【读后续写】2021年11月绍兴市一模读后续写讲评：姐妹情深 名师教学设计-宣晔霏

教学设计宣晔霏文本分析：本文为典型的记叙文，围绕5岁的露露和17岁的“我”展开。文章前三段介绍了我和露露的典型的自相矛盾的性格：倔强，脾气暴躁，但同时又不记仇，热心肠。文章第四、五段描写了我和露露之间的一次face-off，我想教露露弹钢琴，但露露坚决不按照我的要求弹奏，进而哭闹喊叫，而且也因此暴怒，将露露拖到门口，外面天气寒冷……学情分析：本课授课对象为高三学生，已经具备文本分析和解读的能力，同时对于读后续写技能也已经非常熟悉。但对于矛盾冲突写作方法依然比较陌生。教学过程：Step1:pre-readingTask1:thinkaboutthedefinitionofconflictsandwhatconflictsthereareinourlives.tobedifferent,opposed,orcontradictory:tofailtobeinagreementoraccordtask2:whatarethemainconflictsinastory?人物与人物环境与环境人物与环境性格与情感Step2:while-readingTask1:readthetitle“abittersweetface-off”andfindouttheconflictinthetitile.Task2:readthroughthewholepassageandfindoutthestructure.Part1(para.1-3):introductiontothesistersPart2(para.4-5):descriptionoftheface-offTask3:readandfindoutourpersonalities.Wildside:hot-temperedstubborntougheasytoflyintoangerMildside:fastforgivingneverharbouragrudgehonestwarm-heartedconflict1:personality-to-personalityTask4:what’sLulu’sappearance?Externalside:Withherbrowncurls,roundeyes,andChinadollface,Luluwasdesperatelycute.anangelInternalside:ademonawildhorseConflict2:appearance-to-personalityconflictTask5:readpart2andfindoutwhatIdidandhowdidLulureact.Conflict3:Character-to-characterconflictTask6:whatwastheweatherlike?Freezingcold.Whatwasmyreaction?DeterminationWhatwasLulu’sreaction?StubbornnessConflict4:environment-to-characterTask7:didIcareaboutLulu?Excitedaboutworkingtogether—withherbrowncurls,roundeyes,andChinadollface,Luluwasdesperatelycute–Iputheronthepianobench,ontopofsomecomfortablepillows.Conflict5:emotion-to-emotionTask8:whatmightbethetheme?Luluisawildone,butIloveherandwillalwaysloveherasanangel!Bloodisthickerthanwater!Conflictsexisteverywherebutloveconquerseverything!Step3:post-readingTask:trytowriteconflictsbyyourselves.Paragraph1:ButIwasdeterminedtoteachthelittlewildonealesson._______________________________▲___________________________________________Paragraph2:Lulu’steethwereclickingrepeatedlytogetherbecauseofcold,butsheshookherheadagain.________________________▲_____________________________________________Sample:Personality-to-personalityconflict(”I”)勃然大怒，言行激烈Holdinghercollar,Iclenchedmyfistandthreatenedhertostopcrying,“Iwillthrowyououtofhouseifyoudon’tlistentome”.Idraggedthelittlewildoutofthebackdoor,slammingthedoorfuriouslybehindher.(Lulu)桀骜不驯，无动于衷Insteadofbeingobedient,Lulushookherheadfiercelyandsteppedoutside,ignoringthechillywind.Task:Chooseoneortwoconflicts,discusswithyourpartnersandcontinuewritingthestory.Appearance-to-personalityconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Character-to-characterconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Environment-to-emotionconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Emotion-to-emotionconflict:AssignmentApply“conflicts”toyourpreviouswritingandpolishit.Appreciatethepossibleversionandfindouttheconflicts.ButIwasdeterminedtoteachthelittlewildonealesson.“Youcan‘tstayinthehouseifyoudon’tlistentome,”Isaidsternly严厉地.Insteadofbeingobedient,Lulusteppedoutside,facingmeinachallengingway.Adulldreadbeganseepingthroughmybody-thelittleonewaswearingonlyhersweaterandtights."Okay,you'vedecidedtobehave,"Isaidquickly.“Comeinnow.“However,Lulushookherheadwithastubbornlookinhereyes."Don'tbesilly,Lulu."Iwaspanicking."It’sfreezing.You'regoingtogetsick.Comeinnow.“Lulu‘steethwereclickingrepeatedlytogetherbecauseofcold,butsheshookherheadagain.ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatIhadunderestimatedLulu.Shewouldratherfreezetodeaththangivein.Mymindracing,Ichangedtactics战术immediately,beggingandbribing诱哄Lulutocom