【英语】九年级下册英语书面表达易错剖析

【英语】九年级下册英语书面表达易错剖析一、英语书面表达1．写作假定你是李华，在一位名叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上，你看到以下内容。请你根据博客内容，写作要点和要求，给这位家长回复。I’mthemotherofafourteen-year–old.Ihavearuleformydaughter:beamongthetopof5studentsorgetpunishedinonewayoranother.Shehasbeendoingverywellinschool,butsomeofmyfriendskeeptellingmethatIputtoomuchpressureonher.AmIwrong?写作要点：1.表明自己的看法。2.陈述自己的理由。3.提出至少2条建议。【答案】Hi,TigerMom,WhatpuzzlesyouisactuallyapuzzleformanyparentsinChina.Myideaisthatitisnotquiterightforyoutodoso.Althoughhighgradesareanimportantfactorinevaluatingstudentsandfortheirfutureuniversityadmission,developmentinwisdom,emotion,health,andlifeattitudeshouldneverbeignored.Therearemanyexamplesaroundus.Someall-Astudentsinschoolhaveturnedoutnottobeassuccessfulinsocietyastheywereexpected.Thereasonisoftenthatthepressurefromtheirparentsallowsthemalmostnotimeforotheractivities.Furthermore,punishmentisbynomeansawisechoicetohelpthemgrowupmentallyandphysically.SoIsuggestthatyoutakeyourfriends'advice.Moreimportantly,letherlivelikealovelygirl；letherhavemorefriendsandsocialactivities；andlethermakemistakesofherownastheteenagersoftendo.【解析】这是一篇给材料作文，对学生家长的博客进行回复。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：Myideaisthat……，Thereare……，Someall-Astudentsinschoolhave…….，Thereasonis……，SoIsuggestthat……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头表明自己的看法，接下来陈述自己的理由，最后介绍自己的建议。此处turnout,bynomeans,helpsbdosth,growup,letsbdosth,makemistakes,ofone’sown等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。2．书面表达随着电子时代的到来，西方文化如潮水般涌来，中国传统文化的传承面临着巨大的挑战。有人认为学校应当开设传统文化课（setuptraditionalcultureclasses），但也有人认为没有必要。假如你是Mike,请你用英语写一封邮件，给你校英文报投稿写一篇短文，词数80左右，谈谈你对开设传统文化课的看法。YouropinionnecessaryorunnecessaryYourreasonstheroot（根）ofChineseculture,knowmoreabout,spread,developYoursuggestion…Deareditor,Asweallknow,Chinesetraditionalcultureisfacingagreatchallengebecauseoftherapiddevelopmentifinternationaltechnologynowadays.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,Mike【答案】Deareditor,Asweknow,Chinesetraditionalcultureisfacingagreatchallengebecauseoftherapiddevelopmentofinternationaltechnologynowadays.Inmyopinion,it’snecessaryforschoolstosetuptraditionalcultureclasses.First,traditionalcultureistherootofChinese.AsChinese,weshouldn’tgiveupourtraditionalcultureandrunafterWesternculture.Second,traditionalcultureclassescangivestudentschancestoknowmoreaboutournation.Theycanraisetheirsenseofnationalpride.Lastbutnotleast,settinguptraditionalcultureclassescanspreadanddevelopourChineseculture.Allinall,itisofgreatimportancetosetuptraditionalcultureclassesinschools.Let’scallonmoreschoolstosetuptraditionalcultureclasses!Yours,Mike【解析】这是一篇给材料作文，谈谈我对开设传统文化课的看法。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：Chinesetraditionalcultureisfacing……，it’snecessaryforschoolsto……，weshouldn’t……，Theycanraise……，itisofgreatimportanceto……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了中国传统文化面对的问题，接下来介绍我认为开设传统文化课的必要性的原因，最后号召更多的学校开设传统文化课。此处becauseof，inone’sopinion,giveup,knowabout,lastbutnotleast,setup,allinall,callon等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。3．书面表达“小手拉大手,同做文明人。”自创建文明城市文明乡村以来,淄博人民万众一心,众志成城,让人点赞的行为随处可见。作为中学生,我们也做出了自己的努力。请根据以下所给要点,写一篇100词左右的英语短文。1.种植花草树木；2.遵守交通规则；3.公共场合不大声喧哗；4.公交车上主动给有需要的人让座；（自主发挥,至少两点）参考词汇:civilized文明的makejointefforts共同努力obey遵守【答案】Sincecreatingthecivilizedcityandcountryside,allthepeopleinZibohavemadejointefforts（共同努力）.Theirgoodbehaviorcanbeseeneverywhere.Asjuniorstudents,wehavealsomadesomecontributionstothecivilizedZibo.Forexample,toprotectourenvironment,weplantflowersandtrees.Also,forourownandothers’safety,weobeythetrafficrulesandneverrunredlight.Inaddition（此外）,wenolongertalkorlaughloudlyinpublic.What'smore,whenonabus,weactivelygiveourseatstothepeopleinneed.Besides,wehaveformedagoodhabitofthrowingrubbishintoadustbin,neverlitteringanywhere.Furthermore（而且）,weareaccustomedto（习惯于）queuingup（排队）foraticketorsomethingelse.Allinall,wewilltryourbesttodowhatwecantomakeourselvesandZibocitymorecivilized【解析】亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如makejointefforts，asjuniorstudents，forexample，obeythetrafficrules，runredlight，inaddition，nolonger，inpublic，andsoon，what'smore，onabus，inneed，beaccustomedto，queueup，allinall等。而toprotectourenvironment,weplantflowersandtrees./What'smore,whenonabus,weactivelygiveourseatstothepeopleinneed./Allinall,wewilltryourbesttodowhatwecantomakeourselvesandZibocitymorecivilized.等插入语的运用，丰富了短文内容，使语言表达多样化，是本文的最大亮点。点睛：书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。4．书面表达同学们，中考后就会迎来漫长的暑假了，班会课上老师组织大家讨论假期学习和生活计划。假如你是李华，请根据以下内容提示用英语向同学们汇报一下你的计划。内容提示：暑假计划学习博览群书；学习技能（或自拟一点）生活健康饮食；坚持锻炼（或自拟一点）其它热爱公益；亲近自然（或自拟一点）注意：1.表达中必须包括所给要点，可以适当发挥，不要简单翻译。2.词数90左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。3.表达中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。Dearclassmates,Summerholidayiscoming,andhereismyplanforit.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ihopeallofyoucanenjoythecomingholiday.That’sall.Thankyou.【答案】Dearclassmates,Summerholidayiscoming,andhereismyplanforit.First,I'dliketochooseseveralgoodbooksandreadthemcarefully.Thiscanhelpmeopenmymindandlearnmoreabouttheworld.Ialsothinkit'snecessaryformetolearnatleastoneskill.I'minterestedincooking,soIwilllearntocooksomedeliciousdishesduringtheholiday.Second,healthisthemostimportant.SoIwilleathealthilyandexercisemore.Iplantoeatmorefruitandvegetablesandkeeprunningeveryday.Third,it'sagoodideatojoininsomecharityactivitiesbecauseweshouldbekindtosomeoneinneed.IwillpaymoreattentiontoprotectingourenvironmentsothatwecanmakeourEarthabetterworld.Also,travellingoutisagoodchoice.Whiletravelling,wecanbeclosetonatureandlearnaboutdifferentcultures.WehavemorechancestosearchtheInternet.Iknowunhealthywebsitesareharmfultous.Iwillsaynotothem.Ihopeallofyoucanenjoythecomingholiday.That'sall.Thankyou.【解析】亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如I'dliketodo，helpmeopenmymind，atleast，beinterestedin，duringtheholiday，plantodo，joinin，bekindtosomeoneinneed，paymoreattentionto，beclosetonature，searchtheInternet等。而First,I'dliketochooseseveralgoodbooksandreadthemcarefully./Second,healthisthemostimportant./Third,it'sagoodideatojoininsomecharityactivitiesbecauseweshouldbekindtosomeoneinneed.等表顺序词和综合句式的运用，既使短文层次清晰，又丰富了习作内容，使表达多样化，是本文的最大亮点。点睛：书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。5．书面表达根据要求完成短文写作，请将作文写在答题卡指定的位置上。每年春节，每个孩子都能收到来自长辈的压岁钱（luckymoney）。随着生活水平的提高，大部分孩子得到越来越多的压岁钱，有些甚至通过微信（WeChat）或支付宝（Alipay）收压岁钱。同学们该如何管理自己的钱，让自己的钱用得更有意义？请结合自己的实际写一篇文章，词数80词以上，文中不能出现真实校名和人名。内容包括如下：1.你的压岁钱的来源和用途；2.对合理使用压岁钱的建议（至少3点）；3.呼吁大家节约用钱，把自己的压岁钱用在最需要、最有意义的地方。【答案】EverySpringFestivalIreceivealotofluckymoneyfrommyparentsandrelatives.NowIevengetitthroughWeChatorAlipay.Iusuallybuysomeofmyfavoritebooks,schoolthingsandsomefancyclothes.SometimesIalsobuysomegiftsformyparents.Inordertomakegooduseoftheluckymoney,Ithinkwecandothefollowingthings.First,weshouldsavepartofthemoneyforourstudyinsteadofwastingitonvideogames.Second,itisagoodideatobuysomethingusefulforourparentsorteacherssothatwecanshowourlovetothem.Whatismore,whynotdonateourluckymoneytothepoorkidsinneed?Helpingothersmakesushappy.Allinall,letusmanageourluckymoneyproperly.Weshoulduseourmoneyinameaningfulway.【解析】【详解】每年春节，每个孩子都能收到来自长辈的压岁钱（luckymoney）。随着生活水平的提高，大部分孩子得到越来越多的压岁钱，有些甚至通过微信（WeChat）或支付宝（Alipay）收压岁钱。同学们该如何管理自己的钱，让自己的钱用得更有意义？这是一篇给材料作文，本题所给材料比较详细，写作中注意将所给内容表达出来，不能逐字翻译。通过阅读材料可知这篇短文主要使用的人称就是第一人称，时态为一般现在时态，注意谓语动词的变化。动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系。上下文之间可以适当使用连接词。【点睛】文章使用了很好的短语和句子：Inordertomakegooduseoftheluckymoney,Ithinkwecandothefollowingthings.First,weshouldsavepartofthemoneyforourstudyinsteadofwastingitonvideogames.这些给文章增色不少。6．假如你是李华，你们学校准备组织学生本周五去北京世园会参观。你打算邀请外教Peter参加。请用英语写一封电子邮件，告诉他集合的时间和地点，在那里可以做什么，以及参观时需要准备什么。提示词语：schoolgate,nature,culture,foodanddrink提示问题：●Whenandwhereareyougoingtomeet?●Whatareyougoingtodothere?●WhatdoyouadvisePetertoprepareforthevisit?DearPete,Howisitgoing?IamwritingtoinviteyoutovisitBeijingInternationalHorticultureExpositioninYanqing.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________I'mlookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.Yours,LiHua【答案】DearPeter，Howisitgoing?IamwritingtoinviteyoutovisitBeijingInternationalHorticultureExposition.Wewillmeetattheschoolgateat7:00a.m.thisFriday.ThenwewillgotoBeijingInternationalHorticultureExpositiontogether.Wecandoalotofthingsthere.Wecannotonlyenjoythespecialandbeautifulplantsbutalsolearndifferentculturesinvariousindoororoutdoorshows.Weplantostaythereforawholeday.You'dbetterwearapairofcomfortablesportsshoesandtakesomefoodanddrinkswithyou.I'mlookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.Yours,LiHua【解析】【详解】1.题干解读：这是一篇给材料作文，属于应用文写作。本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；提示的问题就是写作的基本方向，然后围绕要点适当发挥即可。2.例文点评：文章采取邮件格式，时态以一般将来时态为主。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，语言准确，语意连贯，表达清楚，具有逻辑性。3.高分亮点：短语：schoolgate；invitesb.todo；alotof；plantodo。句型：notonly…butalso；You'dbetter…；I'mlookingforwardto…。7．4月23日是“世界读书日”，你校英语俱乐部正在开展主题为“多读书，读好书”的活动。假如你是李华，请你写一封倡议书，向全体同学发出号召。内容包括：应该读什么样的书，以及读书的意义。提示词语：story,novel,knowledge,improve,important提示问题：●Whatkindofbooksshouldweread?●Whydoweread?Dearstudents,theWorldReadingDayiscoming.SoI’mhereagaintocallonallofustoreadmorebooksandreadgoodbooks.LiHua【答案】例文Dearstudents,theWorldReadingDayiscoming.Asamiddleschoolstudent,everyoneshouldreadbooks.Firstly,readingincreasesourknowledgeandwecanlearntheworldaffairswithoutgoingout.Secondly,readingisagoodwaytoimprovereadingandwritingskills.Finally,readingcanbroadenourknowledgeandhorizon,whichisimportanttojobhuntinginthefuture.Therefore,starttoreading,nomatterhowoldyouareandwhatyouaredoing.SoI’mhereagaintocallonallofustoreadmorebooksandreadgoodbooks.LiHua【解析】【详解】题干解读：该题目属于应用文写作，但写作时要按照应用文格式写，写作时承接短文开头，写出对学生的倡议。例文点评：例文采用的是一段式，写的是阅读的好处，时态采用的是一般现在时，描述倡议时，描写细致，条理清晰。高分亮点：短语：Firstly；Secondly；Finally；agoodwaytodosth；broadenourknowledgeandhorizon。句型：readingisagoodwaytoimprovereadingandwritingskills；readingcanbroadenourknowledgeandhorizon,whichisimportanttojobhuntinginthefuture。8．李华的英国笔友Jessica来信说,她想了解中国的传统节日中秋节。假如你是李华,请你给Jessica写一封信,介绍该节日。内容须包含以下所有要点：1.中秋节的时间；2.中秋节的传统习俗及庆祝方式：全家人一起吃饭,赏月,吃月饼等；3,我最期待的活动。要求：1.80--100词〔开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数）；2.语句通顺,意思连贯,书写工整。DearJessica,I'mgladtohearfromyou.NowletmeintroducetheMid-AutumnFestivaltoyou._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiHua【答案】DearJessica,I'mgladtohearfromyou.NowletmeintroducetheMid-AutumnFestivaltoyou.TheMid-AutumnFestivalfallsonthe15thofthe8thlunarmonth.It’sabigdayforusChinesepeople.Allthefamilymembersgettogethertocelebratethefestival.Intheevening,weusuallyhaveabigdinner.Andthenwegooutsideandenjoythefullmoon.Themoonthatnightlooksthebrightest.Withthebeautifulmoonupinthesky,wesittogethertoeatmooncakes,andshareourstories.Forme,thebestpartistoenjoythemoonandeatmooncakes.Mooncakestasteverydelicious.Theylooklikethemoon,bigandround.Yours,LiHua【解析】【详解】本篇写作是以书信的方式向笔友介绍中国的传统节日中秋节，要用一般现在时来写。全文可分两大部分，第一部分写中秋节的时间、传统习俗及庆祝方式，第二部分写我最期待的活动。亮点说明：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好地完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态，主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如gettogether，enjoythefullmoon，shareourstories等。增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，句子通顺，行文连贯。9．假如你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack热爱中国的唐诗宋词。最近他对母亲节你在博客里发的《游子吟》（Songofthepartingson）很感兴趣，给你写信想了解该诗，请你根据以下提示给他回信：1.作者：孟郊2.时间：唐朝3.内容：母亲为儿子做衣服4.主题：母爱的伟大注意：1.文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称；2.语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；3.词数:80-100词左右，信件的开头与结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。DearJack,I’mgladtohearfromyou.IknowyouareinterestedinthispoemSongofthepartingson.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,【答案】DearJack,I’mgladtohearfromyou.IknowyouareinterestedinthispoemSongofthepartingson.NowI’mwritingtotellyousomethingaboutit.SongofthepartingsonisoneofthemostpopularChinesepoems.ItwaswrittenbyMengJiao,afamouspoetinTangDynasty.Itdescribesacommonmatterindailylife—amothermakingclothesforherson,whichisfamiliartomostofus.Itmainlyshowshowgreatamother’slovecanbe.Inaword,thisshortpoemhastouchedmanypeople’shearts.Ifyouhaveanyotherquestionsaboutthispoem,pleasetellme.Yours,LiHua【解析】【分析】这是一篇材料作文。【详解】根据内容可知，这是一篇书信类文章。时态是一般现在时。人称是第一人称和第三人称。英语作文一般分为三个部分：第一部分：交代写信目的——朋友Jack热爱中国的唐诗宋词。我将给你介绍《游子吟》（Songofthepartingson）这首诗。第二部分：文章主体部分——具体介绍《游子吟》（Songofthepartingson）这首诗。1.作者：孟郊2.时间：唐朝3.内容：母亲为儿子做衣服4.主题：母爱的伟大第三部分：信的结语——如果对方有任何问题，可以继续问自己，并期待收到对方的来信。10．为了吸引外国游客，杭州旅游网希望对杭州茶文化进行宣传。请你根据表格信息，用英语为其写一篇介绍，词数80左右。WhatisLongjingTeafamousfor?GoodtasteWhatisitusedfor?KeephealthyHowisitproduced?Growonthesidesofmountains...What’sthebestplacetolearnaboutit?Why?HangzhouNationalTeaMuseum...LongjingTea__________________________________________________