读后续写微技能之双线梳理课件高考英语二轮专题复习

读后续写微技能之双线梳理

读后续写以记叙文为主，记叙文主要描写人物经历和事物发展变化，因此在读的过程中一定要从文本双线即文本的情节线和人物的情感线出发，并结合记叙文的五大要素来梳理原文内容。1.梳理原文要素

通过梳理原文五大要素即Who，When，Where，How，What来确定文章的主题大意，了解原文中的人物、时间、地点、主要人物的情感变化等。此外，我们还应该根据原文以及文章所给出的续写段首句，厘清续写策略与线索。读五要素(1)WhoWhowerethemaincharacters?(2)WhenWhendidithappen?(3)WhereWheredidithappen?(4)HowHowdidhe/shefeel?(5)What(mainidea)Whatwasthemainidea?(6)WritingClues根据原文以及文章所给出的续写段首句，厘清续写策略与线索。2.梳理原文情节情感双线

利用“故事山”来对原文情节进行梳理，把握故事的beginning/background→risingaction→climax→fallingaction→ending/solution等情节走向，以及每个阶段主人公情感变化，从而合理推测续写情节，明确写作方向。beginning/background（Para

）情节：情感：risingaction（Para

）情节：情感：climax（Para

）

情节：

情感：fallingaction（续写Para1）ending/solution（续写Para2）3.梳理续写段首句

续写前，除了梳理原文的情节情感双线，还应剖析文章所给的两句段首句。根据段首句，从情节线和情感线两个方面提出问题，对续写部分的情节和情感走向进行合理的推测。Ihadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—loving,sweet,andyetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther. MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten. DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.AvacationwithmymotherOnthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus. Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.1.梳理原文

体裁：

记叙文

人称：

第一人称

时态：

一般过去时

读五要素（1）WhoMom,Dad,DavidandI（2）WhenWhenIwaseleven,duringmyfamilyvacation（3）WhereOnthetriptoColoradoandNorthDakota（4）HowMom(loving,sweet,absent-mindedandforgetful→responsible→_____);I(fearful→nervous→relieved→_____)（5）What(mainidea)“我”的童年非常有趣，充满惊喜与乐趣，只因为“我”有一个善良有爱却健忘的妈妈。在“我”十一岁时，“我”和妈妈、弟弟David一家四口区我外祖父所生活的省份，因为我妈妈健忘又善良的性格，使得我们的旅途惊险又有趣续写策略与线索（6）WritingClues第一段：想起了我们新买的帐篷→我提议去露营→我们搭起帐篷→开启露营的美好时光第二段：我们一路欣赏美景，心情愉悦→顺利抵达外祖父母家→感受到了妈妈的爱和家庭的温暖2.梳理原文情节情感双线beginning/background（Para1）情节：Mymother’sforgetfulnessfilledourlifewithmuchsurpriseandamusement.情感：joyful/delightedrisingaction（Para2-3）情节：Mymomwassoforgetfulthatshealwaysforgetsomethingimportant,soweallworriedaboutourtrip.情感：fearful,unwilling2.梳理原文情节情感双线climax（Para4）情节：Momsuggestedsettingupthetentatsomeone’sbackyard.Wealldisagreed.Finallywefoundahotel.情感：nervous,relievedfallingaction（续写Para1）Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.ending/solution（续写Para2）Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.3.梳理续写段首句fallingaction（续写Para1）Didweusethetent?Whatdidwedowiththetent?Wheredidweputupthetent？Howdidwefeelaboutthecamping?…ending/solution（续写Para2）(1)Whatsightsdidwesee?(2)Whatelsedidweexperiencealongthetripapartfromthegreatsights?(3)Didwesuccessfullymakeittoourgrandparents’place?(4)Howdidwefeelattheendofourtrip?…4.续写故事Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

Mom

insistedthatweshouldmakefulluseoftheunused

tent.

David

andIlookedat

Dad,hopinghecouldstophercrazyidea.ButMomwasdeterminedtouseitatleastonceduringourtrip.Wefinallystoppedatthefrontdoorstepofahousewithabigbackyard.Sittingaroundthecampfire,wetalkedandlaughed.ItwasthefirsttimethatIhadthought

Mom

couldbewiseasIwasadmiringourtent.Thatnight,wesleptsoundlyandhadasweetdreamevenwiththechillywindblowingoutside.Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.

Thebrightbluesky,theendlessgreengrass,thesettingsunandthecountlessstarsofnightkeptmespellbound.Welaughedandchattedalltheway.Toourrelief,wearrivedatourgrandparents’homesafely.Aswesettledintothefamiliarembraceofmygrandparents’home,weknewthatthisjourneywouldforeverholdaspecialplaceinourhearts.Thatnight,Iwaslostinthoughtwhenwesharedourtripwithmygrandparents.“Whereisourtent,David?”Oh,myGod.Momforgottoputitinthetrunk.Itwasawonderfulspringday.TheEarthwasfinallyawakeningfromherwintersleep.Newlifewaseverywhere.Theskywasclearandblue.Theairmelledsweet.Thesunwaskisingtheworld

with

itswarmth.Itwasalreadynearly21°C.

Iwasdrivingtopickmysonupfromtheworkshopwhere

heworksafewdaysaweek.OnmydriveIsawvariousbeautifulflowersinpeople'syards.Thefieldswerefullofyellowdandelions(蒲公英)

Withsomealreadyturningintolittlewhiteballsofseeds.Thetreeswerestartingtoawakentoo.Theblossomsonthem

werewhite,purpleandpink.Thesongsofthebirdswereintheairas

well.Iwastakingitallinandfeelingthelovefromthecreationallaroundme.

Ilongedtobeapartofitandsharemyloveaswell.Ipulledintothedrivewayoftheworkshopandparkedmycar.As

Igotout,Isawalostlittlebutterflylarva(幼虫)movingthewrong

waytowardsthesidewalk.ItwasjustabouttogoundermytirewhenIreacheddownandpickeditup.Ihelditgentlyinmyhandand

walkedovertothegrassyhillsideontheothersideoftheparkinglot.BeforeIputitdown,Isaid,"Youwillneverbecomeabutterflyifyou

getrunovermyfriend.Thebestplaceyoustayisthegrass.Justthen,itwastimetoleavework,andmysoncameout.Ashe

sawme,hewavedfromthedistance.Ihurriedtomeethim,stillholdingthebutterflylarvainmyhand.WhenhesawwhatIhad

inmy

hand,hewasverycuriousandaskedmewhatIwasholding.Itold

himandsaidIwasgoingtoputitbackinthegrass.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Mysonsuggestedtakingthebutterflylarvahometolookafterit.___________________________________________________________________.Themomentfinallyarrivedwhenthelarvawasgoingtobecomeabutterfly.

___________________________________________________________________.1.梳理原文

体裁：

人称：

时态：_________

读五要素（1）Who（2）When（3）Where（4）How（5）What(mainidea)续写策略与线索（6）WritingClues记叙文第三人称一般过去时inpeople'syards本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在春天里的一天开车去接儿子，下车时看到一只迷路的小蝴蝶幼虫朝人行道上错误的方向移动。作者儿子提议带回家照看的直至目睹幼虫化茧成蝶的故事。I,myson

awonderfulspringdaymyson(curious→______)第一段：我同意了儿子的建议→查询相关护理幼虫信息→对幼虫进行细心护理→幼虫日益变大成型；第二段：我和儿子对幼虫成蝶的反应→儿子把成果向老师和同学展示→得到同学老师的热烈欢迎→主旨升华：人与自然和谐共处。2.梳理原文情节情感双线

情感线:细心照看幼虫然后目睹幼虫化茧成蝶的收获和情感变化。情节线:

作者在春天里的一天开车去接儿子，下车时看到一只迷路的小蝴蝶幼虫朝人行道上错误的方向移动。作者儿子提议带回家照看的直至目睹幼虫化茧成蝶的故事。

初遇（状态、行为）

日常细心

护理

特别事件（目睹幼虫

化茧成蝶）

结局，升华主题（人与动物和谐相处）主题：人与自然

人与动物人与动物故事构造人与动物和谐共处主题升华：陪伴、珍爱生命、自然和谐、忠诚等。人与动物产生冲突、成功脱险主题升华：难忘的经历、获得教训、感谢他人救助。Mysonsuggestedtakingthebutterflytolookafterit.Iagreedandmysonimmediatelysetouttosearchforknowledgeaboutraisingbutterflies.HesearchedtheInternetandeventurnedtohisbiologyteacheratschoolforhelp.Hethencreatedasuitableenvironmentforthebutterflytogrowathomeandprovideditwithsuitablefood.

Withthecarefulcareofmyson,thelarvagrewlargerdaybyday,anditwascontinuallychangingitscolorandshape.Themomentfinallyarrivedwhenthelarvawasgoingtobecomeabutterfly.Mysonhadbeenlookingforwardtothi