2024年T8第二次联考英语读后续写试题范文解析（An Uneventful Day）

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Whenwewerefinallydismissedfromthelastclassoftheday,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassrooms.Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool,IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday,Ithought.littledidlknowthatthedaywouldtakeaturnfortheworse.Theliftlobby(电柳闻)ofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls,whichwerepaintedwhite,hadbeendirtiedovermanycars.Ireachedmyflat'slobby,andpressedtheliftbuttonandwentin.Justthen,MrsLim,myelderlyneighbour,hobbled(蹦跚)in.Shelookedancientwithtissuepaperwhitehair,wearingafadedold-fashioneddress.Iheldtheliftdooropen,flashingafriendlysmile,andpolitelygreetedher.Iaskedherhowshefeltthatdayandpressedthebuttons.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite,thenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.Theliftfelldownincreasinglyfast.Therewereloudclankingsoundshereandtherewhiletheliftgrewslowerandslower.Myheartbeathardandfastasmyhandsturnedcoldandwetwithsweat.Unfortunately,theliftcametoanabruptstopatthefifthfloor.1pressedthebuttonshardseveraltimes,butitwasofnohelp,Thelightsonthebuttonshadgoneout,Itsoondawnedonmethatweweretrapped,Anicyfearcreptupmyspine.MrsLimwashysterical(歇斯底里).“Wewillnevergetout!"shecriedwithherfacepale.Ithadbecomeacolourlessmask,Ihadnotimetolose.Ipressedthebellintheliftimmediately.Thesoundwassurelydeafening,butwhatotherchoicedidIhave?MrsLimburstintotears.Itriedmyverybesttocomforther,tellingherthateverythingwouldbeallrightandthatweneededtofindouthowtogetoutsafely,MrsLimbeganhavingtroublebreathing,andIimmediatelyhelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.Paragraph

1:

Several

minutespassed,butnohelpcame....

Paragraph2:

Bang!

MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefighters

ontheothersideofthelift....

写作思路：Para.1：尝试主动自救利用环境道具（buttons,lights,emergencyphone,etc.）自救无果，陷入绝望继续安慰MrsLim过渡到第二段Para.2:

消防人员救援过程利用可能的道具（rope,toolkit,etc.）得救后的反应

事后的感悟

，结尾升华，首尾呼应下水文续写第一段：Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.

Despitemymountingfear,I

gatheredmycomposure

and

hadashotat

theemergencyphone,prayingsomeonewouldpickup.Unfortunately,aftermyseveralattemptstherecamenothingbutdeadsilence

ontheotherendoftheline.Justthen,itwasgettinghotand

stuffy.MrsLimwasseizedbyawaveofpanicattack,

stumblingandmumbling.Igaveheragentlepatonthebackand

signaledhertoleanagainstthecorner.Bearingalastglimmerofhope,Istartedbangingonthedoorand

screamedmylungsout.(94词)【词句点拨】Notes1.

gathermycomposure:保持冷静2.

haveashotat:

尝试去做某事（通常表示成功的可能性不是很高）3.

ontheotherendoftheline:

(idiom)

在电话的另一头

评析：这属于"习语"(idiom)的范畴。我之前在公众号的文章中说过，在读续中适当运用习语，可以增加文章的地道程度。正所谓：Ifyoucanpulloffsomeidiomsinyourstory-telling,yourwritingwillsoundmoreidiomatic!

4.

stuffy

adj.

闷热的5.

stumblingandmumbling:一边踉跄，一边喃喃自语评析：伴随状语，此处突出MrsLim内心的恐慌，呼应句中的"awaveofpanicattack”6.

signaledhertoleanagainstthecorner:

示意她倚靠着角落评析：signal(to)sb.todosth.是一个译林版高中英语教材必修三U2Reading课文关于地震灾害中出现过的动词短语，课文中是“Shesignalledtoherstudentstoexittheclassroominanorderlylinecoveringtheirheads”。对于读续来说，这真是一个万金油动作(suchahandyexpression)。同时，也再次告诉我们，新版教材是一座宝藏。此外，对于官方参考范文在续写第一段中完全没有提到MrsLim，我认为这是有所欠缺的，应该要延续前文中“我”的沉着冷静、助人为乐的人物设定。7.

alastglimmerofhope:最后一点希望8.

screamedmylungsout:

放声大叫

评析：有点类似于中文中的“叫破喉咙”，属于夸张手法。但是各种语言当中，有自己约定俗成的修辞，如果学生直译“叫破喉咙”，当然就是Chinglish.我们平时可以通过阅读和完形，有意识积累一些英文当中的修辞表达。续写第二段：Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.

Theknightsinshiningarmor

cametoourrescue!Thesecondtheycrackedopenthedoor,Ifelt

amassiveweightoffmyshoulder.Oneofthembravely

sliddowntolendusahand,whiletherestwerereadytopullusoutwithropes.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforewe

wereliftedoutofthepredicament.MrsLim,tearsalloverherface,keptthankingmeandthefirefighters.Truthtobetold,

Ihadneverfeltsoalive!ItdawnedonmethatIshouldnever

takemyblesseduneventfullifeforgranted,andImust

cherish

whatIhavewithagratefulheart.(107词)【词句点拨】

Notes9.

aknight

inshiningarmor:

(idiom)一个在危急时刻出现拯救你的英勇人物剑桥字典释义：someonewho

saves

youfroma

difficult

or

dangerous

situation评析：knight指骑士，armor指盔甲。外媒例句："Youcan'tbesittingaroundwaitingfor

aknightinshiningarmor

inatradetorescueyourteam,"saidcatcherMikePiazza.（2000/07/21,NewYorkTimes）10.

amassiveweightoffmyshoulder

:(idiom)如释重负11.

slidedown

:滑下来12.

wereliftedoutofthepredicament:

被解救出困境评析：predicamentn.困境，近义词有dilemma。如果觉得这两个词太难，也可以换成thedangeroussituation.当然，我的英文写作观是“ThebestEnglishisconciseEnglish".

在信息量等同的情况下，词句越简洁越好。我记得有位书评人夸奖菲茨杰拉德的《了不起的盖茨比》，说把这本书倒过来，再抖一抖，掉不出一个多余的单词和标点。我一直认为，不论中文还是英文，写作精进的过程应该是先越写越长，然后再越写越短。13.

Ihadneverfeltsoalive：我从未感到过自己的生命力如此旺盛评析：这句话虽然是我写的，我也觉得不好翻译成中文。英文意思大概是：Itistypicallyusedtoexpressastrongfeelingoremotionthatthespeakerhasneverexperiencedbefore,usuallyamessageofinnerstrength.

14.

takemyblesseduneventfullifeforgranted:把我被保佑的平淡无奇的人生当作理所应当评析：这里是呼应故事第一段中的“我”的想法"Yetanotheruneventfulday".平淡是福。在历险脱困后，我开始懂得惜福，构成故事的闭环。参考范文：Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Theair-conditioninghaddiedout,andtheliftbecamereallystuffy.Weweresweatingbuckets.Wetriedtoringtheemergencyalarmagain.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful.“Help!!!”Iscreamedatthetopofmylungs,tryingtogetsomeone'sattention,Awaveofdespairwashedoverme,Ifeltlikewewouldnevermakeit.Inonelasteffort,ltriedbangingonthedoors.Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor,Helpwasfinallyhere!Thebravefirefightershitthedoorsopenusingtheirtools.Itfeltlikeahundredpoundweightwasliftedoffme,andMrsLimthankedtheheavensthatsomeonehadcometoourrescue.Imadeasighofreliefwhenthedoorswerefinallyopenedandallthisdramawasover.ThefirefighterspraisedmeforhelpingMrsLim.IreturnedtheirpraisewithgratitudeandMrsLimthankedmeandevengavemeahug.默写版：Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.___________________________空调坏了，电梯变得很闷.Weweresweatingbuckets.Wetriedtoringtheemergencyalarmagain.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful.“Help!!!”____________________________________________我声嘶力竭地尖叫，