2022年4月浙江省温州市高三第二次模拟考试英语作文读后续写写作指导(含范文)

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英语作文读后续写写作指导

一、续写原题

acottontoyrat.Itwasgraywithsomecottonstickingoutfromtheholewherean

earhadbeentornoff."Nezumiisextraspecial,sohe'stendollars.Heneedsasafe

newhome."Danasighed.

Timlaughedsayinghedidn'thavetendollars.Danalaughed,tooandgaveNezumitoTimasafreegiftbecausehewasherfriend.WhenTimwhispereditwassortofold,Danasaidoldtoyswerethebest.ShetheninvitedTimtoherbirthdaypartythenextevening,addingthatherparentsweregivingherarealratforherbirthday.Timwasamazedandaskedifitwasaliverat."Ofcourse,"Danasaid.

Athome,Tim'smothershowedhimthegiftshehadboughtforDana.Itwasaknittingspool(编织线轴)shapedlikeamushroom.MomsaidDanacouldknitascarfforherdoll.

laughedafterknowingwhathadhappened.Togethertheydrovetothepetstore,where

couldrunaroundonthefloorsafefromcatsanddogs.TimthoughtofNezumi'searanddecidedDana'snewratwouldneedthisball.

Thenextday,Danabroughtcupcakestoclass.WhenshehandedacupcaketoTim,sheaskedifTimbroughtNezumitoschoolasNezumilikedtorideinbackpacks.TimwasatalossbecauseNezumiwasathomeonhisbed.ThenDanaaskedwhatgifthewasgivingher.Timreplieditwasasurprise.InsilencetheysatforawhilebeforeheheardDanasayherparentsweregivingheranewbikeforherbirthdayinsteadofaliveratbecausetheythoughtratswouldbitethings.

注重：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开始语已为你写好；4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.

Paragraph2:Allofasudden,hehadanidea.

二、下水思路

1.确定主题：大主题是友情。故事讲的是Dana将最好的玩具送给伴侣Tim，并邀请Tim参与生日派对。Tim为Dana的生日细心预备礼物。但是节外生枝，所买的礼物有点多余了...，故事的最后应当是主要人物Tim为伴侣买到称心的礼物，是一个意外的惊喜。

2.时空变化：注重三个时光,thenextevening,thenextday,thatafternoon，注重两个地点，athome，还有其次段的最后部分应当到了Dana家。涉准时空变化的续写最简单跑题，应特殊当心。

3.续写难点：情节容易，无话可说。碰到此类续写最好的解决办法是多举行心理描写，情感描写以及体现某一心理与情感的细节动作描写，或者是烘托情感的环境描写，要身临其境，有代入感。

三、下水续写

“7+7”模式

Paragraph1:Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.

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1.Withoutaliverat,thegiftheselectedseemedlikethefifthwheel.

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2."It'sreallyasurprise!"hemuttered,withawrysmile.

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3.Speechlessanddisappointed,Timstoodthere,notknowingwhattodowithit.

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4.Itwasasifgloomysilencefilledhisroom.

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5.Afterawhile,hebegantopaceupanddownintheroom,scratchinghisheadandglancingaround.

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6.Thenhepouredoutfromaboxallthegiftsheliked,tryingtochooseoneforhisbestfriend,butinvain.

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7.Justashedecidedtogiveup,hiseyesfellonNezumi--thetorncottontoyrat.

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Paragraph2:Allofasudden,hehadanidea.

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1."Aha!"Timyelledwithdelightandjumpedintheair.

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2."WhynotaskMomtomendtheholeinthedollandthenputitintotheplasticratball?"Timsaidtohimselfwithanod."Itmustbeaperfectbirthdaygift

forDana."

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3.Withthat,hedartedoutandcouldn'twaittotellhismotherabouthisidea.

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4.Likemagic,theoldtorndollturnedintoalivelyratinhismother’shands,thoughitwasnotarealrat.

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5.Amazingly,therewasaword“friends”sewnonitsback.

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6.Sureenough,itwasapleasantsurprise.

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7.WhenDanareceivedthespecialgiftfromTim,shereachedoutandgavehimahugehug.

Paragraph1:Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.Withoutaliverat,thegiftheselectedseemedlikethefifthwheel."It'sreallyasurprise!"hemuttered,withawrysmile.Speechlessanddisappointed,Timstoodthere,notknowingwhattodowithit.Itwasasifgloomysilencefilledhisroom.Afterawhile,hebegantopaceupanddownintheroom,scratchinghisheadandglancingaround.Thenhepouredoutfromaboxallthegiftsheliked,tryingtochooseoneforhisbestfriend,butinvain.Justashedecidedtogiveup,hiseyesfellonNezumi--thetorncottontoyrat.

Paragraph2:Allofasudden,hehadanidea."Aha!"Timyelledwithdelightandjumpedintheair."WhynotaskMomtomendtheholeinthedollandthenputitintotheplasticratball?"Timsaidtohimselfwithanod."ItmustbeaperfectbirthdaygiftforDana."Withthat,hedartedoutandcouldn'twaittotellhismotherabout

hisidea.Likemagic,theoldtorndollturnedintoalivelyratinhismother’shands,