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概要写作Summarywriting高考新题型题型、题量及分值新高考卷全国卷总分满分150分满分150分听力20小题

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(每小题1.5分，共15分)短文改错无10处错误(每处错误1分，共10分)书面表达第一节应用文写作(15分);第二节读后续写或概要写作(25分)应用文(满分25分)变化/卷别新高考卷阅读理解全国卷阅读理解篇幅题量A篇(3小题)A篇(3小题)B篇(3小题)B篇(4小题)C篇(4小题)C篇(4小题)/D篇(4小题)体裁记叙文、说明文应用文、记叙文、说明文分值10x2.5=2515x2=30词数不少于900词不少于1100词新高考的写作部分变为两个部分：第一部分：应用文写作，15分80词左右第二部分：读后续写150词左右或者概要写作60词左右25分，这两种在不同形式不定期使用。

Whatis“summary”Asummaryisabriefrestatementoftheessentialthoughtofalongercomposition

概要是一篇较长文章本质思想的简洁重述，它要求用尽量少的语言对原文的主旨进行复述。概要不是简单的换句话说，更不是评论，而是作者思想中最基本部分的准确再现。Howtogetahighmar《考试说明》中评分标准规定概要写作阅卷时按5个档次给分，其中最高档次第五档（21-25points）：理解准确，涵盖全部要点；能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇；完全使用自己的语言；有效使用了语句间的连接成分，使完成的概要结构紧凑。contents内容languagesills语言structure结构agoodsummaryalltheeypointsgrammar,vocabularytightandcoherent连贯yourownwordsabout60-80wordsrightspelling,properpunctuationHowtowritingagoodsummary定位findouttheessentialinformationB改写rewritetheinformationinyourownwordsC核查checthesentencesandaddsomeconjunctionsA定位通过阅读定位语篇的核心信息，包括核心单词，核心短语和核心句子。（句子为主，以单词和短语为辅）

typeskeyinformation记叙文narration人物+时间+地点+事件（起因+经过+结果）说明文exposition描写某事物的性质功用。即“对象+性质功用+利好”；针对某个问题提出解决方法或措施。即“问题+解决方法”；介绍某现象及其原因和结果。即“现象+原因+结果”议论文argumentation论点+论据(+结论)1确定文体thetypesofthepassage√√2消减事例Intheearly16thcentury,eanstoblocoutdisease,asmedicaloSodidtheingofEnglishin15463省略细节（尽量减少实事，大胆省略实事）essentialinformationB改写在核心信息的基础上进行语言表达形式的改写，对原文的语言表达形式尽可能实现大规模的改变。

改写过程中，原则上字数不超过原句，不改变原文的逻辑结构，充分考虑语句压缩。1使用近义词或反义词houYangwillrememberhisfirsttasasareporterToresearchwhethersucha“sithsense”reallyeists,RobertBaeredtwoeentsNeverwillhouYangforgethisfirstassignmentasajournaliststudyifcarriedout/did/madeShebroughthomealotofboosandmagaines2把短语变为单词CleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealthCleaningawaydirtbenefitshealth3使用广义词generalwords代替具体词specificwordsShebroughthomeseveralChineseandEnglishnovels,afewcoeandNewswee,andsometetboosHedidn’tliethecityHehatedit4消除重复5把直接引语的主要信息变为间接引语Thebosssaidtohim,“Tillyou’remoreeperiencedyoucancoverastory”HedisliedthecityThebosssaidthatwithmoreeperiencehecouldcovernews6主动句和被动句互换RobertBaer,aedtwoeentsTwoeentswerecarriedoutbyapsychologist7基本句型间灵活转换DirtonthesinwasameanstoblocoutdiseaseSVPSVODirtonthesincouldgettingillYouwillobtainalltheinformationifvariousquestionsareased8特殊句式（强调句，倒装句，therebe）和正常语序句式的转化OnlyifyouasmanydifferentquestionswillyouacquirealltheinformationToresearchwhethersucha“sithsense”reallyeists,RobertBaer,…thereisreallyasithsense9把从句变为短语介词短语，非谓语动词短语Iftheintervieweeagrees,youcanusearecordertogetthefactsstraightWiththeinterviewee’sagreement,arecordercouldbeused________________________________________Thesinisanecessaryorgan,whichcanserveasabarrieragainstoutsidedangersBaerconcludesthatpeopledonothavetheabilitytosensewhenthey’rebeingstaredat10各种从句的灵活转化Hisconclusionisthatpeoplearenotequippedwiththeabilitytofeelothers’observationC核查核查连贯性优先考虑使用最短连接词（but、then、later、finally、besides、thus、therefore、yet、however）核查字数（60-80words）核查标点和语法StemarystepscontentsThe1ststep定位核心信息The2ndstep在核心信息基础上，进行语言表达形式改写（改词，换句型）The3rdstep核查连接词，语法和标点2016年《考试说明》概要写作样题段落核心信息功能1…thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.论点+论据2Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease….France/EnglandInEurope3…sincethe18thcentury…cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.4nowadays…anAmericanimmunologist,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.…thereisnothingfiedaboutattitudestodirthave,eist,changingopinions，viewpointseChangingviewpointstowardsdirteistPeople’sviewpointstowardsdirtarechanging…SVPIntheearly16thcentury,eanstoblocoutdisease…France/EnglandInEuropeItwasthoughtthat…/Peoplebelievedthat……;…;eeSVPillness,gettingillIntheearly16thcentury,eEurofromgettingillIntheearly16thcentury,eEurogettingillSVOsomeEuropeancountries…sincethe18thcentury…cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealthDoingAisgoodtoBItisgoodforBtodoAovedirtsincethe18thcenturyremove,wash…offbenefityourhealth,eep…healthySincethe18thcentury,peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycaneepushealthy…Nowadays…anAmericanimmunologist,encourageschildrentomunesystemnow/atpresentsomescientistsadvise,suggest,holdtheviewpowerfulepose…toNow,moremunesystemMoreandmoreedirtmayhelmunesystem…eIntheearly16thcentury,itwasthoughtthatdirtonthesincouldgettingillHowever,ovedirtsincethe18thcenturyNow,anincreasingnumberofmunesystemDon’tforgettomaeyoursummarytight!Onceue,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforeverIfyouboughtacarorastove,itwasaonce-in-a-lifetimeinvestmentYouoneyforit,andyoutoocareofitNowadaysindustryhaseItischeaawaythantoreThishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesJustthinofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyleThinoftheeaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisboughtAndweshoaterial!OurindustrialsocietyhasturnedusintospoiledchildrenThiswastefulnesshasgotusintothegreattroubleweareinnowWhenwehavenoresourcesleft,thenwewillstarttotaecareofwhatwehaveButwhycan’tweactbeforethishappensWhycan’twetrytobuildasocietyinwhichthepreventionofwasteisavirtue概要写作难点1Howtogettheeypointsquiclyandcorrectly如何快速、准确地捕捉要点抓住主题句或关键信息，忽略次要信息Para1：Onceue,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforeverIfyouboughtacarorastove,itwasaonce-in-a-lifetimeinvestmentYouoneyforit,andyoutoocareofitdetailedeampletopicsentencecharacteristics忽略具体事例概要写作难点2Howtoepresstheeypointsbyusingyourownwordsproperly如何灵活诠释，规避抄袭的嫌疑Onceue,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforever_________________,industrialgoods

weremade________________________Sometimeago;Inthepast;Decadesagotobeusedforalongtime;tofunctionwellforalongtime;durable持久的近义词替换Decadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurableYouoneyforit,andyoutoocareofitsuchmoneyontreasure;treatitindly;Yousuchmoneyonitandtreasureituseitcarefully;Para1Decadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurableYousuchmoneyonitandtreasureitNowadaysindustryhaseItischeaawaythantoreThishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesJustthinofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyleThinoftheeaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisboughtAndweshoaterial!Para2NowadaysindustryhaseItischeaawaythantoreThishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesJustthinofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyleThinoftheeaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisboughtAndweshoaterial!topicsentencedetailedeamplescharacteristicsresult忽略具体事例1Nowadaysindustryhase2Itischeaawaythantore3Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesModernIndustrymadeusbelieve;convincednotanent;Modernindustryhasconvincedusthatanentshort-lived近义词替换2ItischeaawaythantoreTothrowthemawayischeaItismoreethantothrowthemaway改变主语（形式主语）正话反说、反话正说Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourceswhichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources改变句式resultinModernindustryhasconvincedusthatanentTothrowthemawayischea,whichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesPara2Para3：提炼相关信息OurindustrialsocietyhasturnedusintospoiledchildrenThiswastefulnesshasgotusintothegreattroubleweareinnowWhenwehavenoresourcesleft,thenwewillstarttotaecareofwhatwehaveButwhycan’tweactbeforethishappensWhycan’twetrytobuildasocietyinwhichthepreventionofwasteisavirtue过渡句Weneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolateThiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftroubleWearerunningoutofresourcesandweneedtotaeactionThiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftroubleWearerunningoutofresourcesandweneedtotaeactionWeneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolatePara3ThiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftroubleWearerunningoutofresourcesWeneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolateDecadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurableWesuchmoneyonitandtreasureitModernindustryhasconvincedusthatanentTothrowthemawayischea,whichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresourcesThiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftroubleWearerunningoutofresourcesWeneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolate71WPolishyourwriting有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使概要结构紧凑However,Therefore,ThefoodweeatseemstohaveagreateffectonourhealthAlthoughsciencehasmadebigstemonlyusedtoeeeatsandotherfoodadditives（添加剂）causedcancer

Yet,theseadditivesremaininourfood,anditisdifficulttonowwhichthingsonthewrafulTheadditiveswhichweeatarenotallsodirectFarmersoftengiveals,andbecauseofthis,ilofcowsSometimessimilartingsaresualsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomaeaersaresimalsinordertogetahigheraretAlthoughsomecountrieshavetriedtocontrolsuchthings,thepracticecontinues（201W）ThefoodweeatseemstohaveagreateffectonourhealthAlthoughsciencehasmadebigstemonlyusedtoeeeatsandotherfoodadditives（添加剂）causedcancer

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1Yet,theseadditivesremaininourfood,anditisdifficulttonowwhichthingsonthewraful2Theadditiveswhichweeatarenotallsodirect3Sometimessimilartingsaresualsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomaeaprofit

1Wecanhardlytellwhethertheadditivesinourfoodareharmfulornot2Theyaffectourbodyindirectly3Sometimessimilartingsaresualsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomaeaprofit

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Itisnecessarytolimit“screentime”ifpeoplewanttoloseweightWearesue”Itisnecessarytolimit“screentime”ifpeoplewanttoloseweightoreallerilinsteadofsodaSticingtosmallerportionsandavoidingsugarydrinscontributetoweightlossWatchingoutforportionsiesanddriningwaterinsteadofsugarydrinsarealsoaeytoweightlossorelateronSotheygetmorecaloriesthantheywouldhaveiftheyatebreafastInfact,sthanpeoplewhoeatbreafastIfyoureallyputtheaboveintopracticeatonce,youwilldefinitelyreduceyourweightgraduallyAndwishyouhaveagoodfigurePeopleshouldavoidsippingbreafastSippingbreafastisactuallynotawisewaytoloseweightPeoplewillhaveagoodfigureiftheytaetheabovesuggestionsChangingsomehabitsmaybeagoodwaytoloseweightTaingmoreaemuchdifferencetoe”SticingtosmallerportionsandavoidingsugarydrinscontributetoweightlossPeopleshouldavoidsippingbreafastPeoplewillhaveagoodfigureiftheytaetheabovesuggestions58WFirst,Meanwhile,Besides，Finally，Ratseatourfoodormaeitsodirtythatitisn'tfitforbylayingdownustbecleverandcunningSomescientistshavebeentryingtofindthebestwaytotheseholestotheeSotheynowtheirmanydaystogetoverthefearTheyarealsofrightenedtogonearaethinghasbeentaenawayIfaeeIftherocistaenaway,theywillstillrunroundthe,eventhoughitwouldbequic