临沂市高三教学质量检测考试读后续写二次开发学案教师版

临沂市高三教学质量检测考试读后续写二次开发学案教师版阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。SoonafterwemovedtoaremoteparceloflandintheSierrafoothillsthathadn'tbeenbuiltonformilesaround,webroughtintwostraycats,NoseyandQuincy,tokeepdownthepestpopulation.Wehadneverbeencatownersbefore,andIfeareditwouldbeachallengeforouragingLacy,butshebecametheirbestfriendrightfromthestart.Sheletthemdrinkfromherwaterbowl,sleeponherdogbed,andIevenwatchedherlickingcatfoodfromtheirfuratimeortwo.Thethreepanionsformedquiteabond.AsLacycontinuedtoage,hercatfriendsstayedclose.Whenwedroveupourlongdrivewayinghomefromwork,Lacywouldlimptogreetus,trailedbythecats,evenwhenherjointpainmadeithardforhertogetofftheporch.Asherconditionworsened,wespentmuchtimeatthevet'sofficeseekingtherightmedicationtoeaseherpain.Ononevisit,Iquestionedthedoctor:"Therearetimesnowwhenourdogseemsconfused.Iknowshehassufferedsomehearingloss,butthereseemstobemoretoherbehaviorthanjustthat.AmIimaginingthings?”"No,you'renot."Herreplywasunexpected."Dogscansufferfromakindofmentalconfusionintheiroldage,"shecontinued."It'shardtoknowifthat'shappening,butIsuggestkeepingherinmostly.Shecouldwanderoffandforgethowtoehome,especiallywithallthatlandaroundyourhouse."IaskedmythreeteenagerstokeepaneyeonLacy.Withahousefullofteenagers,thingstendedtogetchaotic,butIencouragedthem:"Wecan'tletLacygooutsideunlesssomebodygoeswithher.”TheyagreedandkeptwatchuntilonebustlingThursdaynight.Thehousewasfulloftheirfriends,whostayeduntilYouthGroupstartedatchurchlater.Kidscameandwentfromeverydoor.Asthelastkidleft,IrealizedLacywasnowhereinthehouse.Itwasdark,somyhusbandandIgrabbedflashlightsandsearchedthehillside,callingforherforhoursthoughIdoubtedshecouldhearus.Wedidn'tseethecatseither,butfiguredtheywereontheirnightlywanderaroundtheproperty.Atmidnightwegaveup,decidingwe'dhavebetterchancesindaylight.注意：1．续写词数应为150个左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1：Thenextmorningtheentirefamilyjoinedinthesearch.Para2:AsIwentouttostartthecar,Icouldn'tbelievemyeyes.【原文翻译】我们搬到塞拉山麓一处偏远的地块后不久，这里方圆数英里都没有建筑物。随后，我们收养了两只流浪猫——诺西（Nosey）和昆西（Quincy），希望它们能帮忙控制害虫数量。我们以前从未养过猫，还担心这对日渐衰老的狗狗莱西（Lacy）来说会是个难题，可莱西从一开始就成了两只猫最好的朋友。它让猫咪喝自己水碗里的水，睡自己的狗窝，我甚至还见过一两次，它帮猫咪舔掉毛上沾着的猫粮。这三个小伙伴之间，建立了十分深厚的羁绊。随着莱西日渐衰老，它的猫咪朋友们始终待在它身边。每当我们下班开车驶过长长的车道回家时，莱西总会一瘸一拐地来迎接我们，身后还跟着那两只猫——即便关节疼痛让它连从门廊上下来都很困难，它也依然如此。后来它的身体状况越来越差，我们花了很多时间跑兽医诊所，只为找到能缓解它疼痛的合适药物。有一次复诊时，我问医生：“最近我们家狗狗有时候显得有些糊涂。我知道它听力已经有些下降了，但它的行为举止里，似乎还有别的问题。是我想多了吗？”“不，你没有想多。”医生的回答出乎我的意料。“狗狗年老时也可能会出现一种老年精神混乱的情况，”她接着说，“很难确定莱西是否正经历这种状况，但我建议尽量让它待在室内。它可能会走失，而且忘了怎么回家，尤其是你们家周围还有这么大一片地方。”我叮嘱家里的三个十几岁的孩子，要多留意照看莱西。家里满是半大的孩子，往往会显得有些乱，但我还是鼓励他们：“除非有人陪着莱西，否则绝不能让它独自出门。”孩子们答应了，也一直照看着莱西，直到一个忙碌的周四晚上。那天家里挤满了他们的朋友，这些孩子一直待到晚些时候教堂青年团活动开始才离开。孩子们从各个门口进进出出，十分热闹。等最后一个孩子离开后，我才发现莱西不在屋子里。天已经黑了，我和丈夫赶紧拿起手电筒，去山坡上搜寻，一边喊着莱西的名字，一边找了好几个小时——尽管我心里清楚，它可能根本听不见我们的声音。我们也没看到那两只猫，但想着它们大概像往常一样，在院子里夜游。到了午夜，我们实在撑不住，只好放弃了搜寻，决定等天亮后再找，那时机会或许会大些。【写作训练步骤】第一步：通读全文，深度解读读情节开端：“我”家搬到偏远山区，收养两只流浪猫Nosey和Quincy，家中老狗Lacy与它们迅速建立深厚友谊，相处融洽。发展：Lacy日渐衰老，不仅关节疼痛，还出现老年精神混乱症状，兽医建议尽量将其留在家中，防止走失，“我”叮嘱三个青少年孩子留意Lacy。转折：一个忙碌的周四晚上，家中因孩子和朋友往来混乱，Lacy意外走失，“我”和丈夫深夜搜寻无果，决定次日白天继续寻找。高潮：第二天全家一同加入搜寻Lacy的队伍。续写开端：描写全家搜寻的过程、遇到的困难以及可能出现的线索。续写结局：阐述找到Lacy的场景以及此次经历带来的影响与感悟。读人物“我”（第一人称叙述者）：细心负责，重视家人与宠物的情感，面对Lacy走失焦急且不放弃。Lacy（老狗）：温顺友善，与猫咪建立深厚情谊，年老体衰，面临健康问题与走失风险。Nosey和Quincy（流浪猫）：与Lacy关系亲密，是Lacy的忠实同伴。家人（丈夫、三个青少年）：配合搜寻，重视Lacy的安危，是搜寻过程中的重要力量。读时态全文以一般过去时为主，续写需严格保持一致。读冲突外在冲突：Lacy意外走失，全家搜寻面临山区环境复杂、线索稀缺等困难，能否成功找到Lacy存在不确定性。内在冲突：“我”面对Lacy走失的焦急与担忧，以及对能否找回Lacy的忐忑心理。读情绪发展担忧→焦急→坚持搜寻→（续写发展：搜寻中的期待与失落交织，出现线索后的振奋）→（续写结局：找到Lacy后的释然与感动，情感更加深厚）读主题宠物与人类的深厚情感（ProfoundEmotionBetweenPetsandHumans）家庭责任与协作（FamilyResponsibilityandCooperation）坚持与不放弃的力量（ThePowerofPersistenceandNeverGivingUp）二、【十句五定法】——搭建你的写作框架请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。段落句子功能你的句子构思第一段1.接续Hint1描述清晨全家搜寻的场景，点明搜寻范围和各自的行动（例如：丈夫沿车道搜寻，孩子分散在山坡各处，“我”呼唤Lacy的名字）。2.动作/心理推进描写搜寻过程中的困难（如地形复杂、毫无线索）以及“我”内心的焦急与担忧。3.有效过渡搜寻陷入僵局时，出现一丝转机（如发现猫咪的踪迹，或听到微弱的声音）。4.有效衔接描述跟随线索寻找的过程，以及猫咪在其中起到的关键作用（如猫咪停留在某处发出叫声指引）。5.段落收束以靠近目标地点、内心充满期待与紧张结束本段，为第二段找到Lacy埋下伏笔。第二段6.接续Hint2具体描写看到Lacy时的场景（如Lacy的状态、所处位置，猫咪在其身边陪伴）。7.情节发展描述“我”和家人上前照料Lacy的动作与互动（如检查身体、温柔安抚，带Lacy回家）。8.主题升华通过内心独白或家人间的对话，点明此次经历对“我”的触动（如感受到宠物间的情谊珍贵，家庭协作的力量）。9.结局呈现描述Lacy回家后的状态，以及家人与宠物间更加亲密的相处场景（如精心照料Lacy，猫咪依旧陪伴左右）。10.富有余韵的结尾用一句温暖的句子结束故事，回扣主题（如：在这片偏远的山区，爱与陪伴让每个生命都不再孤单）。三、【微写作训练】——打磨你的语言【人物心理描写】焦急担忧：Awaveofanxietysurgedthroughmeaswesearchedendlessly;MyheartsankwitheachfruitlesscallforLacy.期待振奋：AglimmerofhopeignitedinmychestwhenIspottedthecats;Excitementcoursedthroughmyveinsaswedrewnearthesound.释然感动：TearsofreliefstreameddownmyfacewhenIheldLacyinmyarms;Thewarmthoftheirpanionshipmeltedalltheanxietyaway.【情感描写】坚持的决心：Clutchingtheflashlighttightly,Iresolvedtokeepsearchingnomatterhowlongittook.重逢的喜悦：Thejoyfulbarksandgentlepurrsfilledtheair,asweetsymphonyofreunion.温暖的陪伴：Lacyleanedagainstmeweakly,whilethecatscurledupbesideher,asifguardingtheirdearfriend.【动作描写】焦急搜寻：Istumbledoverrocksandbushes,callingLacy'snameatthetopofmylungs,myeyesscanningeverycornerfrantically.细心照料：IgentlystrokedLacy'smattedfur,feedinghersmallsipsofwaterandcheckingforanyinjuriescarefully.默契互动：ThecatsrubbedtheirheadsagainstLacy'sbody,thenturnedtolookatus,asifleadingthewaytotheirtrappedfriend.【环境象征描写】偏远山区→从搜寻障碍到情感纽带：Theremotemountainousarea,onceabarrierinoursearch,becameawitnesstothedeepbondbetweenourfamilyandthepets.清晨阳光→从迷茫到希望：Theearlymorningsunbrokethroughtheclouds,castinglightonourpathandliftingourspiritsinthedesperatesearch.猫咪踪迹→从微弱线索到希望指引：Thefaintfootprintsofthecatsweremorethanjustclues;theywerebeaconsofhopeleadingusbacktoLacy.【微写作训练】——为你的故事注入灵魂训练一：环境描写・烘托心情（选择最贴合故事氛围的词语，并尝试造句）心情可选词汇（中英对照）你的造句焦急、迷茫荒无人烟(desolate);四处搜寻(searcheverywhere);毫无头绪(clueless)山区里荒无人烟，我们四处搜寻，却依旧毫无头绪，焦虑感不断蔓延。期待、振奋踪迹显现(traceappeared);精神一振(perkup);满怀希望(fullofhope)当猫咪的踪迹显现时，我们瞬间精神一振，满怀希望地朝着那个方向奔去。释然、温暖安然无恙(safeandsound);紧紧相拥(hugtightly);暖意融融(warmallover)看到Lacy安然无恙地待在那里，我们连忙上前紧紧相拥，心中暖意融融。训练二：人物刻画・于细微处见真情（将左边抽象的描述与右边具体的表达连线，并选择一句仿写）我很焦急。A.Ipacedbackandforthrestlessly,myeyesdartingaroundthehillside,callingLacy'snamerepeatedly.孩子很自责。B.Hehunghisheadlow,hisvoicetremblingashesaid,"I'msorryIdidn'tkeepaclosereyeonher."猫咪很忠诚。C.Theyrefusedtoleavethespot,meowingloudlyandlookingbackatusasifurgingustofollow.（参考答案：1A;2B;3C）训练三：情感表达・找到“高级替身”（圈出你会在正式写作中使用的词语，并替换掉直白的表达）想说"worried"(担心):试试asenseofunease(一阵不安),myheartwasinmymouth(心提到了嗓子眼),overewithanxiety(焦虑不安)想说"happy"(开心):试试aburstofjoy(一阵喜悦),radiantwithdelight(喜形于色),myspiritssoared(精神振奋)想说"thankful"(感激):试试filledwithgratitude(满怀感激),heartfeltthanks(由衷的感谢),Ifeltblessed(感到幸运)例句升级：原句：IwasworriedbuthappywhenwefoundLacy.升级句:Asenseofuneaselingeredinmyheartthroughoutthesearch,butitwasquicklyreplacedbyaburstofjoyaswespottedLacysafeandsound,filledwithgratitudeforthecats'help.训练四：动作细节・让情感可视化（请为以下情境，设计一个包含具体动作和身体反应的句子）情境1：“我”清晨开始搜寻Lacy时，焦急万分。直白版:IsearchedforLacyanxiouslyinthemorning.细节版:I______,myhands______thebranchesasideroughly,whilemyvoice______fromcallingLacy'snametoomuch.(参考：hurriedupthehillside;pushing;hoarse)情境2：看到Lacy后，“我”上前安抚它。直白版:IwenttofortLacy.细节版:Kneelingdowngentlybesideher,I______,"It'sokay,girl,we'rehere."She______,hertailwaggingweaklyasshenuzzledmyhand.(参考:whisperedsoftly;liftedherheadslowly)训练五：象征与隐喻・让主题更深刻（将抽象概念与具体意象连接，完成句子）猫咪的陪伴(Thecats'panionship)→不仅是日常的相伴，更象征着______(aloyalguardianthatneverabandonsitsfriend,guidingusthroughthedarknesstoreunion)。搜寻的过程(Thesearchprocess)→从______(adesperatejourneyfilledwithuncertainty)变成了______(atestamenttothepowerofloveandpersistencethatbindsafamilyandtheirpets)。这次走失经历(TheexperienceofLacy'sdisappearance)→是“我”从______(takingthepets'panionshipforgranted)到______(cherishingeverymomentwiththemandvaluingthebondweshare)的转折点。【微写作训练】参考答案训练一：环境描写・烘托心情焦急、迷茫：山区里荒无人烟，我们四处搜寻，却依旧毫无头绪，焦虑感不断蔓延。期待、振奋：当猫咪的踪迹显现时，我们瞬间精神一振，满怀希望地朝着那个方向奔去。释然、温暖：看到Lacy安然无恙地待在那里，我们连忙上前紧紧相拥，心中暖意融融。训练二：人物刻画・于细微处见真情连线答案:1A;2B;3C仿写示例(选择第2句):Shebitherlowerliptightly,hereyesglisteningwithtearsasshewhispered,"Ishouldhavestayedathometowatchherinsteadofgoingout."训练三：情感表达・找到“高级替身”想到Lacy可能独自在山区过夜，我感到一阵不安(asenseofunease)。当看到Lacy向我们走来时，我精神振奋(myspiritssoared)。对于猫咪的指引，我满怀感激(filledwithgratitude)。例句升级:Asenseofuneaselingeredinmyheartthroughoutthesearch,butitwasquicklyreplacedbyaburstofjoyaswespottedLacysafeandsound,filledwithgratitudeforthecats'help.训练四：动作细节・让情感可视化情境1(细节版):Ihurriedupthehillside(匆忙冲上山坡),myhandspushing(用力拨开)thebranchesasideroughly,whilemyvoicehoarse(因频繁呼唤Lacy的名字而变得沙哑)fromcallingLacy'snametoomuch.情境2(细节版):Kneelingdowngentlybesideher,Iwhisperedsoftly(轻声低语),"It'sokay,girl,we'rehere."Sheliftedherheadslowly(缓缓抬起头),hertailwaggingweaklyasshenuzzledmyhand.训练五：象征与隐喻・让主题更深刻猫咪的陪伴(Thecats'panionship)→不仅是日常的相伴，更象征着aloyalguardianthatneverabandonsitsfriend,guidingusthroughthedarknesstoreunion(一个永不抛弃朋友的忠诚守护者，指引我们穿越黑暗走向重逢)。搜寻的过程(Thesearchprocess)→从adesperatejourneyfilledwithuncertainty(一段充满不确定性的绝望旅程)变成了atestamenttothepowerofloveandpersistencethatbindsafamilyandtheirpets(一份证明爱与坚持力量的见证，这种力量将家庭与宠物紧密相连)。这次走失经历(TheexperienceofLacy'sdisappearance)→是“我”从takingthepets'panionshipforgranted(理所当然地享受宠物的陪伴)到cherishingeverymomentwiththemandvaluingthebondweshare(珍惜与它们相处的每一刻，重视我们之间的羁绊)的转折点。四、【微动作训练】——让情感在行动中展现训练一：动作情绪绑定（请根据中文提示，补全英文句子，完成“动作情绪”的精准绑定）场景：焦急搜寻英文：Iclenchedmyfiststightly(紧紧攥紧拳头),myfootstepsquickeningasIscannedtheunderbrushforanysignofLacy(脚步加快，仔细扫视灌木丛寻找Lacy的任何踪迹).中文：我紧紧攥紧拳头，脚步加快，仔细扫视灌木丛寻找Lacy的任何踪迹。场景：发现线索英文：WhenIsawthecatslingeringbyarock,mybreathcaughtinmythroat(breathcaughtinmythroat屏住呼吸),andIwavedeagerlytosignalthefamilytoeover(急切地挥手示意家人过来).中文：当我看到猫咪在一块石头旁徘徊时，我屏住呼吸，急切地挥手示意家人过来。场景：重逢Lacy英文：CradlingLacyinmyarmsgently(轻轻把Lacy抱在怀里),tearsofreliefstreameddownmyfaceasIpressedasoftkissonherforehead(释然的泪水顺着脸颊流下，轻轻吻了吻她的额头).中文：轻轻把Lacy抱在怀里，释然的泪水顺着脸颊流下，轻轻吻了吻她的额头。训练二：细节放大镜（请将简单的动作，通过添加12个细节进行升级，使其更具表现力）原句：IcalledLacy.细节升级：Icuppedmyhandsaroundmymouth,shoutingLacy'snamerepeatedly,myvoiceechoingthroughthequietmountainvalley(双手拢在嘴边，反复呼喊Lacy的名字，声音在寂静的山谷中回荡).原句：Thecatsledus.细节升级：Thecatstrottedaheadslowly,pausingeveryfewstepstolookbackatus,asifmakingsurewewerefollowingclosely(猫咪在前面慢慢小跑，每走几步就停下来回头看我们，仿佛在确保我们紧紧跟上).原句：WetookLacyhome.细节升级：We______,______.(参考：carefullyliftedLacyintothecar,wrappingablanketaroundhertokeepherwarmaswedroveslowlyalongthebumpydriveway)训练三：综合情景创作（请运用以上所有技巧，为以下情景创作一个包含微动作描写的句子）情景：当全家找到Lacy，带着它回家时，内心充满感动与释然。要求：必须包含一个照料Lacy的细节和一个面部表情或身体姿态的细节，来表现“我”此时的心情。你的创作：（参考：AsIgentlybrushedthedirtoffLacy'sfurwithmyfingers,asoftandcontentedsmilespreadacrossmyface,andIleanedagainstthecarseat,feelingaprofoundsenseofpeaceknowingwehadourbeloveddogbacksafeandsound.）【微动作训练】参考答案训练一：动作情绪绑定我紧紧攥紧拳头，脚步加快，仔细扫视灌木丛寻找Lacy的任何踪迹。Iclenchedmyfiststightly,myfootstepsquickeningasIscannedtheunderbrushforanysignofLacy.当我看到猫咪在一块石头旁徘徊时，我屏住呼吸，急切地挥手示意家人过来。WhenIsawthecatslingeringbyarock,mybreathcaughtinmythroat,andIwavedeagerlytosignalthefamilytoeover.轻轻把Lacy抱在怀里，释然的泪水顺着脸颊流下，轻轻吻了吻她的额头。CradlingLacyinmyarmsgently,tearsofreliefstreameddownmyfaceasIpressedasoftkissonherforehead.训练二：细节放大镜原句:IcalledLacy.细节升级:Icuppedmyhandsaroundmymouth,shoutingLacy'snamerepeatedly,myvoiceechoingthroughthequietmountainvalley.原句:Thecatsledus.细节升级:Thecatstrottedaheadslowly,pausingeveryfewstepstolookbackatus,asifmakingsurewewerefollowingclosely.你的练习:原句:WetookLacyhome.细节升级:WecarefullyliftedLacyintothecar,wrappingablanketaroundhertokeepherwarmaswedroveslowlyalongthebumpydriveway.训练三：综合情景创作你的创作(参考示例):AsIgentlybrushedthedirtoffLacy'sfurwithmyfingers,asoftandcontentedsmilespreadacrossmyface,andIleanedagainstthecarseat,feelingaprofoundsenseofpeaceknowingwehadourbeloveddogbacksafeandsound.五、综合训练与范文引导读后续写范文语法填空题（侧重关键信息考察）阅读下面短文，根据续写情节的关键信息，在空白处填入恰当的单词，使短文完整通顺。Thenextmorningtheentirefamilyjoinedinthesearch.Wesplitintogroups,walkingalongtheovergrown______(填“环境相关词，表搜寻路径”)withLacy’sfavoritetreats,callinghernamesoftly.Theteenscheckedtheold______(填“地点名词，表teens搜寻的具体场所”)andthecreek,whilemyhusbandandIbedthehillsidewherewe’dsearchedthe______(填“时间名词，表与前一晚搜寻的关联”)before.Bynoon,sweatsoakedourclothes,anddisappointmentweighedheavyonour______(填“身体部位名词，表情感载体”)—westillhadnotfoundthedogwelovedsomuch.Worndownbydespairandexhaustion,weresolvedtodrivedowntowninalastditchattemptto______(填“动词，表‘追踪、寻找’”)herdown.AsIwentouttostartthecar,Icouldn’tbelievemyeyes.WalkingupthelongdrivewaywasLacy,______(填“形容词，表Lacy归来时的核心