读后续写个人成长类+放下手机享受假期+讲义 高三英语二轮复习

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Kathy’sfamilyvacationtothebeachwasusuallythehighlightofhersummer.Thisyear,however,herparentsannouncedanewrule:nophonesfortheentireweek.

“Butmyfriendswillbeexpectingupdatesaboutthetrip,”Kathycomplained.Kathy’smomgaveheraseriouslook.Unwillingly,Kathyhandedherphoneoverandhermomlockeditaway.

Thedrivetothebeachhousetookmostoftheday.Astheyturnedoffthehighwayontocountrybackroads,thecloudsdarkened.Rainstartedtopour.“Evenmorebeautifulintherain,”hermothersaid.“Whatdoyouthink,Kathy?”Kathyglaredathermom.“Beautiful,”shemuttered.

Thatnightafterdinner,Kathywanderedintothekitchen,whereherfatherwaswashingdishes.Shegaveherfatheralovinglookandsaidinhersweetestvoice,“Couldn’tIhavemyphoneback,justforonesecond?JustsoIcantelleveryonewhatanamazingtimeI’mhaving?”

“Can’t,”hesaid.“It’snothere.Remember?”Kathywasveryannoyed.Havingnothingbettertodo,sheexaminedthedustybookcaseinthelivingroom.Thebookslookedasdullastheweather.Onthetopshelf,however,shespottedapuzzle.Shetookit,emptiedthepiecesonthetable,andbegantosortthem.

Afterwhatseemedlikeafewminutes,shelookedup.Itwaspastteno'clock.Shehadbeenworkingforalmosttwohours!Sheyawned.Thepuzzlewaslessthanhalfdone,butshewasexhausted.So,shewenttobed.注意：1.

所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph1:

Afteraquickbreakfast,Kathyheadedtothebeach.

Paragraph2:

Appreciatingthefinishedpuzzle,sherealizedshehadn’tthoughtofhercellphoneforhours.

原文大意：

暑期Kathy和父母同往年一样去沙滩度假，今年假期不同是，父母要求期间不能使用手机。Kathy非常不乐意，向父母乞求要回手机一小会，因为她习惯了向朋友们“炫耀”假期的点滴。遭到拒绝之后的Kathy觉得无所事事，来到房间，在书架上找到了一个puzzle游戏玩了起来，不知不觉玩了近两个小时，疲惫不堪上床睡觉，剩下未完成的puzzle.第二天，早餐过后，Kathy来到沙滩。。。分析：

这篇续写的框架还是比较简单的。根据第一段的首句Afteraquickbreakfast,Kathyheadedtothebeach.可知，接下来写沙滩上Kathy的所见所做所感，也就是景色描写、动作描写和情感描写。再看第二段给的首句Appreciatingthefinishedpuzzle,sherealizedshehadn’tthoughtofhercellphoneforhours.中的“

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finishedpuzzle”,倒推出第一段最后应以Kathy回房间完成puzzle结尾。所以，我写的第一段情节就是：Kathy看到沙滩美景，忍不住想第一时间分享，遭到父母拒绝给还手机后，失落的回房间玩puzzle。第二段后面就续写Kathy意识到专注一件事情，用心感受假期也很快乐，最后升华主题：放下手机，享受假期。

我认为这篇续写的难点在于要自编很多细节和情节，尤其在写第二段时候，感觉两句话就能突出主题然后结尾了，却要编出一个段落。

基于以上分析，下水文是这样写的：Paragraph1:Afteraquickbreakfast,Kathyheadedtothebeach.HoppingonthesoftsandKathywassooverwhelmedbytheblondebeachthatshecouldn'twaittoshareitwithherfriends,“CouldIusemyphoneplease?shebegged.“Sorry,sweetheart.Nophonesfortheweek.Disappointed,Kathycroucheddown,graspingahandfulofsandandcastingitfaraway.Herparentssuggested,“Howaboutplayingvolleyball?”Kathyshookherheaddownheartedly.“Imightaswellgoback”Onherarrivalatherroom,shenoticedthehalf-donepuzzleandwentontosolveit.Paragraph2:Appreciatingthefinishedpuzzle,sherealizedshehadn'tthoughtofhercellphoneforhours.Actually,itwasthefirsttimethatshehadbeenabsorbedinworkingoutapuzzleforhoursandneverhadshefeltsoconcentratedandrelieved.Backwardthebeach,sheheardblissfullaughterlingeraroundandjoinedherparentswithnodelaywherethefamilyplayedmerrilytogether.“Whatgreatfunitistospendourholidaywithoutphones!”Kathygrinnedatherparents.Sherealizedthatwithoutphonesoccupyingherattention,shecouldobtainevenmorepleasure.附：参考范文

Afteraquickbreakfast,Kathyheadedtothebeach.

UndernocircumstanceshadKathyexpectedthescenerytobesospectacular!Withtheseawindblowingagainstherface,Kathytotallylostherselfinthestunningviews.Afterhalfanhour’sleisurewalkalongthebeach,Kathyreturnedtothehouse.“HowdoIspendtherestoftheday?”Kathymurmuredtoherself.Suddenly,theunfinishedpuzzlecaughtherattention.Shefeltalittleexcitedandburiedherselfinitonceagain.Everytimetheshapesmet,Kathywasoverwhelmedwithhappiness.Soon,allthatwereleftwereafewgaps.Shequicklyputtheremainingpiecesintoplace.Thepuzzlewascompleted!

Appreciatingthefinishedpuzzle,sherealizedshehadn’tthoughtofhercellphoneforhours.

Tryingtopreservetheimageinhermind,shequietlystartedtakingitapartratherthantakingpicturestoupdateaboutthetrip.That,shethought,wasjustforme.Withoutthedistractionsfromhercellphone,shefoundherselfengagedinstorysharingsessionwithmomanddaddywillingly.Theyspentahigh-qualityfamilytimetogether.Onarrivinghome,momgavehercellphoneback.Thistime,however,shehadnointentiontosharebuttokeepallthegreatmemoriesinhermind.反思一：学生的续写

学生这次的续写失误主要在于对主题的把握不准，很多学生把主题定位成了“戒掉手机瘾”，导致第一段就写Kathy无心欣赏沙滩美景，一心想完成puzzle,事后反应过来原来自己不玩手机也可以；甚至还有学生写Kathy在房间找到了手机，却忍住了不玩；或者找到了相机，用相机拍照分享；我认为这些情节的添加是没有必要，甚至偏离了。

文中第二段和第四段反复交代清楚了Kathy是喜欢把自己经历通过手机分享朋友圈的小年轻，生活中很多这样的年轻人往往因此活在虚拟美好中，而没能用心慢慢感受生活的美，所以续写主题应该是：放下手机，享受假期，美好的经历不必急于拍照分享出去，用心感受了就可以