Unit4+Body+language+读后续写同步写作+高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit4Bodylanguage人教版2019选择性必修第一册读后续写读话题写作文高二上Module4LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123技法点拨

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使续写更加形象生动01续写中的动作描写应该是一连串动作过程的展示,尤其在展示人物个性化的动作时，如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程，表现力便会大增。(1)Tomkneltdownandpattedthedog.汤姆跪下来拍了拍狗。(2)Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.歌手瞥了一眼观众，深吸了一口气，开始唱歌。(3)Mymothergatheredmeinherarmsandwhisperedtocomfortme.我妈妈搂着我，小声安慰我。(4)Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothe

animal.他拿出肉来，瞄准狼，直接向它扔过去。Tip1:使用动作链，动作过程化1.使用非谓语动词(1)Thenightfalling,theyputupatent,singingandchattingtogetherhappily.夜幕降临，他们支起帐篷，一起开心地唱歌聊天。(2)Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphone,knittinghisbrows.坐在地铁上，老人盯着他的手机，皱着眉头。(3)Icuppedmyhandoverthephone,whispcringthatImeantnoharm.我用手捂住电话，低声说我没有恶意。(4)Wideninghiseyesinextremehorror,Sheldonfledaway,screaming.“Mom,help!”谢尔顿极度恐惧地睁大了眼睛，跑开了，尖叫道：“妈妈，救命!”Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化2.使用形容词作状语IHefinallyfoundhiswayintotheforest,cxhaustedbutexcited.他终于找到了进入森林的路，疲惫却很兴奋。3.使用介词短语Shepacedtoherbedroomanddressedherselfwiththegreatestcare.她踱步来到自己的寝室，精心打扮了一番。4.使用副词或从句。(1)TheclassclappedwarmlyasMrLeepresentedmewiththereward.Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化4.使用副词或从句。(1)TheclassclappedwarmlyasMrLeepresentedmewiththereward.当李老师给我发奖时，全班同学热烈鼓掌。(2)HeencouragedmeandarguedthatIshouldworkontheprojectalone.他鼓励我并主张我独自完成该课题。(3)Igatheredmycouragc,andsinccrelyapologizedtohimformymisconduct.我鼓起勇气，为自己的不当行为向他真诚地道歉。Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化佳

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跟着课文学佳句02细节描写1.她的父亲轻轻地、平静地吻了一下她的脸颊。Hisfatherkissedheronthecheekgentlyandcalmly.3.双臂交叉放在胸前，我盯着门看，想知道她为什么没有出现。Witharmscrossedinfrontofmychest,Istaredatthedoorandwonderedwhyshedidn'tturnup.2.当我们和新主人握手时，我告诉他们，他们是多么幸运。Asweshookhandswiththenewowners，Itoldthemhowfortunatetheywere.原：Withtheirchinsontheirhands,theyoccupythemselvesbystaringoutofthewindoworupattheceiling.原：

IncountrieslikeFranceandRussia,peoplemaykisstheirfriendsonthecheekwhentheymeet.原：Elsewhere,peoplefavourshakinghands,bowingfromthewaist,ornoddingtheheadwhentheymeetsomeoneelse.细节描写4.她很沮丧，什么也不想做，两眼哭得通红。Depressed,shefeltinnomoodtodoanything.Hereyeswereredfromweeping.6.根据机票预订系统显示的需求，新增航班的数量每年都在变化。

Thenumberoftheaddedflightsvariesfromyeartoyearaccordingtothedemandshownbyflightticketbookingsystems.5.令我印象最深的是，我一次英语考试不及格，我双手捂脸，尴尬而失望。WhatimpressedmemostwasthatIfailedinanEnglishexam,hidingmyfaceinthehands,awkwardanddisappointed.原：

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However,ifastudentdoesnotbothertobrushherhairandhereyesareredfromweeping.thenIcaninferthattherearedeeperissuesatwork.原：Theymayalsohidetheirfacesintheirhandsliketheyareembarrassedorashamed.03写作实践:

触类旁通阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

IhadbeenswimmingcompetitivelyforfiveyearsandwasreadytoquitbecauseIfeltIwashorribleatit.IwasoftentheonlyAfricanAmericanataswimcompetition.Ikeptreceiving“HonorableMentions”.Anyathleteknowsthatyoudon’twanttohaveabookshelffullof“HonorableMentions”,whichyougetjustbecauseyoushowedup.Onesummerday,thedaybeforeabigswimmeet,IdecidedtobreakthenewstomygrandmathatIwasquittingtheswimteam.WhenItoldherofmydesiretoquitswimming,shelookedmeintomyface,sayingfirmlybutwarmly:“Baby,rememberthesewords:’Aquitterneverwinsandawinnerneverquits.’Yourgrandfatherdidn’traiselosersorquitters.Yougotothatswimmeettomorrow,andyouswimlikeyouareagrandchildofmine,youhear?”Iwastooafraidtosayanythingbut“Yes,ma’am.”Thenextdaywearrivedattheswimmeetlate,missingmygroupofswimmersinthe15/16agegroup.MycoachinsistedIbeallowedtoswimwiththeoldergroup.Iknewshewasincludingmeintheracesoourlongdrivewouldnotbewasted,andshehadnoexpectationswhatsoeverthatIwouldcomeinanythingbuteighthplaceandonlythatbecausetherewerenotninelanes.AsIwasmounting(走上)theboard,alltheothergirlslookedatme.Iquicklynoticedthatthesegirlswereheretodoonething—beatme!Allofasuddenmygrandma’swordsranginmyhead:”Quittersneverwinandwinnersneverquit.Youswimlikeyouareagrandchildofmine.Quittersneverwinandwinnersneverquit....”“Yes,grandma,IwillswimlikeIamagrandchildofyours.”Isaidtomyself.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:SPLASH(扑通一声)!IwasswimmingharderthanI’deverswumbefore.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Justthen,cheersandclapsoverwhelmedme.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析选文以参加游泳比赛为背景，讲述了“我”准备退出已经参加了五年的游泳比赛，但奶奶让作者坚持下去。第二天去参赛时却错过了自己的15/16岁年龄组赛，不得不参加更大的年龄组的比赛，当“我”登上跳板时想起了奶奶的话……“遭遇打击”、“坚持不懈”和“所愿获奖”。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的

“5W1H”。要素内容whoI;mygrandma;mycoach;theothergirlswhenonesummer’sday,thedaybeforeabigswimmeetwheretheswimmeetwhyImissedmygroupofswimminginthe15/16agegroupandhadtoswimwiththeolder17/18agegroup.whatIgatheredcouragetocompeteintheolder17/18agegrouphow?22第二步：构建情节What’sthegenreofthepassage?Narration（记叙文）Argumentation（议论文）Exposition（说明文）Readforthegenre

1.两段首句定第一段续写第一段的段首语“SPLASH!IswamharderthanIhadeverswumbefore（扑通一声!我游得比以前任何时候都努力).”以及第二段的首句“ItwasthenthatIheardtheclapsandcheersaroundme（就在那时，欢呼声和掌声淹没了我），”可知，第一段应写“我”的比赛全程（全力以赴十心理活动）,以及抵达终点（touchedthewall)过程中的所做、所感。情节可以为：开始领先(Afterthefirstflipturn,hadahalf-bodylengthleadovertheothergirls)——对手加速(theyspedupandnarrowedthegap)、局面落后——感到疲惫(felttired)、奶奶的话在耳边响起(thepowerfulwordsofmygrandmaechoedagaininmyears)[照应前文]——自我突破(usedeverylastbitofstrengthtoswim)到终点(touchedthewall)焦急等结果(waitinganxiously)。2.二段首句定第二段根据续写第二段所给首句“ItwasthenthatIheardtheclapsandcheersaroundme.”可知,第二段应写“我”所取得的成绩(atthetopofthelist)以及教练的反应(rantomeandhuggedmetightly)以及“我”的反应,动作+情感和心理likeadream.weepingtearsofjoy,replacedthe“HonorableMentions”onmyshelf（协同首段）],最后升华主题厂“Yes.Grandma,you'reright.Quittersneverwinandwinnersneverquit.”（协同前文提到的奶奶的这句话）]。思路点拨SPLASH!IswamharderthanIhadeverswumbefore.Afterthefirstflipturn,IwassurprisedtofindthatIhadahalf-bodylengthleadovertheothergirls[情感形容词+动作]·However,theysoonspedupandnarrowedthegap.动作链].Halfwaythroughtheracc,thegirltomyleftalmostdrewlevelwithme,whileIalreadybegantofeeltired.Atthatmomcnt,thepowerfulwordsofmygrandmaechoedagaininmyears（动词+介词短语]，“Quittersneverwinandwinnersneverquit.”Iwilledmyarmsandlegstokeepswimmingandusedeverylastbitofstrengthtoswimthelast50metersr动批链士其谘语动词]，IpickedupthepaceasImovedclosertothefinishline动作+状语从句andeverymuscleinmybodyached.AssoonasIlookedupatthescreen,waitinganxiouslyfortheresult动作+非四语动词+副词]·ItwasthenthatIheardtheclapsandcheersaroundme.Isawmytimeonthescrcenbutcouldhardlybelieveit—minewasatthetopofthelist!MycoachrantomeandhuggedmetightlywhenIgotoutofthewaterc动作链+副词+状语从句]·Narrowvictoryasitwas,Ididwinmyfirstrealtrophythatday.EverythingfeltlikeadreamasIstoodonthewinner'spodium,weepingtearsofjoyt动词+非酒语动词，Backathomc,Idelightedlyreplacedthe“HonorableMentions”onmyshelfwiththenewtrophyr动词+副词1.“Yes.Grandma,you'reright.Quittersneverwinandwinnersneverquit.”佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandtheli