Unit3+Fascinating+Parks+读后续写高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit3FascinatingParks人教版2019选择性必修第一册读后续写读话题写作文高二上Module3LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123技法点拨

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写作实践

技

法

点

拨：

使续写更加形象生动01情节线：

遭遇危险（恶劣环境&危险描写&情感描写）—出现转机（想到办法&呼救求助）—-救援脱险（救援描述&情感描写）—-感悟升华（历险者&救援者）情感线：

焦急紧张/恐惧无助—筋疲力尽--欣喜/欣慰（relieved）—感动&感谢Tip1:户外游园或探险情节Tip2:户外游玩写作步骤背景Step1Step2Step3出游背景：期待已久、想通过此行放松、矫正成员的某些行为开始时的兴奋或不情愿，过程中惊喜发现（视觉、听觉‘嗅觉、触觉和味觉等方面）；旅途辛苦或者是因天气等原因陷入困境，通过贵人相助或自身克服；主题升华：人与自然的和谐相处，或大自然可以治愈一切，或坚持和希望的重要性。1.Theicywind

was

howling,stingingmyface.寒风呼啸，我的脸如针刺。（狂风&寒冷）2.Aflashof

lightning

litup

thewhole

sky,followedby

a

crashofthunder.一道闪电照亮天空，接着一声巨雷。（雷电）3.Bothofthem

were

coughing

andtheireyes

were

stinging

from

thesmoke,she

clungto

him,

terrified

bythe

leaping

flames.他们两个都在咳嗽，烟熏得他们眼睛疼，她紧紧抓住他，被熊熊的火焰吓坏了。（火灾：危险描述）4.Suddenly,he

was

stuckin

themudandcouldn'tget

out.

He

struggled

hard

but

he

wasstill

trapped.He

screamed

forhelp,but

allinvain.突然，他陷到淤泥里出不来了。他拼命挣扎，但还是被困住了。他大声呼救，但都是徒劳。（落水）5.I

wasseized/overcomeby

astrongsenseof

horror.I

trembled

alloverand

mypalms

were

sweating.我害怕极了，浑身发抖，手心都出汗了。（恐惧）6.Afloodof

tension

overwhelmed/swallowed/floodedover/welledupin

me,

shecouldfeelherheart

racing/

pounding/

beating

wildly.她紧张极了，觉得心跳加速。（紧张焦虑）7.Exhaustedandhungry

as

wewere,

wedidn'tstop.

Grittingourteeth,wekept

swimming.尽管我们又累又饿，我们没有停下来，咬紧牙关继续游。（筋疲力尽）补充：遭遇危险句式1.They

wavedtheflag

and

screamedforhelp.他们挥舞旗帜，大声呼救。2.Suddenly,it

occurredtousthat

wecouldkeeptothetracktoguideusback.突然想到我们可以沿着这条路回去。3.In

sheerdesperation,

Ifinally

caughtsightof

someboats

withlifeguardsonthem

heading

towards

us

inthedistance.在极度的绝望中，我终于看到远处有几艘载有救生员的船朝我们驶来。4.Tohergreatjoy,

thehelicopter

didn't

missus

thistimeand

it

landed

nearthe

bigrock

slowly.令她十分欣喜的是，直升机这次没有错过我们，它缓缓地降落在大石头附近。补充：出现转机句式1.Exhausted

as

we

were,wedidn’tstop.

Gritting

our

teeth,wekeptdiggingthetrench.我们一点一点的把雪挖出来，在经历了似乎一个世纪之后（夸张手法），我们终于成功了。2.Nosooner

hadwearrivedwherethechild

wastrapped

than

the

manstartedto

scanthesurroundings.Thenhe

inchedtoward

theholeand

stretchedouttoseize

thechild'shands,

pullinghimout

without

reserve.我们一到孩子被困的地方，那个男人就开始观察周国的环境，然后慢慢向洞口走去，仲手抓住孩子的手，把他完全拉了出来。(动作链）3.

To

my

delight,wemanagedtodigoutthetrenchandtookthesehorsesdownthemountain

with

the

help

of

others.

令我欣喜的是，在大家的帮助下，我们成功挖好了沟槽，马儿被带到山下。4.I

breathed

a

sigh

of

relief,

throwing

my

arms

around

himand

huggedhimtightly.

我如释重负的松了口气，伸出双臂紧紧地保住了他。(动作双连）5.If

I

hadn’tbeen

giventhefirstaid,

Iwouldhave

beendead.”Isaidtoeveryone

gratefully.”

itis

you

who

came

to

my

aid

andsavedmylife.“如果没有得到大家的帮助，我的马儿已经死了。”我感激地对大家说。“是你们来帮助我们，救了我们一命。”(

ifIhadn'tdonesth,Iwould...虚拟语气）补充：救援脱险句式1.Cold

as

the

weather

was（as表示尽管，形容词提前倒装）,greatwarmthfilledmyheart

like

never

before.

天气虽然很冷，但是我的心里却感受到前所未有的温暖。2.Only

then

did（倒装）

I

realize

that

it

was

unity

that

（强调句）can

conquer

whatever

difficulty

you

meet./cameintheway.

直到那时，我才意识到团结可以战胜任何困难。3.Itis

this

uniqueexperience

that(itis...that强调句）mademe

understand

whateverdifficulties

we

arefacedwith,aslongaswe

worktogether/stayunited,wecanconquerit.

正是这种独特的经历，让我明白，无论我们面临什么困难，主要团结一致，就能战胜它。4.Iwouldneverforgetthegoodfeelingof

helpingsomeone

inneed.

我永远忘不了那种帮助需要帮助的人的好感觉。5.Itoccurredtomethat

helpingotherswaspriceless

andeveryone

shouldbealifeguard.我突然想到，帮助别人是无价的，每个人都应该是一个救生员。补充：主题升华句式佳

句

仿

写：

跟着课文学佳句02细节描写1.她记下他的地址，谢了他，开车走了。Shewrotedownhisaddress,thankedhimanddroveaway.3.尽管一整天的观光充满汗水和辛苦，但美丽的风景使一切都值得。Eventhoughthelongdayofsightseeingwasfullofsweatandhardworkthebeautifulscenerymadeitallworthwhile.2.即使天空中繁星闪烁，也难以分辨此时是黎明还是黄昏。Eventhough/ifthestarsaretwinklinginthesky,itisdifficulttotellwhetheritisdawnordusk.原：Iftodayisanythinglikeyesterday,itwillbefullofsweatandhardworkasIhikeoverthisdifficultlandtomydestinationontheothersideofthevalley.原：Ileavemytentandwalkovertothemountainedge.原：Eventhoughthesunisbrightlyshining,tellingwhetheritismorningornightisimpossible.细节描写4.希望我们能创造一个更加环保的旅游业，造福人类和地球。It’shopedthatwecancreateamoreenvironmentallyfriendly

tourismindustrythatbenefitsbothpeopleandtheplanet.6.亲近大自然有利于我们的身心健康。Gettingclosetonatureisofgreatbenefittoourmentalandphysicalhealth.5.我们在沙滩上玩得很开心，捡了许多贝壳。Wehadfuninthebeach,pickingupdozensofshell.原：Beinginsuchabeautifulandwildplacemakesmefeelblessedtobealive.原：It'shopedthattheSarckNationalParkwillalwaysremainasitis,naturalandbeautiful.原：HereIam.aloneunderthisbroadsky.breathingthefreshair.andenjoyingthisgreatadventure.细节描写7.北极熊向我们逼近，把我们吓得一动也不敢动。(2020浙江卷读后续写情感描写)Thepolarbearapproachedus,makingusfreeze,tooscaredtomoveaninch.原：Around9,000yearsago,thisicemelted,leavingbehindabout100glaciers.03写作实践:

触类旁通阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Thisfallbreak,ItookmysonNels,aged15,forourlong-plannedvacationinanationalpark.Wehadarentedcottageatthefootofthemountainbyalake.AndmynieceSusan,aged12,alsojoinedus.Onthefirstday,abundantitemskepteveryoneoccupied:picnicking,canoeing,shooting.Whennightfell,wesataroundthecampfiresinginganddancingwithothervacationers,allhavingagreatday.Nevertheless,onthesecondday,InoticedSusanconstantlycheckingherscreen,busilytexting.Thatday,shestayedindoorsgluedtoherphone,playingAxeClimber.Then,Ihadanidea,announcing,"Tomorrow,we'llhiketothetopoftheStoneMountains.“Hearingthis,Susanshrugged,asiftosay,"Why?"EyesfixedonSusan,Icontinued,"Putyourphoneasideandclimbarealmountain,OK?“"Well,"Susanrespondedreluctantly,"theAxeClimberismovinguptothefinallevel,soI'llnotbeavailabletomorrow.”"Susan,that'snottheactualwildernessexperience.Ihikedalot.It'sgreaterfun,"Nelssaidpersuasively."Soundsmorelikepunishment,"shemumbled."Ihatesweating.""Neverhaveyoubeenonamountaintop.Susanhaveagothistime,andyouaresuretolovethefeelingandpleasureitbrings."Shefinallynoddedunwillingly,"Fine,I'llgiveitatry."Ismiled.Anyway,sheagreed.Thenextmorning,weawakenedtothesoundofbirdssinging.Itwasanicedaywiththesunshiningmildlyandcloudsfloatingleisurely."Aperfectdayforhiking,"Isaid."Iwillgo,Uncle,"Susanrepliedmechanically.Packingbread,bottledwaterandcameraintothebackpack,wesetoutforourdestination.Againstthebluesky,aroughtrailwounditswaytothetopofthemountain."Istilldon'tthinkit'sagoodidea,"Susancomplained,frowning."Nopains,nogains!Comeon!"Iencouraged.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:

Thus,Susanbeganhikingup.

_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:

Anhourlater,wemadeittothetop."Howawesome!"Susanyelledwithwildjoy.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析在秋季假期，“我”带着15岁的儿子Nels前往国家公园度假。12岁的侄女Susan也加入了我们。在假期的第三天,我们徒步前往石山的山顶。虽然这个过程非常辛苦，但是当我们最终登上山顶时，我们被迷人的风光所震撼。此时，我们感到所有的辛苦都是值得的。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要素内容whenThisfallbreakwhereInanationalpark;arentedcottageatthefootofthemountainbyalake;StoneMountainswhoI,Nels(myson),Susan(myniece)what带着儿子和侄女去国家公园度假，进行了各种活动，如野炊、划独木舟、射击等，但第二天，侄女Susan却不愿意同行了，一直看手机，经过劝说后，她同意爬山。how通过描述人物的行为、对话和心理活动，展现了主人公和Susan之间的互动和心理变化，以及他们如何达成共识一起爬山的过程。22第二步：构建情节What’sthegenreofthepassage?Narration（记叙文）Argumentation（议论文）Exposition（说明文）Readforthegenre

1.两段首句定第一段根据第一段首句“Thus，Susanbeganhikingup（于是,Susan开始往上爬），”可知：第一段可描写他们登山的经过和艰辛、所见、所感、所悟以及Susan的感受。续写线索：Susan开始爬山不情愿——气喘吁吁汗直冒(sweating)——Susan牢骚满腹步履缓(complainedbreathlessly)——又渴又累满头汗(thirsty,sweatyandexhausted)——Susan落后想放弃(fallingfurtherandfurtherbehind)—-鼓励加油又助威(“Holdon!We‘realmosttothetop!”“Susan,you’rearealclimber!”)—坚持到底继续爬(tookeverystepwithgreateffort,progressingslowlybutfirmly)。2.二段首句定第二段根据第二段首句“Anhourlater，wemadeittothetop（一个小时后，我们到达了山顶).”可知，第二段可描写他们登上山顶后看到的景色以及感受。续写线索：登上山顶心欢喜(yelledwithwildjoy)——美景一片收眼底，视听感觉齐上阵(Fallingleaves,red,yellowandorange,dancedgracefullyintheair)——大功告成回报到(worthallthepains)思路点拨

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwonthefirstplace.Hearingthenews,Istoodthere,frozen.Icouldn'tbelievemyears.HadIheardright?Myclassmatesgavemealookofdisbeliefatfirst,andthencheeredandclappedhappily.WhenIcametomysenses,tearsofexcitementcametomyeyes.Attheawardpresentation,Iacceptedtheawardcertificate,extremelynervousandexcited.Atthatmoment,Icouldn’thelpthinkingofmyteacher.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.WhenIpresentedtheawardcertificatetomyteacher,hiseyesglisteningwithtears,hereachedouthishandsandhuggedmetightly.Iexpressedmysincerestgratitudetotheteacherandattributedthissmallachievementtohim.Lookingintomyeyes,hesaid,“I'msoproudofyou.It'syourownhardworkthatpaidoff.Believeinyourselfandyoucanwritebetterandbetter.”Inoddeddeterminedly.ThatwaswhenIfellinlovewithwriting.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Kevinwoketotheblaringbeepofhisalarmclock."Can'twaitforthatcampingtrip,"Kevinthought,filledwithexcitement.Ashewasleavinghome,hisdadgrabbedhimbythehandandsaid,"Beforeyougo,justtellmethedirectionsonwhereyouandyourfriendsaregoingtostay.""Butdad!"Kevincomplained."Nobuts!"Kevin'sdadadded."Fine."Kevintoldhimthedirectionsandleft.Thethreefriends,Kevin,JayandNathan,hadbeenplanningthisadventureforweeks,packingtheirstuff-tents,snacks,andamap-preparingfora3-dayoutdoorexploration.ExcitementranthroughKevinastheydepartedfortheircampsite."Thistripisgoingtobeawesome,"Nathanexcitedlyyelledastheysetoff.Butlittledidtheyknowthatnaturehadasurpriseinstoreforthem.Thefirstdayatthecampsitewasgoinggreat,settinguptents,collectingfirewood,andsharingstories."Man,wenailedthesetents,"Kevinsaid."Iknowitwaseasyreally,"Nathanreplied.Thefriendswerehappy.Yettowardsnight,asthedarkcloudsgatheredoverhead,theatmosphereshifted,andasuddenstormeruptedwithunforgivinganger.Rainpoureddownfromtheheavenslikearelentlesswaterfall,transformingthepeaceful