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第一节应用文（羽毛球社团招新倡议）你将参加校园演讲，“一分钟演讲”活动。请你针对学校羽毛球社团在招新及成员设定相关问题，不接收零基础新成员的做法写一篇演讲稿，内容包括：1.陈述看法；2.提出建议。注意：①写作词数应为80左右；②请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。参考范文一（92词）ShouldtheBadmintonClubSetEntryRequirements?Goodmorning,everyone.Campusclubsarealwayswarmplaceswhereweshareourpassionsandmakelike-mindedfriends.Whenitcomestothestrictentryrulesfornewmembers,I'mworriedtheywillgreatlyshrinktheclub'sscaleandmakeitlosevaluablefreshblood,whichisharmfultoitslong-termdevelopment.Theclubshouldlowerentrybarrierstowelcomemoreenthusiasts.Bylaunching"seniorleadsjunior"pairingprogramsandregularbasictrainingcamps,beginnerscangraduallyimprovetheirskills.Thisnotonlyhelpsnewmembersgrowquicklybutalsoexpandstheclub'scampusinfluence.参考范文二（91词）ShouldtheBadmintonClubSetEntryRequirements?Goodmorning,everyone.Thebadmintonclub'srecruitmenthassparkedheateddiscussionsamongstudentslately.Asasportsloverwhovaluesefficienttraining,Ithinksettingreasonableentryrequirementsisunderstandable.Itcanavoidtrainingprogressbeingdraggeddownbytoomanybeginners,helpingtheclubbuildahigh-levelcompetitiveteam.Tobalanceprofessionalismandpopularity,theclubcouldrunaweeklybadmintoninterestclassforbeginners.Afteraperiodofsystematicbasictraining,excellentstudentscanjointheofficialclub.Thisway,boththeclub'sdevelopmentandstudents'sportsinterestsarewellcaredfor.解析逻辑一、内容聚焦需包含对“不接收零基础新成员”的看法（反对/辩证看待）、具体改进建议（降低门槛、分层培养/基础培训），贴合校园社团招新实际，紧扣“包容新成员+助力社团发展”核心要求；二、结构清晰第一段：开篇问候+引出社团招新争议+明确观点；第二段：提出具体建议（分层培养/基础培训）+说明建议的积极意义；结尾致谢，逻辑层层递进，符合演讲稿的表达习惯；三、语言特点1.使用

“like-mindedfriends”“valuablefreshblood”“entrybarriers”等校园社团类高频词汇，贴合演讲场景；2.用“notonly...butalso...”“Tobalance...”等句式体现逻辑衔接，语气诚恳且具有说服力，符合演讲稿的情感与表达基调。核心词汇与句型核心词汇1.社团与招新类：campusclub（校园社团）；entryrequirements（入学要求）；recruitment（招新）；entrybarriers（入门门槛）；freshblood（新鲜血液）2.动作与策略类：launch（推出）；systematic（系统的）；expand（扩大）；influence（影响力）；balance（平衡）3.品质与状态类：reasonable（合理的）；professionalism（专业性）；popularity（普及性）高分句型1.Whenitcomestothestrictentryrulesfornewmembers,I'mworriedtheywillgreatlyshrinktheclub'sscale...（whenitcomesto引出话题，表“当谈到……时”，适用于演讲开篇引出观点）2.Thisnotonlyhelpsnewmembersgrowquicklybutalsoexpandstheclub'scampusinfluence.（notonly...butalso...并列结构，清晰体现建议的双重积极效果，增强表达逻辑性）3.Tobalanceprofessionalismandpopularity,theclubcouldrunaweeklybadmintoninterestclassforbeginners.（不定式作目的状语，明确提出建议的目的，使演讲内容更具针对性）第二节读后续写（铲雪兑现承诺）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。原文核心情节：Lucas和Noah铲雪，承诺为Mrs.Williams铲完车道，虽遇困难但坚持，最终完成任务获奖励。续写要求：①续写词数应为150左右；②请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。续写开头：Noah'sachinghandsseemedtoagreewithhisbrother'swords.Astheyclearedthefinalshovelofsnow,Mrs.Williams'carreturned.参考范文（162词）P1：Noah'sachinghandsseemedtoagreewithhisbrother'swords.Foramoment,hestoodfrozen,tornbetweenexhaustionandresponsibility.Walkingawaymeantwarmthandrest,yetMrs.Williams'trustingsmileappearedinhismind,remindinghimoftheconfidenceshehadplacedinthem.Heheldtheshoveltightly,bentdown,andcontinuedclearingthesnow.Lucaswatchedquietlyandsoonjoinedhimwithouthesitation.Sidebyside,theyworkedthroughthebittercold.Inthefadinglight,thedrivewaytookshapeundertheirsteadyeffort.P2:Astheyclearedthefinalshovelofsnow,Mrs.Williams'carreturned.Shelookedattheperfectlyshoveleddrivewaywithpleasantsurpriseandexpressedgenuineappreciation,sayingthatshehadknowntheywouldkeeptheirpromise.Aquietwarmthspreadinsidetheboys.Onthewayhome,Noahtouchedthetwenty-dollarbillinhispocket.Theirdreamoftheredbicyclefeltalittlecloser,yetherealizedthatwhattheyearnedthatdaywasfarmorevaluablethanmoney.Thelessonabouthonestywouldstaywiththemlongafterthesnowmelted.解析逻辑第一段：承接开头“Noah的手酸痛、兄弟的话”，1.先写Noah内心挣扎（疲惫vs责任），通过“heldtheshoveltightly”“bentdown”等动作细节体现坚持，2.再写Lucas加入，共同铲雪，呼应前文“承诺”，推动情节发展；第二段：1.承接开头“铲完最后一车雪”，写Mrs.Williams出现与感谢，通过“pleasantsurprise”“genuineappreciation”体现人物情感；2.再写兄弟俩的内心感悟，从“钱买自行车”升华到“诚实与承诺的价值”，3.结尾“Thelessonabouthonesty”呼应主题，完成情感与主题的双重升华，且与原文“二十美元、红色自行车”的伏笔形成闭环。语言特点：1.用“achinghands”“bittercold”“fadinglight”等环境与细节描写烘托氛围；2.用“tornbetween...and...”“remindhimof”等句式体现人物心理；3.通过“genuineappreciation”“quietwarmth”等词汇传递情感，符合青少年的视角与成长主题，语言细腻且富有感染力。核心词汇与句型核心词汇1.动作与状态类：ache（疼痛）；frozen（僵住的）；exhaustion（疲惫）；responsibility（责任）；steady（稳定的）2.情感与品质类：confidence（信任）；hesitation（犹豫）；appreciation（感激）；genuine（真诚的）；honesty（诚实）3.场景类：shovel（铲子）；driveway（车道）；bittercold（严寒）高分句型1.Hestoodfrozen,tornbetweenexhaustionandresponsibility.（过去分词作状语，“tornbetween...and...”表“在……与……之间纠结”，精准刻画Noah的心理矛盾）2.Shelookedattheperfectlyshoveleddrivewaywithpleasantsurpriseandexpressedgenuineappreciation...（with复合结