高三英语二轮复习专项教学设计：《人际温情善良传递类读后续写》

高三英语二轮复习专项教学设计：《人际温情善良传递类读后续写》一、试题呈现阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。IwasreallystarvingwhenIsteppedoutofthecitylibraryafteranentireafternoonburiedinbooks.ThenIsmeltsomethingdelicious—thehotdogstandatthestreetcorner.“Onehotdog,please!”Inearlyrushedtothestand.“OK,readysoon!”Thevendorrepliedcheerfully.Ashehandedmethehotdog,hegrinned,“Youdeservethebesthotdogintheworld!”Iguessedthatwasthesloganforhislittlebusiness,forthewordswerepaintedincheerfulyellowlettersonhiscart.Icouldn’twaittotakeabite.Thewarmbread,thechillisauceandthejuiceinthesausage—itwasthebestthingintheworld!Definitelyatthattime!“Fivedollars,younglady,”thevendorsaid,wipinghishandsonhisapron.Hotdoginonehand,Ireachedformywalletwiththeother.Justthen,“Ouch!”acrycamefrombehindme.Iturnedbackandfoundawomaninher50’sstrugglingtopickherselfupfromtheground.Hergrocerybagsplitopenwithorangesrollingineverydirection.Seeingthis,Istuffedtherestofthehotdogintomymouth,pickeduptheorangesandputthembackintoherbag.“Areyouokay?”Iaskedwithconcern.“Thankyou.Ididn’tseethepoleontheground,”shebreathed.Noticingherhandwaswounded,IrememberedtheBandAidinmybaganddugitout.“Thankyousomuchforyourkindness,”thewomansaidasIcarefullyappliedittoherwound.Acrossthestreet,thebusIwasabouttotakewaspullingin.Wavingagoodbyetothewoman,Idashedtothebusstopandbarelygotaboardbeforethedoorclosed.it...ebuspulledaway,Isawthewomanboughtahotdogfromthesamevendor.Ontheway,Iwasalwayswonderingifshewouldbegreetedwiththesamewords,“Youdeservethebesthotdogintheworld!”Iwaslostinit...写作要求续写词数应为每段150左右；请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Butwait—hadIforgottensomething?Paragraph2:“Someonehaspaidforit,”thevendorsmiled.二、文本分析与续写思路构建（一）文本类型定位本文属于人际温情/善良帮扶/道德冲突类读后续写材料，以日常生活场景为载体，融入道德选择与情感升华元素，核心围绕“善意传递”与“诚信坚守”展开，符合高考读后续写“贴近生活、凸显人文”的命题趋势。（二）核心要素拆解表分析维度具体内容原文支撑依据人物特质主人公：热心善良、略带莽撞；摊主：温和友善；妇人：懂得感恩“Istuffedtherest...putthembackintoherbag”“Thevendorrepliedcheerfully”“Thankyousomuchforyourkindness”情感脉络主人公：饥饿→满足→关切→愧疚→释然→温暖“Iwasreallystarving”→“itwasthebestthingintheworld”→“askedwithconcern”→“panicsetin”→“warmthroseinmychest”关键情节点买热狗→助妇人→忘付款→妇人购热狗→返回补款→善意闭环“Hergrocerybagsplitopen...”→“dashedtothebus”→“sawthewomanboughtahotdog”语言风格口语化表达为主，穿插感官描写与动作细节，氛围温馨“thejuiceinthesausage—itwasthebestthing”“cheerfulyellowlettersonhiscart”核心关键词“deserve”（贯穿全文，暗示主题）“Youdeservethebesthotdogintheworld!”（重复出现）隐含伏笔1.摊主的标语（为主题升华铺垫）；2.妇人购买热狗（为代付情节埋伏）“thewordswerepaintedincheerfulyellowletters”“thewomanboughtahotdogfromthesamevendor”（三）故事山模式解构开端：图书馆出来饥饿难耐，前往街角购买热狗发展：品尝热狗时偶遇跌倒妇人，主动上前帮扶高潮：因赶公交匆忙离开，遗漏热狗付款环节转折：乘车途中意识到未付款，陷入道德纠结结局：返回摊位发现妇人已代付，善意形成闭环（四）续写核心思路段落1（承接开头语“Butwait—hadIforgottensomething?”）：触发点：通过口袋中未打开的钱包意识到未付款心理刻画：愧疚感与诚信意识的拉扯（突出内心挣扎）动作推进：果断下车折返摊位，展现主人公的道德坚守细节呼应：描写返回途中对摊主善意的回忆，呼应原文“cheerfulyellowletters”等元素段落2（承接开头语“Someonehaspaidforit,”thevendorsmiled.）：真相揭示：摊主解释妇人代付的经过，引用妇人感恩话语主题升华：将摊主的标语从“商业口号”升华为“善意真谛”情感落点：主人公领悟“善意传递”的意义，内心获得温暖与释然语言衔接：延续原文感官描写与口语化风格，保持叙事连贯性三、描写技巧与语言升级体系（一）动作描写高级表达基础表达升级表达例句示范（贴合文本场景）rundash/rush/sprintRealizingmymistake,Isprintedoffthebusandheadedbacktothehotdogstand.takeoutmoneyfumbleforthebill/gropeforthewalletMyfingersfumbledforthefivedollarbillinmypocket,eagertomakeupfortheoversight.stopskidtoahalt/etoanabruptstopIskiddedtoahaltinfrontofthevendor,gaspingforbreathafterthehastyrun.sayquicklyblurtout/stammerIblurtedoutmyapology,afraidthevendormightfeelwrongedbymycarelessness.（二）心理描写精准表达情感类型高级表达例句示范（贴合文本场景）愧疚Guiltgnawedatmyconscience/AflushofshamecreptupmycheeksGuiltgnawedatmyconscienceasIrecalledthevendor’scheerfulgrinwhenhandingmethehotdog.焦虑Panicseizedme/MymindracedwithuneasePanicseizedmewhenIrealizedIhadleftwithoutpaying—howcouldIrepaythevendor’skindnesswithsuchcarelessness?释然Awaveofreliefwashedoverme/TensionmeltedawayAwaveofreliefwashedovermewhenthevendorsaidsomeonehadpaid,andwarmthfollowedasIlearnedthetruth.感动Myheartswelledwithwarmth/AglowspreadthroughmychestMyheartswelledwithwarmthatthewoman’sgratitude—neverhadasimplehotdogcarriedsomuchmeaning.（三）环境描写氛围烘托场景元素高级表达例句示范（贴合文本场景）天色twilight/dusk/thesettingsuncastawarmglowThesettingsuncastawarmglowonthestreet,andthecheerfulyellowlettersonthecartseemedtoshinesoftly.气味thesavoryaromalingered/thescentwaftedthroughtheairThesavoryaromaofgrilledsausagestilllingeredaroundthestand,remindingmeofthedelicioustasteIhadenjoyedearlier.街道thestreetwasbathedinsoftlight/thedistanthumofthecityThestreetwasbathedinsoftstreetlight,andthedistanthumofthecityfadedintothebackgroundasItalkedwiththevendor.（四）核心词汇与短语升级表核心概念基础词汇高级替换词释义高兴happydelighted/beaming情绪饱满的，笑容灿烂的好的goodsuperb/remarkable极好的，值得称赞的付款paysettlethebill/coverthecost结清款项，支付费用感谢thankappreciate/begratefulto由衷感激，深表谢意匆忙hurriedhasty/precipitate仓促的，情急之下的（五）语法结构优化技巧非谓语动词（增强句式灵活性）：例句：Determinedtocorrectmymistake,Ihurriedoffthebusandranbacktothestand.（过去分词作状语）例句：Holdingtheunopenedwalletinmyhand,Ifeltadeepsenseofshame.（现在分词作状语）无灵主语句（提升表达地道性）：例句：ColdrealizationstruckmeasItouchedthewalletinmypocket.（以“realization”为主语）例句：WarmthroseinmychestwhenIheardthevendor’sexplanation.（以“warmth”为主语）倒装句（强化情感表达）：例句：Neverhadasimplehotdogbroughtmesuchaprofoundunderstandingofkindness.例句：NotuntilthatmomentdidItrulygraspthemeaningofthevendor’sslogan.强调句（突出核心信息）：例句：Itwasthewoman’sgratitudethatturnedacarelessmistakeintoabeautifullesson.例句：Itwasthevendor’skindnessthatmademedeterminedtoreturnandpay.（六）核心短语用法解析buriedinbooks：固定搭配，喻指“埋头读书”，buried此处为比喻义，用法地道。拓展：buriedinwork（埋头工作）、buriedinthought（陷入沉思）pickherselfup：固定短语，指“（跌倒后）自行站起”，区别于pickupsth.（捡起某物）、picksb.up（接某人）。splitopen：表示“裂开，撕开”，比break更精准，侧重“突然破裂”的状态。例句：Theoverfilledbagsplitopen,scatteringthefruitsontheground.barelygotaboard：barely表示“勉强，几乎不”，aboard为副词，指“上车/船/飞机”，精准体现“赶公交的紧迫性”。belostinit：省略thought的简洁表达，等同于belostinthought（陷入沉思），符合口语化叙事风格。四、优秀续写范文展示范文1Paragraph1Butwait—hadIforgottensomething?Acoldrealizationstruckmeasmyhandbrushedagainsttheunopenedwalletinmypocket.Ihadn’tpaidforthehotdog!Panicseizedme,andthevendor’scheerfulgrinandthebrightyellowsloganonhiscartflashedinmymind.HowcouldIleavewithoutsettlingthebillafterhehadservedmewithsuchkindness?ThebushadonlygonetwoblockswhenIpressedthestopbuttonfirmly.Assoonasthedooropened,Idashedoffandsprintedbackalongthestreet,theeveningbreezecoolingmyflushedcheeks.BythetimeIreachedthestand,Iwasoutofbreath,mychestheavingwitheverygasp.“Sir,I’msosorry—Iwasinarushtocatchthebusandpletelyforgottopayforthehotdog,”Istammered,fumblingforthefivedollarbill.Paragraph2“Someonehaspaidforit,”thevendorsmiled.Hiseyestwinkledwarmlyashewipedhishandsonhisapron,whichstillborethefaintstainsofchillisauce.“Theladyyouhelpedwiththeoranges—sheboughtahotdogrightafteryouleftandinsistedoncoveringyourcost,”heexplained,noddingtowardthedistantsidewalkwherethewoman’sfigurewasslowlyfading.Ifroze,speechless,asawaveofreliefandgratitudewashedoverme.“Shesaidyoudeservedthebesthotdogintheworldforyourkindness,”thevendoradded,repeatingthefamiliarsloganthatnowcarriedaprofoundmeaning.Istaredatthecart’syellowletters,andsuddenlyunderstood:kindnessisnotaonewayactbutacirclethatconnectsstrangers.Atthatmoment,theeveningairfeltwarmer,andIknewthebestpartofthehotdogwasn’titstaste—butthewarmthofthe善意passedbetweenus.范文2Paragraph1Butwait—hadIforgottensomething?MymindracedasIsatonthebus,andthenithitme:thevendor’swords“Fivedollars”stillechoedinmyears,butmywallethadneverleftmypocket.ShamecreptupmycheeksasIimaginedthevendor’sdisappointmentwhenherealizedIhadn’tpaid.HowcouldIletamomentofhasteovershadowmysenseofhonesty?Withoutasecondthought,Ijumpedoffatthenextstopandhurriedback.ThesavoryaromaofhotdogsgrewstrongerasIapproachedthestand,andthecheerfulyellowlettersseemedtoglowinthedusk.MyhearthammeredagainstmyribsasIapproached,andIpulledoutthemoneyinadvance.“I’mterriblysorryformycarelessness—Iforgottopayforthehotdogearlier,”Isaid,holdingoutthebilltothevendor.Paragraph2“Someonehaspaidforit,”thevendorsmiled.Hiscalmandamusedtonetookmebysurprise.“Thatkindladywiththewoundedhandcameoverafteryouleft.Shesaidyouhelpedherpickuptheorangesandbandagedherwound,sothishotdogwashertreat,”herecounted.Followinghisgaze,Ispottedthewomanwalkingslowlydownthestreet,hergrocerybagheldsecurely.AlumpformedinmythroatasIrealizedhowasmallactofkindnesshadefullcircle.Thevendor’sslogan,oncejustabusinessline,nowresonateddeeplyinmyheart—“Youdeservethebesthotdogintheworld.”Itwasn’tjustaboutthefood;itwasarecognitionofthegoodnessinhumannature.AsIturnedtoleave,Ifeltawarmglowinmychest,knowingthatkindnessisthemostprecious“sauce”thatenrichesourlives.五、高分表达替换与句式模板（一）情感递进句式模板愧疚触发：______dawnedonmethatIhad______/AflushofshamecreptupmycheekswhenIrealized______应用：ItdawnedonmethatIhadforgottentopayforthehotdog/AflushofshamecreptupmycheekswhenIrealizedmyoversight.决心行动：Determ