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五步实战法ContinuationWriting01读后续写的评分标准02读后续写的五步实战法03读后续写之读什么?04读后续写之写什么?0506读后续写之怎么写?读后续写的高频句式ContinuationWritingContent评分标准1.本题总分为25分,按五个档次进行评分。2.评分时,应从内容、词汇、语法和语篇结构三个方面考虑,具体为:

(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。

(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性,恰当性和多样性。

(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。4.评分时还应注意:(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分。(2)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分。(3)单词拼写和标点符号视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。评分标准情节语言衔接

1.不符合基本要求

词数少于120;两段的词数比例不均衡;随意分段;时态错误;抄袭原文等。

2.内容不合逻辑

缺乏合理的想象;续写部分与给定材料之间的逻辑不连贯,或者续写两段内容之间的逻辑以及续写内容与所给段落开头语的逻辑脱节。

3.语言不够丰富恰当

语法结构和词汇使用不够丰富或准确;刻意追求使用生僻词汇和复杂句式,忽略了与原文语言风格的一致性。

4.脑洞开太大

想象不够合理,导致续写部分与原文情节脱节;立意不高;价值观存在争议,影响文章的整体质量。失分原因评分标准

一般来说,高考读后续写内容在续写内容情节的构思上难度不大,大部分考生都能比较合理地续写故事。从阅卷情况来看,写得好的考生主要表现为续写内容符合逻辑和常理,与所给的段首句衔接自然,篇章连贯,内容丰富,充分运用了动作、心理、环境等描写手法;语言功底扎实,词法句法丰富,能恰当使用高级词汇和高级句型,包括一些特殊句型,时态人称都能准确把握。在平时练习中,考生可以比照下面这个评分标准来对写作进行自检:20分(内容顺,细节比较多,有些许错误);18分(内容顺,细节较少,语言有些错误);13分(内容可读,语言错误较多);8分(内容不够完整,错误较多)。五步实战法读全文,抓主线Step1.标记关键词:圈出文中出现的人物、地点和重要事件。梳理情节:用简单的句子概括原文的起因、经过和结果。把握情感基调:注意文中人物的情绪变化,为后续的情感描写做铺垫。核心要点:快速通读原文,理解故事的背景、情节和人物关系。例如:➡️如果原文是一个关于友情的故事,标记出主要人物(如Alice和Bob)、关键事件(如Bob生病)和情感基调(如Alice的担忧)。五步实战法找线索,挖伏笔Step2.关注未解决的情节:文中是否有未完成的任务或未解决的冲突?寻找情感暗示:人物的情绪是否暗示了后续的发展?留意细节描写:文中是否有看似无关紧要的细节,可能成为续写的关键?核心要点:在原文中寻找线索和伏笔,为续写提供方向。例如:➡️如果原文中提到Bob的房间里有一张未寄出的明信片,这可能是一个伏笔,暗示Bob有未了的心愿。五步实战法巧构思,定情节Step3.设计合理的情节:续写部分要自然衔接原文,情节合理且有起伏。设置冲突或转折:增加故事的趣味性和悬念,避免平铺直叙。明确情感走向:人物的情感如何发展?是和解、成长还是新的冲突?核心要点:根据原文和伏笔,构思续写的大致情节和情感走向。例如:➡️Alice决定帮助Bob完成心愿,但过程中遇到了困难,最终通过努力解决了问题,两人的情感也得到了升华。五步实战法定锚点,搭框架Step4.选择情节锚点:确定续写中的几个关键情节,确保故事有层次感。规划段落结构:每个段落围绕一个核心内容展开,逻辑清晰。过渡自然:确保续写部分与原文过渡自然,衔接紧密。核心要点:确定续写中的关键节点(如情节转折),搭建文章框架。例如:➡️开头:Alice发现Bob的心愿(明信片)。过程:Alice试图完成心愿,但遇到困难。结尾:Alice克服困难,Bob的心愿得以实现,两人的情感升华。五步实战法精打磨,润色文Step5.丰富词汇和句式:使用高级词汇和多样化的句式,提升文章档次。增加情感细节:通过人物的心理、表情动作等描写,增强故事的感染力。检查语法和逻辑:确保文章语法正确,逻辑连贯。核心要点:对续写内容进行润色,提升语言表达和情感细节。例如:➡️Alice的脸上露出一丝微笑,她轻轻地握住Bob的手,轻声说道:“我会帮你完成这个心愿。”(细节描写)在一个小镇上,住着一位名叫Tom的男孩。他一直梦想成为一名音乐家,但他的父亲却希望他继承家族生意。一天,Tom收到了一所音乐学院的录取通知书……读全文,抓主线:找线索,挖伏笔:巧构思,定情节:定锚点,搭框架:精打磨,润色文:Tom收到音乐学院的录取通知书,内心充满激动和恐惧。他热爱音乐,但父亲希望他继承家族生意。这是一个关于梦想与责任的冲突。原文中提到Tom对音乐的热爱和父亲的期望,暗示了父子之间的矛盾和Tom的内心挣扎。续写中,Tom需要在梦想和家庭责任之间做出选择,而父亲的态度将成为关键转折点。第一段的核心是Tom的内心挣扎,以及父亲意外发现录取通知书的时刻。增加情感细节和心理描写,让情节更加生动。Paragraph1Tomstaredattheacceptanceletter,hisheartpoundingwithexcitementandfear.Hehadalwaysbeenpassionateaboutmusic,buthisfatherhadalwaysinsistedthathetakeoverthefamilybusiness.Theletterfeltlikealifeline,butheknewhisfatherwouldneverunderstand.Justashewasabouttomakeadecision,hisfatherwalkedinandsawtheletter.Tom'sheartsank.Hebracedhimselffortheinevitableargument,butinstead,hisfather'sfacesoftenedwithamixtureofsurpriseandcuriosity.在一个小镇上,住着一位名叫Tom的男孩。他一直梦想成为一名音乐家,但他的父亲却希望他继承家族生意。一天,Tom收到了一所音乐学院的录取通知书……读全文,抓主线:找线索,挖伏笔:巧构思,定情节:定锚点,搭框架:精打磨,润色文:父亲读了录取通知书后,父子之间的关系和情感成为续写的核心。父亲的表情从惊讶到柔和,暗示他可能理解Tom的梦想。续写中,父亲的支持将成为情节的转折点,Tom的情感也会从紧张转向感激。第二段的核心是父亲的支持和Tom的情感释放,以及父子关系的和解。增加对话和情感细节,让情节更加感人。Paragraph2Hisfatherreadtheletterinsilence,hisexpressionunreadable.Finally,helookedatTomandsaid,“Thisisyourdream.Ifyoureallywantit,I’llsupportyou.”Tomfeltawaveofgratitudewashoverhim.Hehuggedhisfathertightly,realizingthatsometimes,dreamsandfamilycangohandinhand.“Thankyou,Dad,”Tomwhispered,tearsofreliefinhiseyes.Hisfatherpattedhimontheback,araresmilespreadingacrosshisface.“Justpromisemeyou’llgiveityourall,”hesaid.Tomnodded,feelinganewfoundsenseofdeterminationandlove.读后续写之读什么?beginningdevelopmentclimaxendingturningpointfallingactionReadforplot读后续写之读什么?Readforcharactersnegativepositiveconfusedanxioustakeitseriouslyunhappynotdiscouragedworriedhappyoptimistic读后续写之读什么?(1)边读边想象场景,在大脑屮勾勒出画面,为下一步的情景创设做好铺垫。(自我代入,做个”戏精”)(2)边读边用中文把主要情节写下来。特别注意明线(情节发展)和暗线(情绪变化),总结人物性格。(3)主要情节即“记叙文六要素”:人物、时间、地点、起因、经过、结果(谁在什么时间、什么地方,因为什么、做了什么、最终怎样。)读之三步骤读后续写之读什么?1.首句定位法

给定续写段的首句往往暗示情节方向,需分析其与原文的逻辑衔接:

时间/空间线索:如Asnightfell...,需描写夜晚相关事件。

情感转折:如Tearsblurredhereyes...,需解释哭泣原因及后果。2.双线交织原则

情节线(外部事件)

+情感线(内心变化)需同步推进:

例:主角“寻找出路(情节)”的同时“回忆父亲的鼓励(情感升华)”。3.避免逻辑硬伤

禁止引入超现实元素(如突然出现魔法)、违背前文人设的行为。ReadforplotWhat'sBernard'sfamilycondition?HowdidMeredith'sfamilyhelphim?

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish.”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.I'lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”WhatReadforplot

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish.”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.I'lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”WritingmaterialsWhat'sBernard'sfamilycondition?HowdidMeredith'sfamilyhelphim?WhatReadforplotStoryWhenWhereWhoWhat

Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredith'shomekindandthoughtful/Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor/earnsomemoney;sprangtohisfeetandcried/jumpedupallattention/Astheeconomy……What'sBernard'sfamilycondition?Howdidtheyhelphim?writingmaterialsReadforcharacters

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish.”kindthoughtfulkind,caring,active,enthusiastic,intelligentMrs.MeredithJohn,Harry,Clara.Readforcharacters

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish.”WritingmaterialsReadforcharacters

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.……warm-hearted,united,caringVillagersReadforcharacters

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.……Writingmaterials读后续写之读什么?Usefulexpressions:kindandthoughtful/earnsomemoneyVividdescription:sprangtohisfeet(一跃而起)andcried/jumpedupallattentionUsefulsentences:♦Meredithspentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.♦Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,couldnotgoouttowork♦Astheeconomywasindecline,……Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.♦“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.

WritingMaterials——原文中的写作素材

读后续写之写什么?利用“两段首句定一框,二框二首正能量”确定续写方向:①两段首句定一框:根据第一段首句关键信息与第二段首句关键信息确定续写部分第一段的续写框架,同时注意情节发展合情合理;②二框二首正能量:根据第二段首句关键信息推测第二段情节和情感发展,并结合正能量结尾的续写原则确定第二段的续写框架。读后续写之写什么?读后续写之写什么?

Focusontwogivensentences

Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.TheysucceedinmakingpopcornTheyputtheirgoodideaintopracticeBernardsoldpopcornDidheearnmoney?Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.巧用原文,构造情节--BrainstormingWritingmaterials(原文素材)Usefulexpressions:

kindandthoughtful/earnsomemoneyearnsomemoneyVividdescription:sprangtohisfeet(一跃而起)andcried/jumpedupallattentionUsefulsentences:♦Meredith

spentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.♦Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,couldnotgoouttowork♦Astheeconomywasindecline,……Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.♦“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,and

Bernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.

Plotanalysis

Plotanalysis读后续写之写什么?Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.SomedetailedinformationofMrs.Meredith

Herreaction衔接首句主人公——WellbegunishalfdonePara.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Writeandpolishpara1

♦Mrs.Meredith'sreaction?♦WhatdidMeredith'schildrendonext?

♦Bernard'sreaction?

Tip:UseadvancedsentencepatternsTip:Adddetaileddescription♦Theresult——successful♦Allthingsready——theirreaction♦Howtotomakeeverthingready?Usefulexpressions:kindandthoughtful/earnsomemoneyVividdescription:sprangtohisfeet(一跃而起)andcried/jumpedupallattentionUsefulsentences:♦“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.Writingmaterials(原文素材)Usedetaileddescription&advancedsentencesExcitement1.Hisfacelitupwithexcitement.2.Huggingthegifttoherchest,shelookedupexcitedlyandhereyeswelledupwithtears.3.Unabletocontainherexcitement,shejumpedwithjoy.4.Whensheheardthenews,herheartpoundedwithexcitement.5.Lookingatthebeautifulsight,Momcouldhardlyconcealherexcitement.Happiness1.Relieffilledhisheart,withabrightsmilespreadingacrosshisface.

2.Norahwassohappythatshealmostjumpedupandtearsfilledhereyes.3.WhenSantawalkedintotheroom,mydaughterclappedandjumpedupanddown.

4.Jennifer’ssleepyeyesopenedwideandherfaceworeasmilethatbrightenedupthewholeroom.Standup—ReadSitdown—Polish读后续写之写什么?WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.“Whatawonderfulplan!Iwillgiveyouahand.”shesaid,with

herfacelightingup.

SoontheyhurriedtoseeBernardandtoldhimtheirplanexcitedly.

Hearingthat,Bernardjumpedwildlyintoairwithhishandswaving.Thenthefourkidstookout

thebigboxofcornsentbyUncleJohn.Motherwasresponsibleformakingpaperbags.JohnandBernard

wereoccupiedin

poppingthecornwhileHarryandClara

putitinto

thepaperbags.Everyonewasdevotedtotheirjob.Seeing

allpaperbags

filledwithdeliciouspopcorn,theywipedthesweatonthefacewithabrightsmilespreadingacrosstheirface.细节描写&高级句型原文素材改编复现读后续写之写什么?Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.衔接首句主人公Writingmaterials(原文素材)Usefulexpressions:

earnsomemoney/kindandthoughtfulkindandthoughtfulVividdescription:sprangtohisfeet(一跃而起)andcried/jumpedupallattentionUsefulsentences:♦Meredith

spentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.♦Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,couldnotgoouttowork♦Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.♦“……Bernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.♦Howdidhesellpopcorn?♦Didheearnmoney?♦Whatabouthisfather?♦WhenMrsMeredithcameto

visitthemagain,whathappened?

读后续写之写什么?Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

Hevisitedtheneighborsfromdoortodoortosellhispopcorn.Inspiteofstrugglingtomakeendsmeet,peopleinthesmallcommunitywerewillingtodoeverythingintheirpowertohelpBernard.

Owingtocountlesshelpinghands,thelittleboygradually

earnsomemoney.Asaresult,hisdadwhowassickinbedreceivedtimelymedicaltreatment.Thepoorfamilywasbrightenedupdaybyday.When

Mrs.Meredith

cametovisitthemagain,Bernardhuggedhertightlywithtearsstreamingdownhisface.Together,littlelovecanmakeadifference.细节描写&高级句型原文素材改编复现读后续写之怎么写?02Then,Adid...01B’sresponse假设提示句是:Adidsth.Explanation03Cause-effect04Bdidsth/felt...inresponsetoA’sbehavior.(针对A的行为,B做什么或B什么感受?)Then,howdidAdoit?(即A如何做那件事?)Whatwassth?(具体解释提示句中的某一个关键词内容)basedonA’sbehavior:Why(didAdoit)?/What(istheresult)?(即因果推理,A为什么这样做?或者A这样做带来什么结果?)第一&二段开头→

回应段首句→

语义连贯读后续写之怎么写?1、重现改写原文关键

(尤其续写第1句)(句式:evenmore...;dosthagain...)2、评价(评价前动作/前情节)(句式:...,whichworked/whichmadesb.../whichturnedout)3、后悔感叹

(当初就../要是..就好了)(句式:虚拟语气,should/shouldn’thavedone;ifonly)4、动作链

(单动作,拆成多动作)(句式:动词排比/Doingsth,sbdosth./Havingdonesth,sbdosth.)5、角色分工

(同时空下,不同角色的行动)(句式:While/When/As...,sbdosth./Meanwhile,sbdosth.)读后续写之怎么写?writingmethod:triggers+detailsmagnifierdomino触发反应具体表现01B’sresponseExplanation0203Then,Adid...直接说间接说读后续写之怎么写?增加细节在已定框架范围内,依据情节发展和生活常识,推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所说、所思、所做,选择性地加入多角度的细节描写,给每段增加约5至8个具体细节。

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.

Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.

ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.P1:

Afewminuteslater,thebearheaded

backto

ourcamp.P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.原文找:5W1H2P+特点+描写占比读后续写之怎么写?真题运用:

[2020.07浙江卷]尾段:...Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.*尾段关键词:Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes;anangryroar;fierce;pushfence

(喷雾灼伤了熊的眼睛;

愤怒的咆哮;

凶猛;

推栅栏)*Paragraph1给定句:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.(几分钟后,熊回到了我们的营地)续写范文:Thenwerealizedthatthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuch

fiercerthistimeandviolently

pushedthefence

likemad.(红字:原文词/改写;绿字:改写润色)然后我们意识到,喷雾只会让他更加愤怒,因为这次他似乎更猛烈了,像疯了一样猛烈地推着栅栏。

原文尾段关键句+P1首句:组合改写读后续写之怎么写?同时空下,不同角色的行动常用句式:While/When/Assb1dosth,sb2dosth.

(当...时,某人做某事)

Meanwhile,/Inthemeantime,

sbdosth.(同时,某人做某事)

Atthat

criticalmoment,sbdosth.(在那关键时刻,某人做某事)真题运用:

[2020.07浙江卷]*P1段续写情节:熊洗完眼睛回来,我们害怕。*扩写构思:

我感到我的心跳加速,不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻,艾丽抓起几块大蒜面包,把它们扔到了栅栏上。Ifeltmyheartracingwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.读后续写之怎么写?N需求:脱险(对抗熊30分钟);拍照;熊:吃到食物

(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)D困难:熊凶猛、执着;武器只能用普通物品

(线索在:5w1H+角色特点)S方法:等直升机;Elli行动:喷雾+面包

(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)E结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照

(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)P1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.①

接着P1(心理/动作链)②

根据P2P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.⑥

接着P2(心理/动作链)⑦

结局

(需求解决)⑩

升华

(归类+总结共性)读后续写之怎么写?N需求:脱险(对抗熊30分钟);拍照;熊:吃到食物

(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)D困难:熊凶猛、执着;武器只能用普通物品

(线索在:5w1H+角色特点)S方法:等直升机;Elli行动:喷雾+面包

(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照

(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)P1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.①

接着P1(心理/动作链)②

根据P2P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.⑥

接着P2(心理/动作链)⑦

结局

(需求解决)⑩

升华

(归类+总结共性)熊更愤怒,我们意识到喷雾无用惊险时刻我们很开心,因为得救了熊冲破栅栏,吃到食物我拍照Elli行动:扔面包登机脱险读后续写之怎么写?N需求:脱险(对抗熊30分钟);拍照;熊:吃到食物

(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)D困难:熊凶猛、执着;武器只能用普通物品

(线索在:5w1H+角色特点)S方法:等直升机;Elli行动:喷雾+面包

(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照

(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)P1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.①

接着P1(心理/动作链)②

根据P2熊更愤怒,我们意识到喷雾无用惊险时刻Elli行动:扔面包(角色互动)熊跑去吃面包,但吃完折回我紧急拿到辣椒喷雾尝试击退它(惊险时刻)Unfortunately,熊更怒了,直接扑过来读后续写之怎么写?N需求:脱险(对抗熊30分钟);拍照;熊:吃到食物

(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)D困难:熊凶猛、执着;武器只能用普通物品

(线索在:5w1H+角色特点)S方法:等直升机;Elli行动:喷雾+面包

(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照

(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)P1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.①意识到喷雾无用,熊更凶狠②

我害怕,不知咋办③

Elli行动,扔面包

行动有用,熊跑去吃面包⑤

不幸运的是,熊吃完又折回P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.⑥

我们开心.因为得救了(心理+语言)⑦

登直升机脱险(动作+心理)⑧

熊冲破栅栏,

吃食物⑩

我拍照,俯瞰营地,发现惊人一幕心想“熊得逞了”Para1:

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Thenwerealizedthatthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolently

pushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn’tlongbeforeheateupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Para2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.“Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtospotthatthebearhadfinallytorndownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodwe

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