高一下学期英语一段式续写训练Tony篮球梦课件

写作训练5Tony篮球梦AmeliaAspecialbasketballplayer...TyroneBogues(蒂尼·博格斯)Aspecialbasketballplayer...TyroneBoguestheshortestNBAplayerReadingforinformationReadthestory.FindandUnderlinetheanswerstothefollowingquestions.2.HowtallwasheHowtallwashisfavouriteplayer1.Whowashisfavouriteplayer4.Whatkindofplayerwasheontheteam5.HowwashetreatedbythecoachTyroneBogueslikeaweakplayerboth1.6metresareplacementplayer3.Whatteamwasheonthelions___________isthepersonwhotrainstheplayers.___________isthepersonwhoreplacestheplayers.___________istheplacewhereplayersdosports.___________isalongseatwhereplayerscansit.AcoachAreplacementAcourtAbenchBackgroundinformationReading①TonyandIwereinourschoolbasketballteam,theLions.WelovedbasketballandwerebothhugefansoftheNBA.Whenweweren’tplayingonthecourt,wewerewatchingagameonTV.MyfavouriteplayerwasLeBronJameswhileTony’swasTyroneBogues.②Bogueswasonly1.6metrestall,whichmadehimtheshortestplayereverintheNBA.GuesswhatTonywasonly1.6metrestall,too!Tonyknewthatbeingshorterthanotherplayersmeantthathehadtopractisemore.Duringallthosehoursofdoingjumpshotsonhisown,heusedBoguesashisinspiration.Tonyoncesaid,“IfBoguescouldmakeit,whynotme”Tonywas

shortinheight,buthestillpracticedmoretotrainhisskills.Reading③Butourcoachwasnotsosure.Tonyhadtotryoutmanytimesjustformakingtheteam.Hewasstillusuallyonthebench(场边休息区),beingjustareplacement.EveryoneknewTonyhadrealskills,andwassomeonewhoworkedreallyhardandhadastrongdesiretoplayfortheteam.However,Tonydidn’tgetachance.④Thisweek,theLionswereplayingwithourmaincompetitors,theBears,ateamwhoserecordthisseasonhadbeenperfect.Theyhadn’tlostasinglegame.⑤Thelastquarterbegan,andmyteamwasbehindby10points.Suddenly,aplayerandIcrashedintoeachother.Painracedthroughmybody.Mykneehurtbadly.“Idon’tthinkIcanplayanymore,coach,”Isaidquietlyasthedoctorputanicepackonmyknee.⑥“Noway,”thecoachrepliedsharply.“We’vegotnomoreplayers!”OurcoachconsideredTonyasaweakplayer,soTonyfailedtomaketheteammanytimes,buthenevergaveup.Inthelastquarterofthegame,myteamwasbehindby10points,andIcouldn’tplayanymoreduetomykneepain.Thecoachthoughtwe’dgotnomoreplayers.Acompetitive/powerfulcompetitorWouldTonyfinallygethischance“WhataboutTony”someonesuggested.衘接过渡衘接总结/升华教练对此提议的反应？Tony会有什么反应？最终教练是否同意Tony上场？Tony上场后表现如何？比赛结束，结果如何？队友和教练的反应？Tony表现出色的原因？1承上：教练犹豫，Tony自荐，教练同意Tony上场。2总结：Tony带领全队赢得比赛，成功入队。DrafttheMainPoints①教练犹豫，Tony向教练自荐，保证不会让教练失望。（动作）②教练终于同意，Tony上场。（动作）③Tony表现出色，全场欢呼。（动作）④赢得比赛，队友喜悦激动。（动作+情感）⑤教练惊讶，邀请Tony入队。（动作+情感）⑥（升华）Tony的努力和坚持为他赢得了展示实力的机会。（动作）DrawaDraftWhenhesawthecoachhesitated,Tonyhimselfaskedthecoachtoofferhimachance,promisingthathewouldn'tletthecoachdown.①教练犹豫，Tony向教练自荐，保证不会让教练失望。（动作）②教练终于同意，Tony上场。（动作）Finally,thecoachagreedtoletTonytohaveatry.Tonywentontothecourtwithconfidence.DrawaDraft③Tony表现出色，全场欢呼。（动作）SoexcellentwasTonythathemadeshotaftershot,withtheaudiencekeepingclappingandcheering.④赢得比赛，队友喜悦激动。（动作+情感）Whenthegameended,ourteamhadwonbytwoscoresunexpectedly.Filledwithjoy,weliftedTonyup.DrawaDraft⑤教练惊讶，邀请Tony入队。（动作+情感）AmazedatTony'swonderfulperformance,thecoachhitTonyontheshoulderandinvitedhimtojointheteam.⑥（升华）Tony的努力和坚持为他赢得了展示实力的机会。（动作）JustlikeBogues,Tony'shardworkearnedhimtheopportunitytoshowhisstrength.Version评分细则（15分）考虑三个方面：续写内容的合理性、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽程度；所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性和丰富性；上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。语言表达包括：语言准确性：句式、时态和词汇；语言丰富性：句式多样，恰当运用复合句、非谓语和特殊句型等；运用合适的词汇进行心理、动作和环境等细节描写；不鼓励为了追求所谓的高级词汇、短语或句式，套用背诵积累的“高大上”的语言，导致语义、语境和逻辑的混乱；语言逻辑性：段间、句间逻辑衔接自然、紧密。评分细则（15分）⭐Attention!词数过多（以超出框为准）或过少(少于80词）都酌情扣1-2分；书写较差以致影响交际的，将分数降低一个档次；单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受评分细则（15分）档次描述13-15分能创造丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解；自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。10-12分能创造比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高；使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解；比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。7-9分有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整，与原文情境相关；表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但基本不影响理