读后续写八（关注构思）-新高考英语读后续写能力提升

读后续写微讲座八：关注构思

I外刊输入——悟语言之道

WildlifeTeachesLesson

ItwasMarch9,thedayaftermy17thbirthday,whenImetPigeononmywaybacktomy

neighbourhood.Beingthesameasmostotherafternoons,nothingwasunusual.MyfriendsandI

walkeddownthestreet,makingplansfordinner.

Allofasudden,myattentionwascaughtbywhathappenedacrossthestreet.Abushadrunover

apigeon（鸽子）,leavingthepoorcreaturestrugglingtotakeoff.Sheremindedmeofatoddlerwho

couldonlymoveunsteadily,usingherwingsasarmstoclimbtowardtheedgeoftheroad,butshe

madenoprogress.Itwas,withoutdoubt,oneofthemostpainfulscenesI'veeverwitnessed.

Onawhim（心血来潮），Irushedovertopickherup.Themomentmyfingerscameintocontact

withherwarm,softbody,somethingimmediatelystruckmeandfloodedmyheartlikeanelectric

current—thefeelingoflifeandnature.

Observingthepigeonininyhands,Ifeltherheartbeai,Isensedherbreath,andIreceivedher

warmth.Sinceshecouldn'tfly,Iwasawarethatitwouldhavebeenirresponsibletoleaveherthere.

Afteramomentofhesitation,Iwrappedherinmyshirtandbroughtherback.

InamedherPigeonanddecidedtogiveherahealthcheck.Herfeetcouldn'tstretchandsupport

herbodyweighteffectively.WhenIgentlypulledherclaws（爪子），Ireceivednoresponse.Herfeet

musthavebeenbadlyhurtbythebus,andtheonlythingIintendedtodoforherwastoprovideher

withacomfortableenvironment.

AssoonasshewasputinsideaboxI'dfound,Pigeonwasalarmedandstruggledtowardthe

darkestcornerandcurledup（蜷缩）init.Itriedtotouchheragain,butwasrejectedbyherscreaming

andtheflapping（拍打）ofherwings.

Mymindwasfilledwithquestionsatthebeginning.Howonearthcouldsuchaquietanimalbe

transformedintosomethingsounfriendlyandattachedtodarkness?ThenIcametorealizethatit

wasmyfault.

Afterall,pigeonsarewildlife.Natureistheirhome,theskyiswhattheylongfor,andfreedom

istheirfaith.HowcanI,ahumanbeing,beassignificantasthosethingswithinjustafewhours?To

her,Iamjustanotherthreat.

Manyofusoftenthinkinaself-centredway,andonlywhenwethinkaboutothers,including

otherspecies,canweliveinharmonywithnature.Italsotakestimetorecover,bothphysicallyand

menially,andIhopethatPigeongetswellsoon.

1.重点词汇再现

(1)neighbourhoodn.街区

(2)unusualadj.不寻常的

(3)creaturen.生物

(4)remindvt.使想起

(5)makenoprogress没rr进步

(6)immediatelyadv.立刻

(7)observev.观察

(8)awareadj.知道；发觉

(9)effectivelyadv.有效地

(lO)intendv.打算

(11)alarmcdadj.惊恐的

(12)onearth究竟；到底

(13)threatn.威胁

(14)speciesn.物种

(15)harmonyn.和谐；融洽

(16)recoverv.恢复

2.重点句型再现：only倒装句型

Onlywhenwethinkaboutothers,includingotherspecies,canweliveinharmonywithnature.

只有当我们想到他人，包括其他物种时，我们才能与自然和谐相处。

II迷你语料库(MiniCorpus)

序号佳句呈现赏析

Theairisthinandwehavetorest

1severaltimesontheshorthikefrom描写行进过程中的困难。

camp.

Toourleft,snow-coveredmountains

自然场景描写——雪山高耸

2disappearintocloudsthatseemalmost

入云。

closeenoughtotouch.

Ontheplaininfrontofus,wecanjust自然场景描写——平原上成

3

makeoutaherdofgracefulanimals.群的动物。

自然场景描写+心理描写

——动物们成群结队地穿过

Watchingthemmoveslowlyacross

绿色的草地，打动人心。

4thegreengrass,

①p.-ing形式watching作状

I'mstruckbytheirbeauty.

语；©struck的原形为strike,

表示“打动”。

描写动物的悲惨处境。"are

Theyarebeinghunted,illegally,for

5beinghunted”为现在进行时的

theirvaluablefur.

被动语态。

ToZhaxi,thelandissacredand描写人对大自然和野生动植

6

protectingthewildlifeisawayoflife.物的关爱之情。

“WeTenottryingtosavethe描写保护野生动植物的重要

7animals,“hesays."Actually,we're性——保护野生动植物就是

tryingtosaveourselves.”保护人类自己。

描写政府对保护野生动植物

Inordertosavethisspeciesfrom

的重视。①inordertodo作目

8extinction,theChinesegovernment

的状语；②place为熟词生义，

placeditundernationalprotection.

意为“放，置于”。

描写保护野生动植物付出的

Zhaxiandothervolunteerswatched

努力。“watchover”意为“保

9overtheantelopesdayandnightto

护；照管”；"tokeepthemsafe

keepthemsafefromattacks.

fromattacks”作目的状语c

10Themeasureswereeffective.描写措施有效。

续表

序号佳句呈现赏析

Thegovernment,however,does描写对野生动植物的关注。

notintendtostoptheprotection

“intend”意为“意图，打算”；

11programmes,sincethethreats

since意为“因为”，引导原

totheTibetanantelopehavenot

因状语从句。

yetdisappeared.

Muchisbeingdonetoprotect描写保护野生动植物的重要

wildlife,butifwcreallywant性及方法。much作主语时，

12

tosavetheplanet,wemust谓语动词用第三人称单数形

changeourwayoflife.式。

描写保护野生动植物的重要

Onlywhenwelearntoexistin

性及方法。only+when引导

harmonywithnaturecanwe

13的时间状语从句放句首，主句

stopbeingathreattowildlife

用部分倒装。“existin

andtoourplanet.

harmony”意为“和谐共存”。

表示所有的野生动植物都应

Whenitcomestowildlife

该被平等对待。①“whenit

protection1,allspecies一the

comesto”意为”当涉

14good,thebad,andthe

及...”；@U4betreated

ugly-shouldbetreated

equally”意为"被平等对

equally2；

待”。

Theworldneedsall

15kinds-withoutvariety,our描写动植物多样化的重要性。

planetcannotsurvive.

Inthiswayalotofanimal描写动植物栖息地遭到了破

16

homesarebeingdestroyed!坏。

Isitrighttomakeanimals

反问句，用来表示赞同停止对

17homelesssothathumanscan

动植物栖息地的破坏。

havemorepaper?

Itishardwork,buttheyoung

描写帮助动物虽然辛苦但是

18peopleworkingattheshelter

值得。

thinkitisworthit.

Andifyouwanttohelpout,go

19andvolunteeryourtimeand号召大家乐于奉献。

love.

HI读后续写入门篇：关注构思

读后续写要求“语言要模仿：内容要创造”。所以针对这个题型，解题需要分为两个步骤,

第一是读：读懂要素和主题、读通情节和感情发展并读精、读深；第二步就是续写：首先要关

注衔接，其次就要关注构思。

现有考查的续写文本为记叙文。基于文本特点，续写内容的丰富性取决于情节的发展。因

此，要基于前文的阅读，进行合理的预测，进而发展为续写的内容。但是，不管情节如何一波

三折，从开头到结尾，情节的发展一定要紧紧围绕主题进行。情节必须为主题服务，与主题无

关的情节就属多余。

所以，可以按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。

基于段首句，延续文章的发展

第一段预测可能的故事情节

根据第二段段首句，预测第一段的结束

基于段首句，延续文章的发展

故事的结局

第二段

升华：呼应主题——受到教训，得到启发，获得灵

感

【典题精析】

阅读下面的材料，完成以下任务。

ChitoSheddenwasasimplefishermanandtourguidefromSiquirres,LimonProvince,Costa

Rica.Hehadabroadrangeofinterestingfactsaboutnature,whichhelpedhisbusinessquiteabit.

Theyearwas1989andChitowaswalkingalongthebanksoftheReventaz6nRiverwhenhe

happeneduponsomethingverystrange.Therewasadyingmalecrocodile（鳄鱼）.Whenhestepped

uptocarefullyexaminetheskinnyreptile（爬行动物），herealizedithadbeenshotthroughthehead

andthenlefteyes.

Heknew,dangerousasitwas,hecouldn'tleavethepooranimalthere,aloneandhelpless.Chito

actedquickly,callingforthehelpofseveralbravefriendstoloadtheheavyreptileintohisboat.He

knewifhecouldhealit,hewouldthensenditbackintothewild.Henamedthehugereptile“Pocho”,

whichmeansstrengthandbegantocareforhiminhisownbackyard.

ThekindandhelpfulfishermanstartedtohealPochowithmedicine,food,andmoreimportantly,

lotsofcareandattention.Chitofedthecrocodileasteadydietofchickenandfish.Hebought

medicinetopreventinfection（感染）andevensleptbyhissideatnight.

Affectionwasoneofthemostimportantfactors.Chitogavehimkissesandhugs.Hetalkedto

himandpettedhim."Thecrocodileneededmylovetoregainthewilltolive,“hesaid.Intime,

Pochoimprovedenoughtoreturntonormalhealth.Itwastimeforhimtoreturntohisownriverin

thewild.Chitoandhisfriendsloadedthecrocodilebackintohisboatandsethimfreeinanearby

river.ThetwopartedwaysandChitoreturnedhomealone.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

Chitoawokethenextmorning,andwalkedoutside.

AcloserrelationshipluasfannedbetweenPochoandChito.

I.通读全文，本文文体为:

^^Narration记叙文

□Argument议论文

^Exposition说明文

2.一审——获要素

时态一^殳过去时

When1989

Siquirres,LimonProvince,CostaRica;along

WherethebanksoftheReventaz6nRiver;in

hisownbackyard

ChitoShedden—afishemianandtourguideandhisfriend;

Who

六要素adyingmalecrocodilenamedPocho

Chitofoundadyingmalecrocodile.

ThekindandhelpfulfishermanstartedtohealPochowith

Whatmedicine.foodandlotsofcareandattention.

Chitoandhisfriendsloadedthecrocodilebackintohisboat

andsethimfreeinanearbyriver.

Heknew,dangerousasitwas,

Whyhecouldn'tleavethepooranimalthere,alonea

ndhelpless.

HowAcloserrelationshipwasformedbetweenPochoandChilo.

3.二定——主题

主题：Ifpeopletreatwildanimalswithcareandaltentiov,animalswilldothesame.

4.三推测——关注衔接，尤其是段首句定基调

(1)续写内容和原文的衔接

原文前两段：

ChitoSheddenwasasimplefishermanandtourguidefromSiquirres,LimonProvince,Costa

Rica.Hehadabroadrangeofinterestingfactsaboutnature,whichhelpedhisbusinessquiteabit.

Theyearwas1989andChitowaswalkingalongthebanksoftheReventazonRiverwhenhe

happeneduponsomethingverystrange.Therewasadyingmalecrocodile(京粤鱼).Whenhestepped

uptocarefullyexaminetheskinnyreptile(爬行动物)，herealizedithadbeenshotthroughthehead

andthenlefteyes.

可知，续写的内容应该集中于Chito和鳄鱼之间的互动。

(2)续写第一段和段首句的衔接

首先标出第一段段首句的关键词。

Chitnawoke而j?,and7i)alk0dnutside.

说明这是Chit。把Pocho放回野外之后，在外面发生的事情。

(3)续写第一段段末和第二段段首句的衔接

首先标出第二段段首句的关键词。

AcloserrelationshipwasfonnedbetweenPoch。andChito.

根据"closer”可知,Chito和Pocho的关系更亲密了。这提示了下文,即Chito和Pocho有

更多的亲密互动。

(4)续写第二段和段首句的衔接

根据第二段段首句可知，Chilo和Pocho重新团聚。而且这种团聚源于Pocho对Chit。的

爱。

5.四构思一每段三分天下

按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。

Chito看到了Pocho回来了

第一段Pocho愿意和Chito生活在一起

一人一鳄的生活很融洽

描写一人一鳄的融洽生活

第二段一人一鳄都从这种相处中受益

升华：人类如果关爱野生动物，野生动物也会关爱人类

名校模拟演练：

1,（2022•辽宁大连•高二期末）阅读下面材料•，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整

的短文。

TheDifferenceaTeacherCanMake

Steve,atwelve-year-oldboywithalcoholicparents,wasabouttobelostfbieveibytheU.S.

educationsystem.Remarkably,hecouldread,yet,hewasfailing.Hehadbeenfailingsincefirst

grade.ThoughStevelookedbiggerthanhisage,yethewentunnoticed...untilMissWhite.

MissWhitewasasmiling,young,beautifullady!Stevelikedhisnewteacher;yet,stillhefailed.

Heneverdidhishomework.Wheneverhewaspunishedforfailingtoturninhishomework,hefelt

justterrible!Still,hedidnotstudy.

Lastweek,theentireseventhgradewastestedforbasicskills.Stevehurriedthroughhistests,

andcontinuedtodreamofotherthings.Hisheartwasnotinschool,butinthewoods,whereheoften

stayedaloneafterschool.Hewasalwaysalonebecausenoonecared.Oddly,Stevenevermisseda

dayofschool.

Oneday,MissWhite'simpatientvoicebrokeintohisdaydreams.

"Steve!"Shocked,heturnedtolookather.

“Payattention!?,MissWhitebegantogooverthetestresultsfortheseventhgrade.4tYoualldid

prettywell,"shetoldtheclass,“exceptforoneboy,anditbreaksmyhearttotellyouthis,but..."She

hesitated,pinningStevetohisseatwithasharpstare."Thesmartestboyintheseventhgradeis

failingmyclass!”ShejuststaredatSteve,astheclassturnedaroundfbragoodlook.Stevedropped

hiseyesandcarefullyexaminedhisfingertips.

“Justtryit!ONEWEEK!”Hewasunmoved.

“You'resmartenough!You'llseeachange!”Nothingchangedhim.

“Giveyourselfachance!Don'tgiveuponyourlift!”Nothing.

“Steve!Please!Icareaboutyou!,,

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右。

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Wow!Suddenly,Stevegotit:someonecaredabouthim!

ThefollowingMonday,MissWhitegaveanothertest.

2,（2022.山东聊城.高二期末）阅读下面材料，根据所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇

完整的短文。

There'saspecialboyinmyson'sclass.Everyonethinksheisabadkid.I'veheardthathetalks

loudly,disrupts（扰舌L）theclasswithburstsofnegativecomments,anddoesn'tparticipateingroups.

Healsostandsoutasthetallest.Otherparentstellhismotherthey'rescaredofhim.Yethehasnever

beenphysicallyaggressive.Sometimesheevenshowskindnesstoothersinneedofhelp.

PHcallhimJoe.Mostparentsandkidsdon'tknowJoehasAspergersyndrome.Peoplewiththe

diseasemustlearnaboutsociallyproperbehavior.It?sveryhardfbrJoetocontrolhissocialbehavior.

Hehasworkedhardsincesecondgrade.However,hehasfewfriendswhosupporthimwithpositive

comments.

Joeisinthehighest-levelmathandreadingclasses.Hewantedtojoinanactivityclubinschool,

butparentvolunteersrefusedhim.Theydidn'tacknowledgethathehadbeenworkinghardtofitinto

theschooPssocialnetworks.Iv/ishthoseparentshadseenJoewalkinghomefromschoolonecold

winterdayinJanuaryandhowhehadofferedhishelpwarmly.

Drivingby,Isawhimrunandkneeldownbyalittlegirllyingontheground.Joebrushedthe

hairfromhereyesandsmiled.Shesmiledbackthroughtears,havingslippedandfallenontheice.

Joetookoffhiscoatandspreaditout,andthenhehelpedhermovetositonit.Healsogatheredher

belongingsandputthemonhiscoat.Hewipedthesnowfromherkneesandhands,movingherarms

tocheckforinjury.ThenJoehelpedherup,tookherhandandwalkedhcrhome.liecanicdherpack

andthenrang,herdoorbell.Whenhersisterrushedherinside,thelittlegirlsmiledbackatJoe.Then

hesetherpackdownbythedoorandwalkedhomehappily.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

IstoppedbyJoe'shouselater.

Hismotherexpressedgratitudetomeassheshowedmetothedoor.

【答案】

1,Onepossibleversion:

1%卬，Steve女of”：someonecaredabouthiin!Hecouldn'tbelievehiscars.Helooked

upatMissWhiteinwonder.Fromhereagereyes,hecouldfeelthewarmthandtherealcare.Onthe

waybackhome,thosewordsconstantlyechoedinhismind.Whenhegothome,forthefirsttimein

hislife,hedidn,tstormoutoftheroomforthewoods.Heseatedhimselfbeforethedeskandplaced

hisschoolbooksonit.Determined,heturnedthefirstpageopen.

TheQIlowingMonday,Miss"aceanolhertesl.Spreadingthepapercarefullyonhisdesk,

Stevehurriedthroughthetestandwasthefirsttohandinhispaper.Obviouslypuzzled,MissWhite

begantolookitover.Inshock,sheglancedupatSteve,thendown,thenup.Suddenly,herfacebroke

intoabrightsmile."Thesmartestboyhadjustpassedhisfirsttest!”sheannounced,proudand

excited!Atherwords,Stevecrackedabigsmile,withhiseyessparklingwithjoyandgratitude.He

knewthatwasallbecauseofateacherwhocaredabouthim

【导语】本文讲述12岁的Steve,父母都是酒鬼，他的成绩一直不及格。在一次七年级测试中，

While老师说他是最聪明的男孩但是成绩却不及格。随后While老师对他进行鼓励和关心，让

他感受到了温暖和真切的关怀，于是用功学习，终于在下一次考试中及格了。

【详解】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“哇！突然，史蒂夫明白了：有人关心他！”可知，第一段描述Steve在感

受到White老师深切的关怀后的一系列心理变化和他在回家后的行为，他开始认真写作业了。

②由第二段首句内容“接下来的星期一，怀特小姐做了另一次测试。”可知，第二段描述Steve

测试的过程和结果，他通过了他的第一次考试。

2.续写线索：Steve的心理变化--Steve回家Steve写作业Steve做测验Steve第一

次及格——Steve的喜悦和感激

3.词汇激活

行为类

①.回家：gethome/returnhome/gobackhome

②.冲出：stormout/rushout

③.交卷：handinpaper/submitpaper

情绪类

①.困惑：puzzled/confused

②.震惊地：Inshock/astonishingly

【点睛】[高分句型1].Stevehurriedthroughthetestandwasthefirsttohandinhispaper.（运用T

不定式作后置定语）

[高分句型2].Heknewthatwasallbecauseofateacherwhocaredabouthim.（运用了who引导的

限定性定语