专题02读后续写语篇的连贯性(教师版)

专题02参考答案课中讲解sectiononecontentcoherence1.Thewritingintentionofthecontinuationpartshouldbeconsistentwiththatofthewritingmaterials.2.Theimportanceofthecohesionbetweenthegivensentenceofeachparagraphandthecontinuationpartshouldbeattached.3.Thecohesionbetweenthetwocontinuationparagraphsshouldalsobepaidattentionto.教师版标注：1.故事大意一致，写作意图一致2.段落语句与续写内容的衔接3.两个段落之间的衔接e.g.Almostwithoutthinking,Ibentandgaveherahug.Sheheldontometightly.Beforethewomanleft,Isaidtoher,“Mymothertreated

everyonekindly,sheisagreatperson,butshepassedawayyearsago.youarelikemymother,”thewomansaid,“thankyou.Ifyouwanttovisitme,I’lltellyoumystory.”Thenthewomanleft.

Afteralongpause,I

drovethetaxi

togohome.Thenextday,Iwas

onmyway

tovisither.

Theoldwomantoldmethatsheusedtobeamillionaire.Shebecameimmersedinmakingmoney.Shewastheownerofa

particularbuilding

wesawlastnight.Butsheneglectedher

family.heronlysondiedoneyearagobecauseofcancer.Shesoldeverythingtosavehim,butfailed.Howsad!Atlast,theoldwomansaidtome,“Lifeisshort,butpleasebe

innohurry.

Thougheveryonehastoearnmoneyto

makealiving,alwaysrememberthatfamilyisthemostimportantthingtoyou,”I

saidnothing

butnoddedhard.

1.Thethemeofthecontinuationpart,whichistreasuringyourfamily,correspondtothatofthewritingmaterials.Inaddition,theplotinthesecondparagraphcentersaroundthekeyword“particularbuilding”,aclueinthematerialthatisonlybrieflymentionedandneedsfurtherexplanation.2.Thegivensentencesarewellconnectedwiththecontinuationpart.Forexample,inparagraphone,thegivensentence“Almostwithoutthinking,Ibentandgaveherahug.”isfollowedby“Sheheldontometightly.”“Hug”and“holdontome”showsthecohesionbetweenactions.3.Infirstparagraph,“I’lltellyoumystory”isasuspenseplacedbythewriter,whichiswellexplainedbytheplotafterthesentence“Theoldwomantoldmethatsheusedtobeamillionaire”.inthesecondparagraph.教师版标注：1.续写部分关于珍惜亲人的主题和原材料相符，并且填补了材料中关于“particularbuilding”这个线索所可能引发的剧情。2.第一段的段首语句与后续的内容的联系非常的紧密。例如第一段的前两句刚好是一个流畅的动作衔接。3.第一段中埋下的线索I’lltellyoumystory，在第二段中Theoldwomantoldmethatsheusedtobeamillionaire刚好是一种内容的衔接。sectiontwosentencecoherence强调still,indeed,apparently,oddlyenough,ofcourse,afterall,significantly,interestingly,also,aboveall,surely,certainly,undoubtedly,inanycase,anyway,aboveall,infact,especially,obviously,clearly比较like,similarly,likewise,inthesameway,inthesamemanner,equally对比bycontrast,onthecontrary,while,whereas,ontheotherhand,unlike,instead,but,conversely,differentfrom,however,nevertheless,otherwise,whereas,unlike,yet,incontrast列举forexample,forinstance,suchas,take...forexample,except(for),toillustrate时间later,next,then,finally,atlast,eventually,meanwhile,fromnowon,atthesametime,forthetimebeing,intheend,immediately,inthemeantime,inthemeanwhile,recently,soon,nowandthen,during,nowadays,since,lately,assoonas,afterwards,temporarily,earlier,now,afterawhile顺序first,second,third,then,finally,tobeginwith,firstofall,inthefirstplace,last,next,aboveall,lastbutnottheleast,firstandmostimportant可能probably,perhaps解释inotherwords,infact,asamatteroffact,thatis,namely,insimplerterms递进Whatismore,inaddition,and,besides,also,furthermore,too,moreover,furthermore,aswellas,additionally,again让步although,afterall,inspiteof...,despite,evenif,eventhough,though,admittedly,whatevermayhappen转折however,ratherthan,insteadof,but,yet,ontheotherhand,unfortunately,whereas原因forthisreason,dueto,thanksto,because,becauseof,as,since,owingto结果asaresult,thus,hence,so,therefore,accordingly,consequently,asaconsequence总结onthewhole,inconclusion,inaword,tosumup,inbrief,insummary,toconclude,tosummarize,inshort.其他mostly,occasionally,currently,naturally,mainly,exactly,evidently,frankly,monly,forthispurpose,toalargeextent,formostofus,inmanycases,inthiscasesectionthreelanguagecoherenceThelanguagecoherenceisshowinthefouraspects:word,sentence,grammarandfiguresofspeech.e.g.OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Amidthedreadfuldarkness,strangesoundsofwildbeastswereheard.“Ifitweren'tforthatstupidquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere,”shethoughttoherself,regretfultearscloudinghereyes.Surroundedbythefearandtiredness,Janefeltexhaustedandfinallyslidintosleep.“Tom,isthatyou?“shemurmured.“Tom,help!”Inherdream,shesawamanextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Afterawashing,Janecontinuedtoforceherwayahead.Intheboundlesssearch,shefounditimpossibletofindawayout,whichthrewherintodesperation.Fortunately,ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.InnotimedidJanerushtotherockandclimbontoit.Shewavedheryellowblousemadlytothepassinghelicopter.Tohergreatjoy,thistime,thehelicopterspottedher.ThemomentJanewasreunitedwithherhusband,hertearscloudedhervision.Theyhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmlightofthesettingsun.Whatdothetwoarticleshaveinmonconcerningwords,sentencesandgrammar?____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________教师版：详细见图词汇上：原材料和续写部分都使用了很多短动作动词，且数量较多句子上：非谓语，倒装句语法上：虚拟语气原材料：sectionfourstructurecoherenceThestructurecoherencecanbeshownintheechobetweenparagraphs,orbetweencontinuationpartandthetheme,etc.e.g.Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Amidthedreadfuldarkness,strangesoundsofwildbeastswereheard.“Ifitweren'tforthatstupidquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere,”shethoughttoherself,regretfultearscloudinghereyes.Surroundedbythefearandtiredness,Janefeltexhaustedandfinallyslidintosleep.“Tom,isthatyou?“shemurmured.“Tom,help!”Inherdream,shesawamanextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Afterawashing,Janecontinuedtoforceherwayahead.Intheboundlesssearch,shefounditimpossibletofindawayout,whichthrewherintodesperation.Fortunately,ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.InnotimedidJanerushtotherockandclimbontoit.Shewavedheryellowblousemadlytothepassinghelicopter.Tohergreatjoy,thistime,thehelicopterspottedher.ThemomentJanewasreunitedwithherhusband,hertearscloudedhervision.Theyhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmlightofthesettingsun.教师版引导语：注意这里标黄的两句，这里续写通过两句相似的内容，中心动词都是cloud，进行了一个内容上的呼应，但是虽然都是泪水充满了眼睛，但是两句话的感情刚好是相反的e.g.Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusement,allbecauseofmymotherloving,sweet,yetabsentmindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeightyearoldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgoodbyetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwewouldeverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquite.”Wewereneveractuallyleftinastrangecity,butwewerenotabouttotakeanychance.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikelylookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrandnewtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.学生习作：Thenextdaywerememberthebrannewtentwehadbroughtwithus.“We’renotgoingtostayinhotelsanymore.”Momsuddenlysaid,withafirmtone,“Orourtentwouldbeofnouse.”Withallourobjectionsinvain,wefinallystoppedonthefrontdoorstepofahousewithabigbackyard.Tooursurprise,itwasamuchbetterexperiencethanwehadimagined.DavidandIhadagreattimetrying.Allthecampingequipmentandmomwaschattinghappilywiththekindfamily.Thoughwedidn’thavethetoolsforcookingsincemomissoforgetful.Westillhaveagoodmealastheretrulywassomeonewhowasasniceasmomwas.教师版标注：本段写作把mother这个人物置于前景，通过这一具有，典型特征的人物串联全文的中心思想。因为这则故事的标题适合健忘而善良的妈妈的一次旅行。需续写部分，第1段句首说到我们记起了帐篷，那么可以围绕帐篷展开段落，可以体现母亲的健忘，也突出母亲所期盼的善良，来讲述一些比较有趣的事。而且这段的结尾部分thoughwedidn'thavethetoolsforcookingsincemomissoforgetful，westillhaveagoodmeal。Astheretrulywassomeonewhowasasniceasmomwas.用来解释前半句，更重要的是和所给短文的最后一段，ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstepmomwouldhavebeendelighted。Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis形成了强烈的呼应。Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Withournosepressedhardagainstthewindowandeyesgluedtothewindingroadahead,DavidandIanticipatedeverydayforathrillingadventure