高中英语写作技巧点拨一

1、写作技巧点拨一,劝说性写作：给朋友的信 【题目要求】 假设你是李华，你的英国笔友Mike在给你的信中说，他想在暑假做兼职工作，但是他的父母不同意。请根据以下提示，给他写一封回信。,注意：1.词数：100词左右； 2可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。,Dear Mike， Glad to hear from you. _ I hope my suggestions can be helpful to you. Best wishes. Li Hua,一、构思谋篇,二、关键词语,三、连词成句 1你想在今年暑假做兼职工作，但是你的父母与你意见不一致。 You wa

2、nt to do a parttime job this summer vacation but your parents dont agree with you. 2他们可能认为对你来说学习是最重要的任务。 They may regard learning as the most important task for you.,3他们想让你充分利用这个假期学习。 Theyd like you to make good use of the vacation to study. 4你应该为你的学习和工作制订一个详细的计划。 You should make a detailed plan for

3、 your study and work.,四、连句成篇 Dear Mike， Glad to hear from you. I have learnt from your letter that you want to do a parttime job this summer vacation but your parents dont agree with you. I think your parents may have their reasons. They may regard learning as the most important task for you. Perhap

4、s theyd like you to make good use of the vacation to study. Besides, they may think you are too young to work.,In my opinion, youd better have a good talk with them. If they agree, you should make a detailed plan for your study and work. And you can also tell your parents not to worry about you beca

5、use you are old enough to manage your own things well. I hope my suggestions can be helpful to you. Best wishes. Li Hua,亮点点评 亮点一：本文思路清晰，要点齐全。首先表达了收到笔友来信时的高兴心情，接着介绍对方面临的问题，引出话题，然后分析可能的原因并提出自己的建议，最后表达自己的希望，是一篇不错的范文。,亮点二：文中运用了很多复杂的句型，如是that引导的宾语从句，该宾语从句是一个由but连接的表示转折关系的并列句；是省略引导词that的宾语从句；是if引导的条件状语从句；

6、是because引导的原因状语从句。另外，too.to及tell sb. not to do sth.等经典句型的运用也为文章增色不少。 亮点三：文中还运用了许多高级词汇，如regard sth. as make good use of in my opinion have a good talk with sb.等，体现了作者拥有较大的词汇量。,写作提升 你是李华，你很烦恼。最近，每天早晚，你们小区广场上都有很多人在跳广场舞，持续时间长且噪音大，给你和小区里其他人带了很多的不便请你给小区委员会领导写封信，反映现象及其导致的不便(要求涉及生活、学习和工作等方面)并提出合理建议。 注意： 1词数

7、120左右； 2短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 参考词汇：广场舞 square dance 组织者 organizers,Dear Sir， I am writing to tell you something about the people doing the square dance in our community, which has made me terribly upset. _ Best wishes. Sincerely yours， Li Hua,【自己动手写一写】 _,【范文背诵】 Dear Sir， I am writing to tell you somet

8、hing about the people doing the square dance in our community, which has made me terribly upset.,Recently, every morning and evening, many people gather to dance in our community square, which does help to keep healthy. However, the longtime dancing and the noise pollution caused by the loudspeaker

9、really bring about unbearable inconveniences. We cant rest or sleep well. As a result, the students are not only late for school but also sleepy in class, and the workers are easily tired out while working. Here are some suggestions to solve the problem. They are supposed either to shorten the danci

10、ng time and reduce the music noise or to make another choice of dancing places. Only in this way can they have fun and let others enjoy life.,Would you please communicate with the organizers about what I said? Best wishes. Sincerely yours， Li Hua,【写作提示】 题目要求给小区居委会领导写信，反映广场舞带来的不便。不便之处要涉及生活、学习、工作等，并提出合理的建议。词数在120词左右，开头和结尾不计入总词数。注意书信的格式，不能出现标点、拼写错误。要用上参考词汇。,【亮点点评】 范文注意使用 Recently, However, As a result 等连接句子与段落，使作文比较连贯、通顺；范文使用了定语从句 which does help to keep healthy；非谓语动词 caused by the loudspeaker; 倒装 Only in this way can they have fun，宾语从句 what I said 等语法知识，提高了作文的档次；范文使用了较多的短语和固定搭配：bring about, n