读后续写练习写作指导讲义-2023届高三英语复习写作专项

读后续写练习写作指导讲义读后续写（满分25分）阅读下列材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Onthefirstdayofschool,Istaredinaweatthehugebuildings.ThishighschoolwasdefinitelybiggerthantheoneIhadpreviouslyattended.Thiswasmysecondyearofhighschool,butmyfirstyearofschoolinSt.Louis.IhaddecidedthenightbeforethatIwouldbemuchhappierinanewschoolifImadefriendsthatwereso-called"popular”.Gettinginwiththerightgroupofpeoplewouldmakemylifeawholelotbetter.Ievenboughtanewoutfitandhadmyhairstyledjustsothefirstdaywouldbeperfect.Scared,yetanxioustobeginmynewlife,Iwalkedupthestairstothefrontdoor.Thehallswerepackedwithkidsyellingandlaughingandtellingstoriesoftheirsummeradventures.Myfirstclasswasgeometry,butwherewasthat?Iwasstandinginthehalllookingconfused,whenashort,blondgirlwearingglassescameupandasked,“Areyounew?Youlooklost.Doyouneedhelp?MynameisDiane.What'syours?"Eventhoughsheseemedabitstrange,definitelynotthekindofpersonIwantedtobeassociatedwith,Idecidedtoanswerheranyway.Iwas,afterall,lost.Afterexchangingnames.Ifollowedherupthestairsanddownahallwayontheright,makingpoliteconversationthewholeway.Whenwereachedmyroomshesaid,“Well,hereyouare.WelcometoJFK,andIhopeyourdaygoesallright.”Isaidthanksandwavedgood-bye.Onceinsidetheclassroom,Isawonebiggroupofpeoplehuddledaroundsomeonewhoseemedtobetellingsomesortofstory.Iwalkedoverandgotcloseenoughtooverhear.Alleyesweregluedtotheguyinthemiddleofthecirclewhowaswearingaletterjacketcoveredwithpatches.Idecidedthatthisguywaspopular,soImanagedtogetaseatrightnexttohim.Isaid,“Hi,mynameisLisaandI'mnewhere."Hesaid,“Johnny."注意：.续写词数应为150左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡上的相应位置作做答。Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,〃l'mnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?”...Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder....文题解读该文讲述发生在中外校园都发生过或正在发生的一种现象：人们渴望被社会、被他人接纳却可能被残酷拒绝或被生活所戏弄。故事原作者可能是想通过此文来告诫我们：学会欣赏，学会辨认，学会感激、学会沟通，不取悦他人，不急于求成，争做最美的自己，等等。写作指导：故事内容概述这篇文章前文讲述的是一个可能在我们身边发生的校园故事：开学第一天，一个名叫Lisa的初二女生转到了一所新校(JFK),为了能快速融入新的环境，她想走捷径，有意接近并搭讪该校可能最受欢迎的孩子王Johnnyo可是后来发生了什么呢？找出人物特点在进行写作前，我们要首先认真分析前文文本中的描写句段，找出人物特点。而这种前文埋下的伏笔对我们写作非常非常有帮助。同学们一定要善于发现、好好领悟其中的妙处。如：从前文第二段提到的IwouldbemuchhappiefnanewschoolifImadefriendsthatwereso-called“popular”.Gettinginwiththerightgroupofpeoplewouldmakemylifeawholelotbetter.Ievenboughtanewoutfitandhadmyhairstyledjustsothefirstdaywouldbeperfect.(如果“我”能交到所谓的“受欢迎”的朋友,“我”会在新学校更快乐。和正确的一群人交往会让“我”的生活变得更好。“我”甚至买了一套新衣服，还做了个发型，这样第一天就会很完美）可知“我”有着高期待，同时我们读者可以利用这细节在后面续写中写自己的请求遭到拒绝，直到再次遇到Diane并在她再次帮助下，顺利度过新学校开学第一天。另外，我们从前文倒数第二段提到的Johnny的有关大家眼神的关注和有关衣服的细节描写：Alleyesweregluedtotheguyinthemiddleofthecirclewhowaswearingaletterjacketcoveredwithpatches（所有的目光都集中在围在中间的那个穿着一件缀满补丁的字母夹克人身上）可分析得出结论：因为一般来说，除了乞丐，比较叛逆的人才穿打补丁的衣服，所以Johnny可能只是在某一方面的受大众喜欢（popular）的人，例如喜欢捉弄人、讲故事等，而“我”后来再见到的那个热情友好的但看起奇怪（stage）的Dianec才是另一个真正受大众喜欢的人。因为在故事开头有这样一个细节：...ashort,blondgirlwearingglassescameupandasked,“Areyounew?Youlooklost.Doyouneedhelp?MynameisDiane.What'syours?”Eventhoughsheseemedabitstrange,definitelynotthekindofpersonIwantedtobeassociatedwith...（——个戴着眼镜的矮个金发女孩走过来问道：“你是新来的吗？"你看起来迷路了。你需要帮助吗？我叫黛安。你叫什么名？”虽然她看起来有点奇怪，但绝对不是“我”想交往的那种人）可知，其实黛安才是真正的popularfriend。把握感情基调同样，在写作中很重要的一点是要把握感情基调。我认为在续写段落的比较好的情感发展线可以有二条：Lisa兴奋地期待Johnny告知她怎么去她要去的教室一在对方明确或间接拒绝她并说出一些刺激羞辱她的话后，Lisa先前对他的好印象轰然倒塌，高期待导致她失落低迷，不知所措-Diane及时出现，再次帮助Lisa,Lisa心存感激并悟出一个道理。Johnny爽快地答应后Lisa非常高兴，自认为自己找到了靠山一Johnny故意把她带到别处并让她难堪或难过一Diane及时出现，她告知Lisa关于Johnny的为人并表示自己随时乐于帮她，Lisa非常感动并悟出一个道理。明确写作思路（情节发展线）根据后文所给的第一段首句提示“第一节几何课结束后，我转向他问：‘我不晓得下节课我去哪里上。你能告诉我吗？”可知，“我”想博得Johnny的好感。那么接下来，他的反应是不是很积极呢？毕竟“我”今天可是特意梳妆打扮了一番而来的。再说，“我”问话的语气也很恰当而礼貌的啊。但后文究竟是怎样发展得才好呢？……根据后文所给的第二段首句提示“正在此时，有人过来并拍了拍我的肩膀”可知，后面紧接着要写的一定要指出此人是谁？他(她)想干嘛？来帮她的还是仅仅是过来安慰的？后来又发生了什么？按照此类作文续写的最后最好是能够让我们从故事中受到什么启示或教益的话，那它又是什么呢？……因为最好的续写作文就是要解决矛盾。本文的矛盾冲突点应该主要体现在“我”所想达到的目的与目前阻碍“我”达到目的的因素上。故续写的大方向可以基本明确：此人肯定不是Johnny,也非其它陌生人，而是一会儿前带她到教室的Diane。在确定了原文的感情基调，厘清了人物关系，掌握了人物特点、明确了矛盾冲突点之后，续写时应本着解决矛盾的目的，向着积极的结局去写。可能情节预测lJohnny马上答应带Lisa去她下一个要去的教室上课，但他却中途玩消失术，故意让Lisa难堪。进退两难之际，Diane及时出现，伸出援手。最终她俩开始发展友谊，预示着新的学年精彩无限；2」ohnny明确拒绝告诉Lisa怎么去下一个走班教室，并故意当众羞辱她，说她自视过高，太烦人，想巴结他却不知道怎么为人。后来，Diane过来解围，因为她知道在Lisa上几何课的班上有个喜欢捉弄新人的混混。不妥故事发展Johnny热情助人，亲自带Lisa去了下一个教室，一路上热情地介绍肯尼迪学校(JFK),后来一起学习电脑课程，并答应Lisa的请求做他的朋友。Diane这时恰好也出现在他们面前。了解了来龙去脉后，Diane也成了他们无法不说的好朋友。下水作文1：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,'Tmnotsurewheremynextclassis.Couldyouhelpme?"Whenraisingthequestionwithasmile,Ifeltproud:IwaslikelytostartahappierlifebecauseIwouldimmediatelymakeapopularfriendhere!ButJohnnyturnedawayandwalkedoffwithoutareply.Tomygreatersadness,Daniel,followedbythebiggroupofpeople,shouted,“Thesillynewcomerwantedtojoinus.Wouldyouwelcomeher?"Inthehallwayechoedwavesofsneer.Iheardasharpvoice,"Don'tyouthinkshe'slikeahotgirlwithherhairstyledlikethat?”Tearsfinallyburstoutofmyeyes.(94words)Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.Turningaround,IfounditwasDiane.Ihadn'tanticipatedshewouldturnupatthemoment.IthrewmyselfintoherarmsandtoldhereverythingthatIhadjustgonethrough.Shewipedoffmyteardropsonthecheekswithhersoftfingersandaskedmetoforgetit,sayingIneedn'tpleasetheso-calledpopularpeople.ThensheledmedirectlytotheclassroomwhereIwassupposedtogo.NotuntilthendidIknowDianewasexactlymytrulypopularstar.(86words)下水作文2：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,zTmnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?"Surprisingly,helookedintomyeyesandnoddedhisheadfirmly.Thenhecastanunnoticeablebutmeaningfullookathisfriends.''Followme,please!”hesaidtome.Strangely,hisfriendscoveredtheirmouthsandchuckled.ItturnedoutlaterthatallexceptmeknewwhereIwouldbeled.IwasaskedtowaitoutsidetheGents.Anditwas5longminutes!"Shameonyou!Disgracefullady!,zshoutsroaredoutsidethetoilet.Iwasfooledbythemostpopularman.Ihuddledupandstartedweepingviolently.(90words)Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.Lookingup,mymistyeyescaughtafaintfigure.ItwasDiane,theoneIhadsupposedIwouldn'tgetassociatedwith!"What'sup,Lisa?Needhelp?"sheaskedinasoothingvoice.Ishowedhermyschedule,onwhichmycoursesandroomnumberswerelabeled.Withherhelp,Ididn'tmissmyclass.Beforeparting,Ileftmynameandtelephonenumberwithher.Andshepromisedtobemyfirstfriendinthenewschool.Popularfriendsshouldbesincereandwarm-hearted,justlikeDiane!(88words)参考范文：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,'I'mnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?"Withafrown,helookedatmeandthensaidaquickno,turnedbacktohisfriends,andwalkedoutoftheclassroom.Astheywerewalkingou