2023届高三英语二轮复习写作专项读后续写练习 写作指导讲义素材

读后续写阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Growinguponasmall

farm，IlivedalifethatItookforgranted.My

fatherworkedinthecityasaplumber(水暖工)．Hewasnothighlyeducated，buthewassmart，lookingatproblemsinanengineer’sway.Hewasamanmadeofleather，brassandchewingtobaccowhotriedtoteachmybrotherandmeusefulthings，includingrespect.Healsohadatemperandwasstrict

withusforhewouldscolduswhenwemadesomecarelessmistakes.Sometimes，myfatherseemedlikeadistant

enemy

tomeandIdidn’tlikehimverymuch.OnedayIcamehomefrom

primaryschool

andhiscarwasalreadythere.Onceinside，Iwastoldbymymotherthathedidn’tfeelwell.Hisbackhurt.Myfathernevermissed

work；infact，whenhecamehome，hewenttothebarntoworkevenmore.I

remember

lookingathimsecretlyaroundthecornerashelayonhis

bed

inthemiddleoftheday.Later，mymothertoldmehegotmultiplemyeloma(多发性骨髓瘤)，atypeofblood

cancer.Asthecancergrows，thepersonwillshrinkbecausethediseasedestroysthebody’senergyandtheabnormalantibodiescauseproblemsforothercellsandtissue.BoneseventuallylooklikeSwisscheese，andwhentheybreak，theymayneverheal.ButIdidn’trealizethatmyfather’stimewasratherlimitedandjusttreatedhimthesamewayIusedto.Forthelastyearofmyfather’slife，hisentiredayconsistedofrisingfromhis

hospital

bedinthelivingroomandwalkingtohischairtositandthink.HewaspredictablyinthatchairwhenIcamehomeonedayduringtheninthgrade.Idonotrememberwheremymotherandbrotherwere，butthetwoofuswerealone.注意：

1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph1：

Heaskedmetositdownandwhathetoldmestillmovesmethesedecadeslater.

Paragraph2：

Atthatmoment，Irealizedthathewasdoingmorethantelling.

试题分析---Hello，August!█前文分析●人物▷father：○workedinthecityasaplumber○wasnothighlyeducated，butsmart○

amanmadeofleather，brassandchewingtobaccowhotriedtoteachmybrotherandmeusefulthings，includingrespect○hadatemperandwasstrictwithus

○seemedlikeadistantenemytome○nevermissedwork○

gotmultiplemyeloma

▷I:○

livedalifethatItookforgranted○

didn’tlikehimverymuch○lookingathim

secretly

aroundthecornerashelayonhisbedinthemiddleoftheday○didn’trealizethatmyfather’stimewasratherlimitedandjusttreatedhimthesamewayIusedto●主要情节父亲是一个水暖工，为了一家人的冷暖，总是忙于工作，无暇顾及家人，对小孩子的教育总是“严”字当头。我对父亲没什么好感，甚至把他当作“敌人”来对待。后来，父亲病了，母亲告诉我说，父亲得了多发性骨髓瘤（一种血液方面的病），这种病让父亲的身体状况更加糟糕，但是我总是不以为然，也不关心父亲还有多少有生之年。在父亲还在的最后一年，他就只能在病床和椅子之间不断转换。九年级的一天放学回家，屋里只有我跟父亲两人，母亲和哥哥也不知道去了哪里，两人无话可说地呆着。……●冲突点

如何从不理解父亲到接受并珍惜父亲？█续写部分●对两段开头的解读

○段1：

Heaskedmetositdownandwhathetoldmestillmovesmethesedecadeslater.

☺关键要突出whathetoldme，而且stillmovesme。

○段2：Atthatmoment，Irealizedthathewasdoingmorethantelling.

☺如何在这段中体现父亲的doing，虽然现在父亲躺在病床上或只能坐在家里的椅子上。

○考虑行文的合理性方面几个注意点：

①前文最后写的父亲是坐在椅子上的，而且屋里只有父亲和我两人。

②父亲到底说了什么使得我几十年后还清晰记得。

③为什么我认为当时跟父亲的一次长谈不是父亲在“说”故事而是他的真心的“做”。

④对父亲的认识如何从“敌人”转为“父亲”●可以写些什么

▷段1：

①当时父亲的身体状况

②父亲与我分享了他的珍贵的人生经历

③把与父亲的“心结”打开了

▷段2：

①回忆过往父亲的所作所为

②现状让我感动

③父亲的爱让我珍藏终生-试题分析-下水文Hello,August!---Paragraph1：

Heaskedmetositdownandwhathetoldmestillmovesmethesedecadeslater.Thatwaswhenmy

father

wasinarelativegoodhealthconditionrisingfromhis

hospital

bed

andsittinginhispredictablechair.Heaskedmetogooverandsitbeside.Hesharedhispastpreciouslife,hisdeeploveforus,hisstrongbelief,etc.That’sthefirsttimewhenIstayedsoclosetohimsincemy

primaryschool.Andthat’salsowhenIhadadeepunderstandingaboutwhyhewasalways

strict

withusandwhyheworkedsohard.(85words)Paragraph2：

Atthatmoment，Irealizedthathewasdoingmorethantelling.Indeed,sinceIwasableto

remember

something,myfatherwasalwaysengagedinchoresbothinfamilylifeandhis

work,letaloneplayingwithusonthe

farm.However,his

cancer

justaskedhimtoslowdownhislifepacesandenjoysuchabeautifullifewithus,thoughhesufferedalot.Hispatientbutunspectacularlifestorymovedme,tearswellingupinmyeyes.Whatpreciousbuttalkativelovefrommyso-calleddistant“enemy”,whichIwouldcherishthewholelife!(86words)参考范文---Hello,August!Paragraph1:

Heaskedmetositdownandwhathetoldmestillmovesmethesedecadeslater.Lyingonthe

hospital

bed，hetoldmeabouthislifeonthe

farm，hisfamily，hisloves，andhisheartbreaks.Althoughhewastorturedbythe

cancer，hisinnerselfrushedouttomeinagreatfloodasifapipehadburstallo