraroundlivingroom 60 4 HuangshanMountain swondersarethemasterpieceofnaturewhichattractthetouriststolingeron A B C A beautifulpinetreesB jaggedrocksinstrangeshapesC bubblinghotspringsandrapidlychangingclouds 61 5 TheElvisimpersonatorlookedlikeElvis stwin A B C A look alikesB soundalikesC combination 62 Directions Readthefollowingtwoparagraphs Thefirstusesvague generallanguage thesecondusesspecificdetailsthatmakeitsmeaningsharperandclearer Noticethedifferencesandfillinthefollowingtable Thefirsthasbeeddoneforyou Practice3 63 Theislandprisoniscoveredwithflowersnow Alargesignthatisvisiblefromalongwayoffwarnsvisitorsaway Butsincetheearly1960s whentheytookthelastprisonerstootherinstitutions thesignhasreallyservednopurpose fortheprisonhasbeenabondoned Theplaceisnotunpleasant infact onemightenjoytheromanceandsolitudeoutthere General Specific AlcartazIslandiscoveredwithflowersnow orangeandyellownasturtiums geranimus sweetgrass blueiris blace eyedSusans Candytuftspringsupthroughthecrackedconcreteintheexerciseyard Iceplantcarpetstherustingcatwalks WARNING KEEPOFF U S PROPERTY thesignstillreads bigandyellowandvisibleforperhapsaquarterofamile butsinceMarch21 1963 thedaytheytookthelastthirtyorsomenofftheisland thewarninghasbeenonlyproforma servingnorealpurpose Itisnotanunpleasantplacetobe outthereonAlcatrazwithonlytheflowersandthewindandthebellbuoymoaningandthetidesurgingthroughtheGoldenGate 64 Directions Readthetwoversionsoftheparagraphandanswerthequestionsthatfollow Practice4 65 Thisproposalwouldhaveanimmediateimpactontheconditionofourcities Forthehomelessadirty litter strewncornerwouldbereplacedbyacleanlivingenvironment Tourismwouldbecomemoreattractivetoout of towers forthementallyillwouldbeoffthestreets Publictransportationwouldflourishasbus train andsubwaystationswouldbedevoidofrantingvagabonds Housesofworshipwouldseeanincreaseinmembership forthe street cornerpreacher wouldbeunavailable Crimewoulddecrease forpolicecouldconcentrateonseriousoffendersasopposedtoactingasstreetsweepersofthehomeless RoughDraft 66 Thisproposalwouldhaveanimmediateimpactonthehomeless manyofwhomareafflictedwithmentaldisorders Forthem afilthy litter strewnstreetcornerwouldbereplacedbyasterileenvironmentinaresearchhospital shelteredfromrains sleetandsnow fromtheheatofsummerandthebitingwindsofwinter Ofcourse theirabsencewouldimproveourcities landscapesaswell Tourismwouldincreasedramatically forthementallyill manyofwhomwalkaroundencrustedwithfilthandreekingoftheirownexcrement wouldbeoffthestreets Publictransportationwouldflourishasbus train andsubwaystationswouldbedevoidofrantingvegabonds Housesofworshipwouldseeanincreaseinmembership for street cornerpreachers wouldbehauledofftohospitalswhere whileundergoingextensiveneurologicalobservations theycouldshoutthatthe worldiscomingtoanend totheirheart scontent Crimewoulddecrease forpolicewouldconcentrateonseriousoffendersasopposedtoactingasstreetsweepersofthehomeless ofbeggars andofvagrantsshoutingobscenitiestopassersbyormumblingincoherentlytothemselvesastheylayindarkanddirtydoorways FinalDraft 67 1 Didthewriterchangethemainpointinthefinaldraft 2 Whatdidthewriteraddinthefinaldraft 3 Whydidthewriteraddthoseparts Questions 68 Directions Readthefollowingpassageanddotheexercisesthatfollow Practice5 69 MemoryLane ThispassageiswrittenbyastudentatColumbusStatenamedDeborahMcGonigle 70 Findexamplesofeffectiveeffectivenarrationanddescriptionintheessay Theauthorusesvivid sensorywordstodescribeherreturntoachildhoodplaceofrefuge Findexamplesforeachofthefivesensesthatareparticularlyeffectiveatprovidingvividimagesforthereader Astheauthorlefttheplaceofherchildhoodhome shewritesthatsheis surprisedtofeelatearslowlycoursedownmycheek Whatemotionsdoyouthinkshewasfeeling Whatwordsanddescriptionsgiveyouthatimpression Questions 71 III ReadingforWriting WritingTechniqueQuestions 72 MyGrandfather sPlace FromImp