2017年浙江卷读后续写讲解课件-高三英语一轮复习

续写2017.6月浙江卷

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.2017.6月浙江卷

Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）。Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.2017.6月浙江卷

Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph1Thecarabrubtlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Paragraph2Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.梳理故事情节

whoMacHollan,hisfriends,awolfwhenOnabright,warmJulyafternoonwhereFromhishometoAlaskawhatAwolfwascatchingupwithhimhowHefiredthesprayatthewolf首句的解读

从两段续写的首句Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim和Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived中，我们可以推断出∶第一段重点应该放在Paul对Mac是否施以援手或如何救上。果第—段中Paul帮助了Mac，那么第二段的发展方向可能是Mac和后来赶到的朋友就刚发生的惊险一刻的交流互动或仍未完成的旅行展开;如果第一段中Paul并未出手相救，那么第二段可能会是来自friends°的帮助使Mac脱离险境，或者另一种可能会是Mac虽未得到帮助但通过自身努力摆脱了险境。Theothertwocyclists不应该出现在第一段中。写作思路

思路1Mac挡在车前，Paul也从刚才的所见所闻中意识到了Mac的危险境遇，出于热心对Mac伸出援手。Mac成功获救，之后与朋友会合。思路2Paul虽然意识到了刚才自己见到的"狗"其实是"狼""，但考虑到自身的能力和安全并未施以援手，但Mac利用Paul出现的时机争取到了时间和机会，并想办法撑到了朋友的到来，最后在他们的帮助下脱险。写作思路微技能之G-N策略

运用Given-New策略，我们根据原文文本和首句（Giveninformation)提供的信息，采用围绕中心词和一些相关问题、回答问题（Newinformation)的方法，拓展我们的思路和角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。从续写第一段首句

我们可以设问：①DidPaulandBeckyofferhelp?②WhatdidPaulandBeckydotohelpMacout?③Howdidthewolfreact?④WasMacrescuedatlast?⑤HowdidMacfeel?第一段成段

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Comeon,getinthecar,"shoutedPaul.Macjumpedofhisbicycleanddashedintothecarasthewolfwasabouttotearhisfleshintopieces.ThoughMacwassafe,hisheartbeatwildly,withhislegstrembling.第二段提问

根据续写第二段首句

我们可以这样设问：①Aftertheirarrival,howdidtheyreact?②Weretheygratefultothelifesavers?③DidtheycontinuetheirbiketriptoAlaska?第二段成段

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.TheywereshockedtofindthatMacwasjustlikeadrownedmouse.Andtheywereevenmoreshockedtolearnthathemetawolf.Afterashortrest,Macwasmuchbetter.SotheythankedPaulandBeckyanddecidedtocontinuetheirtriptoAlaska.微技能之准确的动作神态描写：恐惧心理篇

读后续写的评分原则之一是“内容的丰富性”。所谓“内容的丰富性”，就是要求续写部分详细、生动地描述情景、态度和感情等。上面这一段文字情节完整，但是存在着字数不足、信息量不够、表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。我们在描写情感的变化时，关注名词、动词、形容词、副词等在文本和续写作文中的使用，还可以通过面部

表情、体态语言、虚拟语气、直接引语和修辞手法等体

现心理。微技能之准确的动作神态描写：恐惧篇

一.词的积累动词fear,scare,dread,shock形容词afraid,scared,dreadful,frightened,frightful名词fear,scare,dread副词alone,fondly,instantly,quickly,hard微技能之准确的动作神态描写：恐惧篇

二.词块和句的积累1.Asnakecameoutofthebrushwoodandscaredmetodeath.2.Theexplosionreallyfrightenedthepantsoffme.3.Thathorrormoviemademyhairstandonend.4.Iwasscaredstiff/silly.5.MyheartstoodstillwhenIsawthelittlebabywastofallfromthesecondfloor.微技能之准确的动作神态描写：恐惧篇

二.词块和句的积累6.Lastnight,Idreamedaboutbeingchasedbyanangrydog.Ireallyhadmyheartinmymouth.7.Thatloudnoisescaredmeoutofmywits.8.Afloodoffearwelledupinhim.9.SallysaidIshouldtryBungee,butIhadcoldfeet.10.Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.牛刀小试

①Failingtogettheprey,thedisappointedwolfleft,______.（运用连动句句型）②Failingtogettheprey，thedisappointedwolfleft，______.（运用非谓语动词结构）2.一想到那只狼的血盆大口，Mac几乎吓晕过去。①Macwasnearlydeadwithfright_______.（运用时间状语从句）②，Macwasnearlydeadwithfright.（运用非谓语动词结构）牛刀小试

3.这只狼怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击车窗。①______thatitroaredandsmackedthewindowviolently.（运用so⋯that..句型）②______,thatitroaredandsmackedthewindowviolently.（运用倒装结构）4.过了很长时间这只狼才意识到想要抓到Mac是不可能的。Itwasquiteawhilebeforethewolfrealized______.（运用宾语从句）牛刀小试

5.他们惊讶地发现Mac的自行车横躺在路上，而Mac看上去也是一副狼狈模样。①Theyweresurprisedtofind________andMacwaslikeadrownedmouse.（运用宾语从句）②Theyweresurprisedtofind____________andMacwaslikeadrownedmouse.（运用非谓语动词结构）6.是的，如果没有他们的及时帮助，我早已经是狼的盘中餐了。①Yes，_______，I__________thefoodofthewolf.（运用if引导的虚拟语气）②Yes,_______，I__________thefoodofthewolf.（运用隐含条件的虚拟语气）牛刀小试

7.漆黑的雨夜，风雨交加，电闪雷鸣，我全然被这种力量镇住了。Thedark,rainyevening,thewind,thethunderingclouds________________.（运用拟人的修辞手法）8.①仿佛世界末日来了。Itseemedasif________________.（运用asif的非虚拟用法）②他看上去命不久矣。Itseemed________________.（运用asif的非虚拟用法进行仿写）9.你无法想象狼向我逼近时我是多么的恐惧。①Youcannotimagine________________，（运用how引导的宾语从句，approach作名词）②Youcannotimagine________________.（运用how引导的宾语从句，approach作动词）牛刀小试

10.虽然被吓了个半死，Mac还是挣扎着爬起来用尽全力把他的自行车朝狼扔去。①________________,Macstruggledtocrawlupandthrewhisbicycleatthewolfwithallhisstrength.（运用分词作状语）②________________,Macstruggledtocrawlupandthrewhisbicycleatthewolfwithallhisstrength.（运用倒装句）参考范文1

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Comeon,getinthecarquickly!”Paulyelled.Withoutanyhesitation,Macjumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothebackdoorofthecar.Itwaslocked!Thinkingofthewolf'sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithfright.Hecouldevenimaginethewolf'steethtearingintohisflesh.Justatthatmoment,thedoorwasunlockedbyBeckyandthefrightenedmandivedin,shuttingthedoorjustbeforethewolfpouncedonhim.Soangrywasthewolfthatitkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.Luckily,thecarwasstrongenoughtoprotectthem.Afterquiteawhile,realizingwhateverhedidwasinvainandthatitwasimpossibletocatchMac,thedisappointedwolfleft,disappearingintothewoodseventually.Macsatinthecar,hisheartstillflutteringwithfear.

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.TheyweresurprisedtofindMac‘sbicyclelyingontheroad,histentbagtornandMacjustlikeadrownedmouse.“Mac,whatonearthhashappened?””Iwasalmostkilledbyawolf!”WhentoldaboutMac’sthrillingexperience,theycouldn‘thelpcryingout,“Whatanarrowescape!””Yes,withouttheirtimelyhelp,I’dhaveendedupinthewolf‘sstomach!“Mac’sfriendswerealsogratefultoPaulandBecky.Afraidthattheremightbemorepotentialdangersahead,PaulandBeckyofferedtodrivethemtoAlaska.Wouldtheyenjoytherestofthejourney?OnlyMaccouldtell.参考范文2

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulshoutedatMac”Getinthecarquickly!”Withoutthinkingtwice,Macpedaledtowardsthecarasfastashecould.Fiveyards,fouryards,threeyards..Maccouldfeelthethumpingofhisheartagainsthischestandsweatdrenchhisclothes.SuddenlythebicyclewastrippedandMacthrewhimselfdownonthegroundheavily.ThewolfcaughtupanditsmurderouslookandbloodymouthseemedtotellMac‘sfate.Scaredtodeathashewas,Macstruggledtocrawlupandthrewhisbicycleatthewolfwithallhisstrength.Meanwhile,Paultriedhonking