【课件】基于衔接理论读后续写讲评课件-2023届高三英语二轮复习

ContinuousWriting基于“衔接理论”的读后续写讲评课

Itwasanunusuallyhotday.Extremelytiredafterfootballpractice,IheadedtothebusstoptowaitforBus112whichwouldtakemehome.IwasbeginningtoslowlyandgentlyfallasleepwhenIsawthebusarriving.ThesunwasinmyeyesandthatwasprobablythereasonwhyIgotontoBus113.Iwasgladtogetaseat.Withinminutes,Iwasslumpedagainstthewindow,fastasleep.WhenIopenedmyeyes,itwasdarkoutside.Iwastheonlypassengerleftonthebus.Icouldnotrecognizethepartoftownwewerepassingthrough.Ipressedthebellandthebusstopped.Iplannedtojumpacrosstheroadandcatchabusgoingintheoppositedirection.However,Ifoundmyselfonaquietstreetwitharowofshopsthatwereallclosed.Ibeatmyselfupfornotaskingthedriverfordirections.AsIwaswonderingwhattodo,amotorcyclecamedowntheroad.Theriderlookedatmeashepassedandthenstoppedashortdistanceaway.IwenttohimandaskedhimhowtogetbacktoTamanKlangUtama,Hesmiled,tappingthebackseatandsaidthathewouldsendmehome.Withoutasecondthought,Iclimbedupbehindtherider.HeturnedthemotorcyclearoundandheadedinthedirectionIwanted.Wetraveledforabout15minutesandthesurroundingsstilllookedunfamiliartome.TheridermadeafewturnsandIknewIwashopelesslylost.Iaskedhimwhereweweregoing.Hedidnotanswerbutincreasedhisspeed.Alarmbellsstartedtoringinmyhead.MainCharacters？Plot(Whathappened?)Emotionalchange?Iamantiredafterfootballpracticebegantofallasleepthesuninmyeyesgotonthewrongbusexhaustedrodepastme&stoppeddarkoutside&theonlypassengerpressedthebell&plannedonaquietstreet&allshopsclosedbeatmyselfupanxiousworriedself-condemnedperplexedwent&askedexpectantsmiled&tapped&saidgotonthemotorcycleexcitedunfamiliarsurroundingsaskedhopelessalarmedcarelessinnocentalertAsIwaswonderingwhattodo,amotorcyclecamedowntheroad.Theriderlookedatmeashepassedandthenstoppedashortdistanceaway.IwenttohimandaskedhimhowtogetbacktoTamanKlangUtama,Hesmiled,tappingthebackseatandsaidthathewouldsendmehome.Withoutasecondthought,Iclimbedupbehindtherider.HeturnedthemotorcyclearoundandheadedinthedirectionIwanted.Wetraveledforabout15minutesandthesurroundingsstilllookedunfamiliartome.TheridermadeafewturnsandIknewIwashopelesslylost.Iaskedhimwhereweweregoing.Hedidnotanswerbutincreasedhisspeed.Alarmbellsstartedtoringinmyhead.Paragraph1:Itappedthemanontheshoulderandtoldhimtostop.Paragraph2:Whenmyfamilylearnedwhathadhappened,theywerefrightened.humantraffickercriminalapersonwithpsychologicalillnessParagraph1:Itappedthemanontheshoulderandtoldhimtostop.Paragraph2:Whenmyfamilylearnedwhathadhappened,theywerefrightened.Whatwillhappennext?didn’tstopdidn’tsayanythingthreatenedme…hitthemanjumpedoffthemotorcyclemetsomeoneelseapolicecarpassedby…terrifiedscaredfrightenedsaved&anarrowescape&reunitedwithhisfamilyIfledaway;gotcaughtThemanrelievedItwasanunusuallyhotday.Extremelytiredafterfootballpractice,IheadedtothebusstoptowaitforBus112whichwouldtakemehome.IwasbeginningtoslowlyandgentlyfallasleepwhenIsawthebusarriving.ThesunwasinmyeyesandthatwasprobablythereasonwhyIgotontoBus113.Iwasgladtogetaseat.Withinminutes,Iwasslumpedagainstthewindow,fastasleep.WhenIopenedmyeyes,itwasdarkoutside.Iwastheonlypassengerleftonthebus.Icouldnotrecognizethepartoftownwewerepassingthrough.Ipressedthebellandthebusstopped.Iplannedtojumpacrosstheroadandcatchabusgoingintheoppositedirection.However,Ifoundmyselfonaquietstreetwitharowofshopsthatwereallclosed.Ibeatmyselfupfornotaskingthedriverfordirections.AsIwaswonderingwhattodo,amotorcyclecamedowntheroad.Theriderlookedatmeashepassedandthenstoppedashortdistanceaway.IwenttohimandaskedhimhowtogetbacktoTamanKlangUtama,Hesmiled,tappingthebackseatandsaidthathewouldsendmehome.Withoutasecondthought,Iclimbedupbehindtherider.HeturnedthemotorcyclearoundandheadedinthedirectionIwanted.Wetraveledforabout15minutesandthesurroundingsstilllookedunfamiliartome.TheridermadeafewturnsandIknewIwashopelesslylost.Iaskedhimwhereweweregoing.Hedidnotanswerbutincreasedhisspeed.Alarmbellsstartedtoringinmyhead.cohesioncoherentcohesion1.Grammaticalcohesivedevices语法衔接手段2.Lexicalcohesivedevices词汇衔接手段1）Reference照应3）Conjunction连接

2）Ellipsis省略

1）Co-occurrence同现2）Repetition复现1.Grammaticalcohesivedevices语法衔接手段1）Reference照应3）Conjunction连接

2）Ellipsis省略

ThesunwasinmyeyesandthatwasprobablythereasonwhyIgotontotheBus113.Withoutasecondthought,Iclimbedupbehindtherider.HeturnedthemotorcyclearoundandheadedinthedirectionIwanted.AsIwaswonderingwhattodo,amotorcyclecamedowntheroad.Theriderlookedatmeashepassedandthenstoppedashortdistanceaway.WhenIopenedmyeyes,itwasdarkoutside.Iplannedtojumpacrosstheroadandcatchabusgoingintheoppositedirection.However,Ifoundmyselfonaquietstreetwitharowofshopsthatwereallclosed.Withoutasecondthought,Iclimbedupbehindtherider.Iaskedhimwhereweweregoing.Hedidnotanswerbutincreasedhisspeed.memeConjunction(时间)Conjunction(推进)Paragraph1:Itappedthemanontheshoulderandtoldhimtostop.“Stop?Noworries,boy.Iwillsendyouhomeafteryourparentssendmoneytome!”Heexclaimed,laughingstrangely.ItsuddenlyoccurredtomethatIwastrapped.Iwasthrownintothedepthsofdespair,totallyatalossastohowtocopewiththedreadfulsituation.Ontheedgeofgivingup,Isawatinyspotinthedistance,andthespotgrewcloserandcloser.ThetruckofmyclassmateTom’sfather!Ijumpedwithmaximumeffortsontothetruck.Afterthetruckpulledaway,Tom’sfatherletmecallmyfamily.AndwhichItwasitEllipsis(省略主语)Conjunction(时间)Conjunction(时间)Conjunction(推进)Reference(照应)Reference(照应)Paragraph1:Itappedthemanontheshoulderandtoldhimtostop.Windroaringinmyearsaswellasmyheart,themanstillkeptsilentanddidnotslowdownhisspeed.Panicsetin.Asenseoffrightmingledwithregretcamedominatingme.SuddenlyIknewImustdosomething.Igrabbedmyfist,andhittheman’sheadwithallmymight.Suddenly,themotorcyclewasoutofcontrol,andbothofusfelltotheground.Fortunately,Ididn’tgetinjured.Withoutthinkingtwice,Iranawayasfastasmylegcouldcarryme.Luckyme!Apolicecarpassedatthismomentandtheysentmebackhomesafely.ButthemanstillkeptsilentConjunction(时间)Conjunction(增补)Conjunction(时间)Conjunction(增补)Conjunction(转折)Conjunction(增补)Conjunction(时间)Reference(照应)anddidnotslowdownhisspeed,whilethewindroaredinmyearsaswellasmyheart.AndAllatonceShowTimeParagraph2:Whenmyfamilylearnedwhathadhappened,theywerefrightened.Translatethefollowingsentencesandcombinethemintothesecondparagraph.1.看到我安然无恙，他们如释重负地松了口气，与此同时，不断上下打量我，确保我确实没受伤。（使用时间连词；使用“省略”）

SeeingthatIcamebackunscathed,theyheavedasighofrelief.Meanwhile,theykeptlookingmeoverupanddown,confirmingthatIwasnotevenhurtabit.2.这使我非常愧疚。我觉得如果我没上陌生人的摩托车的话，就不会遇到危险，父母也不会如此为我担心。（使用“照应”里的指示代词this）

Thismademetremendouslyguilty.HadInotgotonastranger’smotorcycle,Iwouldnothaveencounteredsuchgreatdangerandmyparentswouldnothavefeltsoanxiousaboutme.Conjunction(时间)theytheyEllipsis(省略主语)Ellipsis(省略主语)3.我想起了救我的警察。于是，我走到他们跟前，向他们深深鞠了一躬，并且感谢他们的及时出现。(使用因果连词、人称代词、省略)Ithoughtofthepolicemenwhohadsavedme.SoIwalkedtothem，boweddeeply,andthankedthemforshowingupjustintime.tothemConjunction(因果)Reference(照应)Reference(照应)Ellipsis(省略宾语)4.这时电视里传来一个惊人的消息——一个骑摩托车的罪犯被警察逮捕了。在那刻我才知道原来他是一个人贩子啊！(使用时间连词)ThencametheastonishingnewsreportedonTVthatacriminaldrivingamotorcyclehadbeenarrestedbythepolice!ItwasatthatmomentthatIknewthe