云南省昆明市高一下学期期末统测读后续写写作评析汉娜的秘密图书馆讲义

24年7月5日昆明市高一期末统测读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Onceuponatime,onalandfaraway,therewasasmall

village

wherethe

villagers

livedahappylife.Allofthemwereusedtotheir

robotic

dailytasksandnoneofthemwouldtrysomethingnew,exceptonegirlnamed

Hannah.Veryfewpeopleinthevillagecould

readorwrite,andHannahwasoneofthem.Shelovedto

explore

andwouldspendhoursintheforestslookingfornewthings.Oneafternoon,whentwoofherfriends,

Amma

and

Lily,andshewereontheiradventuroustrip,theycameuponanabandoned(废弃的)small

woodenhouse.Thehouselookedveryold."Ifwemeetanythingterrible,Iamoutofhere!"Lilycried."Lookatthoseovergrowngrass.Itseemslikeaplaceforgottenbytime."Ammafollowed.DespiteMom’swarningagainstgoingaroundinabandonedplaces,Hannah’s

curiosity

gotthebetterofher.Heartpoundingwildly,shetiptoed(踮着脚尖走)tothedoorandslowlyopeneditandshewasleftsurprised.InfrontofHannahwasaroomfullof

books

—booksshininginthedust,bathedinthewarmsunlightjustwaitingtobeexplored.Hannah’sexcitementwasobviousonherfaceasshejumpedupanddownwithjoy!Hannahtookaquickbreathassherealizedthatshehadfounda

hiddentreasure.Shedustedthebooks,theshelves,andwhatwasleftonthetable.Inherexcitement,Hannahsharedeverythingwithherfriends.Shewasthinkingthatherfriendswouldshareherexcitementbutinstead,sheheardroarsoflaughter!Lilylaughed,“Books?What’sthepointofthosedustyoldthings?Wehaveeverythingweneedprovidedbyourparents.You’rewastingyourtime,Hannah.”Anotherfriend,Amma,cutin,“Yeah,Iheardthatreadingtoomuchmessesupyourhead.Whytroubletodothatwhenwehaveourusuallifetolive?”Paragraph1:Hannahwasconfusedbytheresponseandalittlehurttoo.______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Shewantedtosharethetreasurewitheveryonethoughitmightbedifficult.______________________________________________________________________________

故事中文梗概从前，在一个遥远的小村庄里，村民们过着平静的生活，习惯了机械化的日常生活，除了一个叫Hannah的女孩。Hannah喜欢探索，村里很少有人读书识字，而她是其中之一。有一天，Hannah和她的朋友Amma和Lily发现了一座废弃的小木屋，里面满是书。尽管妈妈警告过不要去废弃的地方，Hannah还是忍不住好奇心走了进去，发现了这些书。她兴奋地与朋友们分享，但朋友们却嘲笑她对书的热爱，认为读书是浪费时间。然而，Hannah觉得自己发现了一笔隐藏的宝藏，决定继续探索这些书籍的奥秘…

主要人物：Hannah次要人物：Amma,Lily,othervillagers叙事视角：第三人称视角本主题语境分类：人与自我生活与学习认识自我、丰富自我、完善自我续写思路建议第一段，看到朋友们的反应，Hannah感到内心有些小小的失望。一种合理的续写创设是：在现场（废弃的木屋里）Hannah耐心地向Amma和Lily解释书籍和读书的好处，但却没能改变他们的看法。为了和续写第二段开头句顺利衔接，第一段的末尾处应该有Hannah还是执意把一些书带回了村里的描述。第二段，应该重点写Hannah是如何向村民们传播读书识字的意识的。这一段的续写应该以Hannah从小木屋里带回来的书作为内容创设的主要载体。写作示范Hannahwasconfusedbytheresponseandalittlehurttoo.

Shecouldn'tunderstandwhyherfriendsdidn'tseethevalueinthe

books.

Hannah

hadalwaysfoundjoyandadventurein

reading,andshebelievedthesebooksheldcountlessstoriesandknowledgejustwaitingtobe

explored.Takingadeepbreath,shetriedtoexplain,"Thesebooksare

treasures!Theycanteachussomuchandtakeustoplaceswe'veneverbeen."But

Amma

and

Lily

justshruggedandturnedaway,uninterested.Feelingamixofsadnessanddetermination,Hannahdecidedshewouldn'tgiveuponthebookssoeasily.Shecarefullyselectedafewtotakehome.（99words）

Shewantedtosharethetreasurewitheveryonethoughitmightbedifficult.

Overthenextfewdays,Hannahreadthebookswithenthusiasm,sharingstoriesandfactswithanyonewhowouldlisten.Some

villagers

grewcurious.Oneevening,sheinvitedAmmaandLilytoherhouseandreadaloud.Reluctantatfirst,theysoonwerecaptivated.Encouraged,Hannahproposedcreatinga

village

library.Withthevillagers'support,theydesignatedavillagehouseasthelibrary.Then,Hannahandthevillagersreturnedtothesmall

woodenhouse

andbroughttheremainingbookstothenewlibrary.Asmorevillagersbecameinterestedinthebooks,theydecidedtostartlearningtoread.Thelibrarybecameaplaceoflearningandadventure,transformingthevillageforever.(111words)

写作细节分析Hannahwasconfusedbytheresponseandalittlehurttoo.

Shecouldn'tunderstandwhyherfriendsdidn'tseethevalueinthe

books.（合理的解释：不理解朋友们的想法）Hannah

hadalwaysfoundjoyandadventurein

reading,andshebelievedthesebooksheldcountlessstoriesandknowledgejustwaitingtobe

explored.Takingadeepbreath,shetriedtoexplain,"Thesebooksare

treasures!Theycanteachussomuchandtakeustoplaceswe'veneverbeen."（合理的内容创设：不轻易放弃，试图说服朋友)ButAmmaandLilyjustshruggedandturnedaway,uninterested.（合理的内容创设：朋友们没有那么容易被说服）Feelingamixofsadnessanddetermination,Hannahdecidedshewouldn'tgiveuponthebookssoeasily.Shecarefullyselectedafewtotakehome.（和下文顺畅衔接）

Shewantedtosharethetreasurewitheveryonethoughitmightbedifficult.

Overthenextfewdays,Hannahreadthebookswithenthusiasm,sharingstoriesandfactswithanyonewhowouldlisten.(合理内容创设：不放弃每一个原意听她讲故事的村民)Some

villagers

grewcurious.Oneevening,sheinvitedAmmaandLilytoherhouseandreadaloud.Reluctantatfirst,theysoonwerecaptivated.(次要人物也给到适当的戏份）Encouraged,Hannahproposedcreatinga

village

library.Withthevillagers'support,theydesignatedavillagehouseasthelibrary.（合理内容创设：建立图书馆造福村民）Then,Hannahandthevillagersreturnedtothesmall

woodenhouse

andbroughttheremainingbookstothenewlibrary.（合理内容创设：续写的第一段末尾提到，Hannah只拿来很少的几本书回来）Asmorevillagersbecameinterestedinthebooks,theydecidedtostartlearningtoread.Thelibrarybecameaplaceoflearningandadventure,transformingthevillageforever.（正能量结局设定：读书改变乡村、知识改变命运）词汇和表达积累shrugv.耸肩turnaway

转身离开uninterested

adj.不感兴趣的enthusiasm

n.热情growcuriousv.变得好奇reluctant

adj.不情愿captivatev.

迷住propose

v.

提议designatev.指定transform

v.改变下水文Hannahwasconfusedbytheresponseandalittlehurttoo.Shecouldn'tunderstandwhyherfriendsdidn'tseethevalueinthesebooks,whichtoherweregatewaystonewworldsandknowledge.Asshelookedatthelaughterontheirfaces,shefeltapangofdisappointment.Butherloveforexplorationandthethirstforknowledgeweretoostrongtobedampenedbytheirskepticism.Shedecidedtokeepthediscoverytoherself,vowingtoreturntothewoodenhousealoneanddelveintothewisdomcontainedwithinitspages.Shew