如何提高书面表达句子的档次.ppt

,如何提高书面表达句子的档次,Welcome to our school,你的英国朋友正在做一个课题；世界各地的生日庆祝方式。他请你介绍中国学生过生日的方式。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文： 一、通常方式 1生日聚会 2生日礼物 3生日祝福 二、我认为更有意义的庆祝方式和理由 *词数100-120 （2005 浙江卷）,Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party. They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular. But I think that its better to help other people. We know that its important to learn to help other people. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happy,学生作品（1）,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held so that people can get together. Best friends, as well as relatives, are going to be invited. Its polite to buy a small gift which stands for ones best wishes. Whats more, sending short messages on ones birthday is becoming more and more popular, as a result of its convenience. However, as far as Im concerned, its more meaningful to care about others than about oneself. As is known to all, to give is better than to receive. Birthdays mean not only being older but more helpful and useful to the world. Therefore, its of importance to learn to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can do you a lot of good. For one thing, people will help you in return in the future; for another, youll be happy. As a result, I think it better to help others to spend ones birthday.,学生作品（2）,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held so that people can get together. Best friends, as well as relatives, are going to be invited. Its polite to buy a small gift which stands for ones best wishes. Whats more, sending short messages on ones birthday is becoming more and more popular, as a result of its convenience. However, as far as Im concerned, its more meaningful to care about others than about oneself. As is known to all, to give is better than to receive. Birthdays mean not only being older but more helpful and useful to the world. Therefore, its of importance to learn to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can do you a lot of good. For one thing, people will help you in return in the future; for another, youll be happy. As a result, I think it better to help others to spend ones birthday.,学生作品（2）,1. 要点齐全 2. 较多的语法结构和高级词汇 3. 全文结构紧凑,高档书面表达的要求：,1. 时间：昨天下午放学后 请根据下述情况写一篇80-120个单词的英语新闻 广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。 2. 地点：回家路上 3. 人物：高一（2）班两名男生田力和段凯 4. 事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好 玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在 地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。 5. 警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。,There was an accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. (典型病句）,There was an accident that happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. (定语从句）,An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.（高级词汇）,An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.,Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home after school. They were talking and laughing loudly. (陈蝉),Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home after school, talking and laughing loudly. （用分词合并）,The traffic lights turned red. They found it was too late to stop the bikes.,The lights turned red, but they found it was too late to stop their bikes. (黄颖) （用连接词连接）,Seeing the red traffic lights, they tried to stop but it was too late. （用分词合并）,Ones left arm was hurt and the others leg was hurt too. (戴靓),Ones left arm was broken while the others leg got hurt. (边昶) (避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）,One had his left arm broken while the other got his leg hurt. /the other was badly hurt in the leg.) (高级结构）,They were knocked off their bikes, one with the left arm broken, and the other with one leg hurt. (高级介词短语/独立主格结构） (昭昭),5. If we dont obey traffic rules, we might die.,a. If we go against traffic rules, we might lose our lives. b. If we go against traffic rules, we might end up in hospital. c. Going against traffic rules might cost us our lives. d. Dont risk our lives going against traffic rules. (多种表达）,6. He got up at 7 oclock.（使用多种句式 ）,It was not until 7 oclock that he got up.,Not until 7 oclock did he get up.,(强调句）,（倒装句）,He didnt get up until 7 oclock.,1. I had a good idea.,a. A good idea occurred to me.,b. I came up with a good idea.,2. Dont worry . Well try to help you.,make every effort to, make great efforts to spare no efforts to, try every means to do all we can to, do what we can to,多种表达&高级词汇,Practice: 1. There are 80% of the population live on farming.,2. At 8 this morning, there were about 50 American students came to visit our school.,80% of the population live on farming.,At 8 this morning, about 50 American students came to visit our school.,Practice: （用分词合并） He had finished his homework. He went out to play football.,I was moved by his words. I decided to lend him a hand.,Moved by his words, I decided to lend him a hand.,Having finished his homework, he went out to play football.,Practice: （用连接词连接） The police searched everywhere. The missing boy could not be found.,The police searched everywhere, but the missing boy could not be found.,Though the police searched everywhere, the missing boy could not be found.,Practice: (避免用相同结构和词汇） 1. I like sports. I like music, too.,I like sports and music as well. I like sports as well as music.,My favorite subject is English while my sisters favorite subject is history.,My favorite subject is English while my sisters is history.,b. My favorite subject is English while my sister likes history best.,My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa. He had a book on his knees.,Practice: （用介词短语）,My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa with a book on his knees.,提高句子档次的小结： 1. 用分词短语合并句子 用介词短语合并句子 用独立主格结构合并句子 用连接词连接句子 2. 用高级结构和词汇 3. 用定语从句、主语从句、强调句、倒装句 4. 用不同结构和词汇,An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike. They were talking and laughing happily. When they saw a car which was passing by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red. The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell off the bikes. Tianli broke his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg. (学生作文）,An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike. They were talking and laughing happily. When they saw a bus which was passing by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red. The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell off the bikes. Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg., An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike. They were talking and laughing happily.,An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.,After school was over, Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were on their way home by bike, talking and laughing happily., When they see a bus which was passing by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red.,Seeing a passing car, they started to chase it, thinking it great fun.,Unfortunately, the bus stopped the moment the traffic light turned red., The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell off the bikes. Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg.,The two students were so close to the bus that they were not able to stop their bikes in time.,As a result, they were knocked off the bikes, one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt.,An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. After school was over, Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were heading home by bike, talking and laughing happily. Seeing a passing bus, they started to chase it, thinking it was great fun. Unfortunately, the bus stopped the moment the traffic light turned red. The two students were so close to the bus that they were not able to stop their bikes in time. As a result, they were knocked off the bikes, one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt. (95 words),Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party. They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular. But I think that its better to help other people. We know that its important to learn to help other people. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happy,Improve this composition, try!,( 1) Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. (2) Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party.（用where定语从句）(3) They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes.（和并句子）(4) Sometimes, people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular （用which定语从句）. (5) But (替换） I think （替换） that its better to help other people.(6) We know that its important to learn to help others. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. (7) People will help you in return and youll be happy （用For one thing, For another 替换）.,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways.,Usually, a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun.,They usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wish