读后续写狗的故事课件高三英语一轮复习

2023

读后续写讲评—ADog’sStory人与动物篇的续写文章主题人与动物故事一般围绕两方面展开：具体如下：1.旅途偶遇危险凶猛动物本着保护且不能伤害野生动物，遭遇时可设法驱赶，或择机躲避，确保双方安全无恙。最终大多依靠外援救助成功脱困。2.旅途遭遇无危险动物或是救助小动物这些动物的出现只是给旅途增添一点乐趣和曲折，体验一次难忘惊险或救助的经历。如rabbit,sheep,cow等。

3.家养动物的趣事囧事或是相互治愈dog，cat，duck等和人类交往中产生情感依赖，互相陪伴，安慰或治愈(healalonelysoul)，共同度过艰难黑暗时期(getusthroughgloomydays)。1.人与动物和谐相处，相亲相助2.人与动物发生冲突，成功脱险

Para1:HeknewverywellwhatImeant.Para2:Whenwewentbackhome,Stickeenwasachangeddog.读后续写做题思路：剧情主线&特写镜头关键在于设计情节！Step.1慢看首句，抓重点(特写镜头)Step.2慢看文章，找考点(剧情主线)Step.3快看文章，找燃料(特写镜头)冲突尝试解决问题解决，美好结局反应转折理清文章Storyline故事线明线：情节发展暗线：情感变化IC.文本解读

1.IhadanindependentandcleverdognamedStickeen.Heenjoyedthedeliciousfoodthatmyfamilypreparecforhimeveryday.Heoftenranoutofmysightwhenwalkingwithme.2.Earlyonemorning,Iwenttoexploreanearbyglacier(冰川).

Stickeenfollowedmeandtogetherwewentupon

登上了theglacier.

Later,

Idiscoveredthatweweretrappedbetweentwoverydeepcracks(裂缝)intheglacier.Theonlywayacrossitwasaverythinicethatconnectedthecracks,Imadeapath开辟了一条道路across

the“bridge”andgotto

theotherside.

Butmydogwasafraidtohaveatryandbegantocry.Aftertakinganothercarefullookatthe

largecracks,heranawayhopelessly

绝望地逃跑tofindsomeothercrossings.Bythetimehegotback,hewasconfusedofcourse.

首段是整篇文章的眼，也是续写部分的提示。后文需要呼应。第二段描述了故事矛盾的开始—遇到了困难(被困在冰川的两条很深的裂缝之间)。反应：

人--madeapath,gottotheotherside

狗--...afraidtohaveatryandbegantocryPara2:Whenwewentbackhome,Stickeenwasachangeddog.Thedog’sfeature:*anindependentandcleverdog

*Heoftenranoutofmysight

看不见

whenwalkingwithme.第三段描述了故事矛盾的展开—Thedog：scream,liebackhopelessly,liebackhopelessly人：反复鼓励和唤醒Para1:HeknewverywellwhatImeant.根据首句来构想情节：

根据首句来构想情节Para1:HeknewverywellwhatImeant.Para2:Whenwewentbackhome,Stickeenwasachangeddog.Para1Para2狗：作出反应，尝试着迈出第一步，最终gotto

theotherside人：依旧是唤醒和鼓励，除了”说什么”,还有“做什么”狗：Changed—从文中找伏笔人：与dog和谐相处，有了更深一步的感情；通过语言和动作表现出来ExpressionsPara1

动作描写(thedog)Hecrouched蹲,俯身downontheedge(蹲在悬崖边上),pressinghisbodyagainsttheice.（press...against...把...压/贴在...上）leaptothesafeplace跳到安全的地方动作描写(thedog)stretchedoutmyarm伸出手臂语言描写:scream尖叫;shout;“Welldone!Welldone!”Para2AChangedDog对Para1文本进行改编...动作描写(可爱的狗狗)liebymyside(lay)leaptoitsfeet跳起来(leaped\leapt)puttheearsup把耳朵竖起来(put)wagthetail摇尾巴

(wagged)shakethewholebody抖动全身(shook)rest(使)...倚靠hisheadonmykneewithalookofdevotion(greatlove挚爱)Expressions冲突尝试解决问题解决，美好结局反应转折理清文章Storyline故事线明线：情节发展暗线：情感变化

Possibleversion:

HeknewverywellwhatImeant.

反应

Atlast,withthecourageofdespair,hecroucheddownontheedge,pressinghisbodyagainsttheiceasifcountingone-two-three.尝试解决

ImmediatelyIstretchedoutmyarm,hesucceededinleapingtothesafeplacewithtwosteps,oneonthe“bridge”,theotheroneonmyarm.“Welldone!Welldone!”Icried,tryingtocatchhim.Heranaroundmescreamingandshoutingasifsaying,“Saved!Saved!Saved!转折，与下文衔接FirstparagraphPara1:HeknewverywellwhatImeant.P